Some things I never knew about those creatures. Beyond the TV series that features hunting them in Louisiana.
Enjoyed the read and large font. Makes it look clean and interesting. I enjoyed the journey, and the fact you did point out these are dangerous animals. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.
Such a cool quick ending. Good job. I would go with silly most days as well. Very good little story, I loved the content. Only crit I would have, increase font size, some on here use mobile for the screens. Makes it easier to read. No major issues with the story and I enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing.
Thank you! This is first review of a childs story and I was totally enthralled. Rabbit and Wolf. Interesting combinations. I love all the little things in this story and the detail. Thank you for the journey, and the pictures you painted with your words. I'm sure this would be in a Golden Book for Kids sometime.
Yes that could very well be put to music. Not that I could do that. I loved those lyrics. He is the strong one, the bright light, trying to be a rescuer after a breakup. Good job. Keep writing. May your days be filled with creativity. Thank you for the journey. Reminds me of my youth.
A neat little poem. Nice rhyming, has a good beat. Flowing nicely. I felt a person chasing love and loseing love. Not really understanding why it ends and you look again for love. Good job. It makes me feel young again.
Thank you for the journey. Keep on writing.
Good morning. Good story. Someday this may become a true story. I loved the story, maybe a technical thing or two but the story content was great. A few sentences in was this "An armed man wearing armored and a respirator approached" Think the armored is a typo. One more thing to make it an easier read, break out the dialog so it has a line of its own. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.
My oldest son has FM. I have Crohns and wife has Davics Disease. None show a physical problem, but its there. My prayers for you. Your essay is wonderfully full of information. Those without really don't understand. I wish I knew you, sound like someone I would set down and chew the jawl a bit. Loved the essay! Please keep writing.
I have never had an anxiety attack. I love the poem, it conveys the worry. It makes you think something is wrong. Good job describing that emotion and conveying it. Loved the poem and the journey. Thank you for sharing. May your days be filled with creativity.
Nice little poem. I could follow it so easily. And it seemed to flow very well. I enjoyed reading it, took me inside myself and the wrinkles, the aches and pains that go with it. I see, giving youth over to the younger generation. I really enjoyed reading this and where it took me. How we morph into old wrinkly people. Thank you for the journey. Keep on writing.
Good free verse. It seems to jump from Treating time as an object, then to life. Interesting write. Life seems dependent on time, your free verse seems to scatter a bit. I had a hard time following this, and bouncing from life to time. The flow seems hesitant and bumpy. Of course those are just an opinion. Keep writing, sometimes it's good, sometimes not so good. Been there many times myself.
Wonderful story. Women have always gotten the short end of the deal. The wife always takes care of things while the hubby works. Not so any longer. It takes two. I have always tried to put wife on pedestal, but that doesn't work either. I love the ending. This too shall pass. Good job. Thank you for sharing.
A writers mind. Thats what I read here. This is number two of same type of reading today. You have all the questions and the mind to picture things, now put it to paper and see what comes out. I enjoyed this, was like looking into my own at times. Thank you for sharing and keep writing.
Wow. Talk about a 'left turn' in writing. Did not see that coming. Good job. This is also a good beginning for an extended story. Eliminate last two sentences and go from there. But that is so much like life at times, eliminate last two oops and move on. I enjoyed this journey. Thank you for sharing. Keep on writing.
Good rhythm. And good poem. It caused me to think of an old movie, Beach Blanket Bingo. One of the characters falls for a mermaid. Technically I see no issues and it flows nicely. The content is very good and clear. I enjoyed reading this and the memories it invoked. Thank you for the journey. Keep on writing.
I love the dreams and understand the post wake up time. I love my few morning minutes before others get started. I seldom remember my dreams but always remember the post sleep time. Good essay. I loved the content. Thank you for sharing. Not so sure I like the idea of being chased by lions. Thank you for the journey. I enjoyed it. Keep writing.
OH wow, sounds like a job at Dollar Tree. Very nice little poem. Anyone that has worked retail will recognize exactly what you are saying. Very easy to follow and the content is very accurate. Brings back memories of when I worked. Always such a divide between employees and DM. Thank you for sharing this. I enjoyed the journey. Keep on writing.
Cool little poem. Broken heart. Somes once its broken it does become new again. I enjoyed this poem. It walks nicely and very clear in what is being said. I feel this is like the last straw in a relationship. Love is gone, lets heal and move on. Good job. I enjoyed the journey. Keep on writing.
Oh the sweet love. I feel this is to someone you love. I can feel the emotion, and the care. You have painted an excellent picture of love in words. It flowed nicely and was very clear with the content. Thank you for the journey. Reminds me of young love. Keep writing. May your days be filled with creativity.
Ok so you know me. Sounds exactly as I feel. At 69 I see so much behind me. Good content, very honest and appealing. The rhyming was good, had very good flow with it. Painted a picture and thought you were speaking of me. Thanks for the journey. I really enjoyed reading this. Keep on writing.
Good story, I loved it!! The pictures you paint with the words are so enthralling I just bust out laughing. Wife thinks I'm nuts. I think you captured the spirit of the contest. Very good use of the required words. I could see the whole thing. I didn't see anything that stood out technically and the content was aces! Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!
Good story. Revenge sneaking in. Loved the twist of a girl doing it. Little clues had me thinking something like that. "Their elbow" sort of a clue it wasn't who we would think it was. Good story. It reads very smooth and clear description. I loved the journey and surprise. Works well with this story. Thank you for the journey, keep on writing. May your days be filled with creativity.
Cool little free verse. We step through the months and seasons sometimes without noticing things we should. How fast it goes sometimes. We blink and the time is gone. Back to january and it laughs at us. The content was excellent, and very easy to follow. I loved the picture it painted. Thank you for the journey. Keep writing. May your days be filled with creativity.
You say what you want, and then realize this is redundant. The way things are, our hearts seem to decide what we get or really want. At least thats what I'm reading. I see this could be an emotional burst that everything bubbles to the top. Good Job my friend. I enjoyed reviewing this. Hope things are going well.
Keep on writing.
Such a powerful emotional free verse poem. Thank you for opening your world to the paper. I see and feel pain and hopelessness. I know those feeling, hidden behind a mask. Good job on the poem, very easy to read and understand. Content a bit down, and very easy to see it spiral. Thank you for sharing. Hope there is hope now.
Such a cute little poem. So full of power and emotion. Can see you setting on a lawn chair with pencil and paper, looking over your back yard and feeling the warm sunshine. Fuels your imagination. Thank you for sharing that picture and emotion. I enjoyed reading this. Keep writing.
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Such a cool quick ending. Good job. I would go with silly most days as well. Very good little story, I loved the content. Only crit I would have, increase font size, some on here use mobile for the screens. Makes it easier to read. No major issues with the story and I enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing.
