Neat little story. I'm not a fetish fan and know tickling can be real torture. Content aside the actual dialog was good, and descriptive. Very clear it what was being said and knowing who was talking. All the 'sounds' wrote out for laughter did seem to interupt the story. I personally would shorten those or try to use words to describe the sounds. Keep writing. There is some talent showing through here. Thanks for sharing.
Good set of poems. And seeing you had gotten up to write these proves I am not the only one. I enjoyed reading your poems, I like Dylans music as well. It takes me back to the years I spent in the Keys of Florida. I can imagine someone carrying all that around would have to get it out someway. Then seeing Dylan in your self, good job. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.
To be honest this looks like a story hook. So much can be done using this as a starting point. A ghost story, or someone living in basement/attic story. Your write is good and shows talent. I enjoyed reading this, it made me want more. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.
I feel it telling how we have destroyed the earth, first couple of stanza, the bad things we have done. Now its time to pay for our irresponsible actions. Our last look at Earth. Good free verse, I can feel the emotion in it. I enjoyed reading it and understand exactly where it comes from. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.
Neat little prose. I enjoyed reading this, I totally understand the content. Dreams turn to Goals, that means you have to work at them. Means you do believe dreams can come true. Thank you for sharing, it held my attention well. Technically, I see no problems. Keep on writing.
Good story. I felt like I was watching a scene from a park bench late in the evening. Was just graphic enough to allow imagination through. Technically I saw no problems. The content very interesting and probably happens similar to that often. Minus the murder. I enjoyed reading this, moves nicely. Keep writing.
Good free verse poem. I can see bare, raw feeling here. Knowing a storm is coming, in many different ways. Still must be ready. I enjoyed this short poem. As in seeing somethings in life hit us like a tornado. It seems pure chaos sometimes. Good job. Powerful meaning in these words. May your days be filled with creativity. Keep writing.
People watching is a habit of mine. Your story was very descriptive, the viewer saw and seemed to feel the sensations going on. I could see the elderly couple at a table across from the viewer. Such touching moments that we become part of only in the sense we see and feel their emotions.
Loved the story, it flowed nicely and very descriptive. I would not have put so much into the color of the bench, but it still works. I saw no real technical issues. Keep writing.
Great story! I could picture the whole thing. He is pacing back and forth, she is setting in her chair knitting. The whole thing seemed a set up for the end. Love the twist. She partied while he slept. You did an excellent job bringing it to the end. Kept waiting for the shotgun to show. I enjoyed this story. You have a good talent, keep nurturing it. Keep writing.
Ok the grinch speaks! Love it. Content was great and the word pictures worked well. We all feel that way at some point during the holidays, it just don't last that long. Good job with the rhyming scheme, nice and smooth. Good tempo all thru. Great talent. Keep writing.
That would make a nice song. Reading it as song lyrics it flows nicely and the tempo is steady. I enjoyed reading this. The content, getting a message and hunting for a loved one. Good job. The word pictures was as if I were standing on beach reading a note from a bottle. This is what would go thru my mind. Keep writing.
Beautiful free verse poem for your grandmother. I to, thought greatly of my grandmother. You could do no wrong and she accepted you. Encouraged you to face your battles. I love the content. It feels as though my grandmother spoke through that. Wonderful piece. Keep writing.
Neat little play on words there. Fall the season and rising from the Fall. It makes me think that every season is for a man to stand, but stand is never used. Thank you for making me think a bit more. Just short few lines hides the power in what you say. Good job. I enjoyed it. Keep writing.
Wearing your heart on your sleeve. Old saying my grandmother used often, when we would get our feeling hurt over something. I enjoyed this poem, neat rhyming and fits nicely. Flowed well with good tempo. The coloring aids in reading. Good job. I enjoyed that. Keep writing.
Nice little poem. Rhyming nicely and flowing smoothly. The tempo sounds good. The content, interesting. Trying to see the blessing in chaos. In the end we see that though chaos is abounding, light takes over. I feel a chaos inside the writer, trying to use the light to make sense of it. Good job. I enjoyed the journey and being made to concentrate on what is being said. Thank you for sharing, keep writing.
Love the story. We sometimes have to be taught what NOT to do. Father 1 was an enabler. Farther 2, showed true love. Sometimes when we ask God, he does say no. A good parent never gives up in teaching. Thank you for this story, sometimes we need to think more of Gods methods than our own. Keep writing.
I could see the battles. Those within as well as those with out. After combat its hard for those that were involved. Very descriptive poem and full of emotion. I enjoyed the journey, it wasn't easy with all those thoughts. The content is something every solder carries after a battle. I hope your niece enjoyed this, I did. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.
Nice poem. Love the form, you followed it very well. Love the poem content. Family or visitor all is welcome as well as the kids. Reminds me of having my grandkids over and all the noise. I love the memories. Its a good form for this poem. Good job. Keep on writing.
Very inspiring story. I can see this as an illustrated child's story. Very well written and very clear and descriptive. I love the content, we need to understand these helper animals more. They accept unconditionally. We are still learning how to do that. Technically I saw no real problems, it was smooth and with easy tempo to read. Thank you for sharing this. Keep on writing.
Beautiful poem. I feel and see the sea in it, as it does pull and call. I know the feeling, and this beautiful poem put it into words. It is very clear and descriptive, and easy to follow. The rhyming had a good tempo. I enjoyed reading this, and the memories it invoked. Thank you for sharing. Keep on writing.
I have heard many prayers. Being an old backwoods preacher I know what you pray for. Such a lovely reminder that God does want us to ask. The poem flowed very well, with a good rhyming tempo. It was good size and very easy to read. Thank you for sharing your prayer with us. Very inspiring. I enjoyed reading it. Keep writing.
Sounds like a good story. The kind I used to enjoy, fantasy type with different species. The content seemed pretty descriptive, something to walk into chapter one with. I did find it hard to read and follow due to the font and spacing. It all seemed to run together. It did paint a good picture with words, and I enjoyed that. For some reason my mind went to Everquest the RPG. Looks to be an interesting book. Keep writing.
Neat little 'horror' story. Was laughing all the way through it. I enjoyed it and could picture almost the whole scene. The content makes us think how much we do push our kids, and at what cost? I have watched similar parents at egg hunts, so funny! Technically I would break out the dialog, double space the lines and larger font. All this makes it much easier to read. I loved the story! Keep writing.
Such a heart felt essay. When you find you have done something to someone, that had been done to you. And you didn't like it. Now the regret for stepping into that mud hole. Yes, we have to hold ourselves accountable for these things. And hold our self's up and accept it as a step forward. Use the past as a stepping stone, learn from it. Good little read, glad you have learned to vent through words rather then something physical. Thank you for sharing.
Neat little poem. Technically it looks and sounds good. Smooth flow, very descriptive. Tempo was good. Content was great. I loved it. You are right, its been so long we don't know how to eat right. The adverts never really tell the story, only paint a pretty picture. Good job, real talent showing through. Thats way it is, watching tv and something pops, and you have to write it. Been there many times. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.
All Writing.Com images are copyrighted and may not be copied / modified in any way. All other brand names & trademarks are owned by their respective companies.
Generated in 0.16 seconds at 4:51pm on Aug 31, 2025 via server WEBX1.
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
