Good Free verse. I see a mind stepping into insanity. Good job showing that. All the steps shown very well. Easy read and easy to follow. Sometimes we really don't know where the dividing line is, between sanity and insanity. Good writing. I find nothing technically wrong and the content was great. Keep writing. Lots of talent there.
Good job, inside a players head while at bat. Very good visual and can see this on any baseball field. The little things people don't think of. Loved the story, felt like I was watching the pitch. I saw no technical issues, easy to read and follow. Even slide description was good. Thank you for the journey. Keep on writing.
First and second stanza I could visualize setting in school detention. Hit that feeling right on the head. And setting at home supposed to do homework, but naw it will wait. Good poem. Took me back to jr high school detention. Was my usual spot anyway. It flowed nicely and the tempo was good. Very clear in what its saying.
Thank you for sharing. Keep on writing.
Beautiful poem! Right off I could see snorkeling around the coral reef off of Florida coast. I loved the poem. Took me right back there. Good free verse, very descriptive, and good tempo. Thank you for sharing and stirring those old memories. May your days be filled with creativity. Keep writing.
Seems these rainy days are good for bringing back memories. I see you and her in class looking out the window as it rains with a mist. I have set there as well. Very nice free verse. At first I thought this was going to be difficult but it was all very clear. I felt the warm memories as well as seeing the cool rain. Thank you for the journey. Good job. Keep writing.
Wonderfully inspiring story! My adventures started in second grade. My teacher said same thing about reading, thus I was hooked. I loved the story and the picture it painted, it was very easy to follow even the transition to forest without a hitch. Good job. I enjoyed this. Keep on writing.
Loved this story. And the way you had us wait till the end to see what you sprayed. Good job. Held my attention all the way through. Luck was with you, seems you got rid of the bugs for good. That is one cute story to have in your pocket. No technical bumps and good flow. Very descriptive. The picture of you looking at a spray bottle then looking around the yard is great picture! Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed this. Keep writing.
Good little story. The story told by a cat is such a good idea. I loved it. I can see and feel the cat through the whole story. The picture was nice and clear, cat on lap and heading to palace. Really good story with a different POV. Thank you for sharing. May your days be filled with creativity.
Wonderful prose. I enjoyed reading it. Growing up some of these things were similar to yours. You learn to appreciate the finer things in life. Rather than take them for granted. It's a shame how the family unit everywhere almost has fallen. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed the memories. Keep on writing.
Neat little poem. I had to lookup what Rictameter form was. Good job. I can see the short, skinny start of a dogwood standing forlorn in the cold. Good job with the form, poem was easy to follow and tempo was nice and even. Thank you for sharing this. May your days be filled with creativity. Keep on writing.
Love the poem. Such talent! I could understand and feel each question. This brings a lot of questions to todays thoughts. Do we really have freedom to write? With freedom comes responsibility, many don't understand that. Most everything begins with written words. Good job. I enjoyed this and will keep the question in my mind. Thank you so much for the journey. Keep on writing.
Nice poem. Playing music through the apple phone to blue tooth speakers. Great way to put on a show without really spending a lot of money. Good thinking, and the poem was good, very descriptive and flowed nicely. Reading it aloud it didn't have any bumps. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.
Wow. I thought I was the only one forgetting things. Middle of sentence I forget what I was talking about so often. I loved the honest content. And the fact you know its coming, you can at least take steps to make life easier. Hang in there. I have always said growing old is hard. Keep writing, take one day at a time.
Excellent job. By showing the examples along with how to use punctuation. I was never clear on the use of ';' but that explanation was great. This was very easy to follow and the spaces made it an easy read. I understand a bit more now, thank you for the journey. May your day be filled with creativity. Keep writing.
I enjoyed the essay. I did notice a comma or two misplaced, but other than that very good. The content was excellent. I have always seen memories as a foundation for who we are now. The common fear of that disease is what we all feel. Thank you for the journey. Keep writing.
Good job. I could see the abuse from the beginning. The emotion generated with words is very evident. I loved this as it clearly shows the pattern of abuse. Thank you for sharing such a powerful poem. Please keep writing, there is a lot of talent there. Thank you for the journey.
Good on you. Good poem. It reads very well. The tempo is good. The content the feeling that some are parting and some are not. It points to dreams to follow. I see it as each has goals. Good job. I enjoyed reading this. Keep on writing. Thank you.
I enjoyed that story. It was very clear and descriptive, and about a wake even. Good job showing the conversation and keeping it from being confusing. The content was good, it seemed a small twist as the narrator is the killer. Good job. Held my attention very well. No grammatical errors jumped out. It was an easy read. Thank you for sharing, keep writing.
Wonderful poem. Form was great. The content worked well with the prompts. I enjoyed this, I understand how a few lines can be powerful. Very words are very descriptive and easy to follow. Tempo was good. No grammatical errors. A very nice poem. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.
I feel you are trying to describe love as you see or feel it. We can only see the actions of love. Good poem even with the beginning. Free verse with some rhyming. The items in parenthesis caused me to back up and reread. I would work it into the lines someway so the tempo would be better. Good job putting it together, I did enjoy it. Keep writing.
The eyes tell all, just have to know how to read them. Neat little poem. I would probably tried a different form or structure. Nothing wrong with this one, just a suggestion. I enjoyed reading this. Very clear and descriptive. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.
I felt Ants was the true subject without actually naming them. How the couple and dog invaded the area the ants were in. The setting up a picnic for two and the third was an ant. Cute poem. I enjoyed this poem. Never thought something like that through the eyes of a bug. Very creative. Good talent. Thank you for sharing. Keep on writing.
Good poem. Life as something we can touch. Through and bad we still have life, but only one time shot. I enjoyed this poem was nice free verse and had a good tempo. Flowed well. Suggest trying this with one of the many poetry forms. Good job, thanks for sharing. May your days be filled with creativity. Keep on writing.
Cute story with a twist. He seemed deranged to start with and the last thing said proved it. Good job holding attention and moving through the scene. I could picture her getting up and scooting out the door quickly. Meeting someone like that would definitely cause the red flags to come out. I enjoyed the read, no technical issues and content was good. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing.
Cute story with a twist. He seemed deranged to start with and the last thing said proved it. Good job holding attention and moving through the scene. I could picture her getting up and scooting out the door quickly. Meeting someone like that would definitely cause the red flags to come out. I enjoyed the read, no technical issues and content was good. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing.
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