Such an amazingly beautiful story. I see each of us as a Rosa, with our talent and thirst of freedom to use it. A very inspiring story. She pours her self into her intricate work, and refills her soul from the dances at night. We should take this as wise advice. All of us need a time to refresh, refill, rekindle our freedom. Thank you for such a beautiful story. I will remember it. Keep writing, you have earned that 'dance'.
A beautiful essay of Fort Worth. Comparing the past with the present. I felt as if I had been there and grown up there. Regrets are always for what we didn't do not what we have done. I enjoyed those moments you describe with your words. Such a beautiful picture, growing up there. Keep writing, this showed your talent. I worked and Montgomery Wards once even. I could taste those burgers and fries. Good job. I enjoyed the journey. Thank you.
Beautiful poem about love. From first touch till there is only you and them. I love its simplicity and the colors were a great idea for the feelings. Good job, I enjoyed the journey. It caused me to think of my wife and I how we started. Slow like that. Thank you for the memories and the inspiration. Keep writing.
Loved the poem. Makes think. Loneliness shows itself in many different ways. How to deal with it and continue in life is something we all have to learn. The content of the poem was great, and the rhyming had a good tempo. It flowed nicely and was very descriptive. Thank you for the journey, it makes a person think a bit. Keep writing.
Such a beautiful piece. I love it. I have been the Granpa, many times. Excellent job showing the confusion setting in, and him being somewhat mesmerized with the past. Good chance he has been in that very spot many times, as the end implies. Very touching and you got into Granpa's head very well. Thank you for the pictures you painted with your words. I enjoyed reading this, keep writing.
Cool story. A girl saves a village from a winged demon. I see no major issues with this. The content not my kind of story, but that is ok. The story flows nicely, no real hiccups. I actually was able to stay with it. Love the ending. Introducing herself! Like it was an everyday thing. You have some wonderful talent. It should be easy to find an artist for this. All in all very good job telling the story. Keep writing.
Sweet poem. About leaving friends to move on. Its hard struggle doing that. I feel that emotion through this poem. We all leave things behind as we advance in life. It can be very hard sometimes. Good job. I enjoyed reading this and the journey it took me on. Remembering lots of friends and changes over the years. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.
Sweet little poem. I love it. Voicing the procedure for getting inspired. Normal everyday items can be inspiring. Your muse knows this. Good poem. I loved the journey and pictures it paints, very clear and descriptive. Thank you for sharing. May your days be filled with creativity.
Very good letter. Need one for 2025 now. I hope all your goals are met. Reread your letter and see how it turned out for you. Was very descriptive in what you want to accomplish. Very clear writing. Thank you for sharing this. Please keep writing and look at the 2025 read me contest as well. Your writing inspired me to do a letter to Dear Me as well. Thank you.
Good chunk of a story. I must admit it looks like free writing, when I get stuck I write, disregarding any punctuation or grammar. Just write. This has great potential. Your writing is very good and descriptive, now add a bit of grammar and capital letters. As far as content, great story. Has lot of potential. Please keep writing. More you write, better it will get. Thank you for sharing this.
Such a sweet descriptive poem. Love it. Nice tempo for the rhyming. Sound good and looks good. Bring memories of times I would hike through the woods. I see no major issues here. Only thing I would do is increase font size, makes it easier to read on here. Other then that, good job. Thank you for the journey and pictures you have painted. Please keep writing.
Have to fuss at my newfeed buddy. You made me cry, this was such a sweet story. Very smooth and flowed nicely, building up that emotion slowly. I loved it. Great job and thank you for sharing this. How many are in similar position in life. Wonderful job my friend.
Think this could be a good prolog for an interesting story. It catches you and pulls you down the few sentences. I love it, its clear and I see no technical issues. I would just love to see this expanded into a story. Think it would be a fantastic start. Good job catching attention and holding it. I enjoyed this. Thank you for the picture. Keep writing.
Love that short poem! Not hard to figure out. Good job showing what we do. Plundering Ports sometimes. I like that, short and to the point. Good job. May your days be filled with creativity. One thing I would do, increase font size for readability. Keep writing.
Some of these could be Vignettes. Pulled from a short story even. They could also be considered prompts, many good inspiring ideas. I loved them all. Short and concise, everything seemed technically ok. Content was interesting. I would increase the font for readability on here. Most use mobiles. Keep on writing.
Great story! Very interestingly has a twist. Think two ladies enjoying their evening and then an uninvited over sized kangaroo shows up. Good story. Flowed nicely and looks like good contest material. It should definitely stand out. Thank you for sharing. I loved the journey and pictures you painted with words, even the bloody ones. Good luck on the contest.
Loved that poem. About snow globe with little city inside. I feel this was comparing life to that, turned upside down and problems drift to top/bottom. Turn it up right and they all drift back down. Interesting thought. I did enjoy the poem, easy to read. Clear in what it was speaking of. Thank you for the journey. Keep writing.
Such a sad story. I cannot imagine abuse of that sort to a child. It totally boggles my mind. Good write. Good story, content was clear and concise. Technically the write flows smoothly, no major problems. When we write from the heart, it's always evident. Good job. Word pictures painted well. Keep on writing.
Neat little story. How an everyday family thing could be misconstrued as a problem. Story was good with good content. I saw no real technical issues. Only recommendation I would give is to increase the font size for here. Lot of people use mobile, so its easier to read. Thank you for the journey. Keep on writing.
This sounded like an exasperated person. You have tried to look at life differently but keep coming back to finding something in life that don't fit. There is a couple lines that could be reworded. And a typo on the sentence before last. But a very good essay. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.
I liked this essay. I know how you feel from the first line on. And it is a lot like life. Those chores are done without complaining most times. Quote cliche' Just do it. My favorite. Thank you for sharing a wonderful incite, I enjoyed reading this. I saw no technical issues and content very clear. Keep writing.
Great little short story. Reminded me of times a friend and I would go to Ham Fest(radio flea market), we stop and eat somewhere and our conversation was always weird when ever we notice someone listening. Great story and technically I saw no issues. I enjoyed the picture you painted with your words, good job. Keep writing. Thank you for sharing.
Very nice little poem. I see wearing masks, as our emotions and what we want people to see. Roman actors used hand held masks. Nice free verse, lot of power content. I loved the journey, and knowing there are people that understand 'the mask'. Thank you for sharing and the journey. Keep on writing.
Excellent story. Very clear explanations and yes I have felt these feelings as well. Christ said"Where two or more are gathered in my name. I am there. Thats why you get someone to pray for you or with you. The story is great and I find no technical glitches. I loved the journey. Brings my memories to this old preacher.
keep writing.
Good story, had me wondering what the twist would be. I was enthralled with this. It was very well told, the pictures painted nicely. The journey was a bit frightening but the reality of it is even more frightening. One technical thing, the second paragraph sentence was pretty long. Had to read that twice to figure out the bump. All in all a good piece and I enjoyed it. Keep writing.
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