I just read your poem. Now I am reviewing your poem for Anniversary Review. This poem is sad but beautiful.
Here you are telling that how much you feel your dear brother Wayne. The poem describes the emotions you feel when you lose your brother who was died in Cancer. Here the poet remembered the days when he was young; he played with homemade toys which he made with his brother Wayne. He could remember the food they ate together. God bless your brother Wayne.
I like the last stanza of the poem
God awaits you brother Wayne in heaven on high.
Mom and dad are waiting up in heaven's blue sky.
The rhyme and the flow of the poem flowing well. Thank you for sharing your beautiful poem with us.
My name is Mina~ and I'm reviewing for "The Simply Positive Group" . I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work. I strive to give honest reviews and I hope you find this review helpful.
Initial Impression:I like the subject(music) you pick for this poem.
Music is the best medicine. It creates a dramatic effect on our mind and also our brain. It heals our pain. You know that sometimes music help patients to recover soon. Yes you are right the sound of the trumpets, drums, pianos, guitars and all the musical instruments are very soothing.
Suggestions:I think no punctuation mark need for this poem.
I enjoyed reading your poem from beginning to the end. Keep writing
Hello Ms. Winnie, I just read this poem. This poem is beautiful.
The wonderful relationship between the father and daughter make me reading this poem. A father creates the most influence in her daughter’s life and he raising his child with great care. Sometime his daughter shares her information with father rather than her mother. One day she leaves her parents though it is very painful for her parents but they should let her go.
I like the rhyming of the poem and the lines
I did not know her destiny,
What plans God had designed.
Had I foretold life’s brevity,
Could I have changed His mind
I enjoyed reading your poem from beginning to end. Thank you for sharing your awesome work with us.
Hi mahima, I just read your story about online shopping from the review request page. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
I prefer real shopping rather than online shopping. Though I know that online shopping is more convenient and it consume a lot of time. But I think people spent more money to purchase the thing on online. I have had experience of some dishonest online store. They send me the wrong and sometime broken item.
Grammar and punctuation: Add a space after period or comma. Some examples I taken from your writing “Few months later I became a pro .I knew when to shop ,” it should be ““Few months later I became a pro. I knew when to shop,”
Hello Ms. Winnie How are you ,I just read your beautiful story. I am not a writing expert.
WHY I AM REVIEWING THIS ITEM:I like the description of the nature. Especially I like this line “The smell from the surrounding woods is poignantly earthy.” And “The crickets sing their nightly serenade. The wind picks up, rustling the trees, and the empty rocker next to me sways”
FIRST IMPRESSION: A beautiful story.
SETTING: Setting is good.
CHARACTERS: the character Wilma and Thomas developed well.
DIALOG: Dialogue floated normally between the characters (Wilma and Thomas) and I could imagine the scenes where they were.
Hi, Alexi I just read this Cinquain poem about autumn . A small poem but rich in words (declining, perished). Autumn is one of my favorite seasons. At that time leaves are falling down over the ground changing their color from green to red, orange, yellow or brown before falling. Grasses getting touches of brown and the leaves are scattered by the autumn breeze.
The nature of the autumn picture you painted here makes me reading your poem.
A beautiful poem.i Learned how to write Cinquain poem. Thank you for sharing.
Hi Lynda, I just read this beautiful story and I think I will read more of your story in future. Here you are telling that How Leprechaun obliged Grady and gave him his gold by three wishes. I like the dialogue flowing between the characters.
The characters building is well (Grady and Leprechaun and other). I especially like the ending of the story where you said “Well you can fool a Leprechaun sometimes, but an Irishman, never.”
I enjoyed your awesome story from beginning to the end. I like the way of your writing. Thanks for sharing your story with us.
Hi, M.J I just read this story of yours “superstition”.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
Good starting of an interesting ghost story. We know the people of the village have many strong superstitions and they believe the thing that we modern people do not believe. You are a good story teller and the dialogue between the characters “Kora” and “Cina” flowed well. I think a little bit of editing in the end would make your story interesting.
Spelling and grammar:
Kilometers should be kilometer delete “s”
Screams should be scream delete “s”
And (neighbours', standart) the spelling should be (neighbors, standard)
Character Development: Character development is well.
We called eagles the birds of prey. One of most beautiful bird in the world is golden eagle. They are large are large and hard beaked bird and so observant. They can catch any small birds or even a snake in the blink of an eye. High above in the sky they fly alone spreading their large wings.
All eagles are renowned for their excellent eyesight which you said in your poem “An observant eye”.
You are following all the rules of haiku poem writing (5,7,5)
Nice poem about nature.
Hi, woods i am now reviewing you for anniversary review.
Good starting of an interesting horror story. It seems to me that you described a place where you surrounded by the huge, high reaching long trees tree. The light was so faint and the death silence everywhere.
I think you if you make your story a little large and if you put a character here than your story will be more interesting to read on.
Nice starting. Keep writing.
Hi, rabbit i am now reviewing you for anniversary review.
Global warming is one of the biggest problems nowadays. Seasons turn; in winter we see the storm.
Our mother earth only the livable planet on the earth. But today what we see?... Everywhere there are pollution. Our air is polluted by the greenhouse gases, sea water polluted by the waste. One of the biggest problems is raising sea level. This could result in the flooding of low lying coastal areas like my country. Scientists forecast that within decades our low lying lands will be under water.
I like your poem because of the subject of your poem. I like the lines
In decades to come, If we don't stop
sitting on our thumbs.
Hi, Rose, I just read this story. The main character Emma Waldron a widowed-woman live alone with her two pets. One Halloween night while putting some light on a jar she thought about her husband who died a year back. She thought it may be her husband who showed her love to her by this message from above the heaven. Emma Waldron was emotional when she found a beautiful purple ring in the jar.
The dialogue flows between the characters nicely. I think the prompt “Picture of jars on a line and lights on bushes” perfectly match the prompt. It's well written.
I like the way you write all this. I enjoyed your wonderful story.
Hi, Amay, I just read your poetry. You picked “snow” as your subject of the above form based poems.
I think the beauty of the snow fall gives pleasure to your heart. You felt that you are a part of nature. Here you used some words like “Ferocious winds” “crystalline fingers” “glistening archways” to create the mood of these poem.
I learned how to write poem to use this various form.
Also learn the form based poetry writing technique. Haiku: Blizzard, Nonet, Oddquain Butterfly. Especially I like the Nonet form. I think I will write some poems to use this form.
Thank you for sharing these wonderful poem with us.
Zeke,I just read your story. I think I also feared like the character of your story if my dentist says me to uproot my teeth. Everybody feared in dentist chair. In your story the dentist assured her by saying “Please try to relax. This won’t take long at all. I guarantee you’ll be glad I did it to you when it’s over.” But the patient scared to see the instruments.
I the way you are telling your story. The dialogue flowed between the characters normally. It’s delightful. I enjoyed your story.
Hi, Jones, I just read this beautiful story.I am reviewing you for Anniversary Review.
The author imagined that she was attacked by more than hundred guinea pigs for not feeding them properly. I like the twist of the story and the way of writing.
The dialogue flow between the character is good. I enjoyed your story.
Hello thing, I am reviewing you for Anniversary Review.
A wonderful gratitude poem about mother.
Mother is the best gift of the god. In this world none is comparable with mother. She is a teacher a guide ; her unconditional love makes us to step forward.
Here the poet” May the road and Dad rise up to greet you ” by this line telling us that her mother remembered her even from the heaven. She is watching her children, grandchildren and great grandchildren from the heavens above.
When our dearest one died an emotional feeling had grown in our heart. The poet remembered the wonderful memories of her mother who passed away. I like the lines
Remember us in heaven,
We will see you there again
Hi, jellyfish, I just read this poem. I am now reviewing this for Anniversary review.
Our mother earth only the livable planet in the whole universe. But nowadays our earth is polluted by the green house gases, sea water polluted by the garbage and waste materials. For that reason our sea levels risen up and all the low lands are now going to underwater. We the human beings; we are the rulers of the earth. We rule the air, the water and everything. All the creatures, animals, birds depend upon us.
In your poem you wrote so beautifully that if the earth had the words what she would say. Yes, off course she says that we are not her friend. Honey bee, polar bear, elephants, dolphins are her friend because they didn’t cause any harm to her. We the human hurt her constantly by doing all the pollution.
I like the way you wrote your poem.
The poems flow like floating sea. Good rhyming.Wonderful work.
Hi, Dr. Taher, I just read your wonderful story. I am doing this review for Anniversary review.
I know from your story how you became a doctor. How much hard work a doctor need to become a doctor. We know that a doctor is the most respectful person of the society. In your story you are telling that you sometimes faces challenging situation while worked.
I learn from your writing that, ear lobes torn through the bottom edge by wearing heavy ear jewellery. As I like to wear earring so it is very helpful tips for me.
Being a doctor is hard work, but it is a very rewarding career. A doctor enjoyed his moments when his patient get well and smiles at him.
I like the way you all wrote this. I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.
Parents often get hurt by the sudden change (behavior and mental and also physical) of their children. Sometimes children unwillingly hurt their parents. A t this stage it is very hard for parents to control over them. Because they think they are independent enough. Hormonal change makes them arrogant.
You are right that in our country parents sometimes told them what to wear or what not to wear. But I think parents should let them do whatever they like to wear. They should try to understand their feeling; try to understand what inside their mind.
If both parents and teen communicating each other daily so that they can develop a healthy relation.
I like the way you telling everything. Well written. Thank you for sharing.
Hello, Ms. Winnie, I just read this story and I am reviewing you for Anniversary Review. This story is beautiful but sad. I like the way you wrote this entire story. I like the twist, the suspense and the mood of the story. When Jake and Mary were anxious that something might happen to their daughter and at last they discovered her in the bathtub dead. Dialogue floated smoothly between the characters, not boring.
I especially like the ending of the story when everyone is silent before taking their meal and they added it as a tradition of the family.
You are an awesome story teller and you wrote this story very well. I enjoyed reading your story. It’s really a perfect piece for Thanksgiving Day. Thanks for sharing.
I just read your poem.I am sending you a review of your story for Anniversary Review. I read three times this book “Anne Frank Diary”. A thirteen year old girl wrote this diary while she was hiding with her parents in world war two. She talked about her family, friends and her time with some inspirational words.
You expressed your feeling by telling that how much Anne Frank quotes inspired you. Some of her quotes are really inspirational. Like “Paper has more patience than people. Whoever is happy will make others happy too, I don’t think of all the misery but of the beauty that still remains.”
In your poem you beautifully wrote everything. I like the lines of your poem
You had proved that the pen is mightier than the sword,You had described your life through each written word.
The rhyming and flow is good, no grammatical error with proper punctuation marks. Wonderful work. Thank you for sharing.
Hi tubelsaviz I am now reviewing one of your poem "A sincere friend".
In our life friends comes friends go but a true friend tied in our heartstrings year after year. Yes you are right a true friend is a wonderful, they helps us when needed. They support us, encouraged us so many ways. They help us unconditionally. We cannot live without them. But nowadays it is hard to find a good friend. Sometimes we feel sad when they betray us. Having a true friend is a great gift. I like the lines
“True friendship is built with blocks of love” and “Soothing words that flow like rain”
In your gratitude poem you express your feeling to a friend nicely. I like the way you wrote.
Hi, MarvelGirl26 I am sending you a review of your story. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
I enjoyed reading the cute African lion cub (Charlie) story especially I like the ending of the story.
Finally Charlie found his family.
Your imagination is good. You are really a good story teller.
Suggestion: In second line use punctuation mark period instead of (lions,) comma. In third line capitalized the word (so).
("They left me on a rock in Africa ten years ago!" Charlie answered) delete exclamation mark from the word (ago!)
In the last line (and farther!) should be father and no exclamatory marks here. I think a little bit editing will make your story more interesting.
My goal is to help make your writing stronger, but it is up to you what will work for your story. Keep writing.
Hi, I'm Mina and I am now reviewing one of your items. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
First Impression: Beautiful. I like the concept . Yes, Elephant’s are one of largest animal in the world. They live in herds. Do you know that they are useful even after death. Many things are made of its bones and tusks.
Spelling/Grammar: you wrote “1” it should be “one”. The spelling “favoured” should be “favorite” and “are interesting” should be “ interesting” and “phew” should be “few”.
A little bit of editing would make your Elephant story more interesting.
Above all I like your elephant story. Keep writing.
Hello Rose, I am now reviewing one of your piece "Jane Austen's life". Jane was one of the most widely read authors of the 1800’s. She is my one of my favorite author. I know more about her from your writing. You wrote her biography so well that makes me reading this piece.
I know now from your writing that Jane had six brothers, her brother George was mentally abnormal, Jane also wrote poems, she never argued with her father because she loves her father.
Jane died of Addison's disease and Hodgkin's lymphoma.
Thank for sharing your research with us. I wonder how you create such beautiful images.A nice piece for Jane Austin fans.
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