It's been a pleasure to review your article on behalf of the “"The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a good piece of write with a lot of important information.
THE ARTICLE : the disease cancer is like a monster. Every year many people die this terrible disease. In today’s world, science and technology are moving so fast. Maybe some day we will find the way to beat this disease. The scientists are studying to find ways to prevent cancer. From this piece, I learned which foods prevent cancer. I learned that Greek Yogurt, omega-3, Chickpeas, Dark green leafy vegetables, Dandelions can help to fight cancer cells.
FAVOURITE PART Nuts, almonds for example with the inner "skin" on. That is where the cancer kicking agent is. It only takes a small handful of these cancer-fighting warriors to help prevent cancer from starting.
SUGGESTION A little bit of editing could make this piece more interesting. You can use writing ML. You need to put a paragraph break
OVERALL IMPRESSION: This is good piece of write. I learned many from this piece. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing.
I especially like this poem. The last two stanzas were my absolute favorite. Your poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words. The tone of this poem is soothing. You beautifully put your feelings into words. I admire every word choice.
My favorite:
“Like the sky she's boundless, and free
to be at the edge of terminus
where the ominous, stands obvious
of life with me”
I read your story. It's been a pleasure to review you on behalf of "Sipmly Positive Group."
FIRST IMPRESSION : This is a good story. You wrote this story from a cat's point of view.
THE STORY:I like the way how you wrote this story to observe their behaviors. Especially I like the dialogues of this story. It floated beautifully between the characters.
You have good descriptions of your characters. I like the ending. I understood your story has written for a contest so you focus on that part. I think it followed the prompt.
FAVOURITE PART:” I worked on those treats all night, but I couldn't get it open. I could smell them. Almost taste them. I was so aggravated, it woke me up. It was early, I know. But if he would have listened to me last night, he wouldn't have had to listen to me this morning!”
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I see that you have Anniversary this month. I am now reviewing one of your work.
This is a good piece of work. I love the description and the presentation of your work about “Audrey Hepburn”. I always love to watch old movies and Audrey is my favorite and I love watching her movies too. I have seen many of her movies, especially I have seen Roman holiday several times. This is a beautiful movie. She acts well in the role of Princess Ann. She was the role model for girls in her time.
I learned many about Audrey Hepburn from this piece. I learned that she was married twice. She is considered a Fashion Icon. She was a singer. Thank for sharing.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Happy Writing!
Initial Impression: I like the overall concept . Thanks for sharing this important message.
Theme and Creativity: I appreciate the simplicity and the rhyming of this poem. Your rhyming scheme is absolutely beautiful. It flowed beautifully with your crafted words. The tone is soothing.
Favorite lines:
I like your poem because you have original thought in your writing.
Although it sometimes causes them to have moments of dismay,
They will take on the burdens, shouldering the blame,
The nice guys have their bragging rights to claim,
They are triumphant over chaos, at the end of the day.
Overall Impression: This I like the overall concept . Thanks for sharing this important message.
This is good piece of write. I like the way you put your feelings into words. I feel your pain I could totally relate your poem. The tone is soothing. The poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words.
Favorite lines:
We’re siblings living worlds apart
But you will live in my heart.
Miss you bro, but surely know
Within hearts our bindings grow.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I am reviewing you on behalf of ""Angel Review Forum" . This review is for"a very Wodehouse challenge" " Initial Impression: This is a wonderful piece of write beautifully told and written.
The Essay: I love this piece because main thought of this piece is about a book The Giving Tree. It’s written so beautifully that kept me reading to the end. I especially liked the introduction of the essay “I am moderately musical, moderately creative, moderately introverted, moderately liberal, moderately feminist, and moderately lazy”. I like how you wrote all your thoughts beautifully. I like the descriptions and presentation of your essay. I know that you wrote this essay for a contest “Essay Contest Prompt: If your house was on fire, what book would you take and why?” and I think you did a great job.
Suggestions :I didn’t find any mistakes.
}Overall Impression: I enjoyed it reading. I am glad to meet a writer like you.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
First impression: This is a wonderful poem. The title caught my eye.
the poem:This is a good poem packed with message. Concept is unique. This poem is beautiful inside every line. I love this piece especially the last stanza.
The above is false
untrue, unreal
The belief of Society
artificial, a fluke
All it takes is the wild
untainted, untouched
To bring us to ourselves.
I look forward to read more of your write.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
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First impression: Lovely poem. I like the beautiful nature picture you have painted here.
the poem: The poem is about spring. In spring nature looks charming and many kinds of beautiful flowers bloom during this season. The lovely roses win our hearts. I like the wording of this poem.
What I liked:
A rain of death has come forth,
Flowing through my nose, and pelting my eyes.
Suggestions:You need to put some line break to flow your poem.
I learned that a line break is a poetic device which is used to focus the reader's attention. Though I am not a writing expert but I think you can write like this
The age of beauty is over.
The time of yellow sickness has come.
A rain of death has come forth,
Flowing through my nose, and pelting my eyes.
I mustn't leave the safety of my home,
Until the storm is over.
Oh, how I long for those days of frost and snow,
Those days of red and green. But nay, that is behind me now.
All that awaits is a time of heat and illness.
Even when the rain of death ends,
The sun will blaze upon my back,
Burning my skin and blinding my eyes.
As I forever search for the fair maiden of winter
Overall: I enjoyed reading your poem. Thanks for sharing. It’s a wonderful poem
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
First impression: This is a wonderful poem. The title caught my eye. I watched a film named love comes softly. It’s a wonderful movie. Your poem is as beautiful as the film. It touched me.
the poem: The poem is significant. I like the way how you put your feelings into words. You have lovely romantic thoughts inside every line. Yes, sometimes love is not a firework it come softly.
I like the rhyming of this poem. Your rhyming scheme (a,a,a,x) is absolutely beautiful. It flows beautifully that kept me reading. The tone is soothing. I like how each stanza ended with the same phrase “love comes softly”.
What I liked:
Fleeting doubts inside possess
a gathering of emptiness
upon which feelings never rest
love comes softly
Suggestions: I didn’t find any mistakes. I like the message that when we least expect it, we can find someone.
Overall: I enjoyed reading your poem. Thanks for sharing. It’s a wonderful poem
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
It's been pleasure to review your story on behalf of the “The Earth day Challenge”. I am not a writing expert and this review is my opinion only.
You have written a very good piece of story; I liked the way you told the story with very clear descriptions and presentation. It is easy to read. I like this monologue based story. The story starts very beautifully with a thoughtful quote “The older you get, the more you give in to gravity.” You have original thoughts in your story.
The story:
The story is about an old man who lost his wife Marian many years ago. The old man used to visit the nearby park every day. One day he found a little puppy in the park. He named it Max after his dead friend.
Characters:
All the characters are well developed. I like these characters. You crafted them beautifully.
Dialogue : Dioulouge floated beautifully between the characters.
Favourite part: “ There are so many colors in nature. I look around now from this bench and I see them, but there are colors our eyes cannot see nor our minds can fathom. Does forgiveness have a color, Marian? I believe it does. I believe the color of forgiveness cannot be found in any flower, tree, or bird. But it can paint the hearts of old men. Not any impossibility exists from uniting the three of us in a higher realm. That’s what I believe Marian. That’s why I’ll always wear your ring. “
Suggestions:
I think you can make a bigger story from this piece. That would be very interesting.
This is an amazing thoughtful story and the ending was brilliant. I enjoyed it reading.
I just read your poem.I am reviewing you on behalf of the “The Earth day Challenge”. I am not a writing expert and this review is my opinion only.
I like your Haiku Sonnet poem.
The way you wrote this poem keeps me reading it from the beginning to the end. I like how every third line ended with the same phrase “The season is ripe.”
This poem is unique and flows beautifully with your crafted words. Your rhyming scheme makes this poem more interesting. I like the last stanza
"In Mother Nature's new clothes,
the earth celebrates rebirth."
You used the Punctuation marks which help the readers to read it smoothly. I learned how to write Haiku Sonnet.
This is a wonderful poem especially I like the ending.
Initial Impression : This is a wonderful piece of write with a unique concept. I like the proverbs. The title caught my eye.
The poem : We the human being rules the sea, air and land. Every day we constructed buildings and industry for our own comfort. Sadly we don't pay the respect that she deserves; we don’t think what will happen to our next generation. We pollute the air and water with toxic gases. I hope a day will come when all of us will start caring about the environment and nature to forget our personal matters.
Theme and Creativity:I love this piece because main thought of this piece is about our mother nature. It’s written so beautifully that kept me reading to the end. It describes lot of problems created by us (the human being).
Favorite part: "I am alarmed by the "need for greed" in oil and coal to be the end to all means for energy. I am disturbed by the pipeline leaks that continue to take place that destroy the earth, wildlife, and human lives, all of which can never be replaced."
Suggestions :I didn’t find any mistakes.
Overall Impression: . I enjoyed it reading.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
First impression:
This is a good piece of work. The title caught my eye. I like the information’s you have given here about Shorter neck Canada Goose. I learned that the endangered Canada Goose have long gray wings, lower their webbed feet. They found in Pennsylvania campus. They have a wide variety of moods and gestures when they communicate with each other.
We the human being rules the earth. We are polluting the air by the greenhouse gases. Polluting sea by the plastics and wastes. It affects many other species. Each year thousands of species disappear. Many animals are being lost due to our negligence. Sometimes hunters haunted them; We cut the trees and destroying their habitat. Sometimes hunters hunt them ignoring the rules of hunting.
It is high time for all of us to think about the endangered species and do our best to save and protect them.
The article: I want to thank you for your description and presentation. The way you present this kept me reading to the end.
Favorite part: “You will see them in the very, very early spring as soon as the ice is gone into the late fall. They are non migratory and will stay as long as they can find food and they will go south long enough to find food. They won’t starve,” said Neyer.”
Overall impression: I enjoyed it reading. I learned many from this piece. Thank you for sharing. This is a wonderful piece.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I'm reviewing for "The Simply Positive Group." I want to welcome you to WDC and thought I would give you some feedback on your work. I strive to give honest reviews and I hope you find this review helpful.
Initial Impression:This is sad but beautiful poem. I like the concept.
Theme and Creativity:This is thirteen line rhymed poem. Beautifully described the feelings.
Suggestions:
1. It would be excellent if you make four line in each stanzas (a,a,b,b)
2. Remove the commas. Besides that, the poem was amazing.
I like the lines
“Find your courage and your valiance,
Seek your passion and your defiance,
Wear not the mask of grief in your search for relief,
Use not the crutch of despair”
Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I read your story. you wrote this piece following the prompt “ It was a dark and stormy night. I liked the stormy picture you painted here,
The Story:The story was about Jake and Kim. Who fight with the ten feet waves in a dark stormy day. You have painted beautifully the stormy night picture. I want to thank you for your description and presentation. I especially like the ending “Kim screamed as a terrible pain tore through her leg and then pulled her under for the last time. The devil of the ocean claimed another victim.”
My Suggestions:I understand you wrote this story with limited word count. And I think you can make a bigger story from this piece.
Final Thoughts:Overall, this piece was very well written. I enjoyed your story.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I read your poem.
I would give you some feedback on your work.
Initial Impression : Beautifully written. I like the message.
The poem : Yes, it very true that , empathy touch make us feel and act like better people.
The people for the people. Life for life. Certainly one could get little sympathy from each other. Empathy’s touch can ease pain. The most surprising thing is with empathic touch an enemy becomes friend.
I most like the last verse.
“Feeling the intense heat;
O heart in turmoil's grasp
I desperately want to save you
From the vespers of the asp”
A little bit editing will make this piece more interesting. Besides that, this piece was amazing.
I really liked your poem. I found it very entertaining. Yes, we all want to be young and reckless and irresponsible. We all wish we could go back to the past. It is our human nature. I like the simplicity of your writing. It is easy to read and understand.
Some suggestions: I think you need to capitalize all the first words.
Overall: I enjoyed reading your poem. I am glad to meet a writer like you.
Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I read your story. I'm reviewing for The Simply positive group.
Initial Impression: This is a wonderful story. Beautifully told and written.
Theme and Creativity: You wrote this piece with clear descriptions and presentations. I like the smallest details of your story. I like the dialogues. I especially like the character Macy. The diolouge floated beautifully between the characters. All the characters are well developed.
I like the ending.
Suggestions :I didn’t find any mistakes. I like the images of your writing.
Overall Impression: Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed your story.
The story:: You are telling this story through the eye of a six-year-old. This is a wonderful story. I like the idea. I like the way you wrote this kept me reading.
This is a story of a kid and a pair of hamsters. The kid loved his pets and cares them. But one day he found that Heidi ate all her babies. This made the kid incredibly sad, frighten him. But he did not understand that the animals do not think like we do.
Suggestion: Overall, This is a beautiful story. My suggestion is put some paragraph break. A little bit editing will make your story more interesting. Besides that, the story was amazing and the ending was brilliant. Thank you for sharing.
First Impression:This is a wonderful poem with a unique concept.
Theme and Creativity:The poem packed with messages inside every line. Yes, depression is like a monster controlling our brain. You did a wonderful job expressing yourself and describing it beautifully. Your rhyming scheme (a.a.b.b) is absolutely beautiful.
Favorite lines:
"There he starts playing "The Impossible Dream",
Whistles in between to this hypnotic theme.
Sad dreamy tunes, the rain turns to tears,
That special lady who shared all his years"
Suggestions: I did not find any mistakes.
I enjoyed reading your poem very much. The thoughts you have included are beautiful. I look forward to reading some of your other work.
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First Impression:This is a wonderful poem with a unique concept.
Theme and Creativity: This poem consists of four rimed stanzas of forty lines. I appreciate the simplicity of your writing. The poem has lovely thought inside every line that kept me reading it to the end. The tone is soothing. I like the way you put your feelings into words. Your rhyming scheme (a.a.b.b) is absolutely beautiful like the floating sea wave.
Favorite lines:
" There he starts playing "The Impossible Dream",
Whistles in between to this hypnotic theme.
Sad dreamy tunes, the rain turns to tears,
That special lady who shared all his years.”
Suggestions: I did not find any mistakes.
I enjoyed reading your poem very much.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
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The poem:This is a beautiful poem. You painted a perfect storm picture. I like the imagery you describe here. The way you wrote this poem kept me reading to the end. You made a good word choice of words.
I like the little rhyming of this poem. The ending is brilliant.
My favorite lines:
Man and beast alike breathe a sigh
of relief at having outlasted the storm.
This is beautiful heartfelt poem. I appreciate the simplicity of your writing. This poem has lovely romantic thought inside every line. I like the way you put your feelings.
My favorite lines:
Your name is written in the heart
i am in love with the mountains
Suggestions: I think you need to capitalize every first word. Capitalized all the "i".
I enjoyed your poem.
Keep writing.
Mina.
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