General Impression: I just read your piece “"Long Lost Friend" . This is a sweet tribute for a heartfelt friendship.
The Poem: The poem is about a friend who will find her soul mate in someone who is her best friend. You wrote beautifully what friendship truly mean.
Friends makes us laugh, and we can share our thoughts with them. Life becomes dusty bleak desert without friends. I like the words of this poem. The way you wrote can easily read.
Favorite parts:
“Now we’ve finally found each other
Soul mates it looks like we are
We read each other’s thoughts
Responding to each other as we ought"
Closing Comments: Friendship is a good subject for poetry. I enjoyed it reading. I understood this was written from personal experience and it looks great. I like the thought woven in this piece. Thank you for sharing.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Best of luck with all of your writing.
Happy Writing!
Mina
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This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you. I've read a few more of your poems and I thought that the poems that you have here are really beautiful.
First Impression : I like the beautiful images the poet have painted here. I like the opening and the humorous ending.
The poem: this poem is about a tree that gave the poet's heart pleasure. The plot is extremely simple but beautiful. The poet watched a tree outside his window turned a bright pink in the early spring which has given comfort to the poet.
I like the way you have crafted your words in this poem. Your rhyming scheme is beautiful. I like the lines
“Within the growing tree some birds would sing,
A rope is hanging down to hold my swing,”
Overall Impression : A beautiful poem. I enjoyed your poem.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you. I've read a few more of your poems and I thought that the poems that you have here are really beautiful.
First Impression : I like the words of this poem. I like your thought process.
The poem: this poem is about writers block. The poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words. I like the imaginary of this poem “The author acting like he was dead, while he sat in his den”. And the lines “Not a tale to tell.
Curiosity planted its seed in my head.”
Your rhyming scheme (a,b,a,b) makes this poem brighter.
Overall Impression : A beautiful poem. I enjoyed your poem.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting to you. I've read a few more of your stories and I thought that the stories that you have here are really beautiful.
First Impression : This poem is significant not only the words but also the rhyming. I like this thoughtful shape poem.
The poem: this poem is about bipolar disorder. I can relate your poem because I have a friend who has bipolar disorder. The good news is that there are many medicines that can help reduce bipolar.
I like the way you have crafted your words in this poem. Your rhyming scheme is beautiful.
The flow of this poem like the floating sea wave.
Favorite Lines :
“So I sit alone with my broken emotions,
pray to God, and read daily devotions.
My world may be full of strife,
but I’ll be set free in the afterlife.”
Overall Impression : A beautiful poem. I enjoyed your poem.
Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
General Impression:
I like this thoughtful poem. Here you beautifully painted the human nature.
The Poem: I like the words of this poem. The tone is soothing. Your rhyming scheme makes this poem brighter. The poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words. Yes, we get only one life and in life we have many things to do. We must learn from the mistakes. We the human being have responsibility towards others. We must do some good works before we die. I liked the way you wrote this poem with very clear descriptions and presentation.
Favorite Lines:
“Live to do good works, to improve society
without seeking reward, fame, or notoriety.
Display selflessness toward all in good amount.
You will live only once. Make it count!”
Closing Comments: Wonderful poem. I enjoyed it reading.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. Best of luck with all of your writing.
Happy Writing!
Mina
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I saw that you have an anniversary this month and I thought to read your "Appomattox Autumn" as part of my participation with Anniversary Review event this month.
General Impression: This poem is unique. I like this thoughtful poem. Here you beautifully painted the human nature.
The Poem: The tone is soothing. The poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words. Yes, history repeats itself and there is no way out. We learn from the mistakes what was our ancestors have done. And we try to make better future. But sometimes we too did the same mistakes and we haven't always been very good at tackling them. I liked the way you wrote this poem with very clear descriptions and presentation.
Favorite Lines:
“Or doomed to travel dark roads, die is cast
Tears, grief and mourning, oh what was it for?
Time hurries by, new century at last
Condemned to repeat careless ways of the past”
Closing Comments: Wonderful poem. I enjoyed it reading.
Mina
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General Impression:Both of the poem are beautiful. You have good imagination. I like the concept.
Something to Think About This two poem is beautiful inspirational poem. The tone is soothing. It flows extremely well with your crafted words. It is easy to read and understand. The poem is significant not only the words but also the rhyming and it brings innovative life in words. I like how each stanza ended with the word “I'm a clown”. I think in life we all are acts like clowns. I like the way you put down your thoughts. This poems packed with messages.
Favorite lines.
“Hate the sins, not the sinner
Help your kins, be the winner.”
A Few Closing Comments: these are wonderful poem. I enjoyed reading this poem. I hope to hear from you soon.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest.
Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
It's been a pleasure to review your story on behalf of Simply Positive Group “"Lilly's Great Adventure" .
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you. I've read a few more of your stories and I thought that the stories that you have here are really beautiful.
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a good children story, beautifully written with the song prompt. I especially liked the conversations between the characters.
THE STORY:This is a story of a little girl Lilly and a Unicorn Rainbow. You have a good imagination.
Dialogues : Dialogue floated beautifully between the characters and wasn't boring at all.
CHARACTERS: All the characters are well developed. I especially liked the character “Lilly”. You crafted her so beautifully.
SUGGESTION I am not an expert but I found a few things you will need to watch when you write again
1. I found the spelling mistakes for example “approch ” “Thay ” “coverd” “heartshaped” and so on.
2. Dialogue should begin on a new line for each speaker for example you wrote "What happend next granpa?" Said Lilly, "well, The Unicorn flew through the sky, and back to it's magical kingdom" said granpa, "wow, do you really think there could be a place with a magical unicorn, granpa?"
You should write
"What happend next granpa?" Said Lilly
"well, The Unicorn flew through the sky, and back to it's magical kingdom" said granpa
"wow, do you really think there could be a place with a magical unicorn, granpa?"
You need to give some paragraph break. Otherwise, this is a wonderful story for children.
Final Impression : you are a good story teller. I appreciate the way you are telling this story.
I can’t wait to read another story from you. I enjoyed it reading.
I read your thoughtful piece"Freedom of Speech" . I am now reviewing your piece.
General Impression: this is good piece of write. I like the concept Freedom of speech. I like the way you displayed it with George Washington quote: “If freedom of speech is taken away, then dumb and silent we may be led like sheep to the slaughter.”
The article: Yes, freedom is speech is really important for our life. I agree with you the in recent years, some of the press tend to spin news in one direction.
Freedom of speech enhance our true self.. freedom of speech is our basic right. It allowing society to develop and progress. We can share our thoughts, idea and opinion. I like the presentation and descriptions of this piece.
Favorite part: Changes in society can only happen if freedom of speech is allowed. Free speech helped women obtain their rights, abolish slavery, and improve horrific working conditions, to name a few.
A Few Closing Comments: Overall, I thought this piece was very nice. I learned many from this piece.Thanks for the links.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest.
Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I saw that you have Birthday Aniversary this month and I thought to review your poem. It's been a pleasure to review your poem “"Waiting on the Shore" on behalf of Anniversary review.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you. I've read a few more of your stories and I thought that the stories that you have here are really beautiful.
FIRST IMPRESSION : This is a good poem about pet. I like the wording and the rhyming of this poem.
The poem:. Beautifully told and written. You paints a nice picture . The poem has soothing tone and lovely thought inside every line. Your rhyming scheme (aba) is absolutely beautiful. I like how each stanza ended. I like the imaginary.
Favourite lines:
” Come, emerge from the wave.
Throw the Frisbee.
I promise to behave.”
SUGGESTION I didn’t find any mistake.
I enjoyed it reading.
I am sending you a review on behalf of Simply Positive Group"The Weathered Pages" . The review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert.
WHY I AM REVIEWING THIS ITEM:I liked this poem and the way you telling this. I like the concept.
FIRST IMPRESSION : Beautifully told and written. The poem has beautiful thought inside every line. I like the repeated line “The weathered pages stained with age.” I really liked the way you put out your feelings into words.
FAVORITE LINES :I liked the last stanza
“Much to tell, yet nothing to say,
The weathered pages stained with age.
Echoes and shadows barely there.
Silent voices on faded page”
OVERALL IMPRESSION: This piece is so wonderful . I enjoyed it reading.
General Impression I especially like this poem. It packed with advices and I like the way you displayed these. The eight stanzas was my absolute favorite.
The poem I admire every word choice which is very true. And the flow was smooth and continuous, nice rhythm , and the poem creating a sad reflective atmosphere that keeps me reading it to the end.
A Few Things You Might Want to Work On
I didn’t find any mistake. Favorite lines/b}
If everyone could just take the time and give someone a smile,
they could possibly make a lonely life just a little more worthwhile.
A Few Closing Comments Overall, I thought this piece was very nice.
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Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
I read your "Come and Walk" . I am now reviewing your poem.
General Impression a good poem for a heartfelt friendship. I like the way you displayed it. I particularly like the concept.
The poem I like the way you put your feelings to your friend. A fiend is someone who walked with us on our journey, who never leaves us in life’s twist and turn, a friend gives us a shoulder when we fall, they makes us laugh . You are telling all in your poem. I especially like the lines
"Sometimes you may stumble and I'll give you a hand.
Sometimes I may stumble and you'll give me a hand."
Suggesstion
I think you need to shorter 8th and 9th line of your poem . I learned that a long line should leave you breathless.
"Perhaps my journey will be too hard and you won't understand and you'll walk away.
Perhaps my journey will be too hard and you will understand and decide to stay."
A little bit of editing will make your poem interesting.
A Few Closing Comments Overall, I thought this piece was very nice.
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General Impression This poem has a soothing, quiet tone. I appreciate the simplicity.
The poemThe images you have painted beautifully kept me reading your poem to the end. I like the way you put your feelings into words while walking in the evening. The beauty of evening cannot be expresses in words. Sunset really is the most beautiful time of day. Incredible images of early evening light from across the world makes us mesmerized.
A Few Things You Might Want to Work On: I didn't find any mistake
A Few Closing CommentsI enjoyed it reading. It's beautiful
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest.
Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
General Impression A nice poem the tone is soothing.
THE Poem Beautifully told and written. The poem has lovely romantic thought inside every line. I like how each stanza. Your rhyming scheme (a,b,a,b) is absolutely beautiful.I really liked the way you put out your feelings into words. Yes, sometimes people love someone who has no clue and are about to be separated from them. It comes softly. Some people love, never finding the courage to come up and say something but others don’t have any problems showing it. I think nothing can be achieved without passion.
Favorite lines
The future is very difficult to forecast,
Nothing constructed in today is built to last,
Maybe one day I will smile looking on the past,
Ten years is forever yet it vanishes so fast
A Few Closing Comments I like the way you crafted your words.
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Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you. I've read a few more of your stories and I thought that the stories that you have here are really beautiful.
FIRST IMPRESSION : This is a good spooky story. I especially liked the dialogues.
THE STORY:This is a story of a young boy Kyle who was killed by a terrorist Josh . Kyle returned as a ghost. Then suddenly a man in a black coat approached. He made a deal with Kyle. Upon seeing his name in the list Kyle requested the man to give him one more chance. But the man Kyle soul replaced with lilitu’ soul.
FAVOURITE PART:” The corners of the mans lips went up slightly "I'm sorry, but you're soul is already sealed to go through those doors. Its on the list." He materialized a clipboard out of thin are and tapped about half way down the page with his pen. "You're right here." He turned the clipboard over and I could see my name written in a slot in what looked like my own hand writing. My eyes bulged with fear when I looked back up at the door and the loss it represented”
Dialogues : Dialogue floated beautifully between the characters and they wasn't boring at all.
SETTING :The story is setting in modern time
CHARACTERS: All the characters are well developed. I especially liked the character “Kyle”. You crafted him so beautifully.
SUGGESTION I like the way how you wrote this story. Dialogues flowed beautifully. I understand this is the first chapter that’s why too many events have been happening here. I think it may fit on the next chapters later on. I learned that a story without enough description is missing something. The description gives your story the life it needs. So, I think in some places you need to give some descriptions. I think you can add some monsters/demons characters to make it more interesting. Otherwise, it’s a beautiful story.
I can’t wait to read another chapter from you. I enjoyed it reading.
: The title caught my eyes. I just read it form review request page. You wrote down your thought beautifully that made me read your story to the end.
: People have long been thinking about living in red planet Mars. The fourth planet from sun. Its temperature is much like our earth. Although, some believe that the It’s freezing temperature, and atmosphere still not suitable for human habitation. Yet people are trying to make the planet Mars as a second planet for us.
: I can see the reflection of thought in your science fiction. I like the images you have painted here.
I liked the character “Nathan”. You have good descriptions of your characters.
I'd have liked to have seen a bit more from some of the characters – especially Kumar Hassan.
I think if you add some more Chapters that would be interesting.
}: This is a good piece of story. Keep writing. You are an awesome writer.
I read your poem.
I like this poem because each stanza is beautiful. The poem is beautiful not only because it brings innovative life in words but also captures the moment of life. Being with nature is really wonderful.
Here you are crafted all those by some good word choice. greens in sunlit hours, Flash floods wash out roads, Worms appear on sidewalks, children clad in rain gear splish-splash and jump all the nature images creates a beautiful picture. It is just like entering a world of different rhythm. I like the repeated line " April showers bring more than May flowers."
I found you put the Punctuations where they are needed. Though I am not a writing expert and I learned that commas, periods, colons, and dashes signal the reader to pause briefly and absorb the significance of an image or thought.
I enjoyed reading your poem.
These are my thoughts and ideas alone. I hope you found them helpful. Not all of us see writing or any one piece in the same light. Please take what helps you from my comments and ignore the rest. Thank you for allowing me to read and review your writing. Keep up the good work, and best of luck with all of your writing.
It's been a pleasure to review your poem on behalf of Simply Positive Group. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert
Initial Impression :I like this gratitude poem. It is a beautiful poem for a heartfelt friendship. Friends are like treasures. A true friend's memories embedded in our hearts forever. I think Cathy too was very lucky to got a friends like you. I like the last three lines.
"I have treasured the good times so I'm prepared.
My tears for you I must swallow
For this path you take I can't follow
I enjoyed reading your poem very much."
This is a cute story. I like the beautiful images you have painted here. The way you wrote this piece kept me reading to the end. Thank you for sharing.
Once upon a time there was a fox. Everyday, he used to steal a chicken from a chicken farm and ate his fill. One day, he watched the news on TV that the chicken had bird flu_. Because of that, he stopped eating chicken. Until finally, he came to know that the chicken were vaccinated.
Mina
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I just read this poem from nature genre list. I especially like this poem. The last stanza was my absolute favorite. Your poem flowed beautifully with your crafted words. The tone of this poem is soothing. You beautifully put your feelings into words. I admire every word choice.
My favorite:
“Luminescence, like a soft blush,
reveals our surroundings through our heart's glow,
illuminating that we are more than ourselves.
Discovered in solitude ... Hush.”
It's been a pleasure to review your poem on behalf of the “"The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
Initial Impression:This is a beautiful gratitude poem
Favorite lines: She is your mother with all her heart for you
You are more important for her than she is for you
Suggestions:I think you need to capitalize all the first word in each line. Overall Impression : Beautiful poem. Keep writing.
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Mina
General Impression a good poem for a heartfelt friendship. I like the way you displayed it. I particularly like the concept.
Suggesstion
: The title caught my eyes. I just read it form review request page. You wrote down your thought beautifully that made me read your story to the end. 
: People have long been thinking about living in red planet Mars. The fourth planet from sun. Its temperature is much like our earth. Although, some believe that the It’s freezing temperature, and atmosphere still not suitable for human habitation. Yet people are trying to make the planet Mars as a second planet for us.
: I can see the reflection of thought in your science fiction. I like the images you have painted here. 
I liked the character “Nathan”. You have good descriptions of your characters.
}: This is a good piece of story. Keep writing. You are an awesome writer.
