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OK, this is not as bad as you advertised. Yeah, I gave it 3 stars, but there are issues with rhyming, cadence, and rhythm. This is a new item. It needs work. But it's average. Definitely list genres. I'd recommend Adult (it doesn't mean porn after all), inspirational, Personal and Experience. Listing genres gets more eyes on your writing, and that's why we post.
If you think this is bad poetry, I urge you to try . That is bad poetry, admittedly intentionally bad poetry.
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This is very good. However, I happen to have a beginning reader living in my house. Granddaughter is in the first grade, so I asked her to read this. She tried to read the first 2 lines, but she couldn't. I'm giving you 3.5 stars because I think Granddaughter might be more of a beginning reader than you are aiming for. I'm not an expert, but this seems to me to be geared to maybe 3rd or 4th graders, which if so maybe you should change your note to say intermediate reader.
It is well-written. I see no other errors, nothing else I would change.
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This is an excellent children's tory. I visualized Winnie the Pooh style illustrations. At first glance it seems a little short. But after reading it, and visualizing the illustrations, you realize it is the right length.
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This is very God's. Excellent. I haven't lived in snow country for 40 years. And don't miss it in the least. Usually. This made me reminisce about those days. That's the sign of good writing. 'Course, then memories of Temps below zero returned, and sanity comes back. Beu, good job.
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This is interesting. A fascinating solution to an unwanted situation. This is well thought out, well written. I see no glaring errors, nothing I would recommend that you change.
This is longer than I usually read, but about the same size as I write, so I thought I'd give you a shot.
This is very well written. Gripping, engaging, I was all in quickly. I see no glaring errors, nothing I would change. I like that the commands and the alien transmissions were color coded. Nice touch with that. I was very impressed that Beaumont was female. Another nice touch, although when first intro, before her gender was established, I saw a rumpled, bespectacled nerd with a cigar in his mouth struggling with the books. Maybe that image would be better for Youngblood!
I saw a recent review of this which made me curious.
Curiosity sated.
This is a good piece. I agree with Joseph. This is well written. The cadence is good, the rhyming scheme works, and your voice and imagery allow us to see the injury through the eyes of the wounded. You have done well with this.
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Hmmm. An interesting take on the Cinderella story. This is good. Short, but not too short. Since we already should know the characters, not a lot of character development is necessary, but you give enough. Very well done.
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This is different. Not bad, just different. I understand that the contest is no dialogue. Even without dialogue, I think you could have expanded his character more. Somehow, it left me unfulfilled.
I saw no glaring errors, no suggestions on what to change to make it more fulfilling.
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Very interesting. Well thought out, well executed. I have to admit that I had figured out that Mr. Bond was dead about half way through, but that is not a bad thing. I think you did a wonderful job here. I am curious. I saw the small man as Ernst Stavro Blofeld even though he is supposed to be a physically high man. Who did you envision as the small man?
Well done. I see no glaring errors, nothing I would change.
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This is very good. I'm not a poetry expert, but for me, this reminds me of Emily Dickinson. It is well written. The rhyming scheme is good. The cadence is a little rough in places, but I don't know how to fix it.
I followed your advice and followed the links. I understand much better now. I was the link, but I tend to skip over them for no good reason, so I missed this. I'm glad you led me in the right direction. I don't know how to tell you to tell dunces like to to follow the steps. Good luck with that.
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And imagine my surprise when you popped up.
This is a very good story. It leaves many questions that do NOT need to be answered. The set up is ordinary, which is a good thing. Just an ordinary day. The action is believable. Children get lost in the woods easily. The questions that don't need answering are, how did she know that the kid was at the cabin? How did she know how to get to the cabin? Why didn't the rangers know about the cabin? Why couldn't Chief follow the kid's scent? Masterful job of making these questions inconsequential.
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They say that limericks are a low form of poetry. I say I don't care. I love them.
This is a good limerick, better than most of mine. I see no glaring errors (other than swallowing a fly), nothing I would change (other than swallowing a fly).
If you like limericks and want a fun, challenging In/Out to participate in, I urge you to try "Linericks" . I visit it often. It is very fun, and can be quite a challenge. Check it out.
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This is average. Not bad, but not earthshattering. Hence, 3-stars. There is nothing wrong with this. I understand that this is an article that explains your feelings. You do the job well. I see no glaring errors, nothing I would change.
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If your loss is recent, please accept my condolences.
This is very good. I would make one suggestion: The 7th line, change memory to mem'ry. Make it an obvious 2 syllable word. The cadence will flow better.
Other than that, there is nothing I would change. I see no glaring errors.
This is very good. Thank you for bringing it to my attention. I especially like the choice of Elliott's last name. Good move. Names of our characters can be very important. I chose Ken and April for my character names in "Backstage" because they were common enough at the story's setting, but not as common as Bob or Paul, Mary or Sue. I saw no glaring errors. I would change one this. Because of the death at the climax, I'd suggest you change the rating to 13+, and do it before the moderators do it and lick it in.
Wow! Awesome! This is very good. You give us just enough information to keep us glued to the page. I saw no glaring errors, nothing I would recommend changing. One thing I liked is you never gave us a reason for his suicide. Good job. Let us figure it out for ourselves.
I appreciate the GPs you send me for reviews, so I looked up your port, and this caught my eye. Now, mind you, I'm an expert on Rome (note the sarcasm). I haven't heard of all of these. My first reaction was, Where's Nero? Ok, seriously, "greatest" is subjective, but with my lack of know, I went with the one that, thanks to the Gospel of Luke's nativity story in the Bible, I. Went with the one that I'm must familiar with.
One good deed deserves another. I asked you to review two of my stories, so here we are.
This is very good. It might be a little short, but that works here. A couple things I noticed, and it's probably nothing. Where did they walk that first day? And how did Leo know Adrian's name? Why didn't Adrian ask? The fact that Adrian knew Leo's name is not a problem because of the way it was introduced: "The first time Adrian saw Leo, it felt like the world had tilted."
I think that you probably should give this a 13+ rating due to subject matter. Other than that, well done.
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