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*Heart* WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE

Title: Every title of a piece should have a magnetic charm that can allure or hook a reader, because it is the first thing in which every reader have their first glance and first impression before entering to the piece.

The title of your piece is simple for me, but it hook me, ideas are very intrigue to know, because we always learn in every ideas that we share.

Imagery : a well chosen and creatively crafted words are important to create a well balance and vivid imagery.It will evokes emotion also specially if there is no distraction while reading.

The words you weaved are vivid to me, every line have and give a thought or an idea,
just like the title.

Rhyme, Rhythm and Form - The correct and well chosen of rhyme and rhythm in a poetry is important to help to lift the tone to express well the purpose or thought of the piece, that will not executing distortion of the language.
I find some rhyme in ends of lines but some are not, I think its better if there are all rhyming or have a rhyming pattern, because you begin the rhyming on the first two part in which the reader have already an impression that this is a rhyming poetry.
*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
Just only the rhyming pattern in lines 3 and 4
and in lines 14 and 15.

and I just have a thought on the word germ you used.

Are ideas are like germs?
I think about germ as we always tend to get rid of it because it can cause as a disease.
Is this mean that we tend to get rid of every ideas sometimes..?

 MY FINAL THOUGHT :
This is a great piece.
You already stated there where ideas come from.
and they all indeed true.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.0


Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.*Heart*

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*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

Title:The title of your piece is good for me, A great start of everything is its new beginning.
This reminds me of the beauty in every morning - and that enticed me to read and picked your piece.

Plot and Format - The format is good to me, it has proper paragraphing, incidents are in detailed and that makes reader somehow really understand it.

Setting - if its properly well written, with the correct chosen of words, it makes a nice and balance imagery, and it will not seems to be redundant or overdone.The setting of your story is good, the words created are well.

Length - A proper length of a story can enticed a reader also to read, but sometimes a story even if its long if the words that are delivered was good it will not seem to be long and boring, but even if its short it will seems to be long if its not properly done which makes the reader bored.The length of your story is just good for me, because it makes me to be a part of it,the words that you delivered makes me feel and see emotions of the characters.

Grammar and punctuation - I didn't see any word that can distract the flow, and no doubt arise.

just only the word amounts on the second paragraph.

..small amounts of time in his presence....

maybe you can eliminate the s there.

MY FINAL THOUGHT
 Decisions we made make us hurt sometimes,
but if this the only thing to have a new beginnings its worth to endure the pain.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. You portrayed it well. And I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.*Heart*

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I'm a friend here Samberine Everose Author IconMail Icon
And thank you for your interest in joining the contest"A Great Value of Expressions" Open in new Window. and this is one of my gifts for you, reviewing your piece I've found in your Portfolio.

Please remember that I‘m not a professional or expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Heart* WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:
Title: Every title of a piece is so important, it is the one that can entice a reader. The title should have a magnetic charm that can allure a reader,because it is the first thing in which a reader have their first glance before reading a piece.

I already have a clue about the given title- its about a long distance love affair- and that the one that hook me to read it.

Imagery - a well crafted words and if properly used can create a subtle or vivid in imagery.The proper chosen of words to express or to show the meaning of the piece can create a well and balance imagery that let the reader be a part of the piece and and can also evokes tone and emotions.

The words you weaved are good to me,in which it creates a vivid imagery and evokes emotions like longing and sweetness, just like I relate this to every dream of a princess waiting for her prince charming.
I think this as a combination of classic and modern days.
The use of places or modern places and words like princess from fairy tales,
it blends properly with the created theme or subject in between the two lovers.

Rhyme and Rhythm: This is one also of the important part of a piece. The Rhyme when it was properly used can be pleasing to the ear specially when it read aloud, it was fun to create, testing the wit of the writer, and the rhythm and even line breaks can stimulate emotions and will set well the imagery presented.

There are some rhyming on some lines and some are not, but for me its good because its blend with the created rhythm- like breaking of lines and form of the stanza.

*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find any words that can distract the flow*ThumbsUp*
and no doubt arise.

I just have a thought about the title-using the word Love Story.
I just think there is no need to add already this, because it was seen there in the genre that this is about love or romance.

*Thought2* MY FINAL REFLECTION :
Modern days are -in as of now.
But I still believed in fairy tales of once upon a time, and they live happily ever after.That is the image I've seen here in you piece.
Ten thousand miles away will make abundance for the two hearts.

Thank you for sharing your piece, I enjoyed reading and reviewing it.
Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
Its within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on, *Pencil*
and always share this wonderful talent you have.

Until next time.*Heart*

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Review of Visual Poetry  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Please remember that I'm not an expert in reviewing, these are just only my humble thoughts and opinion as a reader, please try to chew it and leave or ignore if doesn't fit to your taste.*Smile*

WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

Title:
I like the title, the combination of the two words Visual and Poetry
Art and Writing, because I think about Art - and link it to Visual, and Poetry is in Writing, and that is I found here in Writing.Com


Imagery:
All the words you used are true. One word but the idea is compact, it says and comprehend many meanings and many thoughts come up.


Form:
I really like the form and shape, its really amazing how you create it in that way, they are properly and well formatted.

MY FINAL THOUGHT

Writing and Reading the two first words that greets me and captivate my heart in your piece,
Through READING and WRITING we expressed our self bit by bit,here with the wonderful community of WRITERS which make us inspired,encouraged and grow in our wonderful site WRITING.COM, and that's what we make us to be at HOME here as what the end word said in your piece. Well done!

I am ENCOURAGED and INSPIRED upon looking and reading all the words that stated there, and especially the heart shape that compact on it.

Thank you so much for allowing me to review and the enjoyment on seeing and reading your piece.
Hoping to see again more works of yours as UNIQUE as this in the future.

Until next time. *Heart*

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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I'm a friend here Samberine Everose Author IconMail Icon

I've found your piece while visiting your Portfolio, and I'm here, giving you a review.
I hope I can bring you a smile. *Smile*

Please remember that I‘m not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Heart* WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:

Title: Every title of piece is so important, it is the first thing in which a prospective reader have their first glance and first impression, so a title should have a magnetic charm to hook a reader, and a good title also should have a relation to the body of the piece, because the title is just like its head part.

The title of your piece is intriguing to me, why you used numbers, I just thought that this is when you created the item, isn't it..? but a good title in a poetry should really relate to its body, because the title is like the door, that serves the reader have their first impression, and expectation about the piece.


Imagery - a well crafted words if properly used can create a subtle or vivid in imagery.
The proper chosen of words to expressed or to showed the real meaning of the piece
can create a better imagery that will evokes tone and emotions.

The words you weaved is vivid to me, you used words that create a good thought and can inspired every one.

Rhyme and Rhythm: When it was properly been chosen and properly been used by the words that was used can be pleasing to the ear when it read aloud and it is also fun to create,even line breaks on the part of rhythm can stimulate emotions and will set the imagery presented.

This is not a rhyming poetry, and I liked how you made the breaking of its line, specially its form


*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :

Maybe, you can add a period on the end of line 3, because that's already a one thought.

How they are possible or work
I have a doubt on the word "or",
it makes the word work out of place in that thought.
how about using the word "to"
so that it may link to be a one thought.


*Thought2* MY FINAL REFLECTION :
Our body is the temple of the Holy Spirit, so we must used it properly.

Thank you for sharing your piece, I enjoyed reading and reviewing it.
Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
Its within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on,*Pencil*
and always share this wonderful talent you have.

Until next time.*Heart*

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I'm your friend here Samberine Everose Author IconMail Icon

Its my pleasure to give you a review on your piece that I've found while roaming around in your Portfolio.

Please remember that I'm not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, these are just only my humble opinion as a reader, who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Just try to chew and please ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. . *Smile*


*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

Title - The title is one of the important element of a story, because it is the first thing in which a prospective reader have their first glance and create their first impression to the piece, so title should have a magnetic charm to allure or enticed the reader.

The title of your piece is intriguing to me, but I just think that the stated line is incomplete.
But, somehow maybe that's the thought that hooks me.

 Plot and Format - is important also in a story, a good format of a story can attract a reader.
especially if there is a proper paragraphing, spacing, and line breaks.

The format of your story is just fair for me, but it seems that it needs more proper paragraphing,
The thoughts and ideas are good, It reminds me of a writing in a journal or diary, because like you, this is how I write, just follow how my thoughts/emotions brings me, and many opinions and ideas were showed that I didn't know that I think it in that way, I just only realize it until I've finished to write already.

Setting- This is also important, a well chosen word can create a nice and balance imagery, that will give and hold the reader to continuously read it until it reach its end.

The setting of your story is just fair for me, I liked how your thoughts, experience and memories take you. I liked the emotions that evokes in the piece. It holds me until I reach the end part.

Length - A proper length of a story can enticed a reader also too read, but sometimes a story even if its long if the words that are delivered are good it will not seems to be long and boring, but even if its short it will seems to be long if its not properly done which makes the reader bored.

The length of your story is just good for me, somehow it makes me to be a part of it, your words that you delivered makes me feel and see that emotions that going through by the main character.

Grammar and punctuation - I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.

MY FINAL THOUGHT
When writing we tend to follow our emotions, our thoughts, our muse specially when we are on fire in writing, That is what I see in your piece. But we should also think about editing.

Like in sketching a piece of art, Artist draw and sketch many lines until he is satisfied to the images that he was creating, but after then, artist tend to erase the unnecessary line, so that the viewer will really see and perceive the real thought and image in which he create.

And the more polishing to a piece, the more it will shine its real beauty.


Thank you for sharing your piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it.
I rate it 3.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time. *Heart*

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I'm your friend here Samberine Everose Author IconMail Icon
and I'm giving you a review on one of your piece that I've found in your Portfolio.*Smile*


Please remember that I‘m not a professional in writing or expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Heart* WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:

Title: Every title of a piece is so important,because it is the captivating part of it, the title should have a magnetic charm that can allure a reader, because it is the first thing in which a reader have their first glance and have their first impression on the piece.

The title of your piece hook me and intrigues me.
My first impression is weird if its in literal, but I know this is metaphorical.
I think about letting others to see what's on our mind, so we are letting our head to be open.
Or maybe we are open, or our head is open to any ideas or any opinions that will be share.

Imagery - A well crafted words when it was properly used can create a subtle or vivid in the imagery. The proper chosen of words to express or to show the meaning of the piece can create a better imagery that evokes tone and emotions.

I always like how you create words, every line have its own and create an idea.I always like how you mentioned in he body of the piece the given title.
Rhyme and Rhythm: This is important also, when it was properly done and well, it can be a pleasing to the ear and fun to create. Rhyme can draw attention,and even line breaks on the part of rhythm can stimulate emotions and will set the imagery presented.

This is not a rhyming poetry, but I liked the rhythm that was created. It blends with the created tone.


*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any words that can distract the flow*ThumbsUp*
And no doubt arise.

*Thought2* MY FAVORITE PART :

"That we must contend with
Life was given to each of us."

We can't feel the success in Life, if we don't struggle it.
Expect that every road are rough, while we walk in the path of Life.
But we should also think that we have an armor that our Creator clothe in us.
Thanks for sharing your piece and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing on it.*Smile*

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
Its within us, if we want to improve and share.
So WRITE ON,*Pencil*
and always share this wonderful talent you have.


Until next time.*Heart*


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I'm your friend here Samberine Everose Author IconMail Icon

It’s a great honor for asking me to review your piece. Thank you, but I’m sorry if just only now that I fulfilled it. Anyways here's my review, I hope I can bring you a smile. *Smile*

Please remember that I'm not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, these are just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Just try to chew and ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*


*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:


Title - The title is one of the most important element of a story, because it is the first thing in which a prospective reader have their first glance and get a first impression before reading a piece, so title should have a magnetic charm that can allure or enticed a reader.

The title of your piece is very intriguing to me. I looked in the dictionary about Kalamity- but the word that I found there is Calamity, we used that word Kalamity here in our country- or in our language it is Kalamidad or Kalamity. Calamity means storm isn’t it? and storm are really devastating to life. That’s what my first impression in your story.



Plot and Format - is important also in a story, a good format of a story can attract a reader.

The format is good to me, its appealing and there's a proper paragraphing, and all the incidents are needed. I liked how you combined the sound of the clock while the memories flows in the mind of the main character, it makes it as a nostalgic sound, like when we are listening to music, there is always something that stir in our mind. Maybe, just because the clock has a sentimental value to him. The plot is really a calamity, we really don’t know what will happen tomorrow, immediate accidents that even if we think we are ready, we planned for it, but we don't expect that the goal of our plan will be 100% succeed tomorrow. This is a kind of tragedy, it really happens,lucky to those who survived.


Setting - if it's properly well written, with the correct chosen of words, it makes a nice and balance imagery, and it will not seems to be redundant or overdone.


The setting of your story is good, the words created are well, it doesn’t seems to be crowded, not redundant. And left the reader thinking at the end.

Length - A proper length of a story can enticed a reader to read a story, but sometimes a story even if its long if the words that are delivered are good it will not seem to be long and boring, but even if its short, it will seems to be long if its not properly done which makes the readers bored.

The length of your story is just good for me, because it makes me to be a part of it, your words that you delivered makes me feel and see the emotions of the main character.


Grammar and punctuation - I didn't find any word that can distract the flow, and no doubt arise.

The only thing I just wonder is why the main character forgot to pray.?
In times of calamity, in times when we are already in the midst of life and death,
We usually pray, and think also the one who create us.
Dialogue - dialogue can also allure a story, because through dialogue you can examine, or feel the character or personality of the main character.

I liked that you used some dialogue, it also makes the piece its breathing or space.

MY FINAL THOUGHT
As I’ve said tragedy, accident, even if we are already prepared on it, and plan to success for it, we don’t know what will really happen to us in the end. The creator is the only one who knows it.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.*Heart*

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I'm a friend here Samberine Everose Author IconMail Icon

I've found your piece while visiting your Portfolio, and I'm here giving you a review.
I hope I can bring you a smile.*Smile*

Please remember that I‘m not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Heart* WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:

Title: Every title of piece is so important, it is the first part in which a prospective reader have their first glance, so a title should have a magnetic charm to hook a reader.

I just don't get the title of your piece, I think about a date..?
The brief description is the one that enticed me to read it.

Imagery - a well crafted words if properly used can create a subtle or vivid in imagery.
The proper chosen of words to expressed or to showed the intentionally meaning of the piece
can create a better imagery that can evokes tone and emotions.

The words you weaved is vivid to me, you used words that can stimulate some emotions like certainty,
a feeling to someone, and defining it here. I liked the combination of words like jumped- feet.
I think about 10 as a perfect.

Rhyme and Rhythm: When it was properly been chosen and properly been used by the words that is intently used can be pleasing to the ear when it read aloud and it is also fun to create,
even line breaks on the part of rhythm can stimulate emotions and will set the imagery presented.

This is not a rhyming poetry, and I liked how you showed it using free verse.

*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find any word that can distract its flow.
And no doubt arise.

Just only some spacing.
spacing and breaking of lines can make the thought more firm and create an impact.

*Thought2* MY FINAL REFLECTION :
A feeling or an emotion when it pour into paper can create a beautiful piece,
describing and showing its meaning.
Well done.

Thank you for sharing your piece, I enjoyed reading and reviewing it.
Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
Its within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on, *Pencil*
and always share this wonderful talent you have.


Until next time.*Heart*

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I've found your piece while visiting your Portfolio, so I'm here, giving you a review.
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Please remember that I‘m not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Heart* WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:

Title: Every title of a piece is so important, it is the captivating part of it, the title should have a magnetic charm that can allure a reader, because it is the first thing in which a reader have their first glance and have their first impression on a piece.

The title of your piece is good for me, it is intriguing, it hooked me, I liked how you personify the moon as a friend., maybe it may also symbol as a loyal friend.

Imagery - A well crafted words when it was properly used can create a subtle or vivid in the imagery.The proper chosen of words to express or to show intentionally meaning of the piece
can create a better imagery that can evokes tone and emotions.

The words you weaved is vivid to me, I liked how you properly combined your words which creates an imagery and evokes emotion like sadness, mystery, and loyalty.


Rhyme and Rhythm: when it was properly been chosen and properly been used by the words that was intently used can be pleasing to the ear when it read aloud and fun to create.,and even line breaks on the part of rhythm can stimulate emotions and will set the imagery presented.

This is not a rhyming poetry, but I liked the rhythm that was created. It blends with the created tone.


*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any words that can distract the flow*ThumbsUp*
I just have doubt and wonder why you didn't capitalized some letter on the given title ,
And not using some punctuation marks,
using Punctuation marks are one of the important tools or equipment of a piece,
It helps the piece to slow, to stop and be fast while reading.
I've noticed also that you don't used any punctuation marks on the body of the piece.
Like on the third line, this is a kind of questioning but you don't used any punctuation.

*Thought2* MY FINAL REFLECTION :
Moon is beautiful, it looks deep and full of mystery, like friendship.
A good friendship always go deeper like the moon at night.
The more you looked it , the more deeper and the more you want to know what's behind it, like friendship.

Thanks for sharing your piece and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing on it.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.


Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
Its within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on,
and always share this wonderful talent you have.


Until next time.*Heart*


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Please remember that I‘m not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
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*Heart* WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:

Title: Every title of a piece is so important, it is the first thing in which a reader have their first glance, so the title should have a magnetic charm that can allure or attract a reader.

The title of your piece is so enticing to me, but its just simple. I always find this lines through lyrics in a song so my first impression is a kind of lyrical piece. That's how it enticed me to read it, because I liked lyrics in songs and also in poetry, and I didn't disappointed to have a read on it.


Imagery - A well crafted words and when it was properly used can create and stimulate emotions and tone, it can create a vivid picture of imagery to the reader. It can take the reader to the imagination of the creator without any blur of lines or words, to make a subtle flow of the piece.

The words you weaved is vivid to me, easy to understand and lyrical in format. I've found it as an expression of emotion. I feel the emotion like longings, pain, sorry, missing and love certainty.


Rhyme and Rhythm: One of the most important element of a piece, when it was properly been chosen and properly been used by the words that is intently used can be pleasing to the ear when it read aloud and fun to create, and even line breaks on the part of rhythm can stimulate emotions and will set a perfect of the imagery as it is presented.

This is a free verse, and I liked how you made it,
It blends with the created emotions.

*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :

I just have doubt on some lines.
This are just only my thought it may varies to others.

When we first met
I just think there is a missing word here, it didn't satisfy me.
I also think - The first time we met.


You loved me so much already.
The word so much - when I go through the next line.
It doesn't link already.
You might mean

that you love me.- simple but I think its firm.

You grew on me.
I just don't understanding what you are saying here.-
You mean develop, through companionship, friendship..?
Or the way you feel so that it will link to the first two lines before this line.
How about
I already felt you.- simple but its firm.

The line
Sometimes I'd cry just for you to hug me,

Do you mean, so that he would hug you, you must first have to cry?
That's the way how I understand it.
Or
Sometimes I'd cry,then you hug me,
So that it will link to the next line
And say it's alright.

The line
Sometimes I still wish you were alive.
The thought here is weak
Just only sometimes that you are wishing that he still alive

How about
Sometimes I wish you were still alive.
Or if you want to be more certain its thought
Don't add the word sometimes.

How I should have told you the truth
Why you add the word how
Do you mean how can a way you told him the truth..?

To make it more certain and firm
Maybe you can omit some of the words on it.
To tell you the truth.

Breaking of lines and spacing makes a piece more deeper in meaning and more firm and strong its thought.


*Thought2* MY FINAL REFLECTION :
But when you left,
You stole my heart
And took it with you.

This is my favorite part
the best way when we truly pour ourselves and emotions to paper is when we are in a deep feeling of something, and you expressed it well here in your piece.

Thank you for sharing your piece, I enjoyed reading and reviewing it.
Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
Its within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on, *Pencil*
and always share this wonderful talent you have.


Until next time. *Heart*


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*Heart* WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:
Title: Every title of a piece is so important, it is the captivating part of a piece, the title should have a magnetic charm that can allure a reader, because it is the first thing in which a reader have their first glance before reading a piece.

The title of your piece is good to me, it is intriguing, it hooked me, and trying to know what's about it..

Imagery - A well crafted words and if properly used can create a subtly or vivid in the imagery.
The proper chosen of words to express or to show the intentionally meaning of the piece can create a better imagery that can evokes tone and emotions.

The words you weaved is vivid to me, the perfect and properly combination you used on words, and its moving, like the imagery you've want to show it.

Rhyme and Rhythm: When it was properly been chosen and properly been used by the words that is intently used can be pleasing to the ear when it read aloud and fun to create,and even line breaks on the part of rhythm can stimulate emotions and will set the imagery presented.
This is not a rhyming poetry, and I liked how you made the breaking of its line.

*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find any words that can distract the flow. *ThumbsUp*
And no doubt arise.

*Thought2* MY FINAL REFLECTION :
Everything we think will reflect in us, and we always see our reflection in a clear water.

Thank you for sharing your piece, I enjoyed reading and reviewing it.
Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
Its within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on,
and always share this wonderful talent you have.

Until next time. *Heart*

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*Reading**Thought* MY REFLECTION :
We can learn to taste and to live the sweetness of every bitterness even in times of pain by accepting it.

*Heart* MY FAVORITes:
Title - The title of a piece is important, this should have a magnetic charm that can allure a reader, because it is the first thing in which every reader have their first peek.

*Star*The title of your piece is intriguing to me, and hook me to know what's behind it

Imagery - A well crafted and chosen words can create a vivid imagery, stimulate and evokes emotions where in the piece would take the reader to be a part and to feel what the writer wants to show.

*Star*The words you weaved is vivid, and took me to know and learn beyond your words and ideas that was on the piece.

*Heart* MY FAVORITE PART :
I am just a pebble in the deepest pond
To every depth I am prepared to go

I see determination here.

*Question*MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION:

I didn't find any words that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

*Thought2* MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Living through bitterness can build a good character that we can use if not for now, but for the future.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. You potrayed it well. And I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.*Heart*

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*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
The best time to create a piece of poetry is when we are having an strong emotional feeling, because that is the time that our emotions are too strong and full and the one of the best thing that can satisfy it is by pouring it into paper.

*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

Title - Every title of a piece must have a magnetic charm that allures a reader, because the title is the first thing in which the reader notice and have its first glance.
The given title for me is just simple, but the combination of the word strong entice me, somehow it lift the word stand.

Imagery - Every crafted words if its well chosen and properly arranged will create a vivid imagery, and enhance the created emotion that intently showed by the author so that the reader would feel and taste it.
The weaved words, are also simple, but it evokes emotions, because they are relate and linked to each other. It only seems that you just made it in a light reflection,

Rhyme and Rhythm -A well chosen Rhyme and Rhythm of a piece will help and make also to stimulate- to evokes the tone of the piece. This is a free verse, and I like how the lines was broken,it blends with the created emotions.

*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :

I have doubt on the first line.
Why did you hurt me,
Maybe you forgot to add a question mark at the end of this line, because it begins with the word why - it ask something.

The second line:
I just only think that there's something missing on that line:
Make me cry and feel,
I think about the word "and",
So that it will link on the first line.
and make me cry and feel

And the third line,
I think that there should be a link between the two word feel,

On the third stanza.

I said I love you too.
Even through I knew I'd lied

The word through
It seems that it does not link to the given statement,

You might mean though
To intensify the given statement.

You have turn my down.
You might mean -turn me down?
Made feel low and
There's something that are missing again in this line,

My thought is who's that who "made feel low?"

You might mean
Made me feel low

and the word and,
it doesn't link to the next line
maybe instead of, you can use but

So that it will create a more strong and concrete statement, like the given line

at the end to make it much deeper and really reflect the word strong make it all as capital letter - STRONG.
I will stand STRONG.
it will create an impact on it.

These are just only my thought as a reader, and I have also these in my writing, it also varies in another perspective.


 MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Emotions are truly strong, and it is been best written into a piece.
This is just my rate for now, I'd be willing to change it if you would like to re review on me on the future.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 3.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.*Heart*


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*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Witches are no different than girls, dreamy, observer, trying , curiosing in every thing, they think or way to follow and fulfill their dreams.

*Thought*WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:
Title - The first thing in which a reader glance in every piece is the title,
So a title should be enticing to read.The given title captivates me, but the most thing that I got interested is the form or the shape of the poem.

Imagery- A well chosen crafted words which is properly combine with correct and creative form of words can create a vivid imagery, and can make the piece smooth while reading it. The crafted words of yours is vivid, which create a good relationship each of the words, within the words.

Rhyme and Rhythm - The correct use of the rhyming of every poetry is important, to stimulate the intended tone. This is not a rhyming poetry but I like how the rhythm was formed.

Form and Structure- Every created form and structure of a piece should be properly applied to create an impact to the reader, your piece for me is enticing and interesting to read, the created form and shape is perfect for me.

*Thought2*MY FINAL THOUGHT:
Like the word witch you used in your piece,
Magical brewing, whispering spells of the witch,
You're poem is just like it,
Bewitching someone to read.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time. *Heart*


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just chew and ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.*Heart*

*Reading**Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Everyone has its own purpose, and that purpose is always something unique and certainty in every human role in this world.

*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:
Title –Every title should have a character that hook a reader, because title is the captivating part of a piece, it is the first thing that every reader look on it. If it create a deep impact on them, or a stimulate a curiosing effect, then it means that you did pulling them on the given title of your piece.
The title of your piece is enticing to read for me.

Imagery – A well chosen words that were creatively crafted and link to other words can make the piece vivid, and can stimulate emotions in which the author want to show, it will make the reader to remind something and the piece can take them into a different perspective in which the auhor would like to share.
The words that you weaved is so in depth for me, I read it not only twice, but many times, but the more I read it, somehow it always make and see its own shine and appreciate it.

Rhyme and Rhythm- A proper chosen and use of Rhyme and Rhythm of a piece can make the piece more enticing and enhancing the created emotion.
I usually appreciate a free verse piece which is best in an emotional piece or in serious tone.
This is not a rhyming piece and it blends with the created tone.

*Heart* MY FAVORITE LINES :
In the kind world of mirrors
In the sunshine feel of sad

*QuestionP* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any word that distract the flow.*ThumbsUp*

I have only a doubt on the word “back” you used o the first line.

Most of all the lines except the first line are really in depth for me.
The used of that word ” back “ seems simple from those other lines.
And it pulls me at first impression as just a simple piece.

Maybe if you would like to change it to something more deeper than it.

*Thought2* MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A great piece.
A little word from the world is singing softly to you, in the sunshine feel of sand,
in the kind world of mirrors.
Well done.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.*Heart*


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*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Each of us have its own path in journeying life, every path we have is not how smooth as how we think.I would say that there is no perfect/smooth path so that we could always have a rest and have a perfect journey, but every rough path that we have, God knew and believe in us, that we can stand and cope all these things, because He is our creator.
Every creator on his masterpiece knew the ability and weakness of his piece, because it was his piece and a part of him. The first one that affected if a piece would have a problem is the creator.

*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:
Plot and Format – Every format of a story should be properly arrange and situation should be in correct order so that the reader will follow it smoothly until it reach the end part.
The format of your story is good, every paragraph consist a compact phase or situation in which it really needs as a part of the story.
The plot here is about our problems and trials that we have, and how we strongly face it, and every purpose that we have has its own reason, every incidence whether we like it or not can create something that can uplift us.
Setting- A balance and well crafted words,will make you feel that you were in the story and a part of it, and no abruptly while reading it.The setting of the story is good and the paragraph are not redundant.
Length - Just because I don't have enough time, so I always look for a short story that is not too long,
Long story can make the reader think its boring, specially if its always the same its topic, the story of yours is not too long and not too short.
Grammar and Punctuation - I didn't find any word that can distract its flow.
Dialogue – A dialogue makes the story appealing, I didn't find any dialogue here but still I like.
Flow - The flow of the story is good and it is in proper order, it holds me, until I didn't notice that I already reach the ending part.

 MY FINAL THOUGHT :
I see this an inspirational piece.
In every experience we have it reflects us, and a good character was build in every trials that we face.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

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*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
This is a beautiful meaning of the different seasons. I always like to use season also in my poetry, and relate or link it to emotions, because somehow the season reflect emotions. I mostly like to used the summer and autumn, I also like spring, but I just only thought that spring attach to rain, and rain here in our country is storm.

*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

Title: Every title of a piece, should be enticing to read to attract a reader to look for that piece.
The title of your piece hook me, because seasons is one of my favorite things to read.
Imagery - Every crafted words should be well chosen, and properly in organized so that we can achieve the smooth flowing and imagery of a piece, to evokes also the emotions and the different senses that were used.
The piece has a smoothly flowing as I read it, and the imagery is vivid. You relate well the different stage of a relationship to the season.
Rhyme and Rhythm- This is in free verse and it blended in the created emotion.


*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find any words that can distract the flow. *Thumbsupr*
Just only on the last part.
'Will spring come again'
I just think that there's a punctuation mark on the end part?
Because the tone created are something longing for the coming of spring.

 MY FINAL THOUGHT :

This is a Great piece.
Well done, the Awardicon deserves well.
Every time in every season have its own beauty and stage, just like relationship.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time. *Heart*

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Please remember that I‘m not a professional or an expert in writing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and just ignore it,if doesn't fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Air is one of the most important to every living things here on earth. Air links to life, because air sustain life. We still live even if we don't eat foods for so many days, we still live even if we don't drink a water for a day, but air without just only a few seconds, our life's ended.

*Thought*What CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:

Title - A title is the one that hook a reader, because its the first thing which every reader first see it, this should be enticing, the given title captivates me, using the word life, life is something mysterious to me and I like how you link it to air, air is life.
Imagery - Every crafted word should be properly well chosen to reach or create an effective flow and subtle flow of imagery, taking the reader to smell, to see, to feel those that in the piece.Your piece is short and your crafted word is simple and well balance, which create a certain idea. It reminds me like the air that is light, freely floating, pure and natural.
Rhyme and Rhythm - This is not a rhyming poetry, and state in free verse.
Flow and Structure. - The flow is like its subject, freely it flows like the air.

*Heart* MY FAVORITE LINE:
No air, no life

This is certain..

*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find any words that can distract the flow. *Thumbsupr*
And no doubt arise.

 MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Air like life is in and out. Sometimes we are lucky and sometimes we are not luck, consist both of negative and positive to make it balance like the air, when it comes to us, we smell the fresh air, and exhale the air and that cleans us. Just like life.
If there's no air, our life end.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5 .

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time. *Heart*


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It appeals to me, so I read, and here I'd like to give you a review.

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*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :

Nature is really wonderful, a scenic view, can uplift one's spirit, can inspired someone, when we are in our dull moments, the best way to go is a place surrounded by wonderful view of nature.

*Thought* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

Title - The title is the captivating part of a piece, when I am searching something to read the title Is the one I look first. Your title is simple for me - its good when this is in the acrostic form, but as I can see, it was already determined that this is about nature , but other than that, its good.
Imagery- The words that you crafted creates their own description that is vivid, and have the ability to took me in those views you've showed. I liked also how you properly formed in an organize and well sequence until it reach the end part.
Rhyme and Rhythm - I didn't see any rhyming pattern here, but the rhythm is fine for me.



*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :

I didn't see any word that can distract its flow.

But I just only have a thought on the word "drop" you used on the first line
It just didn't satisfied me,
I just thought that rays of sunshine scattered when the sun rises.
drop for me - is just only in one place, there's a limited.
Although sometimes sunshine has a time limiting in scattering its rays like a cloudy morning, but when it talks about nature, we always described and showed the best of its views.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A great piece.
And nature as its best.I can't compare it even a nature view on a masterpiece created by hand, because nature is original, and one of the wondrously created by our loving God.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.

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A description of love.
#1973673 by Sammie Rose Author IconMail Icon
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Please remember that I‘m not a professional writer or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.*Smile*

*Reading* *Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
This is different about description of love. We have different views of love, and yours is true.
The more you know that person, the more you had been through for years, the more you will love him. Love always develop and grows everyday.

*Heart**Thought* What I think about the:

Title: The one that enticed a reader to read a piece, I was captivated by the given title.
Imagery -A crafted words of a piece should be properly arrange, so that the flow will be smoothly ad no distraction while reading it. The weaved words are vivid, and easily been reach.
Rhyme and Rhythm - free verse and it blends with the created emotion.

 MY FAVORITE STANZA:

Your love is like the best dream I could never have,
Hours I spend with dreamy eyes.
Thinking of our love as vast as the sky.

Very romantic, and lovely.

*Thought*DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :

I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.

I just have a thought on the word "coffee" you used.
I don't know but sometimes coffee if there is no added sugar, its not sweet, and sometimes it makes us nervous because of the caffeine as one of its ingredient.
But my mom like coffee and even if i told her to limit it, because its not good to her heart.
She said that she's already addicted and its hard to stop already.
Maybe that's the love you also see, you became addicted on his love everyday. *Smile*

*Thought2* MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A very romantic piece,
I liked the inspiration you used here.
Maybe for me, just because- hot chocolate is my every morning's favorite drink.. Love would be like a cup of chocolate,the more you taste, the sweeter is it. *Smile*
You portrayed it well.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review.
Its my pleasure to read ad to give a review. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.

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*Reading**Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
I relate this to confidence - confidence sometimes depends on how we grow, the experienced we've been through.

MY FAVORITES:
Title - I liked the given title,simple but intrigues me, mirror is something mystery to me, we always see the reflection of our selves, but I always wonder why mirror have different reflection perceived in us.

Imagery - I liked the crafted words, it took me to think also and reflect myself.
Sometimes, it reminds me on the past, and the emotions we always see through the mirror, it is the one we hold it.

Rhyme and Rhythm - a free verse, and I know you freely showed and delivered it because it blends with the created emotion.

*QuestionP* MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A Great piece.
A mirror is only a thing but we always see the truth in us. Well done.

Thank you for sharing your piece and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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I'm your friend here Samberine Everose Author IconMail Icon
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Please remember that , I‘m not a professional writer or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. *Smile*

*Reading**Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
As we live here on earth, we are in time travel.Travelling every hours, every minute, we have our own journey in every time, and through that time we always find wisdom in every experience that we have.

*Heart* MY FAVORITES:
Title: I always intrigue about time, its wonder and its deep every time, so its the one that enticed me to choose your piece.
Imagery : I feel that time, took and hold me, and let me to travel from to the past till the present in your crafted words, somehow I see that every line is certain and its true.
Rhyme and Rhythm : You did well in choosing the free verse form, it blends with the created emotion, something mystery and sentimental.
Form and structure:well done using the acrostic form.

MY FAVORITE LINE:

Time is infinite.

*QuestionP* MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn't find any words that can distract the flow.*ThumbsUp*
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
This is a great piece.
Travelling in our time, we always have our own journey, but we can't bring back time once we lost it.
Well done.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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Please remember that I‘m not a professional or a writing expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste. *Smile*


*Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Sometimes it depends in us, how we hold and nurture to grow the love in a relationship.
But not always, because we can't hold time and its circumstances, the best way is to do always the best we can to our love, without forgetting our selves.


*Heart* WHAT I THINK ABOUT THe

The title- I like the word you used: paving - Hardening..? our new map pertains to the relationship. Good title. We all know that every title is the enticing part of a piece, it allures the reader to read.
Imagery- I liked how you weaved your words, some are description of the one you love,so you let the reader create an image of her, and then the description of the relationship that you've both through and will going through.
Rhyme and Rhythm - A free verse, in narrative , it just blend with the created tone.


*Question* *Idea* MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.


MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Although, a piece of every legal paper has always been important to bind the love of every couple, but the most important is the feeling that will always on them, that no one can ever separate them.

Thanks for sharing your piece, its my pleasure to read and give my review.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
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What is your purpose on the Earth?
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*Reading* *Thought* MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Earth is a place created by God so that we can have a place to live, therefore earth is our home. Its really hard to think that nowadays because technology is improving and human were upgrading, they forgot their original home and come to think they are still standing on its face.
Its good to have changes specially improving, but we should not forgot the place where we came from.

*Heart* MY FAVORITES:
Title - the title is the one that hook a reader, it is the first thing where in we first stumbled before the body of a piece, the title gives me something to think, it makes me intrigue, so it enticed me to read.
Imagery - your crafted words has a tone of informative type, questioning but there is already the answer there, it gives the reader to really think about it and analyze carefully.

*QuestionP* MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow.*ThumbsUp*

I just have doubt on the word "created" that you used on line 7th, you already
have that on line 6th, it makes the line reiterate.
Maybe you can use another word.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
a nice piece.
Our mother earth is a gift, we should protect and treasure it.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.

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