Samberine Everose's (everose) Reviews

Greetings!!!!
I'm Samberine Everose

your friend here.
This is my last review from the Package Gift that I will be sending to you as a token of my appreciation for your kindness and generosity in donating funds on "Samberine Everose Group Fund"

.
I hope I would make you smile even a while.

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or expert in reviewing. Anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and ignore, if doesn't fit.

First of all I would like to concentrate more most on the given thoughts and feelings of the poem.

THE TITLE-
- The title is good, pies are sweet and it taste delicious, the title creates a good imagery, and any one would like to pick it, who would not like to have a piece of pie specially if that is special.

THE BODY

PLOT -
The plot of the story is about Journey and the good Samaritans in our Journey.
There is good and bad in traveling, we encountered many things, so a good Samaritans/friends, who are helpful, cheerful, hospitable are needs in our way to inspire us to continue the traveling.

IMAGERY -The well proper choose of words and how they blend them and link to the other words can create a good imagery, and will stimulate the emotions. This will make the piece to be enjoyable to read.
The story is an adventure and the Author took me to that venture, so I can say that this creates a good and vivid imagery, and evokes a pleasant emotions while journeying also to its adventure.
The first part did create an emotion like worriedness, waiting for the next thing to come because of the accident they met, but at the end, that accident came to be a blessing in disguise because they have the time to rest for a while and have that special piece of pie.

CHARACTERS and the POV-
– The Point of view is on the first person, and mostly the way that the main characters described and showed is about what they had or adventure in their travels. Even if it doesn’t talks about the characters personality, it shows up their through his thought and gesture.

DIALOGUE-
-The proper quantity of dialogue will makes the story to be good also, this is the part where in the characters are moving and exchanging their views through their dialogue, this is where we get to know also the characters.

LENGTH AND FLOW-
The length of the story is just fine. Honestly I liked short stories that are short or like a flash fiction specially if that story is compact and blew me at the end, what I mean It didn’t expect that’s its end, as I’ve said the story is fine, and the incidents are needed in the story and no abrupt that I met.

DOUBT AND SUGGESTION:
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT
In our journey, its still nice to know person who are friendly Samaritans who helps us in our venture.

Well Done!

Hoping to see more of your works in the future.

Thank you for sharing this great piece of yours,
and always let your Muse be spark and shine.

Until next time my friend.

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#4056063

Review of Image of a dry leaf blowing in the wind

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Moarzjasac

Greetings!!!!
I'm Samberine Everose

your friend here.
This is one of the items from the Package Gift that I will be sending to you as a token of my appreciation for your kindness and generosity in donating funds on "Samberine Everose Group Fund"

.
I hope I would make you smile even a while.

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or expert in reviewing. Anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and ignore, if doesn't fit.

First of all I would like to concentrate more most on the given thoughts and feelings of the poem.

THE TITLE-
The title seems to be poetic, this reminds me of the Autumn season, where in leaf were fall from boughs where the wind blows and carry the dry leaf, dusty, because of the coming winter.
Maybe you can already omit or not to include the word image, because the blending of words A dry leaf blowing in the wind it creates an imagery already, and it will stir different images to the readers.

THE BODY
This is a letter written in prose, and I liked how the way was written, the thing that I perceived about this letter-prose is about what legacy of life really means- and I liked the next words that defines this
That in our simple way we can touched each other’s life in our simple way, giving them inspiration, a pleasant memory and maybe unpleasant, but I will not recognize the unpleasant, just making a pleasant memory to them even if it’s that is tiny or in simple way.
The flow of paragraphs are good also, continuously and no abrupt and disrupt, because the weaved of words are fine and easy to understand, there some words that are hard but when it blends to light words it makes it balance.

DOUBT AND SUGGESTION:
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.

I just lost on this part
I sure as hell hope I won’t have to wait till them to know;

What do you mean by this?

are you feel like having frenzy like hell while waiting that day?
I just think there is a missing word here, or maybe comma, to make the statement clearly.

A QUOTE FROM THE PROSE AND MY FAVORITE

The legacy of life is the thousands of tiny places where we touched each other's lives,

Well Done!

Hoping to see more of your works in the future.

Thank you for sharing this great piece of yours,
and always let your Muse be spark and shine.

Until next time.

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#4055549

Review of A single River Stone

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Greetings!!!!
I'm Samberine Everose

your friend here.
This is one of the items from the Package Gift that I will be sending to you as a token of my Appreciation for your kindness and generosity in donating funds on "Samberine Everose Group Fund"

.
I hope I would make you smile even a while.

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or expert in reviewing. Anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and just ignore, if doesn't fit.

First of all I would like to concentrate more most on the given thoughts and feelings of the poem.

THE TITLE-
The thing that I liked in this piece of yours is how the title gave me a thought and it creates good imagery. Most river stone are black and they are really shine and clean, maybe just because they always in the water, and the water have the capacity or ability to make them shine.
I liked that you described what is this kind of stone by using the word river, and the adjective single, it helps to direct on ones view and thought of that certain kind of stone.

THE BODY
The imagery is good, I can say that you crafted well and the words were properly blended. I liked how you showed here the single river stone, where it came from and how it was formed, its journey, until a little girl’s attention was hook on its hidden splendid beauty and shine.
This is metaphorical, and I liked how you delivered it in the manner of a light-literal.
The spacing, form and breaking of lines are in good and properly done also, the space gives the reader to pause for a while and a chance to imagine and think, it gives the item into a slow phase in motion to digest properly the hidden meaning.

MY THOUGHT
I just perceived this about life’s journey, we are all the same in His eye, we may face life’s struggle/ uncertainty but all this are part of His plan, to make us grow and polish as the way he planned, until we will return back to Him.

DOUBT AND SUGGESTION:
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

MY FAVORITE LINES
Time and miles

Have left their mark,

Changing just a rock

Into a precious stone.

very inspiring,
I just think that we are all precious stone.

Well Done!

Hoping to see more of your works in the future.
Keep Writing.

Until next time.

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#4055530

Review of Morning

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Greetings!!!!
I'm Samberine Everose

your friend here.
This is one of the items from the Package Gift that I will be sending to you as a token of my appreciation for your kindness and generosity in donating funds on "Samberine Everose Group Fund"

.
I hope I would make you smile even a while.

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or expert in reviewing. Anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and just ignore, if doesn't fit.

First of all I would like to concentrate more most on the given thoughts and feelings of the poem.

THE TITLE-
Morning always comes first before its said to be a day, Morning is always fresh and new.
The given title is simple, it is usual, but the thing that I liked is that it creates a good imagery, as well as it stir a good and inspiring feeling.

THE BODY
All the words that you used were blend and it creates a good image, every line links to the next line, one should finish the read to understand it.
While the beauty of the morning it shows here beyond the words that it did stimulate emotions making the reader experience to see the other face of a morning and appreciate too that part of a day.
I liked also the way it flow, just like the dawn when the sun slowly spreading it rays and the light begins to say it’s a beautiful morning.

DOUBT AND SUGGESTION:
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

LINES THAT INSPIRED ME MOST
Now the forest sips
The morning slowly
Waiting for the sun’s
Gentle fingers

Well Done!

Thanks for sharing this beautiful piece.
Hoping to see more of your works in the future.
Keep Writing.

Until next time.

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#4055299

Review of Is That All THere Is

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

Greetings!!!!
I'm Samberine Everose

your friend here.
This is one of the items from the Package Gift that I will be sending to you in return for your kindness and generosity in donating funds on "Samberine Everose Group Fund"

.
I hope I would make you smile even a while.

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or expert in reviewing. Anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and ignore, if doesn't fit.

THE TITLE-
As I searching for something to review in your Portfolio,
I was caught up in this piece of yours, for me the title creates an intriguing effect, Asking or demanding of something, it is like the other words of Why?

THE BODY
First of all I would like to concentrate more most on the given thoughts and feelings of the story.

PLOT -
The story is about a relationship, a long distance relationship/love affair that sadly at the end they didn't conquest mostly one of the problems encountered in a long distance love affair.

IMAGERY -The correct chosen of words, as well as proper blending can create a good imagery and can stir the emotion of the reader. The words you used are in general, I mean easy to understand, and without any abrupt, it was properly and softly showed even when the incident or the setting change.

CHARACTERS and the POV-
– The Point of View is in the first person, and that makes the story to be good, because when using the first point of view, the reader will be like in the shoes of the character’s view, to know the characters thought and to feel the character’s emotion, allowing to create a sympathy to the character created. That explain often that some reader will love the Character created because of how the Author shows and introduced it to the reader.

DIALOGUE-
- I liked dialogue in a story, this is where when the characters have the chance to talk or move, just like seeing a scene in a movie. For me this is also the breathing part of the story, but over use of dialogue can make the story choppy, so dialogue should be given enough and use it properly or just only add when it really needs.
The dialogue that were used on the story are good, it's in fine quantity, and it really needs in the story, it makes the story alive and moving.

LENGTH AND FLOW-
This is one also of the important part of a story, Sometimes a short story can be so boring if the imagery are too blur and words are not understandable and how the author delivered also the incident or sequence, but there are long story that the reader think that its short and they crave for more, because of how the Author's show it.
My first impression on the story is long, but when I begin to read it, it fasten me on my seat, until I didn't noticed that I already finished my reading, and that I concluded that its short, and wish to read more.

DOUBT AND SUGGESTION:
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT
We wouldn't know or appreciate the other shades, if we didn't feel its contrast.

Well Done!

Hoping to see more of your works in the future.
Thank you for sharing this great piece of yours,
and always let your Muse be spark and shine.

Until next time.

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#4053569

Review of Your here might as well say Hello.

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hi Osyrus

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

Greetings!!!!
I'm Samberine Everose

your friend here.
Thanks for your interest in joining the contest "A Great Value of Expressions"

and its my pleasure to give my Gift Review for you.

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or expert in reviewing.
Anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and just ignore, if doesn't fit.

THE TITLE-
A title always been said the one that every reader give their first glance, it serves as the door, before the reader will decide to enter or just ignore or pass it on to that item, so title should have an alluring effect, so that the reader would hook to read the body of the item.
The given title, is like a friendly statement or quote. The word Hello is the captivating word on the statement, as we can see if we say Hello, we are giving a friendly greetings that anyone will return that friendly approach also. So I can say that the title is nice.
I also think if you would like to tighten it,
Like
"You might say Hello"
"You might like to say Hello"

THE BODY
First of all I would like to concentrate more most on the given thoughts and feelings of the item.

I think this is a friendly Welcome Greetings to visitors, the words that you crafted are very friendly, interesting, and I really feel your energy. I liked also the emoticons you include it makes the written work to be more light and friendly.
It would be better if you will intend this to be a Guest book. I liked the idea about sharing being still a Newbie, or newbie memories, many have a memory about being a newbie and it’s so fun and great.
You can transfer or make this to be in a Forum or the In and out, so that it may allow that one can share their newbie experience and add their names also any one that will visit your Portfolio.
I’m excited to share my experience if that so.

DOUBT AND SUGGESTION:

Second paragraph-
Osyrus is my hanler/screen- name

Osyrus is my handle/screen-name

I wish there was an interesting story to it,but it was

I wish there was an interesting story about it, but it was

But it was a nickname that came out of nowhere and just stuck.
But it was a nickname that came out of nowhere and just stick and stuck. (to make it comical)

Sixth paragraph
Making new friends and possibly mentor-ish friends that she help me improve and learn new things
Using the noun She- you should change and use in general or for every body.
Making new friends and possibly mentor-ish friends that would help me improve and learn new things.

FINAL THOUGHT
All in all this is a Great start here my friend,
Let me know if you would like to know how to transfer this to the in and out,
So that your reader may have the chance to answer that things you’ve ask.

Hoping to see more of your works in the future.
Keep Writing.

Until next time.

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#4051020

Review of Terrifying night in Manchac Swamp

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi Jeannie🌺

Greetings!!!!
I chose this item of yours while roaming around in your Portfolio to give my gift review for you.

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or expert in reviewing. Anything I say here are just only my opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and just ignore if doesn't fit.

THE TITLE - When I return again to your Story folio to search for something to review, this piece of yours grab my attention. I think this is a kind of adventure again, because of the stated place -Swamp, or a Ghost on the swamp, What ever will be, it sounds thrill to me. Well,I would like to find it out.

THE BODY
As I did on my first review while ago, I would like to concentrate more most on my thoughts and feelings about the story.

PLOT - The plot of the story is an adventure,a vacation that leads to devastation. Two lovers or sweetheart having their vacation trip to celebrate Halloween in their friends place, but this vacation was brought them to their nightmares.

IMAGERY - For weaving words to create the sequence of the story, I think you did right in showing it all, it makes me feel that I am a part or one of the characters while reading it.

CHARACTERS- They are only four characters, but you did well in showing or introducing them one by one, through the way they act, their beliefs and their thought.
You introduced them not in vulgar or in the obvious manner, their personality were seen on how they act in the situation.

SETTINGS- just like the character, the setting is good also, they are not obvious too, they are normally been delivered through the activities of the characters.

DIALOGUE- One of the important part of the piece is this- I liked to read story when there is a dialogue, and the correct spacing too of the paragraph. Dialogue can make the story to be lively, and in moving, just like when we watch scene.

DOUBT AND SUGGESTION
I just have doubts like in this paragraph-

Lisa, afraid to look away, continued staring through the fog, then blinked. Did she just see a shadow
But all in all thus it a great piece.

look away, continued staring... There is something missing between the word away and continued.
I think of adding a noun "She" there.

On this paragraph-

Pepper began barking like crazy, too. Is he seeing what I'm seeing? When everybody -

Maybe you can change the other verb that you used here,
it just doubles the word.
I think about looking or gaze.

LENGTH AND FLOW- The length of the story is just in proper, and all the incidents are needed and that what makes the flow to be consistent.

FINAL THOUGHT
This is a thrilling story, I liked how you did the incidents and shows the expressions of the characters.It did gave me a goosebumps.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Keep Writing.

Until next time.

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#4051005

Review of A Forest's Deep Secret

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi Jeannie🌺

Greetings!!!!
I chose this item of yours while roaming around in your Portfolio to give my gift review for you.

Please remember that I'm not a Professional or expert in reviewing. Anything I say here are just only my opinion as a reader.
Just take anything that fits and just ignore if doesn't fit.

THE TITLE :
It hook me on the word "strange happening" that you scribbled, if we think and we always feel that there is a strange happenings in anything or place, we always tend to look for it, human is curious in anything as we always like to search and find experience and knowledge in everything.
It gives an imagery of something that is adventure because of the word wood or place Kaplin Wood, I assumed that this is really happens on the woods or mountainous/forest of course because of the word wood.

THE BODY
I would like to concentrate on the thoughts and state or discuss one by one what I comprehend and feel about the story as I begin to enter to its body. .

Plot- so my first impression is right, that this is an adventure, Two teenager who have their adventure in the Kaplin woods in the time of summer.

Character - I liked how you introduced your characters here, I slowly get to learn their personality through their favorites, by emphasizing the way they talk and their gestures.

Dialogue - Its good that you added dialogue, that makes the story moving and alive, like a scene in movies, as I've said I learn also and know your characters.

Imagery - Words you used are easy to understand, easy to catch and appropriate, and that what makes the imagery good and vivid to me as a reader, I became part of the story, following also the sequence of the incidents.

Length - honestly, at first my first impression about the length of the story is long, but when I try to read it, it becomes short. That explain maybe that a long story can be short in length and the reader will crave for more if the story is well written and gave a good imagery, and a short story can be long if there are things that stated there that are not needed, and that's become boring.

Flow and Setting - I liked how you again shows the setting of the story, you did it not in the obvious manner but you added it as part of the characters life and activites or a part of the incident, which makes the flow to be subtle.

Doubts for Improvements-
I didn't find any grammatical issues here, and no doubt arise.
The only thing that I noticed is when the ghost appeared to the teenagers, I expect or crave for more expression on them, maybe lack of emotion how they were really afraid, and some incident or flow to suspense the reader.

FINAL THOUGHT
I can say that this is a good story, and its really a venture of adventures.

Hoping to see more of your works in the future.
Keep Writing.

Until next time.

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#4049959

Review of On My Own

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.0)

A pleasant hour Khariyya

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

your friend here.
And it’s my pleasure to give you a review as one of the contest gift.
Thank you for your interest in joining the contest "A Great Value of Expressions"

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

MY IMPRESSION ABOUT THE :

THE TITLE-
When I visit your Portfolio, to search something to review this item of yours caught my attention. As title said that should be enticing to read to lure a reader, because title serves as the door before entering to the body of the piece. The given title for me is just simple but it gives me a thought about Personal or opinions by using the word my own, that really creates and gives me to think on it.

THE BODY-
This is about friendship, as the first word already shows it. You stated here how friends are great and true, with their good deeds, to encourage us and inspired us.
The words that you used are light which it able me to reach and capture the meaning on it, so I said it creates a vivid imagery.
This is in free verse, and I liked how you did it in free verse, because it links to the created tone;
like the joy of having a friend but regrets, pain in the end for not considering them as friends.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t see any words that can distract the flow,
Words are just only light, but I just think its applicable because it talks about friends.

MY FINAL THOUGHT.
This is a nice piece, showing friends are good and great.
They are treasures which is more than diamonds or gems.

Well Done.
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4049911

Review of Wildflowers

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Kate

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

I’m here again Samberine Everose

your friend here.

And CONGRATULATIONS!!! for winning my package on the "Invalid Item"

And I'm really sorry if only now that I send my reviews.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

MY IMPRESSION ABOUT THE :

THE TITLE- When I returned again into your Poetfolio to search something to review this one attract my attention. Wild Flowers.
Wild flowers they are not easy to find, as using the word Wild, they are not really in common, But I liked the combination of the two words, the word Wild creates a tough and rough impression where in it softens the word flower as we all knew that flowers are tender and soft. They are link and comfortable in each other. I always meet this two words in song and yes poetry, but even if its a cliché it still create an impact, because it stir the mind which creates a good impression about a unique kind of flower.

THE BODY- Wow! you scribbled a well written words, which described a wild flower. I think about this as a personality, a flower which we see as soft but because of circumstance and uncertain that it went through, it makes it to be tough. Like the wild flowers which we are only see in the forest or woods where surrounded by wild animals, but we only see its real stunning beauty, maybe the way how can this flower was raised and made in wild place. There is always a good thing on it.
I liked how the wild flower that you described here as even if it was wet from daybreak teardrops, it still write sweet lyric that untamed.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t see any words that can distract the flow,
and no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT:
This is just in few words, but I liked how you did it in that way.
Sometimes in few words using words that are really need in the piece, can create a much more impact, and describes well the personality you've been portraying.
And liked that you sprinkled the ambience of nature while describing a personality here.

Well Done!!
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4049891

Review of Autumn

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Maineiac

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

your friend here.
And it’s my pleasure to give you a review as one of the contest gift.
Thank you for your interest in joining the contest "A Great Value of Expressions"

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

MY IMPRESSION ABOUT THE :

THE TITLE- I liked Autumn, it always attract me when the word Autumn comes to my mind, because it creates a good imagery, like orange rays of the sun, a lazy afternoon, rice fields where the grains are ripe and waiting to be harvested, the falling dried leaf. It just evokes an emotion which are peaceful, at rest, I also think contentment, just beautiful.

THE BODY- As I try to enter and read carefully the body of your item, the first word did hook me already fasten me in my seat to continue reading. I liked rainbow, but I have a sudden curiosity why you used it in describing the leaves, rainbows have different colors, not only the orange red colors but also the dark cool colors, and if I relate this to the season of Autumn, cool colors like the family of blue can’t link to it, but I think about the blue sky, maybe you are mentioning or adding here the blue sky in times of Autumn. I liked the word float you used other that falling, it balance when you combined the word down. I imagined leaves slowly drifting down that carries the wind, until it touches the ground.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t see any words that can distract the flow,
I’ve only mentioned the only doubt that arise..

MY FAVORITE LINE :
This is in few words and I liked every word you used.

MY FINAL THOUGHT.
Autumn is farewell also, like the leaves that gently drift down before it grip it rest.

Well Done.!
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4045519

Review of What Nature Brings

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.0)

A pleasant hour Lisa Noe

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

your friend here.
And it’s my pleasure to give you a review.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

MY IMPRESSION ABOUT THE :

THE TITLE- The given title is just simple for me, we already knew what always Nature it brings to us, relaxation, tranquility, beautiful views that is in the good side of Nature and I always expect on that.

THE BODY-
IMAGERY – I liked how you showed here the beauty of nature by using animals that have wings and flying. The words you used are vivid and light and I can easily captured it. It evokes emotions and that is what really Nature gives to us, as I’ve said the peacefulness, the awesome views that makes us in tranquility, and may forget our uncertainties.

FORM (Rhyme and Rhythm)
There are some words in lines that I doubt, and some words are not rhyming.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I just have a doubt on the first line

I look to the Heavens oh so very high

The word heaven, you might mean blue sky here or sky
Because the next line

The birds flying so free capture my mind

You had mentioned about birds here that are flying,
we always see birds on sky flying,

And between the words free and capture
I think there is a missing link there.
I think about adding “and” there

The birds flying so free and capture my mind.

And the use of punctuation marks like comma.

MY FAVORITE LINE :
Nature is divine, she can make us ease.

That is nature.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4043954

Review of Smile

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour Dreamer

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

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Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.

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MY IMPRESSION ABOUT THE :

TITLE: As title is one of the important part of a piece, because this serves as a door before entering to an item, this is the part where in a prospective reader continue to enter or just pass it on. So title should be fascinating to read, and may link to the body of the piece, first impression is created also here and also the expectation.

As I look at the given title, it fascinates me, who wouldn't be smile if you seeing a smile. The word is simple and light and creates a good impression. It is the simple gift that we can give instantly to others.

THE BODY- When a piece have a well balance and proper chosen of words it creates a vivid imagery, letting to take the prospective reader to the imagination of the Author, this can evokes emotions, without any distraction or abrupt in the flow.
Wow! I liked how you scribbled those words, they are light and easy to reach like the simple title. I liked how the tone it is, its lively and can makes one to wear a smile also.
This is a kind of encouragement or inspiration.
I liked also the rhythm form, there is a beat like the lyrics in a song.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.

Just only on the last line, the last word- smile.
Maybe, you can capitalized those five letters, to have an impact- SMILE.
You also forgot to add some punctuation like comma.

MY FAVORITE STANZA :
If there is one thing a favor I can ask of you
One task to fulfill before I die
Then that would have to be the most beautiful thing
Just simply watching you laugh and yes, SMILE.

I liked the message on this part, very encouraging and inspiring.

Well Done!
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4042221

Review of GHOSTS

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Geoff

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

your friend here.
I just found your item in the Newbies Academy Reviewing Page.
And it’s my pleasure to give you a review.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

MY IMPRESSION ABOUT THE :

TITLE: The title of every piece serves as a door while entering to an item, this is the part where in a prospective reader will continue to enter or just pass it on. So title should be enticing to read, and may link to the body of the piece, first impression is created here and also the expectation.

I’m afraid of Ghost, but they make me think as they are mystery, if they are true or just an illusion.
While I stumbled into the title of your piece it makes me think about days of Halloween.

even if it still far away.

THE BODY- When a piece have a well balance and proper chosen of words it creates a vivid imagery, letting to take the prospective reader to the imagination of the Author. This will evokes emotions also, without any distraction or abrupt in the flow.

As I enter to the body of your item, I find the words are clear and creates a vivid imagery, it evokes emotions like mystery, curiosity. This is a metaphor and I relate this to past that are not resolve and haunting the present situation. Ghosts are sometimes those we are afraid of, we can’t bury them, because they are already a part of us. They exist when they are trigger especially their shadows.
I liked those words you used, they are all link in each other, which creates a dark tone.
I liked the word prey that you used to symbolized their victims.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.

And no doubt arise.

MY FAVORITE LINE :
The ghost have plenty to eat.

Ghost has always plenty to eat if we let them.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4038622

Review of Soul Mates

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)

A pleasant hour Cheri Annemos

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

your friend here.
Thank you for your interest in joining the contest "A Great Value of Expressions"

And this is one of the contest’s gifts.
Reviewing one of your piece in your Portfolio.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader. Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

TITLE – This is my first time to visit your portfolio, and as I browse those items of yours, This short story got my attention, as I have my first glance on it, it did hook me already.

What enticed me to read and give a review is what I believed and feel about Soul mate.
I read a lot of it, it fascinates me, searching and trying to know from different views and opinions, if this is really true or just only an expression of every writer's creative imagination. And how true is this.
So that’s the thought that enticed me to read your short story, and would like to know what’s on your mind on these two words.

THE BODY –
PLOT – The plot is good, two sweetheart they met, love each other until the end. Yes, That is really one of the definition of Soul mate. You showed here and relate it in your story how it’s mean, that from the word soul which is mean mind and heart, with the word mate or friend, there is a compatibility in emotion and thought, but I don’t know the right time limit, if this is forever or maybe more than forever.

FLOW/SETTINGS – The setting is good also, I think the main character was having a flashback, remembering his love. I just lost in the flow or sequence, it’s just too fast, I mean there is an abrupt the way when you change the sequence/settings of the story.

DIALOGUE – I really loved dialogue, it makes the story moving, because this is the part where you can have a hint about the personality of the characters.
I just noticed that you mentioned more on the names of the character, just like on the first part. You can used pronoun also in mentioning instead of their names, I just found it reiterate and somehow irritating.

LENGTH- The length of the story is good for me, you stated here all the sequence of their life, from the first time they've met, until they engaged, married until the last part of their journey in which the one was being gone already.

IMAGERY- A well balance and properly chosen words can create a good and vivid imagery to the reader. This is the one that fasten me to read and continue until the end, because a good imagery may lead the reader to be a part of the story, to see, to feel the emotions of the characters with their beliefs and opinions.
The created imagery of your short story is good for me, just only the flow, where in I've stated first, maybe you can add some more words that can stimulate the flow or omit some of the words there.

GRAMMAR AND PUNTUATION-
I just found some on the first paragraph

..to share with his Becky on this their 40th anniversary..
To share with his Becky for their 40th anniversary..

…mental notes on what he needed for his anniversary celebration,
..mental notes on what he needed for their anniversary celebration,

MY FINAL QUOTE :
Take the time to sit and meditate
And think the Memories that was shared
Sometimes it refresh us and feel the love once we felt
Make us strong to face for every tomorrow.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4038617

Review of Blue

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Elisa Rose

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

your friend here.
Thank you for your interest in joining the contest "A Great Value of Expressions"

And this is one of the contest’s gifts.
Reviewing one of your piece in your Portfolio.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader. Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

TITLE – The title is one of the important element of a poem, this is where you can captivate a prospective reader, this is the part where in the first impression is created and expectation. So title should have a magnetic element to lure a reader.

What enticed me to read your piece and give a review is the given title- Blue. Simple but it says a lot.
Looking in the thesaurus, it stated there all about the other meaning of blue. Blue is calm, and it creates firmness and has a soothing element, like the blue sky or the blue sea. But in the other way around, blue can be sadness or gloom. But I like Blue.

THE BODY –Well, I liked your story as I read already, I liked the plot, simple but interesting, you started lines which is very intriguing, trying to explain the personality of the main character so I begin to intact on my impression on him, I liked also the flow, the sequence, you did a great job showing how the story is all about without any abrupt, but smoothly it flows until I finally reached the ending part which made me smile at the end why the main character likes to wear blue all the time. Nice job.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL QUOTE :
We always have our own identity.

Great.Well Done!

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4036276

Review of Well Watered Gardens

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Kenword

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

your friend here.
And it’s my pleasure to give you a review.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

MY IMPRESSION ABOUT THE :

TITLE- As I perceiving the given title of your piece, trying to capture some tone or mood and thought to create my first impression and an expectation as has always been said that should be consist of every title. For me the given title is good, Well-Watered Gardens. The three words are already relating to nature, a beautiful view where in I imagined from the two adjective words, Well and watered, and Gardens is a place of various plants, and that is Nature.

THE BODY- What a beautiful Garden, as I entered in the body of your piece, you described it in here certainly and vivid the things that are found in a well manned garden, full of colors and different herbaceous plants. All I can see is green, the colors of Nature.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow.

And no doubt arise.

MY FAVORITE LINES :
None are hungry when garden water flows
When the savory sun in September feeds

Beautiful words, showing that nature is full of views and wonder.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4036275

Review of The Same Picture (for Fox)

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.0)

A pleasant hour Unapologetic Poetess

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

your friend here.
And it’s my pleasure to give you a review.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

MY IMPRESSION ABOUT THE :

TITLE- The title is very important to an item, this is the first thing in which a reader have their first glance, this is the part when a reader decide or not to enter to the piece. First impression and an expectation was also created here.
As I am looking the given title of your item, just found it in the verdant poetry contest. For me its just simple, I am trying to convey an emotion on it, but I can’t, all I can think is somehow curiosity, the same picture-(for fox) it just blur for me.

THE BODY- This is a narrating style of poetry, and as the words comes to me, it did create an impact, telling about poet are really born and really in their nature. As they see, observed and perceived things, is always been their style, the creating of beautiful words that has been showed based on what they see.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow.

I just think about some spacing or breaking of lines, it can evokes emotion.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Why beautiful words can soften the heart of every poet.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4036261

Review of Nature's Grace

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Dave

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

your friend here.
Its my pleasure to give you a review.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

MY IMPRESSION:

TITLE – As title has been said as the first thing where in every prospective reader had their first glance before entering to a piece, As my first glance on the given title of your piece, it did hook me already, because the two words you used about nature is indeed true. The Nature’s elegance and beauty are true and the masterpiece from God that really gives grace to anyone who can see.

THE BODY – The first line fascinates me already as humming birds are like poets who try to carve words in their poetic impression about the beauty of nature, and as one of His masterpiece no one could ever match on it.
The words you used are vivid, it did create a good imagery in my mind, and nicely done using the Tros-par-Huit form of poetry.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

MY FAVORITE LINES:
The beauty of a bird flitting before a rose
To the page, but cannot capture what God bestows.

Beautiful words. Well Done.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4036257

Review of Camp California

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Jeff

A Greetings from the "WDC Addicts Anonymous"

your friend here.
And it’s my pleasure to give you a review.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

MY IMPRESSION ABOUT THE :

TITLE- As every title has been said that there is a captivating effect to lure a reader, because it is the first thing in which had their first glance before deciding to continue to enter to the item. First impression was also created here and expectation, so we should be careful in choosing or creating our title.
The given title of your piece is somehow good for me, I think this is a place, just simple. But the thing that make me curious is California is a country and why you stated here as a camp, so I made a doubt if this is a country or just a camp, but whatever it is this talks about a place.

THE BODY- As I go along in the body, capturing and holding every word that was scribbled, the first thing that I did noticed is in which it creates a different style is you slowly showed starting from a single word until I reach into the middle part, words becomes more ad the thought becomes strong and depth also, where in imagery becomes vivid too, so I presume that on the middle part is the climax, and as I go along words were slowly fade as it reach its end. Lovely.
The emotion is like how the way you scribbled also the words, and the shape or format is good.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT
There are always a place that we always treasure,
Where we find inspiration and joy.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4035336

Review of The Herald

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Angels in my Ear

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

your friend here.
And it’s my pleasure to give you a review.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

MY IMPRESSION ABOUT THE :

TITLE- As I am looking the given title of your piece, trying to perceive the effect on me,
Its only two words but I liked how you capitalized the two words which makes and creates an impact.
I always meet this word when the topic is about Christmas because it pertains to Angels, they are messenger, and it makes me curious how can you relate this to nature?
That’s the thought that holds me to continue to enter into your piece.

THE BODY- I liked how you did the first line, the tone is slow, yes it was in free verse, and I liked how you did it in free verse, the words you used creates a vivid imagery, taking me to the place where you stated there, and simultaneously just flow, in which the emotions is the only thing I feel.
Emotions like frighten, cold, like in times of storms, asking that the devastating thing would end.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow.

And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
There is another side of Nature,
Like day and night, to make it balance.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4033835

Review of The Artist's Touch

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour The Ripper Returnsl

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

your friend here.
And it’s my pleasure to give you a review.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

MY IMPRESSION ABOUT THE :

TITLE- As title has been said that it is one of the important part of a poem, because the title serves as the door before entering to the body of the piece, this is the part where in an impression and expectation has been created.
as I read the given title, it did hook me already, by the two words you used artist and touch,
We are all artist, as our Father who's been the Great Artist created us, it reminds me of a magnificent work of art that promised a good view or work. So my impression is this could be a good read, and it is related to nature, and its true that one of the the greatest created art of our Father God above is nature.

THE BODY- As I go along trying to convey the words in every line of your piece, I found out that you used words that are vivid, and creates a good imagery, it creates a slow or subtle flow, explaining how an artist creates and paint the beauty, it doesn't rush, just following the emotions, as where every artist have. It reminds me of colors who has been paint it in subtle harmonic flowing.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow.

And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL COMMENT :
You really paint the beauty of nature in words like in the artist hands, magnificent touch of beautiful colors.
Well Done.!!

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4033832

Review of Capturing Mother's Colors

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Alan Davies

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

your friend here.
And it’s my pleasure to give you a review.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

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MY IMPRESSION ABOUT THE :

TITLE- As I'm looking at the given title of your item, perceiving what it means, through the word "capturing" you used, it did captured me already, with adding the two words mother's colors, it reminds me of the love of a mother, you are true in deed linking this to nature, because just like every mother's love like nature there are things that soften our heart while seeing every nature's beauty and that also like the love of every mother.
So I feel excited to know and capture what every mother's colors.

THE BODY- As I go along trying to catch the words on every line of your piece, the first line creates a vivid imagery to me, preparing me - using the word standing, wondering as we always feel while we are in front of every nature's view.
I liked that you used the different shades of colors which articulate the colors and emotions of nature, it links to the given title.
It evokes emotions like stillness, serenity, peacefulness, you did great in portraying these emotions, these are really stimulate while we are seeing the beauty of nature.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow.

I just only have a thought for using different colors on every line.
They are nice, somehow it reminds me of a beautiful flower that was arranged properly in a vase,
I also think in a birthday party where different colors are all seen.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
It soften our hearts, and will last forever --
Once we captured the beauty of every mother's colors.

Well Done!
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4031109

Review of Whispering Tears

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

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your friend here.
And it’s my pleasure to give you a review.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

MY IMPRESSION ABOUT THE :

TITLE- The word whisper caught my attention while searching again for something to review in your Portfolio. It induces some kind of sadness especially when it links to tears. But tears tells a lot, be that tears in joy or tears in pain. That thought hook me to find out.

THE BODY- While reading the words through the line by lines of your piece- I liked how you delivered it, juts some kind of prose, A few lines that tells about the way we live with our love one. I can see a great story attached where in the emotions of joy, happiness, contentment, and pain was there.
I liked how you used the eyes as the starting word to explain how a feeling was work, and the word whisper, I see it in every lines but still great as you used it as the title.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
We can always whisper the feelings
The moment that we have
With our love one through our tears

Well Done.
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4031102

Review of Take a Moment

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Alexi Mason

' Congralations!
You just won 50K worth of package from "The Wizard's Magic Fundraiser" ! And this basket is part of the package.~ GERVIC - Saving for Premium '

A Greetings from the "WDC Addicts Anonymous"

your friend here.
And it’s my pleasure to give you a review.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

MY IMPRESSION ABOUT THE :

TITLE- Sometimes, just because we are busy in our everyday life, we always forgot to take a moment to do some simple things like looking the flowers and observe its beauty, spread our eyes to look the vast blue sky and feel its immensity, or even listening to chirping of birds- that is my thought and impression while perceiving the title of your piece, and that way charmed me to continue my reading.

THE BODY- As I go along trying to convey the words in every line of your piece, I just find out that like the other items in your Portfolio, they are vivid which creates a good imagery, and evokes emotions.
As I begin to read the first line it took me already to a good imagery describing how beauty of every moment when we try to escape from the demands of the world.
I liked how you used our different senses to catch those beauties from our environment/nature.
This is a kind of meditation that take me into relaxing effects of your words.
That for just only a moment- we can smell the breeze from the heaven sky,
That flowers are dancing for the coming of a new day, the dew, and every one's prayer.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :

I just have a thought on the 13th line

The joys that he betrothed to we

The word he- if you are addressing to Him.
This should be capital letter.
And the pronoun we on the last line
I just think you might like to change it to us?

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Even the world is busy
We can make and take every moment as a treasure.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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