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#3931511

Review of Aimee Amanda Alms

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.0)

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Aimee Amanda Alms

(E)
An entry for the Writer's Cramp
#1938821 by William Fowlkes

in your Portfolio, and I’m here to give you a review and comment on this nice stuff of yours.

I‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believe that everyone knows what’s their best.

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
A short piece, and it described well and its sounds cute the character of Aimee Amanda Alms.
Maybe, you are symbolizing a girl, focusing your attention but not attentive...?

MY FAVORITES:
I like how the form was created. Short and simple, just like it easy to carry, but heavy and full if we’ve see.Sometimes,I like miniature poems, just like Miniature houses in Architecture, few materials in small spaces but properly arranged. That’s how I see in your piece. Great.
FAVORITE LINE :
Aimee Amanda Alms
I like how these names rhyme. Sounds good.

MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here.
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A Great piece. Short and Appealing, I believe you described her well here in your own short forms of words. Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.0

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3927254

Review of Why I Had to Share my Tuna Melt

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.0)

A pleasant hour Patrece

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Why I Had to Share my Tuna Melt

(E)
Just a goofy little poem I came up with for the writers cramp contest. For the fun of it!
#1963696 by Patrece ~

from your Portfolio.
I‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believe that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
A clever little piece, that talks about our everyday scene with our pet. It perceived also that you are a pet lover for using them as an inspiration in this piece of yours.Lovely.

MY FAVORITES:
I liked how you weaved your words here. Light- playful and enjoyable to read.
It captured a friendly and delight able images between you and your pet.
And you described it well in your words how your pet looks when he is craving also.

MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Perfect.

I just confused by the format you used
if this is a rhyming poetry or free verse.
Some are rhyming and its sounds good- I liked how you rhyme it- it can add its playful tone,
But some are not rhyming and it can or not really but there is the possibility to distract the flow.
Maybe you want to try to work those un rhyme words.

MY FAVORITE LINES :
My puppy stared right up at me,
His eyes were big and bright.
Then his ears perked suddenly,
His nose, sensed much delight.

Great description of your pet.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A great piece. You showed here the fun and maybe worst of having a pet sometimes that they really need to care for them. By the way if you need something or an assistance in roaming this wonderful site of WDC . You can take a look on our group "Invalid Item"

We are giving help to anyone who would like to embrace the colorful world of Writing here in WDC. Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3926530

Review of What is love, Daddy?

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Sisco

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Meet your friend here Joanna pen name: Samberine Everose

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What is love, Daddy?

(E)
A daughter asks her Dad, "What is love?" ~ WINNER The Five Star Poetry Contest Feb 2010
#1639918 by ~ Santa Sisco ~

from your Portfolio and I’m here to offer you a review and comment on this nice stuff of yours.
I ‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
We really have different definition of love, and it always depends on how we think and look on it. This piece talks about a love of a Father to his child, and love in the eyes of a child. They are different, but it blends in the end.

MY FAVORITES:
I liked how you crafted your words which create a tender and imagery of pure.
All words are demanding and intense, has a soft music that can touch every heart.
The given title captivate me first and intrigues me how is that father’s love that portrayed here.
You really expressed well your thoughts and feelings. Beautifully written.

MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Perfect.

And no doubt arise.
The Awardicon deserves well. Congratulations!!!

MY FAVORITE LINES :
It’s a moment in time that you can’t replace.

It is indeed true. So we always tend to keep it in a special place in us.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A great piece. You really showed here and described it well and let also your readers feel and see the beauty of love of a father in your own perspective. Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3926517

Review of Upside Down (Unshortened Version)

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour Cat Caroll

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Upside Down (Unshortened Version)

(E)
The original version of Upside Down. Angela is shocked at how everything's changed...
#1964029 by Cat Carroll

from your Portfolio.
I‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
This piece have two faces – A face that is full of fantasy in her own world, and the face in which her world in reality. Maybe that is why it is entitled to be Upside down. Double meaning in every side. Beautiful Imagery.

MY FAVORITES:
I liked how you crafted your words in every paragraph. I can feel and see those images you want to share to your readers. Very vivid, full of colors.
You have high and creative imagination.
You portrayed it well and I can grasp it easily without distraction of the flow and hold it until it ends.

MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Perfect.

I just have doubt on the word:
“pitter-tatter”

you might mean
pitter-patter..?

And the font maybe you may want to make it bigger in size to be more appealing.

MY FAVORITE WORD :
Upside Down

I liked how your description here about the story. Simple but it means a lot.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A great piece. You really showed here and shared the things you feel and see in your high and creative imagination, and you delivered it well. By the way if you need something or an assistance in roaming this wonderful site of WDC . You can take a look on our group "Invalid Item"

We are giving help to anyone who would like to embrace the colorful world of Writing here in WDC. Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3925163

Review of Find Me in the Rain

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Poet's Place

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour GroovyStella

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Find Me in the Rain

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Life is too much for her. She loves her son and doesn't want to leave him.
#1963378 by GroovyStella

from your Portfolio.
I ‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
A piece that talks about a love of a mother to her children. A mother’s love is valuable and priceless, one of the greatest love of all. And sometimes mother’s inspiration is her children to struggle and to fight the agony of life .

MY FAVORITES:
I like how you crafted your words-intense.
Every line has a memory attached on which create a vivid imagery. Soft and subtle.
I liked also the given title- in depth and captivating, the one that hooked me to read and feel your piece.
It evokes emotions like pain, yearning, longing, sorrow.
You really expressed well your thoughts and feelings .

MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Perfect.

And no doubt arise.

I just wonder if you intended not to use any Punctuation marks at the end of every line.
Punctuation marks helps to control the flow of a piece.

MY FAVORITE LINE :
He’ll find me in the rain.

Very emotional- I liked how you used the rain to signify your feelings.
Rain showered us blessing specially its drops.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A great piece. You showed here in your crafted words the feeling of a mother’s sentiments on life and her longing and loving her son. You portrayed it very well.
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3925159

Review of Brilliance

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour Stormfoedt

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Brilliance

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I will be brilliant, and I will show all that ONE is more than none.
#1959848 by Stormfoedt

from your Portfolio.
I‘m not a professional or an expert,anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
An inspirational piece that talks about having our own brilliance and ability. You relate it to the sun of what humans have and it is more than the bright of the sun. God created us and gave us our own sheen that can really light and bright others. That’s the thing that we can truly make a difference.

MY FAVORITES:
I liked how your words flow and how you expressed it in free verse.
Every line has an inspirational message which create a vivid imagery. Slow and soft.
I liked also the given title- simple and yet captivating, the one that hooked me to read and feel your piece.
Its really an interesting piece, and very intriguing, you tackled here the unique ability and capability of a person and you expressed it well your thoughts and feelings .

MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Perfect.

And no doubt arise.

MY FAVORITE LINE :
We each have our role.

God gifted each of us a role that we can handle.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A great piece. You showed it here that one can make a difference by having each role and trying to fulfill what God’s planned to accomplish that role.
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3925155

Review of Breathing Autumn

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour S E Smith

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Breathing Autumn

(E)
Autumnal perspective
#1960456 by S E Smith

on your Portfolio where in you were listed as one of the Author Spotlight this November on the WDC Angel Army and I’m here to offer you a review and a comment on this nice stuff of yours.
I ‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Autumn is one of my favorite season also, here in our country, Autumn signifies the harvesting of rice and December breeze is expecting or an after a hard rain, the sunset, the orange. Truly like other seasons, Autumn have its own beauty.

MY FAVORITES:
I liked the given title – captivates me to read it.
I liked how your described there the Autumn. Breathing-
maybe it pertains also your birth here- Breathing in the season of Autumn.
I liked also your inspiration- because everyone has a unique definition of what we think about season.
And you crafted your words here in an very inspiring mood and relaxing time of Autumn.
It really reminds me –creating a vivid imagery of what Autumn looked like in your eyes. Truly Refreshing.
You expressed well your thoughts and feelings .

MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Good job.

And no doubt arise.

MY FAVORITE LINE :
Breathing Autumn

Nice Personification, and a moving description- reminds me an Autumn full of life.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A great piece. You really showed here what you felt and see the beauty of an Autumn season, and indeed lovely and beautiful. Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3924581

Review of By Chance

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour Alma Waits

Welcome to WDC!!!Greetings from the "The WDC Angel Army"

Meet your friend here Joanna pen name: Samberine Everose

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By Chance

(E)
My first Sonnet (that I wrote for my friend's senior final *laughs*)
#1960395 by Almea Waits

on your Portfolio where in you were listed as one of the Author Spotlight this November on the WDC Angel Army and I’m here to offer you a review and a comment on this nice stuff of yours.
I‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
An expression of feeling to someone we loved and how we see him/her. Our thoughts to every person is always been different, but the one that can be the source of our inspiration would be more likely be different- to move us, to lift us and inspired us. And its very hard knowing that not everything has always have a happy endings.

MY FAVORITES:
I liked the given title, it really portrayed the piece as itself- by chance in meeting the love of our lifetime and falling to him by chance, and ended by chance.
But I think about soul mate if really true.
I liked also the words you used you probably described it your love one the way you see and feel. Very romantic and passionate, and pain when that someone that inspired us will fade.
You really expressed well your thoughts and feelings .

MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Good job.

I just wonder if you intended not to put punctuation at the end of every line.

MY FAVORITE LINES :
What hearts do often wander through the night
The loneliest of spirits without hope

Nice flow, and very creative chosen words.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A great piece. You really showed here that our love one can be a source of our inspiration that can lift us to do great things and can be also a source of our pain.Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3924574

Review of This Life I Lead

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour Ulysses Worthington

Welcome to WDC!!! Greetings from the "The WDC Angel Army"

Meet your friend here Joanna pen name: Samberine Everose

I am captivated by your piece

This Life I Lead

(E)
A short poem about life being boring enough to drive someone insane.
#1959424 by Ulysses Worthington

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
Truly, freedom is one of the most important things that every living things must have, because it says here our individuality, freedom to choose what we want, what we like, what we decide. We should not let others to monitor and control us, As God had been done when He created us in His own image and likeness and the way how He created us in our unique forms.

MY FAVORITES:
I really liked the given title, it intrigues me and I see it inspiring. But when I go beyond the line- its an statement where in the poet was hoping and wishing for.
I liked also some words you crafted like mindless clones, Men upon thrones.
It evokes emotion, I feel the emptiness, hopeless. If only the sun could really light and shine.
You portrayed it very well the tone and expressed well your thoughts and feelings.

MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Good job.

I just only have doubt on line:
In only my mind I can flee
I just didn’t grasp easily the idea of this line
How about:
Only in my mind I can flee.

MY FAVORITE LINES :
This life I lead

We are the transporter of our own life, we hold it and it depends in us on how we drive on it to reach our dreams and goals because God in His goodness gave us the power to decide what we like. So we always lead our own life, and we should let God have a part to take in charge in us.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A great piece. You really showed here how freedom is really an essential to humans. God knows our needs so He let us to decide what we really chose in life. Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3924553

Review of Mirror, Mirror

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Poet's Place

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour Em Anekaf

Welcome to WDC!!! from "The Poet's Place "

Meet your friend here Joanna pen name: Samberine Everose

Thank you for entering the contest "A Great Value of Expressions"

And this is my gift review for you in which I am captivated by your piece

Mirror, Mirror

(E)
My attempt to encompass what having an eating disorder feels like.
#1961434 by Em Anekaf

from your Portfolio.
I‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s really best in their works.

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT
A piece that talks about the word contentment-un satisfaction on the way we look and our own figures, wherein most of girls especially teens does. You portrayed it here using the mirror as the reflection of what we really are in our eyes. It really can affect our mind and causes an eating disorder.

MY FAVORITES:
I liked the inspiration you chose very informative.
Using words that personify the mirror the way how we really look at our selves.
In free verse form - demanding and intense choice of words.
I liked also the given title- simple and yet captivating.
You really expressed well your thoughts and feelings .

MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Perfect.

And no doubt arise.

MY FAVORITE LINES :
Mirror, mirror

A fairy tale like-if I transform this to a magical piece, I would relate the mirror to a witch
A witch within ourselves that bit by bit drown us because of our in contentment.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A great piece. You showed here most of teens issue and one can learnt from your piece. If we just only contented of what we have and what we looked, because God created us in the best of what He knows and that is what makes us unique- if not to others but in His own eyes.
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine
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#3923379

Review of The Promise

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Poet's Place

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour Simple Dykie

A greetings from "The Poet's Place "

Meet your friend here Joanna pen name: Samberine Everose

I am captivated by your piece

The Promise

(E)
Two men; seperated by circumstances, and a promise made.
#1814494 by Simple Dykie

which was listed on the List of Public Reviewing Pages and I’m here to offer you a review and comment on this nice stuff of yours.
I ‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
A piece which defines the word promise. A promise of a son to his father and a promise of a father to his son. Sometimes promise is always certainty specially if we have trusted the one that promised us even if time will always be an impediment to fulfill a promise, as long as that promise is already kept in our hearts.

MY FAVORITES:
I liked words that you weaved. Full of moments and sentiments.
I feel the love of a father to his child- patiently waiting and trusting his son.
and the love of his son to his father fulfilling his promise even time gone and passed.
They both kept their promises.
I liked also the last part its sound emotional and it is the part that twist.
You really expressed well your thoughts and feelings of a father waiting patiently to his son.

MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Perfect.

And no doubt arise.
Really deserve the given Award- Congratulations!!

MY FAVORITE LINE :
Rising amidst misty dreams of sleep,
The coming dawn a whisper on the wind.

Very creative form of words. I really like. Lovely.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A great piece. You showed here and define a love which can’t be valued by anything. A love between a father and his son and that is priceless.
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3923057

Review of Clair de Lune

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour G.Y. Lanov

Welcome to WDC!!! Greetings from the "The WDC Angel Army"

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Clair de Lune

(E)
An image of a peaceful night
#1959120 by G.Y. Lanov

which was listed as one of the Author Spotlight this November on the WDC Angel Army and I’m here to offer you a review and a comment on this nice stuff of yours.
I ‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
A piece that talks about the beauty of the night. Its mysterious shades and a pleasant moment within.
You painted here and showed its magnificent hues with soft stroke in a colorful palette. Very lovely images.

MY FAVORITES:
I liked the given title, it is the one that hooked me to read and feel your piece. Very intimate and passionate imagery.
I liked also the words you used- it reminds me in terms of music like those piece of our famous pianist like Beethoven, Richard Clayderman, I relate them to your piece. Somewhat classy.
Vivid Imagery and words are intense and demanding.
I really feel the mysterious beauty of a peaceful night, specially beside the one you love. Lovely.
You really expressed well your thoughts and feelings .

MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Perfect.

I just have doubts on line:

Cross the blue, I sit with you on the lea

The word cross- I can’t figure out what you are trying to perceive here-
on the other side..?
I just think using the word “across”.

On lines:
The gentle moon keeps rising, smiling kind
A father watching the world before dawn

The word “father” that you used there
If who’s that father you are signify here-
If it is related to the moon, then there should be the word “like”
“like a father watching the world before dawn.
But if you relating it to Our Father God above
Then it should be capitalized.
A Father watching the world before dawn.

MY FAVORITE LINES :
The somnolent breeze silently does drift
Caressing flowers that the fields adorn

Nice imagery. I really imagine the soft and gentle breeze caressing the flowers.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A great piece. You really showed here in your own words the feeling and definition of a very peaceful and mysterious beauty of the night.
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3923056

Review of Maybe.

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour Mash

Welcome to WDC !!! from "Invalid Item"

Meet your friend here Joanna pen name: Samberine Everose

Thank you for entering the contest "A Great Value of Expressions"

And this is my gift review for you in which I am captivated by your piece "Maybe."

from your Portfolio.
I‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
A piece that talks about a decision, or a path that one must have to choose to follow to reach his/her goal. A decision that will made him/her change for better or for worst. Maybe a goal must first to think to decide what change would be follow. Specially if there is a will to change.

MY FAVORITES:
I liked how you crafted your words, demanding and intense- in depth.
I liked also the given title- simple and yet captivating. It is the one that hooked me to read and to feel your piece.
You really expressed well your thoughts and feelings .

MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Perfect.

I just have doubts on line:

He will a change
You might mean He would change..?

MY FAVORITE LINES :
Envisioned is a man gone beserk

I always have a heart to people who have gone beserk.
Because knowing our Father God who created us in His own image and likeness
and always planned the best for us.
If we just only satisfy and accept what we are and change for a better we are.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A great piece. You really showed here in your own words the essence and the definition of the word change. Truly, humans are unique and have different ideas.
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#1960298 by Samberine Everose

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#3920226

Review of The Little Beggars

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Poet's Place

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour Angela Death

Welcome to WDC!!! A greetings from the "The Poet's Place "

Meet your friend here Joanna pen name: Samberine Everose

I am captivated by your piece

The Little Beggars

(E)
A poem about halloween. 12 lines.
#1954744 by Angela Death

which was listed on the List of Public Reviewing Pages and I’m here to offer you a review and comments on this nice stuff of yours
I ‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
This piece talks about the traditions where everybody does when the last days of October comes.
You stated here the fun and exciting activities of children during Halloween and the different tricks that may occur. Although you just only concentrated your piece to the little ones but it is full enough to meet the happenings done in every Halloween.

MY FAVORITES:
First that I liked is the given title – You crafted it in a simple manner that doesn’t showed the real fun here and it is the one that hooked me to read it - Little Beggars- beautifully chosen title- pertaining to the little ones craving for fun.
Having a tone of excitement – I really feel that I was there having those fancy trick and games.
Very interesting.

MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Perfect.

I just wonder if you really intended not to put any punctuation marks.

and I have doubt on the line:
Many a dentist will happily meet
it doesn’t conform with the first succeeding lines-the first three line talks about the happenings and fun of the Halloween.
it seems that it doesn’t flow with the idea you want to perceive.
Maybe you want to try to work on it.

MY FAVORITE LINE :
The Little Beggars

Nice chosen words- hiding the real meaning of the piece in the simple manner.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A great piece, you truly portrayed the wonderful , fun and exciting world of being a child. It really gives an inspiring and interesting sense of views. Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3920214

Review of Summer Love and Coffee Kisses

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Poet's Place

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour Amanda

Welcome to WDC!!! A greetings from the "The Poet's Place "

Meet your friend here Joanna pen name: Samberine Everose

I am captivated by your piece

Summer Love and Coffee Kisses

(13+)
Short free verse poem, I'd love it so much if you told me your thoughts on it!
#1960291 by Amanda

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
This is an expression of feelings of being in love- a young heart and in love’s feeling- fresh and fragile like a bud of rose in the morning dew when the sun softly rising to give its new fresh day. A notes of being in love and how that feeling been inscribed to the paper. A very Inspiring piece .

MY FAVORITES:
I liked how words used- they are light and simple- everyone can reach on it, because everyone experienced the feeling of teen age love and life- I liked also how you relate your inspiration to simple words but depth it means like math and rain, fireworks , peanut butter, lemons coffee kisses. Clever.
Every words are important to give the idea of every line. You really expressed well your thoughts and feelings and It evokes emotions, I really feel the sweetness of love and the pain that always attached on it.
I liked also the given title, the one that captivated me to see and feel your piece.

MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Perfect.

I just have doubts on
the word math there- do you mean a subject?, then this should be capitalized.
and the line:
I can’t hear fireworks
maybe you can put the word “those” between hear and fireworks to support and emphasize that there are really many fireworks.

MY FAVORITE LINES :
Summer loves and coffee kisses
were never meant to stay.

Very fascinating, why summer loves and coffee kisses were never meant to stay – is it just because coffee kisses are not appropriate in the summer season..?. Interesting to know.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :

A great piece. Smooth and it flows softly the feeling of being in the atmosphere of love, you really showed here in your own words the feeling of in love with attached feeling of pain and dismayed, and it was beautifully written. Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3917914

Review of Would You Kindly?

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Poet's Place

Rated: E

| (4.0)

A pleasant hour Acid Wire

I've been captivated by your piece

Would You Kindly?

(E)
From the Perspective of one of the Big Daddies from Bioshock
#1957203 by Acid Wire

in the List of Public Reviewing Page, and I'm here to offer you a review and comments on this nice stuff of yours.
I‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
This piece talks about the real character of a protector. A protector which reflects our biological father and Our Father above or any one who has been protect us from danger-our friend, husband and also our mother who protect and take care also the needs and benefit of her children.

WHAT”S THE MOST I LIKED:
I liked the given title
Simple- But it is the one that hooked me to read it- because of the questioning tone,asking for permission, requesting something, it intrigues me.
which consist a comforting tone with a bit of adventure- reminds me looking a hero.
I liked also the format you used using the dash -- even if I didn't know what does it means but it makes the poem clear and hold its flow a little bit slow..

DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Perfect
And no doubt arise.

FAVORITE LINES :
By point of drill--or rivet Gun--
I will protect my little one.

I can feel sincerity on this line and certainty. a phrase comes from a father.

FINAL THOUGHT :

This is a great piece. Truly gives an inspirations having a protector which stands Our father or those one who always guard and protect us.Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3917540

Review of A Cherished Brood

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Poet's Place

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour Tim Chiu

I've been captivated by your piece

A Cherished Brood

(E)
About settling down with a loved one and starting a family - a rhyming poem.
#1958824 by Tim Chiu

in the List of Public Reviewing Page, and I'm here to offer you a review and comment on this nice stuff of yours.
I‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

My Opinion & Insight

You portrayed here the beauty of having a family, a union with someone special and the gifts of God to every couple in the atmospheric shades of love.

My Favorites

I liked those words you used and how you inscribed it in your own, interesting and inspiring.
I liked also the given title-demanding and I feel the essence and certainty in every words, it has a moment attached within the message in every line.

My Favorite stanza

A cherished brood that's timeless, free,
With blessed thoughts eternally.
Tomorrows can, at times, seem vexing,
But His sweet mercy, not perplexing.

I can see happiness and contentment here.

My Doubts and Suggestions

I didn't find any grammatical error here. Perfect

and no doubts arise.

My Final thought :

This is a great piece, You truly showed in your own unique forms of words the meaning of love and gifts of God and the beauty of having a family.
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it.I rate it 4.5
Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3917536

Review of Monotony

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Poet's Place

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour iluvhorses

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Monotony

(E)
Acrostic... tedious sameness.
#1805074 by iluvhorses

in the List of Public Reviewing Page, and I'm here to offer you a review and comments on this nice stuff of yours.
I‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

My Opinion & Insight

This piece talks about the word monotone- in an acrostic form, as you have said boring- no creativity, using only what the given rules, afraid to blend its own idea and personality.But in art, there's a beauty in monotone colors because it gives a relaxing effect and a feeling of calmness- as long as the colors used have the same characters and their ranges are at least equal.

My Favorites

I liked how you crafted your words here, Straight to the point but left the readers thinking because every line has its own depth. Interesting.

My Favorite line

Every lines are my favorite- really expressed the feeling of a Monotone.

My Doubts and Suggestions

I didn't find any grammatical error here. Perfect

and no doubts arise.

My Final thought :

This is a great piece, You truly showed and explained in your own unique formed of words the meaning of Monotonous and I can see also the beauty on it.
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it.I rate it 4.5
Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3917476

Review of Experience, Strength & Hope

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Poet's Place

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour C.E. Thieroff

I've been captivated by your piece

Experience, Strength & Hope

(ASR)
Life's wisdom as taught to me by others
#1460271 by C.E. Thieroff

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I ‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

My Opinion & Insight

An inspiring reflection through our experience that can become our strength that will lead us to have hope and faith.

My Favorites

I liked how you inscribed your words here, interesting and inspiring.
I liked also the given title- it is indeed that by our experience can taught us the virtue and wisdom of life. We can really learnt in every experienced that we have.
I liked also your inspiration here- you chose one of the interesting topic-about life and experience.

My Favorite stanza

Pick up the kit of spiritual tools laid at your feet
Incorporate these ideals in your daily living
Do the work and the answers will come
Your life will have new meaning
That is my experience, strength and hope

You stated here the wisdom of this piece. Really inspiring.

My Doubts and Suggestions

I didn't find any grammatical error here. Perfect

I just have doubts on lines:

You wanted to turn and run to put it as had I
The word "had I"- I just have hard reading it, it just distract the flow
you might mean I had...?

Something, anything, make it stop or go away
The word "go away"- it seems amateur to me.

My Final thought :

This is a great piece, You truly showed and explained in your own unique formed of words the meaning of experience and what inspirational ideas can we pick.
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it.I rate it 4.5
Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3917245

Review of Waves of Love

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Poet's Place

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour!! Dan Sturn

I am captivated by your piece

Waves of Love

(E)
Having gone down the river to the ocean again, the Poet learns to ride the waves of love.
#1476595 by Dan Sturn

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I ‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

My Opinion & Insight
A well written piece which reflects the feeling of being in the shades of love. Consist of different emotions with in depth meanings and relate it in the simple manner. Very interesting.

What can I say about the :

Title:
In depth and captivating-the one that hooked me to read and feel the tune on it.

Rhyme & Rhythm:
This is not a rhyming poetry- which have its own beauty with a soft beat of the rhythm.

Tone/Mood:
A very inspiring mood- portraying every stanza about the secret and feelings of love.

Format/Flow:
The flow is smooth, it is gracefully moving, dancing. I can feel the twist in every stanza.

Imagery:
Every stanza showed a vivid imagery- you really tackled here the different colors of love and it waves which reminds me the feeling of being in the atmosphere of love.

What‘s the most I liked:
I liked how you crafted your words here. very passionate and creative.
I liked also the format you used it blend with the beat of the rhythm and the given title.
I liked also how you formed-it was moving -softly dancing on the music of love.
I liked also how you used simple imagery to portrayed the depth meaning of love.

Doubts and Suggestions:
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Perfect

and no doubts arise.

Favorite Lines :

All words, lines and every stanza are my favorites, it really attached the meaning on it.

Final thought:

This is a great piece. You showed very well to your reader the beauty and the feeling of love in your own unique forms of words, truly it gives an inspiration. Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5
Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3916714

Review of Seeking Asylum

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Poet's Place

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi Acid Wire

I came across to your piece in the List the Public Reviewing Pages, and I'm here to offer you a review and comment on this nice stuff of yours.
I ‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
I’ve been curious on the character you create here. Very intriguing. Having a world, surrounded by those who have their own world just because of being unloved and neglected on their real world. Truly in haven/asylum which the character was longing for would find his/her peace and happiness. Very interesting.

MY FAVORITES:
I liked how you weaved your words here- in depth and how you hold the emotions in every line. It really reminds me and make me feel being on the world of your crafted character here. You really expressed it in the right manner- your thoughts and feelings.
I liked also the given title, the one that captivate me to see and feel your piece.
I liked also the emotions that evokes here in your piece. longing, loneliness, empty, unloved.

MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Perfect.

I just only have doubt on the word “go home” that you used on line:
And hear the staff “go home” for the night-
It seems that it just disrupt the flow on that line.
I just think about using the word “leave”…

MY FAVORITE WORDS :
Seeking Asylum

I see this- not just looking for a place that we can seek peace and rest, but looking and searching also a real love, joy and home given by others.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :

This is a great piece. It creates a dramatic impact and in depth, you really showed here which letting me to experienced in your own words the feeling of being unloved, and craving for happiness, piece and rest, it was beautifully written. Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

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#3916657

Review of The Valley at Night

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Poet's Place

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Devils in my Ear

I came across to your piece in the List of my Favorites Updates, and I'm here to offer you a review and comment on this nice stuff of yours.
I ‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here are just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :
This is some kind of a mystery to me, I think about a ghost thinking and missing his/her love one, I also think of someone who had been parted from his/her sweetheart, or just personifying some thing to expressed longing or missing to his/her love one. Very interesting.

MY FAVORITES:
I liked every words you used- simple but in depth- every words has a significant role to give an idea of every line. You really expressed your thoughts and feelings in free verse.
I liked also the given title - the one that captivate me to see and feel your piece.
I liked also the emotions that evokes here in your piece. sadness missing, loneliness, longing, and somewhat empty-just because of absence..

MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Perfect.

I just have a thought on the word “blackness” from the words
darkness-black-blackness- they are just the same it means to me.
how about using the word blankness…

MY FAVORITE LINES :
Diamonds and rubies wink at me
with electric eyes

Very fascinating, I liked how you personify the treasures here that relate into an empty-companion.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :

This is a great piece. Smooth and subtle flow, you really showed here in your own words the feeling of missing, longing, and it was beautifully written. Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

samberine

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#3916098

Review of Come Along Now, Mr. Bubbles!

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Poet's Place

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Acid Wire

I came across to your piece in the List of Public Reviewing Page, and I'm here to offer you a review and comment on this nice stuff of yours.
I ‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

MY OPINION AND INSIGHT :

A playful note or a piece for children, it reminds me an imagination of toddlers about protector and their play mates. The fun of being playful sometimes- we can see and feel the joyful of lights through the little children, their dreams, likes and inspiration. Interesting.

MY FAVORITES:

The words you used are light- playful creates a vivid imagery, it was well written and portrayed.
I liked also your inspiration- using the young to relate an imaginative playmates their thoughts and fun adventures.
I liked also the given title- very attracting- specially the word “Mr. Bubbles” you used here.

MY DOUBTS AND SUGGESTIONS :
I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Perfect.

and I have no doubts arise.

MY FAVORITE LINES :
Come along now, Mr. Bubbles!

Very fascinating and captivating title, it allures one to know about it.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :

This is a great piece. Lighthearted words that showed the characters feelings and high imagination of being a children, truly it gives an inspiration. Simplicity of things can lift one’s spirits.
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

"The Poet's Place "

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Review of Patience

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Poet's Place

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Marci

I am enjoying visiting again your port, and chose this piece of yours to offer a review and comment.
I ‘m not a professional or an expert, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and discard them, if doesn’t fit to your taste, cause I believed that everyone knows what’s the best in their works.

My Opinion & Insight

This piece talks about a character/ traits that one must have- Patience, but patience can’t acquired easily as you have scribbled in your piece, one must acknowledge and embrace it through experience, because by experience which consist struggling, patience will be the fruit and once we have patience we can endured all things- patience- long suffering is also one of the fruits of the spirit.
Galatians 5:22-23

My Favorites

I liked how you weaved your words in this piece, it gives an enlightening tone, which consist of somewhat joyful notes, truly inspirational.
Every words in every line is important to create an idea.
The given title is simple, anyone can relate on it, but captivating.
I liked also the created rhythm, and even if other lines are not in rhymes it doesn’t sound disrupting because it was properly in place.

My Favorite line

Then through patience I will become more sure
Experience gives me hope to endure

It is indeed that we obtain patience through endurance in our experience.

My Doubts and Suggestions

Now as a friend, a mom, and wife
you just forgot to put “a” between and & wife

and I just a hard analyzing this two lines:
If you lack patience you are told to pray
Wow, that is a scary thing to say.

Why is it scary if we lack patience and told to pray…?

My Final thought :

This is a great piece, You truly described in your own word patience means and how we obtain, it truly gives an inspiration. Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

"The Poet's Place "

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .

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#3914002

Review of Rainbow Reasons

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Poet's Place

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Keaton Foster

My Opinion & Insight

This piece talks about personality, everyone have different personality, and they have different reason, many questions with many reasons, one’s preferred not to be opened, one doesn’t, whatever could be, because every one’s knows what’s their best.

My Favorites

I liked how you weaved your words here. Philosophical-Ingenuity.
I liked how it was in depth, and the first impression that reached to me using the word “rainbow” to relate on ideas.

My Favorite word

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Rainbow reasons,

I liked the chosen title here, for me it means colorful reasons; many ideas; many insight; many views- full of ideas.

My Doubts and Suggestions

I didn’t find any grammatical error here. Perfect.

I just have hard understanding the line:
I have not the key
maybe you might mean:
I am not the key or I don’t have the key?

My Final thought :

This is a great piece, It gives warm in an intriguing manner to the reader. Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

Always, let your pen creatively weep.

Samberine

"The Poet's Place "

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .

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