Samberine Everose's (everose) Reviews

your friend here.
I just roaming around in your Portfolio and found this beautiful piece of yours,
And I’d like to give you a review.

Just please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader, who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

MY THOUGHTS ABOUT THE :

TITLE – This is the part in which every reader give their first glance, if the given title have the effect that can lure a reader, it can let a prospective reader to continue to enter or just pass it by.
As I roaming in your Portfolio, I was stumbled in this piece of yours, what hook me is the word motherly love, which I understood as the love of every mother. I often catch my attention in every piece like this stating our Mother because it reminds me how good and how great how every mother’s love.

THE BODY- A well- crafted and chose formed of words can create a good and vivid imagery which take the reader to be in the thought of the Author. As I begin to read the first line of your poem, it did captured me already, stating how every mother’s do and doing to her child. I can feel the emotion, full and impact how mother’s showed here their love to their child.
I liked the words- fulfillment, joy, blessed, gift, completeness.
These are the words stated there how proud, and how love has every mothers to their child.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow,
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Love of a mother is different, we can’t replace to anyone else,
they are a blessing to us as children, and a treasure which is more than gold or silver.

Well Done!

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4030137

Review of The puzzle of life

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.0)

A pleasant hour GerryGalavoba

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

your friend here.
And it’s my pleasure to give you a review.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

TITLE – The given title creates an idea or a thought which makes a reader intrigues. This is not the first time that I read about life which is relate it to puzzle, we all know that every one’s life are puzzle that have its own to build or search every piece to create the whole puzzle.
But, I like how you used it here, it driven me to hold and continue my reading.

THE BODY – – You did great in creating the idea about the puzzle of life.
I can relate it, you used words that are easily to reach, in which it means that it is for everybody.
I liked how you slowly explain and state how those pieces of puzzle were collect and work in each other until it reach the end which is the final piece of the puzzle to form a masterpiece.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
There are just some words that are reiterated, like
When you finally do, you are ready to start building and piece by piece the picture starts to form.
I already again meet the word piece by piece on the next line.
Piece by piece you match and you create and yet you can’t see.
I just found it distracting the flow.

MY FINAL COMMENT :
This is a good thought about life, which creates an inspirational message.
Well Done!
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4030133

Review of Spilt Eggs

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.0)

A pleasant hour Stephanie Ferguson

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

your friend here.
Thank you for your interest in joining the contest "A Great Value of Expressions"

And this is one of the contest’s gifts.
Reviewing one of your piece in your Portfolio.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

TITLE – The title serve as the door of every item, this is one of the important part, if a prospective reader would continue to read or just pass it on to another. So title should have a captivating element to hook the reader, first impression was also created here and an expectation.
For me your title is good, it reminds me of a home, a rice field; a country house where I always see hen laying their eggs and sometimes it spilt or fallen, and a good breakfast which always prepared by mom.

THE BODY –As I go along with the lines, capturing the thoughts and conveying in the imagery.
I just found it that this short story of yours was full of ideas and thoughts about spilt eggs.
And how you relate spilt eggs to problems or mess which every mother would always try to clean or handle on it.
Words you used are vivid for me, I can easily reach. It evokes emotions, stating personality and characters of every mother would and should have in every spilt eggs.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any words that can distract the flow.
Just only paragraph spacing and dialogue tagging,
These enticed to be more fascinating to read and evokes more emotion.
Like.
Most people say “don’t cry over spilt milk” I say,”There is nothing worse then spilt eggs, so don’t sweat the milk thing.”

For me-
Most people say “Don’t cry over spilt milk,”
I say, “There is nothing worse than spilt eggs, so don’t sweat the milk thing.
Just like that. These are just only my thought it may differs to others.

MY FINAL QUOTE :
Mother’s knows best to do, even the messiest spilt eggs.

Well Done!
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4028258

Review of That Place

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Sisco

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

I’m Samberine Everose

your friend here.
I'm here again and its my pleasure to give you a review.
and this is the last review contained on my gift package for you.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

THE TITLE –When I am searching for something to review in your Portfolio, this piece caught my attention
As every title should have a magnetic effect to lure a reader, this piece of yours have that- What charmed me is that using only that simple word- That Place- making an impression to the reader of pointing of a place which maybe a close or dear to you for using the word That, creating an intriguing effect, what place you are referring to - So that pulls me to find out.

THE BODY – As I begin to read and catch every line, softly to capture the idea, I found this as fascinating, because it creates a vivid imagery by using words which are easily reach and properly combined/comfortable to each other.
You slowly took me to a place where it feels the thrill, enjoy, joy of being at home.
It described already there which we can't measure the treasure that we have and feel.
I like the rhyme and rhythm that was used- it makes the tone livelier, giving an impression of the joy and fun we have in that wonderful place.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t see any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.
The Awardicon deserves well-
Congratulations!!!

MY FINAL QUOTE :
There are many kinds of houses and dwellings -
But, we are the only one who knew where really feel as a home.
and you're right Writing dot com is really like a home.
not only the home of words of writers,
but home of our soul- (thought and emotion)- through the pieces that we shared here.

Well Done!
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4028220

Review of Until

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour cmfountain

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

Only reviews from the past
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your friend here.
Thank you for your interest in joining the contest "A Great Value of Expressions"

WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

TITLE - This is one of the most important and sensitive part of an item. Title should have an alluring effect because this is the first thing that every reader have their first peek before entering to the body of the item. This is the part where impression and expectation was created. So a good impression that creates a good imagery that link to the body of the item must be crafted here.
As I visited your Portfolio to search of something to review, this piece of yours caught my attention,
One word but for me it tells more than that one word.
Until- I think about endless, because didn’t stated there when will be its end, the impression and thought is remain. That intrigues me to find out.

THE BODY - When I slowly begin to try to read the first line, it clasp me already on words that was crafted, because every line links to each other, I will not be satisfied with the idea attached if I'd stop my reading, until I didn’t notice that I reach already the end part.
The words you weaved creates a vivid imagery, of what is love is all about. You just not write here but you showed, so it evokes emotions- the feeling of how love sometimes is understandable and powerful.
But sometimes that is love, it’s hard to think but it’s true, denying ourselves for the sake of our love one.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t see any word that can distract the flow.
I just think about the use of spacing- or breaking lines-
They can stimulate also and make powerful emotions to the reader.

MY FINAL QUOTE :
As long as we still feel the love.
Make every time for last, and make the best for it.

Well Done!
Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it.
I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4028191

Review of Whispering Stars

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Angels in my Ear

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

I’m Samberine Everose

your friend here.

I chose to review your item today as part of my review challenge at the "Invalid Item"

.

Just please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

MY THOUGHTS ABOUT THE :

TITLE - Is there any whispering stars? That is the thought that hook me to enter to the body of your piece.
As every title should have an effect that can allure a reader, it gives me an enchanted impression,
An imagery of a night that is full of stars before going to bed is magnificent that take me to a good night sleep.

THE BODY- When I slowly begin to try to read the first line and continue again the next line by line, I found out that the word you used are all vivid, and easy for me to reach. I liked how you slowly used descriptive words to create a good imagery about a peaceful night, and what it brings to us.
My thought and impression that I’ve mentioned on the given title is true, and it didn’t disappointed me.
I like also how you describe the stars fades when comes the day, but they are still there.
It reminds me of friends who are always stick there, day and night,for better or in worse.
They are the true friends who always whispering encouraging words like the stars in your piece.

THE ENDING PART- As I reach the ending part, I am totally satisfied as my first impression that I feel and have on the first part, because it leaves me a magnificent and enchanting good night, staying in my heart that friends like the stars whispering even day turn to night or even night turn to day.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow.

And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Whispering stars- they always there
Our friends whispering their love to us.

Well Done!

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4027086

Review of Worthless Angel

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Angels in my Ear

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

I’m Samberine Everose

your friend here.
And Its my pleasure to give you a thought and impression on one of your nice piece.

Please remember that l'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader .
I hope that you can find something that can be useful.
Just leave it if doesn't fit to your taste.

MY THOUGHTS ABOUT THE:

THE TITLE - When I am searching something to review in your Portfolio, the given title caught my attention. Worthless Angel. My beliefs and impression about angel is there are all guardian and capable and they are not worth to be called worthless Angel,and that hooks me to continue reading your poem.

THE BODY - As I go along and carefully read those beautiful crafted lines,
The first line already evokes emotion, I can feel the sadness, like depriving pride, as I've said angel always seems to be a guardian, but by admitting that the angel here are worthless is too degrading.As I go along to the next line, by lines. I begin to understand who is that angel was telling here.
yes - they are the armies, the soldiers who battles and fight for war to protect people, peace of nation, those are the angels that I begin to see in your poem.
And as already reach the end part, its so sad that most of the angels who fight and died for wars are been sometimes forgotten when years already passed.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION

I didn't see any thing or words here that are not fit.
The Awardicon deserves well.

MY FINAL COMMENT :
Battling in the fields are our heroes who protect us and considered as real angels.

Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4022014

Review of The Novelist

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Sisco

Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

I'm here again and this is one of the item from the package that I've promised to give you on your recent birthday but sorry it just late delivered.

I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works, try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.

MY THOUGHTS ABOUT THE :

TITLE - I already save this item in my Review Tool, waiting for this time to give my review, and even if I will be searching for an item to review in your Portfolio, I will pick this, because first the title is enticing to read. The Novelist - I always looked up to a Novelist in a high point in writings, because as I've read some works of novelists they are amazed me on how they make a story or a novel to make like in real.

IMAGERY- As I begin to read the words carefully to know what its all about a Novelist, I found out that words are simple when its divided in a one sentence, and that's how I easily reach it, helps to create a vivid imagery, and as I go along with the lines while the item explained that a novelist created a character on its novel, The character of the novelist was build also in my mind, in which it didn't disappointed on my first impression before I was begin to read this item. The first and the last part is one of its finest which creates an impact because as I read the last part it makes again an impression that its start again a new beginning, and that's how the piece it is. Its like a circle, as long as it start there's no such end.

RHYME, RHYTHM AND FORM - The flow of the piece is good and the rhyming pattern that used stimulate the emotion and the created character.

MY FINAL COMMENT :
All I can say is this is a great piece and one of the awesome poetry of yours.
Its worth to have been published and have an Awardicon. Well Done!

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4021994

Review of A Life Taken From Us

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour Survivor

Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

Its my pleasure to give you a review.
I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.Just chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.

MY THOUGHTS ABOUT THE :

TITLE - I'm not already a new guest in your Portfolio, so when I enter and try to roam on it. This piece of yours caught my attention, not just because it is in the highlighted corner but the title is very much captivating, giving an impression of sorrow, and pain. I don't usually read dark items because I already know the emotions that attached on it, how every pain torn our hearts, but this item of yours pulled me to get closer.

THE BODY - As I begin to enter to the body of your item, voyaging the words in every lines and its thought. The first sentence captured me already on the first part about "media or about news" that you used. And then the next lines fasten me to continue until I reached in which I didn't noticed that its the end part, because the words you used are easy for me to reach, so the flow while I read it is continuous which makes the imagery in my minds vivid. The created words evokes emotion like pain, sorrowful and missing, so it means that my impression is true.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
And as I reach the ending part, All I can say is this is just a short expression, and a good item, it shows here the longing and love for to our sibling, and to our family.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4021962

Review of The Moon Loves the Sun

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour Jennifer L. Rowlands

Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

and Thank you for your interest in joining the contest "A Great Value of Expressions"

and its my pleasure to give you a review as one of the contest gifts.
I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.Just chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.

MY THOUGHTS ABOUT THE :

TITLE - As I begin to enter and roam into your Portfolio searching for something to review, this item of yours caught my attention. First the title is very much intriguing - I found it, it was in a metaphorical phrase even if the words used are in the light manner. As Moon and Sun are always have a distance, they still love each other,
without any of them, we could not make a whole day, so each one of them need each other to
form a day, and that impression hook me to enter into your poem.

IMAGERY - As I enter and read carefully the words that you crafted into your poem, I found it has a good imagery, a nice and reachable combination of words can create a vivid imagery, and can evokes emotion. If I was still a kid and read this, my impression would be I'm amaze, because the words you poured drift me to enter and voyage to your piece. As I've said I find it in the metaphorical means.

RHYME, RHYTHM AND FORM - This is one of the important part of a poem also, the proper use and well balance rhythm of words can evokes emotions, when a poem follows a rhyming pattern it can be pleasing to hear when it read aloud.
I think This piece of yours have no rhyming pattern, but I liked how the piece create the rhyming and the rhythm formed.

MY FINAL COMMENT :
This is a great poetry, one need each other to create a whole.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4021121

Review of Bubbles

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Sisco

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

I’m Samberine Everose

your friend here.
And this is one of the items from my gift package that I’ve promised to give as a gift on your birthday last June. Sorry, it just delivered late.

.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

TITLE – When I returned again into your Portfolio, to search something to review, this item of yours captivates my eyes, as like every bubbles when we see, it enchants our eyes, enhancing to touch and play with them, and let them erupt in our fingers, they are light. I’d like to play with the bubbles so I go through your piece.

IMAGERY- On the first line, it baits me already, as bubbles was described here, one at a time, their characters and what fun they give. The crafted words you used creates a vivid imagery where in it was vibrant in my mind. It evokes emotions like enjoyment, amusement, fun. It reminds me of a feeling like a little kid again playing with the bubbles, a good memory evokes which makes the mood light and enjoy.

RHYME, RHYTHM AND FORM- I noticed that this has a rhyming pattern, most of the end lines are rhyming, and it blends with the created tone, which makes to be an enjoyable to read.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow.

And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
As I already reach the last part, before the poems ends, and as my conclusion already created. Bubbles are like also balloons, they created a light atmosphere to make the reader relish and fun.
Well Done.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4021115

Review of The "Joys" of Getting Ready for Prom

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour Ryan Monahan

A Greetings from the "The WDC Angel Army"

Congratulations for being one of the Spotlight Author on "Angel Review Forum"

And I’d like you to give a gift review for that.
Sorry it just late delivered.

I’m Samberine Everose

your friend here.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

TITLE – As every title should have a captivating effect to capture a prospective reader, because this is the first part in which they give the first peek before entering to the body of the item. This part is where first impression was created and also the expectation.
As I browse for something to review in your Portfolio, this item of yours caught my attention, - The joys of Getting Ready for Prom. Well Prom is one of the exciting part of being teen, specially in highschool.
You are indeed right, that it consist of joys in the preparation, in the practice, in the choosing of what to wear and so on. That’s hook me, because it reminds me, when I was still having my first high school Prom.

IMAGERY – The imagery of an item which is found on the body of the item, can stimulate emotions specially when we used proper combination of words and will create a vivid imagery.
The words you crafted are vivid for me, I liked how they was formed, I liked also how they was written through lines and stanza, this evokes emotion like excitement, and doubtful to have a Prom.
I liked also the activity that was stated in there, it makes the item desirable to read.

RHYME, RHYTHM AND FORM – This is a free verse, free narrating type, no rhyming pattern that follows.
And I liked how it was formed, the excitement is in there.

MY FINAL COMMENT :
Promenade is one of the activity that tells about the enjoyment of being a teen,
so we should do things that makes a good and give a treasured moment in us.

Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
It’s within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on,

And always share this wonderful talent you have.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4021098

Review of Rita Rode Away

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour Sunny Day

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

A Greetings from the "The WDC Angel Army"

Congratulations for being one of the Spotlight Author on "Angel Review Forum"

this July.
And I’d like you to give a gift review for that.
Sorry it just delivered late.

I’m Samberine Everose

WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

TITLE –The title is one of the important element of an item/story, this is where the reader give their first glance before reading an item, this is the part in which we determine if its an enticing to read,this is the part also wherein we create our first impression and expectation.
The given title of your story hook me, I just like the created name of your character Rita Rode, it’s just rhyme, like Bunny Bugs, Mickey Mouse, and other famous characters or if the word rode is a verb, it just made me curious why Rita Rode away, and that’s hook me to find out.

THE BODY – When I begin reading the body of your story, the first part pull me, and fasten me already to be closer, I liked the first word you used to begin- Once-, my impression is some kind of fairy tale. And I didn’t disappointed because the word you used on the story is vivid easy for me to reach, and it attached an adventurous or an action. Rita was a brave girl-that’s I concluded her.
Although for me the story is so short, but I understand that you just follow the rules of the contest and it fit its lenth.

THE ENDING PART – As I reach the last part, all I can say is the story is nice and the flow is good. And I didn’t find words or any doubt that distract the subtle flow of the story.

MY FINAL COMMENT :
Words even just a few, can create a sudden blow to a reader.

Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
It’s within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on,
And always share this wonderful talent you have.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4019758

Review of Homeless

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Sisco

Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

And this is one of the items from my gift package that I've promised to give from the Raffle Game Contest "What's -in- that bag?" Round 3 -The birthday and tributes.
I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.Just chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.

MY THOUGHTS ABOUT THE :

TITLE - As I begin to roam again in your Portfolio looking on your static folders and items to review, this piece of yours charmed me.
Homeless- as the title stated- its already evokes emotions-
its really hard to be homeless, and the word homeless always attached the word comfort, needs comfort.

THE BODY - As I begin my steps to enter to the body of your piece, and read carefully the lines that were written, the first line fasten me already in my seat, pulling me to continue to read. I liked the words that you used, easy for me to reach which creates a good imagery in my mind, somehow it drift me already following its line like the character feels who is roaming around in the street. I liked also that you used first person as the point of view, it just help to stimulate the emotions created by the words you weaved.

RHYME, RHYTHM AND FORM - A rhyming poetry is fun to create and fascinates every one's to hear specially when it read aloud. The rhyming scheme that you used stimulate and blends in the created emotions.I liked also the shape that was formed.

MY FAVORITE LINE :
Feelings are nothing if there’s no hurt when you bleed.

This is indeed true, this is the center or the heart of the poem for me. Beautifully written.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4019674

Review of The Need

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour candy

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

Thank you for your interest in joining the contest "A Great Value of Expressions"

and its my pleasure to give you a review as one of the contest gifts.

I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.Just chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.

MY THOUGHTS ABOUT THE :

TITLE - When I begin my step to enter into your Portfolio and browse those static to search for something to review, this piece of yours caught my attention.As every title should have a magnetic element to hook a reader. The stated word is just simple _The Need- but it tells a lot already. My first impression is we have many needs, it depends on us if what we think is the most valuable that we really need. And that hook me to continue to read and to find out.

THE BODY - So from the first sentence that greets me on the body of your item, it draws me already, its good that you used a kind of an asking statement, that makes the reader intrigue what's next, until I didn't notice that my eyes already follow the next line and lines, which creates a vivid imagery in my mind, because the words you crafted are clear and easy for me to reach without any abrupt. Mostly I like those lines/sentence that you used which makes me to ask also- on my own perspective or opinion about what humans do or I as a person's really need.

END PART - As I reach the final part where in the essay have its subtle flow -
I like this sentence which makes me think:

The journey to find again the need which has been subtlety replaced by things we created.

and this sentence

The most important form on earth. A form which makes the earth alive, good and beautiful--people--persons--us--me.

I like how you used the dash on the end part, it gives an impact, and make me to read and comprehend carefully and slowly.

MY FINAL THOUGHT:
We always know what we really need.
Need means to me - being comfortable with, happiness and even fulfillment.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4019304

Review of A musician's life

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Tabitha_G

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

And thank you for your interest in joining the contest "A Great Value of Expressions"
Its my pleasure to give you a review as one of its gift.
I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.Just chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.

MY THOUGHTS ABOUT THE :

TITLE - As I browse for something to review in your Portfolio, this item of yours caught my attention. As every title should have a magnetic charm that can lure a reader, the word musician hook me,I'm not a musician, I just like music but it intrigues me what is all about the musician's life you would like to tell here.

THE BODY - As I begin to enter to the body of your piece, and read carefully the words that you weaved, The first statement which is dialogue enticed me already,to continue my reading, I liked dialogue in a story, character was observed here and it makes the story moving as like you are watching a movie in mind,and also the words that you used are easily to reach which creates a vivid imagery that makes the flow subtle, until your item took me already to follow its way until I reach the end part.
I liked also some descriptive words you used- it seems harsh or sharp like monster, demon,makes my impression that the story is dark, but its good, because it combines some light words, making the story to be a bit of funny, or amusing.

END PART - As I reach the end part, The flow of the story is good and it is in proper order, which made me enjoyed reading it.

MY FINAL THOUGHT:
This is an amusing story, And you did well showing a simple every day life's of most couple of today.Well Done.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.0

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4018951

Review of My World

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Sisco

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

your friend here.
And this is one of the items from my gift package that I've promised to give from the Raffle Game Contest "Invalid Item"

Round 3 -The birthday and tributes. Sorry,it just delivered late.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

TITLE - As I begin to search for an item to review on your Portfolio, this piece of yours captivates my attention, My World- it’s just simple as I can see, but it tells more for me. My first impression is everyone have its own world, and we are the main actor or character in our own world, whether that world is good or bad we have our own unique world. So I’d like to know the world that you are telling here, and that hooks me to continue entering into your poem.

IMAGERY- When I slowly begin to read the first line, and continue to the next line by lines. I found out that you used colors as your main theme here, it reminds me of the colorful palettes of a painter when trying to paint images on a canvas, and as you paint your word here about your world, you are simply the same like an artist painting an images same using as the colors as the words, and its vivid and easy for me to reach, because the words are light and familiar, I like how you give, define and differentiate the colors you stated, they are all link on what you’ve been describe here about character and personality, and it evokes emotions, you are painting with your heart.

RHYME, RHYTHM AND FORM- I noticed that this has a rhyming pattern, most of the end lines are rhyming, and it blends with the created tone, which makes to be an enjoyable to read.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow.

And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
As I reach the last part, before the poem ends, and as my conclusion already created. I found this as a sweet poetry dedicating to someone, and as the words was scribbled, it shows here that she is your world. Well Done.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4018655

Review of Heroes Of The Sky

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour MAGEORGE

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

your friend here.
And this is the last item from my gift package that you've won from the Raffle Game Contest "Invalid Item"

Round 3 -The birthday and tributes.Sorry, if just delivered late.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.

WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

TITLE - Title is one of the important part of a poem, this is the first thing that every first glance should be hook,so title should enticed a prospective reader to enter. I am captivated on the given title of this poem of yours while looking something to review in your Portfolio. As I've mentioned before, I always lure about sky, it gives a good imagery to me, and other things that attached to sky, whether if the clouds, blue sky, flying, birds. It just appealing and the imagery created and emotions that evokes gives a good feeling like peaceful, heaven, light, ethereal. So heroes of the sky, maybe it tells about conqueror, champion.

IMAGERY- When I slowly begin to try to catch every word beginning on the first line, First it was blur for me, I mean the words that you used are vivid, but I’m figuring out it means, as I continue to read, You begin creating slowly an imagery about something that were flying, by the word you used like speed, gravity, forces, engines roar, planes, then that’s the start that I begin to create a view in my mind about battle in the sky, and that’s how I link the given title. And the most thing that I like is the end part, because the tone before that line is formal and serious then when I reach the last part, the emotions created change to a bit of smile, by the word "popcorn" you used.

RHYME, RHYTHM AND FORM- This is a free verse, and I liked the rhythm that was formed.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.

And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Battle in the sky is enjoyable to watch, fascinates the viewer, specially if the action was well as it shows.
That’s what I see in your piece. Well Done.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4017313

Review of A Fall Afternoon

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (4.0)

A pleasant hour riverbedwriter

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

Congratulations !!! for being one of the Member's Showcase on the "Newbies Academy Showcase Back SOON!" in this month of July.

and its my pleasure to give you a review as one of my gifts to you.
I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.Just chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.

MY THOUGHTS ABOUT THE :

TITLE - When I begin to look for an item to review on your Portfolio, this piece of yours captivates my attention. As every title should have a magnetic character that can lure a prospective reader. There are two things that I perceived when I glance on the given title, one is the autumn season in an afternoon, and the other is an afternoon that falls or drop down. But I most like the first one that comes to my mind, because as you stated the title, the two combination of words that you used are link, like falls or autumn describe the afternoon, maybe just because of its color, the rays of sun, and its given temperature,and that seems to me a good read.

THE BODY - As I entered to the body of your piece, and read carefully the words that you weaved, on the first paragraph, it entice me on the first line and catches my eyes, because we have the same favorite, but when I already go along the lines, I find it didn't link to the second line.

Fall is my favorite season. Saturday was a stunning day.

I didn't find any relation on this two, which makes me lost and confused.
I think there is a lacking word here, maybe you need a conjunction so that they may link or bind.
Fall is my favorite season and Saturday was a stunning day.

then begin to like the next part of it as I go along to the story, because its vivid, and you used adjective words that adds and help the clarity which uplift the imagery.
On the fourth paragraph,
Maybe you forgot to put a comma between the word space and I
Eager to get back to a more tranquil space - is a sentence already
Cantine - you might mean canteen.

Fifth paragraph.
The ice cream soothing my
Soothing you might mean soothes.

Six paragraph
I gazed down at the river moving slowly it was almost not moving at all.
I just noticed that you used twice the word moving -
You can describe moving or shows how the river was moving to avoid reiteration of words.

END PART - The flow of the story is good and it is in proper order, and you used a narrating style.

MY FAVORITE PART :
The sun sparkled on the water creating dazzling white ripples like crystals dancing on the river.

I like how you showed here how the rays of sun - shine to the water.LOVELY

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.0

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4017310

Review of Remember When

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour BillieGail !,

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

Congratulations !!! for being one of the Newbies Member's Showcase on the "Newbies Academy Showcase Back SOON!" in this month of July

and its my pleasure to give you a review on your piece.
I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

Please remember that I‘m not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

MY THOUGHTS ABOUT THE :

TITLE - When I begin looking for an item to review in your Portfolio,this piece of yours hook me, first I found it as one of the highlighted items, second the title has a sense of intriguing effect. I just find it romantic, maybe because of the word remember- where in it was place on the column of sentiments like memories, thinking, then adding the word when. My impression is asking a time of that memory.

IMAGERY - As I begin to read slowly the lines, I concluded that my initial impression is true, this is about reminiscing the past, and its romantic for me, as I try to catch the words in every lines, I found it that it was easily reach, and that what it makes it vivid, and begins to create a subtle imagery, a scene in a story that creates, and I found its certainly, knowing also about love that last.

RHYME RHYTHM AND FORM - When it was a rhyming poetry, I usually read it aloud, because its true that the sound is fascinating to hear, and I like how it twist the tongue when it read and pronounced.
But when it's not a rhyming poetry, I still like it because I found more emotions attached, specially when it was properly created using the broken of lines, and proper spacing of stanza.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Reminding the past or the first time is what makes love to refresh again.Well Done.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.

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#4015219

Review of In The Cloud Above

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Poet's Place

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour MAGEORGE

A Greetings from the "The Poet's Place "

I'm your friend Samberine Everose

.
And this is one of the items from the package you’ve won on my contest "Invalid Item"

Round 3.(Birthday and Tribute) Congratulations!! once again.

Please, remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
You can chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. { e:smile}

WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE

TITLE- As I stumble on the given title of your piece while searching something to review on your Portfolio, it hook my attention. I like clouds, and as I think of the white clouds surrounded by the blue sky it draws my attention to see what's behind on your piece. That captivates me to read and that is also my first impression, and white clouds in the blue sky is like its promises a good and a wonderful place.

IMAGERY – As I go along with my read about that certain clouds above, I didn't disappointed on my expectation and impression on what I think on the title. Because the word you used are vivid, and easy to reach as like the title what its telling.
It also evokes emotion like -I'm in a wonderful place- walking with the clouds and seeing what you are describing along the body.You're right clouds are fascinating. And all the imagery you used to described images behind those clouds are indeed true.

RHYME, RHYTHM & FORM- As they said a Rhyming form in a poetry can be an enticing also to read, specially when it was read aloud, which test the ingenuity of the author specially when following a form, this is not a rhyming poetry, but I liked its rhythm, it blends with the flow and the created tone.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn’t find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Well this is a great piece, you created so many images on the cloud above, and your reflection on them are all great
while you describing them. Thanks for showing them to me.
Well done.

Thank you for sharing your piece and for allowing me to drop some review.
I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4013536

Review of My Heart

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The Newbies Academy Group

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Billie GAil

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

A Greetings from the "Invalid Item"

I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

And this is one of the item on my package you bid and purchased on "The Great G Fundraiser" .
I hope I can bring you a smile. .

Please remember that I'm not a professional in writing or an expert in reviewing, these are just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Just try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

MY REFLECTION :
The Lord is good, He never forsake us.
He stayed in us if we let Him to enter in our hearts, and let Him to take charge of our life.

WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

TITLE - Every title of a piece should have a magnetic character that can hook a reader, because it is the first thing in which the reader have its first glance .

The title of your piece is interesting to me, I like the word heart amd bind together with the possessive word "my" in another word it means My Love, that's what it means to me, because heart means love, and the word love have a lot of means and kind. That hooks me to read it.

IMAGERY - A well chosen word that creatively crafted can make the imagery vivid, and can take the reader to be a part in that piece, to see, to feel, to smell what is that imagery that was intently showed and created by the author.This will evokes also emotions and the reader can also reflect in another perspective in what the author wants to say on his/her creation.

The words that you weaved in your piece is vivid for me,the words are in the light manner, but as the title said and was describing it, its filled with emotions -love. The love of our Lord to us, you showed it clearly here.

RHYME, RHYTHM AND FORM - In every piece this is one of the important part, rhyming poetry can be enticing and fun to create, even in free verse, with the proper spacing in paragraphing and line breaks can stimulate emotions while reading it.

I see a rhyming pattern on the end of each line, some author state the rhyming pattern to easily distinguished it.I like also the rhythm and line breaks specially the formed image, I am thinking if it was done intentionally or just it flows while crafting the words. Lovely.

MY FAVORITE LINE:
Plants a kiss on my tear stained cheek

This line reminds me - in times of our down while having our journey in life, the Lord is not just walking beside us, but He carrying us until we are again in our feet, until our journey's end.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4010930

Review of Coffee

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with WDC Addicts Anonymous

Rated: E

| (5.0)

A pleasant hour Christine

I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

This review is one that you bought with the gift certificate from your "Invalid Item"

haunter.'

Please remember that I'm not an expert in reviewing, these are just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Just try to chew and please ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

MY FAVORITES:

PLOT AND FORMAT - The format of your essay/story is good, every paragraph consist a compact thought and idea which is really needs as a part of the story.
The plot here is a simple mug of coffee, but it tells more that what we think for and the author relate it to its experience. Nice thought.

SETTING- When you choose a balance and well crafted words, it will make you feel that you were in the story and a part of it. The setting of the story is good and every paragraph are not redundant.

LENGTH- A proper length of a written work is important, it creates on impression also on the part of the reader. But sometimes long story seems to be short if the thoughts and created words are well balance, and short length story are too long if the expressed words are redundant, or have the same thought, makes the reader think its bored.
The written piece of yours have a proper length, because the words you used are vivid, and smooth on how it was delivered, and specially the thought and ideas are in depth and true.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION - I didn't find any word that can distract its flow.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
A cup of Coffee- why we almost tend to asked and sometimes gives us relief and somehow soften our hearts when we are in our joy, trouble and pain.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review.
I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 5.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Until next time.

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#4010614

Review of The Game

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.0)

A pleasant hour Kai,

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

Congratulations !!! for being one of the Authors Spotlight on the "Angel Review Forum" in this month of June

I'm your friend here Samberine Everose

So I'm here giving you a review as my gift to you.

Please remember that I‘m not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works. Just try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.

WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE:

TITLE - The title is one of the important element of a story, because it is the first thing in which a prospective reader have their first glance and have their first impression to the piece, so title should have a magnetic charm to allure or enticed the reader.

The title of your piece is good for me, Its simple as its seen, but if I have a closer look, it tells many things, There are many kinds of games isn't it?, and that enticed me to read it. What kind of Game is this.

PLOT AND FORMAT - is important also in a story, a good format of a story can attract a reader.
The format of your story is good for me, There is a proper paragraphing, and every paragraph have its own idea or a thought, all the incidents are needed in the story. The plot here is different, I think about a ball games that you relate it to the world, its creation, the exist of mankind.

SETTING - if it's properly well written, with the correct chosen of words, it makes a nice and balance in imagery, and it will not seems to be redundant or overdone.

The setting of your story is good, somehow at the middle part I lost, maybe just because the incidents that links to what you are showing or the description on what you are relating here are just too fast how you showed, I just only understand when I already reach the end part.

LENGTH - A proper length of a story can enticed a reader also to read, but sometimes a story even if its long if the words that are delivered are good and well balance it will not seems to be long and boring, but even if its short it will seems to be long if the words are not properly done which makes the reader bored.

My first impression when I saw the length of your story is too long, but when I begin reading it, I just found it that it just short and proper, because the thoughts are good.

GRAMMAR AND PUNCTUATION- On the first paragraph
It, a small ball of a matter that didn't matter
maybe you might mean- Its

MY FINAL THOUGHT
You are indeed right Everything are not always as they seem.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. You potrayed it well. And I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.

Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.
Until next time.

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Review of Tea Time Talk

for entry "Love: The Rose"

Review by Samberine Everose

In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A pleasant hour Edwina Carol

Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" !

and

Congratulations !!! for being one of the Authors Spotlight on the "Angel Review Forum" in this month of June.

I'm your friend hereSamberine Everose

and its my pleasure to give you a gift by reviewing your piece that I've found in your Portfolio.

Please remember that I'm not a professional or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works.
Please try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste.

WHAT I THINK ABOUT THE :

TITLE - This is one of the important part of a poem, because it is the one that readers have their first glance while looking the list of things to read and review in the table of contents. It create also the first impression of the prospective reader ad expectation what's in that piece. So title should be captivating and it really links to the body of the item or poem.

I liked the given title of your piece. Rose is a beautiful flower and its true that it signifies love and mystery. I said mystery also because as we look at the rose flower there is something that keeps us pulling to have it, maybe that's the beauty and charm of a rose flower. And that's how your piece hooked me.

IMAGERY - This is one of the important part also of a poem, it serves as the lifeblood of a piece. This shows how the writer or poet paint or carve about the whole piece through words and a well chosen and crafted words can create a vivid imagery which evokes emotions. By the words crafted by the poet, he/she can choose to control, show, stimulate emotions that can take its reader to his/her own imagination about that certain piece.

The words you weaved is simple to me, but I liked it, I liked how you repeated the adjective, somehow its like a lyrical kind.

RHYME, RHYTHM & FORM - If choosing the correct rhyme and creating the correct rhythm of a piece makes also to stimulate the tone and the emotion. The proper using of pattern of any rhyming form can be a pleasing to the ear specially when it read aloud, ad fun to create, testing the wit of the poet.

This is not a rhyming poetry, but I liked the rhythm, it blends with the created tone.

MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :
I didn't find any word that can distract the flow.
And no doubt arise.

MY FINAL THOUGHT :
Love is like a rose, its beauty and fragrance is sweet, but it breaks your heart and left you in pain when you touch its thorn.

Thank you for sharing this piece, and for allowing me to drop some review. I really enjoyed reading and reviewing it. I rate it 4.5
Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future.

Everyone have its own gift and talent,
God made us unique.
Its within us, if we want to improve and share.
So write on,
and always share this wonderful talent you have.

Until next time.

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