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Review of Flower  Open in new Window.
Review by WriterRick Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem is a heartfelt exploration of a serene moment in nature and the emotions it evokes. Here's my take on it:

Strengths:
Imagery: The poem uses vivid imagery to transport the reader into the forest. Phrases like “blossoming meadow” and “shines brighter than the sun” paint a clear, almost magical picture of the setting.
Emotion: The emotional connection to the flower is palpable. Lines like “A tear fell, right onto its floret” convey a deep, almost overwhelming reaction, making the reader feel the intensity of the moment.
Flow: The poem flows naturally, with a rhythm that mirrors the gentle yet sudden experience of discovery and awe.
Suggestions for Improvement:
Structure: While the free-verse style works, the poem could benefit from slight restructuring to emphasize its emotional peaks. Breaking it into stanzas could create pauses that reflect the speaker's experience.
Ambiguity in Expression: Phrases like “my whole being felt still” and “I dared not feel” could be refined for clarity. For instance, elaborating on why the speaker "dared not feel" might deepen the emotional impact.
Conclusion: The ending is poignant but abrupt. Expanding on how the flower’s light “never leaves my eyes” could give more weight to its lasting significance.
Overall, this poem beautifully captures a fleeting yet transformative moment, balancing the quiet majesty of nature with the speaker’s inner turmoil. With a few adjustments, it could become even more impactful!

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Review of A Dangerous Gift  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This story has a compelling premise and great emotional weight. The generational curse of the Fire Bearers, coupled with Phil's inner conflict, creates a strong narrative hook. However, a few areas could benefit from refinement to make it even stronger:

Emotional Depth and Dialogue:
The characters' emotions come across well, but some dialogue feels stilted. For example, Phil's transition from shock to experimentation with his powers could delve deeper into his thought process. Instead of just stating his fascination, show his internal struggle more vividly. What specific memories or desires drive his curiosity to master the fire?

Worldbuilding:
The lore of the Fire Bearers is intriguing, but it could use more fleshing out. What exactly makes the power uncontrollable? Why was it revered in the past but deemed worthless now? Adding snippets from the ancestor's journal, perhaps contrasting past glory with modern struggles, would enrich the story's background.

Pacing:
The story shifts quickly from Phil's discovery to his experiments, then to the climactic fire rescue. While the action is engaging, the progression feels rushed at times. Allow more space for Phil to grapple with his father's warnings and his growing desire to use his power.

Character Development:
Phil's arc is compelling but could be deepened by exploring his relationship with his father further. How does he view his father's warnings? Does he feel resentment, love, or pity? Similarly, Lucien's struggle with guilt and fear could be expanded to make his warnings more impactful.

Climactic Scene:
The rescue scene is thrilling and showcases Phil's heroism, but it could benefit from more sensory details. What does the heat feel like against his skin? How does the smoke impair his vision? These elements would heighten the tension and immerse readers further.

Ending Hook:
The story ends mid-rescue, leaving a sense of incompleteness. Even if you’re planning to continue, a small resolution—such as Phil emerging from the house with Tony's family or a reflective moment—would give the reader a more satisfying conclusion to this chapter.

Overall, this story has a solid foundation with strong emotional stakes and an intriguing premise. Refining the pacing, adding depth to the characters, and enriching the lore will elevate it further. Keep going—this has the potential to be a memorable tale of power, responsibility, and redemption.

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Review of The Party  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This short story, The Party, effectively captures a slice of life moment with a relatable mix of joy and unexpected emotions. The narrative focuses on a simple family gathering that turns into an emotionally charged memory, especially for Jacky. It delivers a clear and bittersweet lesson while offering a heartwarming yet realistic depiction of human nature. Here's what stood out:

Strengths:
Relatable Theme: The story portrays a common childhood experience—being the center of attention at a party. Many readers can empathize with Jacky's overwhelmed reaction, making the narrative engaging and personal.

Atmosphere: The description of the gathering is lively and vivid. The warm day, colorful tablecloths, and children playing create a cheerful and picturesque setting that contrasts nicely with Jacky's eventual meltdown.

Characterization: Dot's multitasking as a mother and hostess, Nancy's helpfulness, and Jacky's typical behavior are well-drawn, adding depth to the family dynamic. Even in a short piece, these small details breathe life into the characters.

Twist Ending: The story's ending, with Jacky's aversion to surprises solidified for life, adds humor and poignancy. It ties the story together and gives readers something to reflect on about personality traits shaped by early experiences.

Suggestions for Improvement:
Build-Up to Jacky's Reaction: While her outburst is impactful, a hint of her discomfort earlier—perhaps through her body language or hesitation—could make her reaction feel more grounded and less sudden.

Transition Between Events: The jump from "after the food" to the surprise reveal feels a bit rushed. Adding a few sentences to build anticipation or show the family's effort in setting up the table would enhance the pacing.

Expand the Emotional Impact: Jacky's reaction is a pivotal moment, but exploring her inner thoughts or giving a brief exchange with Dot afterward could deepen the emotional resonance of the story.

Polish the Narration: Lines like "it was time for the party!" could use more descriptive flair to heighten excitement. Similarly, the concluding sentence might be stronger with a reflective tone, emphasizing how this moment shaped Jacky's character.

Overall Impression:
The Party is a charming and insightful snapshot of family life with a memorable takeaway. By enhancing the emotional depth and pacing, the story could leave an even more lasting impression on readers. It's a great foundation for exploring how small moments leave a significant mark on our personalities.

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Review by WriterRick Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your poem has a surreal and abstract quality that invites deep interpretation. It balances vivid imagery with profound ideas, giving it an almost meditative tone. Here’s a breakdown of what stands out and some thoughts for refinement:

Strengths:
Imagery: The opening lines evoke a blend of tension and beauty. Phrases like “fearful pails and seething gasps” and “paramour of awestruck beaming” create a striking contrast that captures attention.
Tone: The philosophical depth, especially when reflecting on themes of love, forgiveness, and divinity, is thought-provoking.
Structure: The poem flows with an almost stream-of-consciousness rhythm, which works well for its introspective nature. The shorter, standalone lines like “By unsubstantiated offers” and “Whose sewing involves a quilt” create pauses that emphasize their meaning.
Suggestions for Improvement:
Clarity vs. Obscurity: While abstract poetry thrives on ambiguity, some lines—like “Infinity’s classification yielded / By unsubstantiated offers”—feel overly opaque. Providing a clearer anchor for the reader might strengthen the emotional impact.
Word Choices: Phrases like “penultimate harmony” and “vociferous roar” can feel slightly grandiose, potentially distancing the reader. Simplifying or grounding some expressions could heighten their relatability.
Consistency in Metaphors: The quilt metaphor in “Whose sewing involves a quilt” is intriguing but feels disconnected from the rest of the imagery. Expanding on or tying it more clearly to the broader themes (e.g., love, forgiveness, or divinity) would enhance its significance.
Ending Strength: The closing lines about an “Almighty’s kingly, / Vociferous roar” are powerful but abrupt. Consider elaborating on the divine connection to tie the poem together more cohesively.
Overall Impression:
Your poem is rich with emotion and artistic flair, but tightening some of the more elusive elements could make it even more impactful. The balance of beauty and introspection shines through, and with a bit more clarity, your voice will resonate even stronger.

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Review by WriterRick Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)

It seems like you've provided a structured list of headers and data points. Here's a review of the format and content:

Strengths:
Clear Headers: The repeated "HEADER CLM X" format suggests you have a structured framework. This could work well for organizing information if fleshed out further.
Numerical Data Points: Using "Data X" gives an impression of sequential entries or items related to each header. This could be useful for lists, tabular data, or hierarchical structures.
Suggestions for Improvement:
Content Under Headers: It’s unclear how the data aligns with the headers. Adding specific details or descriptions under each header will improve clarity and usability.
Example: If "HEADER CLM 1" represents a category, list all relevant data points beneath it.
Avoid Repetition: "Data 4" appears twice, which might confuse readers. Ensure unique entries or clarify if repetition is intentional.
Label Refinement: The generic "HEADER" and "Data" labels lack context. Descriptive names or keywords can better convey meaning.
Example: Replace "HEADER CLM 1" with "Category: Sales Data."
Hierarchical Formatting: Consider using a nested structure if certain data points belong to specific headers. For instance:
HEADER CLM 1
Data 1
Data 2
HEADER CLM 2
Data 4
Contextual Explanation: Providing a brief introduction or conclusion about the purpose of these headers and data points can make it more comprehensible.
Overall Assessment:
While the structure is foundational, adding context and refining organization would significantly enhance clarity and utility.

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Review of Emily's Steer  Open in new Window.
Review by WriterRick Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This story tugs at the heartstrings with its emotional depth and blend of humor, sorrow, and introspection. It offers a compelling mix of slice-of-life simplicity and a touch of the fantastical, creating a memorable narrative that is both heartfelt and thought-provoking.

The bond between Emily and Moses is beautifully portrayed. From the tender moments of nursing the calf back to health to the bittersweet final days, the relationship feels authentic and relatable. The description of Moses believing he’s one of the barn cats adds charm and lightness, providing a delicate balance to the heavier themes of loss and sacrifice.

The appearance of the magical milk can and the cow genie is an unexpected twist that adds a layer of whimsy. It’s an effective narrative device to explore the protagonist's internal conflict about loss, love, and the consequences of wishing away pain. The humor in the cow's sudden speech and the protagonist's reaction—"What the heck?!?!"—grounds the scene, making it relatable and engaging rather than jarring.

The resolution is especially poignant. Instead of succumbing to the temptation of easy fixes, the protagonist's decision to forgo the wishes underscores a deeper message: life’s pain and joy are intertwined, and removing one can diminish the value of the other. This mature, reflective conclusion elevates the story from being just a whimsical tale to a meaningful exploration of human experience.

Some areas for improvement:

The narrative could benefit from slightly tighter pacing, especially during the wish-pondering section. While thoughtful, it becomes a bit repetitive and risks losing momentum.
Consider providing more resolution about Emily’s reaction to Moses leaving. Closing the emotional loop would give the story greater completeness.
Overall, this is a touching, creative piece that captures the complexity of love, loss, and the lessons that come with them.

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Review of A Trip Inspired  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This reflection is a heartfelt journey through personal memories, travel, and appreciation for art. The author does an excellent job weaving their love for travel with a deep connection to the painting of the Frisco Fishing Pier. The narrative evokes a sense of nostalgia and respect for nature’s power, while also capturing the resilience and determination of people.

The story behind the painting enriches the personal significance it holds. The description of the painting itself, with its vivid imagery of morning sun, storm clouds, and the worn pier, creates a visual for the reader that mirrors the emotions tied to the memory. The author’s appreciation for the art’s ability to capture a fleeting moment of beauty and history is beautifully expressed.

The historical context provided by the shop owner adds depth to the story. It transitions the painting from a simple souvenir to a piece of living history, connecting it to the experiences of anglers and visitors over decades. The detail about the pier's removal and the preservation efforts offers a bittersweet closure, emphasizing the impermanence of human creations against the enduring forces of nature.

The conclusion ties the piece together, reflecting on the painting as both a keepsake and a reminder of life’s fleeting moments. It inspires the reader to cherish their travels and mementos while celebrating life’s adventures.

If anything could enhance this piece, it might be a bit more about the family dynamics during the trip, as it would add warmth and a broader sense of connection. However, as it stands, this review is a touching testament to the power of art and memory.

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Review of Be Descriptive  Open in new Window.
Review by WriterRick Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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review - Welcome back! Today's topic is going to be imagery.

It is one of my absolute favorite things to include in my writing, and it also adds to the "BEEF" (If you know you know)

I enjoy swapping out common words for uncommon words, like just now, as I write this, I first typed, "I like," but then i decided to say, "I enjoy. If I had said I like, you probably would have already left.

When you write, think about ways to add more adjectives and words to small sentences. But ALWAYS remember the importance of short sentences.

All in all, I like to write, and write I do.
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Your piece on imagery has a fun, conversational tone, which makes it approachable and easy to follow. The way you weave in your personality, like referencing "BEEF" (though it’s a little cryptic), adds a unique flair that engages readers. Still, there’s room to tighten the focus and polish the message.

Strengths:

Relatability: The conversational tone makes readers feel like you’re speaking directly to them, which is great for connection.
Practical Advice: Encouraging the use of uncommon words and more adjectives is a solid tip for enhancing imagery.
Passion: Your enthusiasm for writing shines, and that energy can be contagious.
Suggestions for Improvement:

Clarify "BEEF": If "BEEF" is a concept or acronym you’re referencing, briefly explain it. Readers might feel left out if they don’t "know."
Consistency in Tone: You start with a polished introduction but slip into a casual style (“like just now, as I write this”), which might feel unrefined to some. Balancing casual and formal elements could make your advice more impactful.
Structure: While the tips are helpful, the piece jumps between topics (imagery, adjectives, short sentences) without much transition. Consider organizing your points more clearly:
Define imagery.
Explain how word choice enhances it.
Highlight the balance of sentence length.
Closing: The ending feels rushed. You could wrap up with a final thought or encouragement about how imagery transforms writing.
Revised Example of Your Style:
"Imagery is one of my favorite writing tools because it pulls readers into the world you’re creating. Swapping common words for more interesting ones is a simple way to do this. For instance, instead of saying 'I like,' I’ll say 'I enjoy'—it feels richer, right? But don’t forget, even with beautiful adjectives, short sentences carry power too. Writing is a balance, and mastering imagery is one way to make your work unforgettable."

Your enthusiasm for writing is evident, and with a few tweaks, this could inspire others to embrace imagery like you do!


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Review by WriterRick Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem beautifully captures the complexity of internal struggles and the strength it takes to navigate them. The imagery is vivid, balancing the turmoil of unseen battles with a powerful sense of hope and resilience. The consistent rhythm and rhyme scheme lend it a soothing, almost meditative quality, making the emotions feel authentic and relatable.

The contrast between the external calm and internal storm is striking, especially in lines like “The smile’s a mask, the laughter a shield, / Hiding the wounds that never quite healed.” These lines resonate deeply, as many people can relate to putting on a brave face despite inner pain.

The shift in tone from despair to hope is particularly impactful. Lines such as “Yet in the shadow, a flicker of light, / A whisper of hope in the darkest night” serve as a turning point, providing comfort and inspiration. The use of natural imagery, like the rising sun and stormy rain, effectively conveys the emotional journey from struggle to healing.

The closing stanza is empowering, reminding the reader of their inherent strength and capacity for renewal: “You are the dawn after the endless night.” It leaves the reader with a sense of optimism and solidarity, emphasizing that no one is truly alone in their fight.

Overall, this poem is heartfelt and poignant, offering solace and encouragement to anyone facing difficulties. It’s a gentle reminder that while the journey may be tough, hope and courage can light the way forward.

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Review by WriterRick Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem has a nostalgic and reflective tone, weaving themes of teamwork, challenges, and the bittersweet journey of striving for success. Here's what stands out and could use improvement:

Strengths:
Theme of Resilience: The poem captures the ups and downs of being part of a team, especially the trials faced in pursuit of greatness. Lines like "The new ups and downs seem truly prescriptive" convey the learning process involved in overcoming hardships.
Imagery of Teamwork: Phrases like "The most treasured bliss, and the games played together" evoke memories of camaraderie, while "Daily and nightly, a proponent, a must" underscores the dedication required to succeed.
Rhyming Structure: The rhyme is consistent and gives the piece a rhythmic flow, making it pleasant to read.
Suggestions for Improvement:
Clarity in Narrative: While the poem explores a journey, the storyline feels somewhat fragmented. For example, the transition between "after the enemies" and "champions forever" could be clearer—are these moments of triumph, failure, or both? Tightening these ideas could enhance readability.
Word Choice: Some phrases, such as "free flowing plans" and "the critiques and the shame are advanced," feel abstract. More vivid or specific imagery might make the emotions and actions more relatable.
Pacing: The shift from "fall apart" to "a new start" feels abrupt. Expanding on the aftermath of failure or the hope for redemption would add depth.
Resolution: The ending feels unresolved with "Wishing that winning was simple and just." It leaves the reader yearning for closure. Perhaps adding a final thought about the journey being its own reward could tie it together.
Overall Impression:
The poem has potential to be a poignant reflection on the struggles and joys of teamwork. A bit more narrative clarity and evocative imagery could elevate it further. It’s relatable and has the beginnings of something memorable.

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Review of LONLEY bucket  Open in new Window.
Review by WriterRick Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)

This piece presents an interesting metaphor about the mind as a broken bucket and explores whether it is worthwhile to try to fill it, despite its imperfections. The symbolism is clear: the bucket represents the mind, and water represents emotional or psychological fulfillment. The premise invites reflection, but the execution could benefit from refinement.

Strengths:
Creative Metaphor: Comparing the mind to a broken bucket is a fresh way to discuss human struggles, particularly feelings of emptiness and futility.
Thought-Provoking Question: The narrative challenges readers to think deeply about the purpose of effort, even when the results seem incomplete or impossible.
Encouraging Perspective: Opinion A suggests that trying to fulfill the bucket, despite its flaws, has value. This is a hopeful and motivating message.
Areas for Improvement:
Grammar and Clarity: The writing has several grammatical errors, which make it harder to follow. For example, "Putting the water in the bucket is meaningless" could be revised to "Pouring water into the bucket feels meaningless."
Incomplete Argument: Opinion A starts a discussion about the purpose of the bucket and the mind but ends abruptly. For example, the sentence, "For instance, if there are no communication and conversation," is left unfinished. Expanding on this idea would make the argument stronger and more persuasive.
Flow and Structure: The transition between the metaphor and the opinion could be smoother. Adding more context or examples to Opinion A would help readers better connect with the idea.
Suggestions:
Revise for Clarity: Clean up grammar and phrasing to make the piece easier to understand. For instance, rephrasing "Although we try to fulfill it. Is it true?" to "Even though we try to fill it, can we ever truly succeed?" improves flow.
Expand on the Argument: Flesh out Opinion A with more examples or counterpoints to create a balanced discussion. For instance, you could explore what "filling the bucket" might look like in real-life scenarios—friendship, personal growth, or creative pursuits.
Conclude Strongly: End with a summary or a call to action. For example, "Even if our minds are like broken buckets, trying to fill them brings purpose and growth. Isn’t that reason enough to keep pouring in the water?"
Overall, this draft has the potential to be a meaningful piece about perseverance and purpose. With a bit more depth and polish, it could leave a lasting impression.

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Review by WriterRick Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

This piece does a great job capturing tension and the subtle nuances of a close friendship under stress. Here are some highlights and suggestions:

Strengths
Character Dynamics: The relationship between Liz and Francis feels authentic and layered. The lack of explosive fights but the palpable tension is an interesting dynamic, making their disagreements stand out more.
Natural Dialogue: The dialogue flows well and feels realistic. Liz and Francis’s back-and-forth carries emotional weight, and you can sense the history and closeness between them.
Subtle Foreshadowing: The narrative builds curiosity as to what Liz is hiding. It keeps the reader invested, eager to learn what’s causing the tension.
Satisfying Payoff: The surprise birthday party is a great twist, resolving the conflict in a heartfelt way. It ties together the earlier tension, showing Liz’s struggle was all for a good reason.
Areas for Improvement
Pacing: The middle section, where they argue in the car, is a bit drawn out. You might want to condense some of the dialogue to maintain the reader’s interest. Fewer lines could still convey the tension without feeling repetitive.
Liz’s Inner Conflict: While Liz’s anxiety about the situation comes through, adding more internal reflection could enhance the emotional depth. Maybe a few more hints about her guilt for lying could make her struggle more tangible.
Setting Descriptions: Descriptions of the environment are minimal, especially during the car scene. A few sensory details (like the hum of the engine or the streetlights flashing by) could enrich the atmosphere.
Ending: The resolution is sweet, but Francis’s reaction could be fleshed out more. Maybe add a moment where he realizes how much Liz went through to make the party happen, emphasizing their bond.
Final Thoughts
Overall, the story is engaging and captures a genuine, relatable conflict. The surprise ending is touching, making the buildup worth it. If you tighten the pacing and add a bit more depth to Liz’s internal struggle, it will shine even more brightly. Great work!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem captures the essence of a serene moment in nature. The imagery evokes a peaceful lakeside scene filled with the sounds and sights of birds, bees, and flowing water. The theme centers around connecting deeply with the natural world and experiencing a sense of harmony and spiritual upliftment.

The use of visual details, like “water lake where various birds are decent” and “different type of trees,” helps set a vivid atmosphere. The idea of “bees flying to get ride of fruit and flower” and “fishes swimming for own aspect and gain” adds a sense of nature’s purpose and interconnectedness. The line “My inner state of mind opened to imagine heavenly” beautifully captures the feeling of being spiritually transported by nature’s splendor.

However, there are a few areas where the writing could be refined. Some phrases could be adjusted for better flow and clarity. For instance, “To get ride of fruit and flower where was flying some bees” could be simplified for readability. Similarly, “Swimming the fishes for own aspect and gain” feels a bit awkward and might benefit from rephrasing to make the imagery more vivid.

Overall, the poem has a dream-like quality and an appreciation for the natural world that shines through. With some editing to improve the grammar and rhythm, the piece could be even more impactful. It captures a genuine sense of awe and wonder, which is its greatest strength.

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Review of Insomnia  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This short story sets up a humorous and relatable situation using the classic theme of an unwanted house guest. The opening line, "It’s one am. Time for the night noises to begin," instantly creates a feeling of anticipation, hinting at something sinister or unsettling. The following onomatopoeic "Bang!" draws readers into the moment, and we quickly learn that the cause of the disturbance isn’t an intruder or ghost, but a possum. The humor in the situation feels genuine, especially as the narrator’s desperation is revealed.

Your dialogue is effective in characterizing both the narrator and Frank, with Frank’s nonchalant response of “I’ll sort him out tomorrow” painting a picture of someone who is accustomed to nightly disturbances or who simply isn’t bothered enough to act. The narrator’s thoughts about resorting to poisoning the possum are funny and relatable, reflecting just how sleep deprivation can lead us to extreme (though not serious) fantasies.

The ending, "Listen! Our possum’s gone. At least until morning when he comes back," ties things up with a light-hearted conclusion. It emphasizes that this is an ongoing battle, and there’s a sense of resignation mixed with relief.

Overall, your story captures a relatable experience with humor and vivid detail. To strengthen it further, you could add more sensory descriptions of the possum's sounds or the narrator's frustration to immerse readers even more.

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Review of Throne Room  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The throne room you’ve described paints a vivid image and has a strong sense of grandeur mixed with intrigue. The focal point of the huge red velvet chair at the room’s center captures a classic, almost medieval royal aesthetic. The cascading red carpet that flows toward the double doors adds an elegant touch that immediately sets a majestic tone.

The wall decor of past kings’ marble statues gives a sense of legacy and history, while the royal crest symbolizes authority and power. This imagery evokes respect and hints at a legacy steeped in tradition. The description of the heavy curtain concealing an opening meant for dragon dignitaries introduces a unique twist, suggesting that the throne room isn’t just for human or humanoid audiences but has adapted to accommodate mythical beings. It makes the setting feel alive and ripe for fantasy storytelling.

The iron door in the back right corner, left ajar, adds a layer of mystery to the otherwise grand and ceremonial space. The sense of an invisible pull leading there builds suspense, making you wonder what secrets the room holds. This detail pulls readers in, suggesting a deeper narrative or potential conflict lying in wait.

Overall, the setting is described in a way that immerses readers immediately in a fantasy world. There’s a good balance of opulence and mystery, setting up an atmosphere that could lead to thrilling development.

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Review of Old Winds  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
"Old Winds" weaves nature and memory into a flowing, introspective journey that taps into themes of time, continuity, and transformation. The poem’s imagery of “old winds,” “old waters,” and “old leaves” effectively personifies elements of nature as ancient witnesses, guiding the reader through a landscape where past and present are intertwined. The tone feels both reflective and slightly haunting, as if these natural forces carry secrets from times long gone.

Each stanza builds on this theme with vivid language: “Old winds blow through canyons carved by time,” for example, creates a sense of history and permanence. These winds become messengers, “bringing hints of worlds beyond distant horizon” and subtly reminding us that change is ongoing, yet somehow eternal. The poem’s structure—moving from wind to water, sound, and earth—gives a cyclical feel, mirroring natural processes and life’s unending flow.

The final lines bring a powerful sense of connection to these “mutterings of the ancestors,” portraying the winds as conduits for both renewal and a call toward the future. By ending on the image of the wind “ever dancing to the heartbeat of my soul,” the poem beautifully emphasizes a personal link to the natural world’s timeless rhythm. This piece succeeds in evoking a sense of reverence and wonder, inviting readers to reflect on how the “old winds” in their own lives might be gently guiding them forward.


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Review of Saturday Morning  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This story, "Saturday Morning," cleverly captures a common, relatable scenario in family life where one partner—often the wife—is expected to handle last-minute plans and juggle multiple household responsibilities. Through dialogue and subtle hints, the piece explores the imbalance in household labor and assumptions around family duties. Jan’s workload is evident, with a full-time job and a weekend packed with errands, sports practices, and cleaning tasks. Harry’s well-meaning but oblivious requests only amplify this tension, revealing a typical divide in family dynamics.

The dialogue feels natural, and Harry’s tone conveys both his casual assumption and his lack of awareness. His offer to “help” by running errands or skipping the lawn-mowing reflects his assumption that Jan will take care of everything else without question. This dynamic builds up to Jan’s simple, powerful response: “Wrong question.” It’s a quiet but potent moment, suggesting her frustration with being overburdened and her husband’s failure to recognize her needs.

In terms of structure, the story does an excellent job building tension through a steady stream of requests and assumptions. Readers can sense Jan’s patience wearing thin without any direct statements of her thoughts. The use of subtle details, like Harry’s golfing plans or Jan’s hope for family time on Sundays, enhances the realism and drives home the everyday nature of the conflict.

Overall, this piece feels both humorous and insightful, leaving readers to reflect on balance, expectations, and the unspoken demands placed on partners within households.

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This poem captures the disorienting moments right after waking—when reality feels slightly off, and the mind fumbles to reconnect with familiar surroundings. The poet uses a dreamy, almost haunting tone to explore that brief disconnect when the ordinary world seems foreign. The opening lines, with "Frequently now," hint that these unsettling moments are becoming more common, possibly pointing to aging, stress, or just the universal human experience of occasional confusion. The way the poem gradually reconstructs the scene—first a blank wall, then a cat that turns out to be a sweater, and the misplaced door—is a clever portrayal of how our minds reset after sleep.

The line "a blind drawn before a window" suggests a mental fog lifting, like the slow reveal of reality after dreams fade. This gentle unraveling feels almost like a painter working on a canvas, adding layers until a coherent image emerges. The poem's ending adds a touch of humor and humanity, with sleep becoming a trickster playing "a practical joke" on a brain “befuddled by time." It’s an apt description of those moments when, for a split second, you wonder who and where you are, only to reassemble your reality.

Overall, "Sometimes on Waking" is quietly profound, capturing something intimate and universal. The poem uses simple language and clear imagery to convey a relatable experience that feels both personal and oddly comforting.

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Review of The Way it Goes  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)

The Way it Goes paints a vivid picture of the familiar dynamics in relationships where opposites truly attract. The narrator's contrasting attitude toward social gatherings is presented in an authentic, humorous way that many readers will relate to, especially those who might feel out of place in social settings while their partners thrive.

The story sets up a clear division of labor between the narrator and her husband, with each excelling in their own way. Her knack for setting the table beautifully and creating a welcoming atmosphere, despite her lack of enthusiasm for the gathering itself, feels like a sincere effort to meet halfway. The ironic twist that the “perfect” table setup—a symbol of her effort to fit in and make a good impression—is unwittingly sabotaged by the roses, adds a nice touch of humor. This small revelation at the end, that she didn't know about her mother-in-law's allergy after three years of marriage, hints at a broader theme: no matter how much we try, there will always be little surprises in our relationships and things we overlook in the rush to fit a mold.

The narrator’s inner thoughts—especially her amused resignation to hide in the kitchen and avoid certain conversations—make the story feel real. The playful tone and relatable anxieties of meeting family expectations add to the warmth and humor, while the final twist adds an extra layer of irony that caps off this slice-of-life moment nicely.

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Review of Prettiful  Open in new Window.
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Prettiful - Word Review

Origin: Western regions of the United States
Pronunciation: PRIT-tee-full

Definitions:

A blend of “pretty” and “beautiful.”
A colloquial or “redneck” term to describe someone who is extraordinarily attractive.
Sentence Use:
“The model sashaying down the street was prettiful, thought the man standing on the sidewalk.”

Review:
“Prettiful” is an interesting example of a playful blend word that’s both familiar and fresh. It merges the charm of “pretty” with the admiration of “beautiful,” giving it a folksy vibe that might bring a smile to anyone who hears it. The term carries an affectionate tone, with a hint of casual admiration that feels especially fitting in a small-town or rural setting.

Though it might not be standard English, "prettiful" could easily become a regional endearment, especially in a story or setting where characters have down-to-earth or rustic personalities. It sounds like something you’d hear in a cozy family gathering or from an enthusiastic onlooker at a small-town parade, making it great for adding color to dialogue.

Overall, "prettiful" has a warm, slightly whimsical charm, and its blend of “pretty” and “beautiful” makes it memorable and fun to use. It may not become a mainstream word, but for anyone looking to add a touch of rustic or regional flavor to their writing, it’s a delightful choice!

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Review of Be Encouraged!  Open in new Window.
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This reflection reads like a heartfelt call for faith, resilience, and community. The message here is especially impactful, as it encourages people not to lose faith even when life feels uncertain or challenging. Starting with a reminder of God’s constancy, it reassures readers that no matter the situation, they are not abandoned.

The phrase "Oh, yee of LITTLE Faith" immediately sets a familiar and encouraging tone, a call to strengthen our resolve and trust in God’s promises. It makes the reader feel like part of a larger, supportive community, especially by using words like "we" and "us," which makes the message feel more personal and communal.

I particularly like how the message shifts into practical advice. Rather than only being a call to action for one specific moment, it encourages a lifestyle of ongoing faith and prayer. Suggesting that people “watch as well as pray” daily, not just in crisis, is a strong reminder that maintaining a spiritual connection can help people find strength in both good and tough times. The reference to Psalm 121 with “look toward the hills for whence cometh thou help” is also powerful, adding a comforting reminder of divine support.

The part mentioning Maryland’s governor calling for a moment of prayer is a nice touch that connects the spiritual message to a recent event. This reference adds context, showing how communities sometimes come together in collective acts of faith, which can be uplifting.

Overall, the message is a comforting, sincere, and hopeful call to stay connected with faith and one another, not just now but always. It’s a timely reminder for anyone feeling uncertain or weary, urging them to find peace in prayer and trust in the enduring presence of God.

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This piece is a lovely reflection of serene moments and simple pleasures, rich with sensory imagery that pulls the reader into the scene. Each sound—creak, reak, creak, reak—sets a rhythm that feels like an invitation to slow down, as if we’re sharing in a cozy morning ritual. The repetition of sounds and phrases, like blow...sip...blow, has a mesmerizing, almost hypnotic effect, underscoring the tranquility of the moment.

The subtle interactions between the narrator and her husband bring warmth to the scene, making it feel deeply personal. Lines like “I couldn’t help but to let out a little laugh” show a gentle intimacy without any need for overstatement. The progression from the rocking chair to the hot tub and finally to the glass swirling captures a beautiful flow, as if we’re moving deeper into a daydream or a memory of a perfect morning.

One of the best parts is how you wove in sensory elements—the feel of the “healing bubbles,” the sound of ice clinking, and the smell of baked goods filling the air. They create a fully immersive experience, making the mountain setting come alive. The last line, “But life on the mountain still slumbered,” gives the ending a sense of timelessness, like this moment could stretch on endlessly, undisturbed.

Overall, the piece captures a peaceful, almost meditative feel, inviting readers to pause and savor those quiet, intimate details. It’s a beautiful reminder of the magic found in simple, everyday moments.

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Review of Jim's So Fat  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This limerick-style poem, Jim's So Fat, has a humorous charm that brings a smile with each line. It paints a vivid picture of Jim, an older man who wishes to lose weight but, ultimately, isn’t that concerned with the pursuit. The casual, easygoing rhyme scheme and playful tone work well together, and the poem delivers a light-hearted message about self-perception and indulgence.

In the first stanza, Jim's fleeting desire to be slim but lack of motivation is relatable and sets up a humorous contrast between his wish and reality. The line “Then again, that thought had just been a whim” hints that Jim’s contentment with himself might outweigh his desire to change—a nice touch.

In the second stanza, the rhyme between “at” and “Dingbat” adds a comedic flair, suggesting Jim’s quirkiness. However, the shift in perspective, where Jim is now seen as a “Dingbat,” is a little abrupt. It might help to smooth the transition here by showing Jim’s thoughts directly, reinforcing why he sees himself as “where it’s at.”

The final stanza brings the poem to a charming conclusion, introducing Jessica Rabbit, who serves as Jim’s reason to kick his unhealthy habits. There’s something sweet and motivating in this ending, though “Jessia Rabbit” might be a typo for “Jessica Rabbit.” The reference to Jessica Rabbit adds a pop culture twist that’s both clever and endearing.

Overall, Jim's So Fat combines humor, character, and a relatable message. With a few tweaks, it could have an even stronger rhythm and flow, but as it stands, it’s a fun, light read.

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Review of Haiku 0037  Open in new Window.
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This short poem captures a straightforward yet powerful message of gratitude for those who serve in the military. The repetition of "Paw" in a staggered form gives a sense of rhythm, almost like the steady march or steps of soldiers. The phrase "protecting our great country" emphasizes the sense of duty and selflessness, while "know I am grateful" personalizes the sentiment, making it feel heartfelt and direct.

"Semper Fi" (short for Semper Fidelis, meaning "Always Faithful") is a well-known motto of the U.S. Marine Corps and serves as a tribute to the military's loyalty and dedication. Adding this phrase not only enhances the patriotic tone but also shows respect for a specific branch of the military.

Overall, this is a concise yet impactful poem. It conveys sincere gratitude, the steady perseverance of those who serve, and a personal connection to their sacrifices.

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This guide on crafting a nonfiction writer's bio is informative and well-structured, making it easy for writers to create concise and compelling bios. Here are some insights into the article’s strengths and a few suggestions for improvement:

Strengths
Clear Structure and Formatting: The article is well-organized, with bolded headings like "What to Include in Your Writer's Bio" and sub-sections that logically break down each component of a bio. This structure makes it accessible for readers to understand and apply each step.

Actionable Advice: The article offers specific advice, such as including name and postnominals, a personal statement, writing experience, published works, and genre. It’s particularly helpful that each point is backed up with concrete examples, guiding writers on what to include based on their unique accomplishments.

Engaging Tone: The tone strikes a friendly and encouraging balance, making it approachable. It not only informs but also motivates the reader to think creatively, particularly in sections like “Find Your Voice” and “In Closing,” where the idea of a “hook” is emphasized as a way to capture the reader's curiosity.

Practical Examples: Including real-world examples of bios (such as Courtney Milan’s and Chuck Wendig’s) makes the advice tangible and shows how the components work together in a polished bio. These examples serve as both inspiration and templates, giving readers a clear sense of what a well-rounded bio looks like.

Areas for Improvement
Clarify Bio Variability for Different Platforms: While the note at the beginning acknowledges that writers may need different bios for various contexts, the article focuses almost exclusively on the short bio. Adding a brief section on how to adapt the content for specific platforms—like LinkedIn versus Amazon—could make the advice more versatile.

Expand on “Voice” Section: The article suggests writing in the third person as a norm but leaves it as a flexible choice. Expanding on the implications of first-person versus third-person voice, especially for self-marketing purposes, could help writers decide what’s best for their brand.

More on Keywords and SEO: Since many writers will use their bio for online profiles, it would be beneficial to mention the importance of keywords and SEO. This addition could help writers improve their bio’s visibility and reach.

Examples Section Organization: The examples are helpful but would benefit from a bit of analysis. Briefly breaking down each example to highlight how they follow the outlined tips (such as personal statement, credentials, etc.) would reinforce the article's points.

Overall Impressions
This article is a practical and engaging resource for writers aiming to create a professional bio. It could be further enhanced by expanding on voice choices, offering platform-specific suggestions, and briefly explaining SEO considerations. With these additions, the guide would be even more comprehensive for both new and seasoned writers.

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