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#4794998

Review of Puppet On A String

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This piece does a great job of building suspense and eerie imagery. Here are some thoughts on how to refine it:

Strengths:
✅ Vivid Horror Imagery – The descriptions of the Thing’s face are chilling, especially the grinning mouth, missing features, and bubbling nose holes. The blending of unnatural elements (laser-like teeth, gnarling ears) makes it feel truly otherworldly.

✅ Strong Sensory Detail – The pounding heart, numbed muscles, and eerie sounds add to the tension. The protagonist’s fear is palpable.

✅ Surprising Twist – The sudden reveal of an auditorium and applause flips the scene unexpectedly, adding a layer of mystery.

Areas for Improvement:
🔹 Sentence Clarity & Flow – Some sentences feel cluttered or slightly awkward. For example:

"I was stiff. My muscles were numbed, cried out for comfort." → Could be smoother:
"I was stiff, my numbed muscles crying out for comfort."
🔹 Overloaded Descriptions – Some imagery is striking, but too many intense details in one place can overwhelm the reader. Consider simplifying a few, like:

"Its moonface was blotched and swollen as if it had a furious fight with a giant whose hands battered its face continuously."
→ "Its swollen moonface looked battered, as if a giant had pummeled it relentlessly."
🔹 Pacing of the Twist – The transition from sheer terror to an auditorium with applause is abrupt. Maybe adding a brief moment of disorientation before the reveal would help ease the shift.

Suggested Small Revision for Clarity & Impact:
"I felt my heart pounding, like deep drumbeats rising from within the earth. I dared not open my eyes. My body was stiff, my numbed muscles crying out for comfort. The night swirled around me, thick with darkness.

Yet, I saw its face clearly.

It grinned from ear to ear—though it had no ears, only slits that crackled and growled. Blackened teeth gleamed, flashing like sharp laser beams. It had no body, just the shifting silhouette of a humanoid. Its eyes, deep and red, flickered in and out of shadow. Where its nose should have been, two bubbling holes churned with burning liquid. Its swollen moonface looked battered, as if a giant had pummeled it relentlessly.

I screamed. The sound shattered the silence, echoing like an explosion inside me. My voice cracked and raw, I thought I heard eerie movements in the room. My body trembled, rolling from side to side, turning to stone.

Then—applause.

It rose and fell in waves. The lights came on…"

This keeps the eerie tone, smooths out some phrasing, and makes the reveal hit harder.

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#4794997

Review of Pollution

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Your poem has a sharp, rhythmic flow that effectively captures the tension between environmental concerns and economic interests. The brevity of each stanza enhances its impact, making each word feel deliberate. The rhyme scheme works well, reinforcing the cyclical nature of the issues you’re addressing.

A few things to consider:

The phrase "demanding thereof / solution" is slightly archaic in tone. You might make it more fluid by reordering it (e.g., "demanding a clear solution").
"Cash propagates / dilution" is strong, but "propagates" leans abstract. A more concrete verb might heighten the clarity.
The final stanza is particularly striking. The shift from "collusion" to "exclusion" lands well, reinforcing the idea of common sense being sidelined.
Overall, it's a tight, evocative piece with a powerful message.

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#4794996

Review of Day 6 - 1.18.13

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This piece has a stark, almost poetic quality that beautifully captures the desolation and quiet resilience of Celia and Marcel. The imagery is vivid, and despite the restrictions on words, you managed to paint a bleak yet emotionally charged setting.

Strengths:
Atmosphere & Tone – The contrast between longing for Monet-like pastels and the stark black-and-white reality is powerful. It enhances the feeling of loss and hardship.
Tension & Pacing – The short, fragmented lines mirror Celia's hesitancy and the slow, grueling passage of time.
Characterization – Even in this short piece, we understand Celia’s internal struggle and Marcel’s perseverance. Their bond is evident in the way they endure together.
Ending & Symbolism – The robin in the broken birdbath is a poignant and fitting symbol of hope amidst despair.
Areas for Consideration:
The prohibition of "cold, icy, snow" is creatively sidestepped, but phrases like “white in frigid air” and “blanketed in white” might feel like substitutes. If the prompt's intent was to avoid direct winter descriptions, you might push toward different sensory details.
The first two stanzas are beautifully poetic, but the phrasing can be slightly smoothed out for clarity without losing the artistry.
"Scarlet flash of cardinal / or was it blood?" is striking, but if "bird(s)" is forbidden, this might need reworking (though I love the ambiguity here).
Overall, this is a haunting and poetic piece that delivers strong emotions and stark survivalist imagery.

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#4793783

Review of Book Lore

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

The lore you've created has a deep and fascinating foundation, full of conflict, intrigue, and moral complexity. The contrast between the Lightlings and Darklings is especially intriguing, with themes of betrayal, power struggles, and the consequences of unchecked ambition. The backstory of the entities—Corrosion, Salvation, Desperation, and Autonomy—adds a layer of philosophical depth, framing the world as a place where entities aren't just powerful beings but representations of opposing forces and ideas.

The world of Vulkon itself, with its cataclysmic events (The Volkuning) and the impact it has on its inhabitants, sets the stage for some serious drama. The fall of the Lightlings, their transformation, and the resulting backlash from the Darklings create a sense of constant tension. The Lightlings' hidden past and the inevitable repercussions of their actions offer great potential for plot development. There's a lot of potential for character-driven storytelling here, as the different groups grapple with their own histories and identities.

The introduction of unique races like the Treelings and Underlings enriches the world-building even more. The Treelings, with their deep spiritual connection to nature and their matriarchal society, feel like a people who could become a strong ally or enemy depending on the plot's direction. Their spiritual abilities and connection to their world also add an element of mysticism that balances the darker, more grounded elements of the story.

The Underlings, with their reverence for light and fire, add an interesting contrast to the other races. Their peaceful, non-confrontational nature doesn't make them weak, but rather resilient—surviving in harsh underground environments while staying true to their values.

The Lightlings’ tragic and flawed attempt to escape their past creates tension, and the gradual unraveling of their façade provides room for an exploration of guilt, denial, and the weight of history.

Your characters, especially the main characters from each group, seem well-positioned to explore these complex themes of redemption, power, and the costs of war. There's a lot of potential for intricate relationships, betrayal, and self-discovery as the characters deal with the consequences of their worlds’ past and their attempts to reshape their futures.

Overall, this lore presents a world brimming with conflict, mystery, and moral ambiguity—perfect for a rich, character-driven story with high stakes and deep emotional resonance.

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#4793782

Review of How I found out I was going to be a Dad

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This is a deeply personal and emotional piece, and the narrative presents an intriguing mix of surreal, future-oriented visions and intimate reflection. The story feels a little disjointed, almost like a dream or vision that doesn't quite follow the expected logic. The shift from a mental presentation of future technologies to the appearance of a daughter from the future is both unexpected and compelling, though the pacing of this transition feels rushed.

The idea of receiving a stock tip from a daughter who doesn't seem to exist yet is a fascinating concept, but the lack of deeper emotional development or context around this vision leaves the reader questioning the significance of it all. Why would this daughter choose to communicate with the protagonist in such a cryptic way? Was it truly a glimpse into the future, or just a figment of the mind?

The final twist, with the wife’s pregnancy and the eventual birth of Zoe, adds a beautiful sense of closure, giving weight to the seemingly fantastical experience. The emotional tone shifts here, and the reflection on the future of the daughter, Zoe, offers a hopeful, warm conclusion. However, the story would benefit from further fleshing out the protagonist’s emotional state after the vision, as the sudden switch to a routine, mundane life without much introspection leaves the event somewhat underexplored.

Overall, this is an intriguing, thought-provoking narrative about love, future possibilities, and the unknowable. It works best as an intimate, personal reflection, but could use some more depth in tying together the surreal and the real.

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#4793780

Review of Lovestories

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This piece feels like a series of poetic musings about nature, relationships, and the emotional connections between elements in the world. The imagery is strong, and the flow of thoughts feels like a journey—both literal and metaphorical. The repeated personifications of the sky, river, ocean, and darkness give these natural elements a sense of life, which adds depth to the writing.

The first section, with the sky loving the land, presents a beautiful, protective love. The metaphor of the horizon and the sky’s desire for the land works well, though I wonder if the tension between the land’s hesitation and the sky’s devotion could be explored more. The sky’s feeling of self-deception—“how much the sky will long for the love of land”—is intriguing but could be made clearer with further reflection on why the land resists.

The second section with the river giving herself to the ocean paints a vivid picture of sacrifice and transformation. I really like how you describe the river as “sweet and fresh” and how she becomes “one” with the ocean by giving up her identity. The ocean, as a figure with “many wives,” contrasts with the river’s purity, showing the dynamics of love and how different types of love exist in the world.

The transition into the ocean’s desire for light works well, adding a sense of longing. The restlessness of the ocean, yearning for sunlight, is almost poetic in its simplicity. I also liked the shift from this vast, cosmic longing to the very human experience of newlyweds separating, which feels like a symbolic moment of transition.

The flute section is a nice touch—connecting the natural and emotional worlds with music. The idea of distance being bridged through emotion, even if physically far apart, is beautifully conveyed. The ending, with the feeling of being "lost in the home," ties everything together in an ambiguous yet emotional way.

Overall, it's an evocative piece with great potential for emotional depth. It’s a lovely exploration of connections, sacrifices, and the passage of time, all wrapped up in a mystical journey through nature and human experience. A little more clarity in some of the relationships between the elements and the human scenes would make the message even more powerful.

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#4791920

Review of DANCING IN THE RAIN

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This poem beautifully captures a spontaneous and carefree moment, embracing the joy of living in the present. The imagery of wet sneakers, darkened green fields, and quick-forming puddles creates a vivid, almost tactile sense of place. The transition from being caught in the rain to finding delight in it feels natural and heartfelt.

The line, “No reason to complain or lament,” shifts the tone from inconvenience to opportunity, setting the stage for the poem's celebratory mood. The act of removing shoes and baring red toe socks gives the scene a touch of whimsy, making it feel personal and relatable. The tango in the rain symbolizes freedom and connection, both with nature and perhaps with a partner, reinforcing the theme of finding joy in unexpected circumstances.

One suggestion for improvement might be to expand on the emotional or sensory experience of the dance itself. For instance, how does the rain feel against their skin? Is the rhythm influenced by the sound of the raindrops? This could add depth to the moment and make the scene even more immersive.

Overall, the poem’s simplicity and charm are its strengths. It’s a wonderful reminder of how life’s unplanned moments can become the most magical.

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#4791918

Review of Government Control of Abortion Rights

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This essay offers a detailed examination of the government's role in reproductive rights, weaving together historical context, societal governance, and the complexities of autonomy. Below are some strengths and areas for improvement:

Strengths:
Historical Context: The essay effectively uses historical examples, from ancient societies to modern policies, to showcase how governments have historically regulated reproduction. This adds depth and credibility.
Balanced Perspective: The argument is nuanced, avoiding extreme stances and instead presenting a pragmatic view of governance and societal needs.
Social Contract Framing: The connection between the social contract and government authority is well-articulated, showing how individual freedoms are balanced against collective welfare.
Contemporary Relevance: Including examples like the U.S. state-based approach and China's evolving policies makes the argument timely and relatable.
Areas for Improvement:
Organizational Flow: The essay could benefit from a clearer structure. The historical examples are rich but feel scattered. Grouping them into thematic categories (e.g., population control, ideological motives) might improve coherence.
Overuse of Examples: While the historical context is valuable, it occasionally overshadows the central argument. Fewer examples, discussed in greater detail, could make the essay more focused.
Decentralization Argument: The discussion of state autonomy in abortion policy is intriguing but underdeveloped. Expanding on how this approach aligns with or challenges the principles of the social contract would strengthen the argument.
Moral Dimensions: While the essay aims to stay pragmatic, the absence of a more explicit acknowledgment of the moral and ethical concerns surrounding abortion may make the argument seem overly clinical.
Conclusion Depth: The conclusion reaffirms the main points but could be more compelling by summarizing key takeaways and addressing potential counterarguments.
Suggestions:
Structure: Introduce the topic, provide historical context as background, and then focus on modern implications, dividing the essay into clear sections.
Clarity and Focus: Streamline the historical examples and use them to directly support the essay's central claim.
Counterarguments: Address opposing views (e.g., those advocating for universal autonomy or those prioritizing absolute government control) to reinforce the balanced stance.
Language: Some phrasing is dense. Simplifying complex sentences will make the essay more accessible without losing sophistication.
Final Thoughts:
The essay presents a thoughtful and well-researched exploration of a sensitive topic. By refining its structure and balancing historical and contemporary insights, it could become even more compelling and impactful.

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#4791917

Review of Government Control of Abortion Rights

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This essay offers a detailed examination of the government's role in reproductive rights, weaving together historical context, societal governance, and the complexities of autonomy. Below are some strengths and areas for improvement:

Strengths:
Historical Context: The essay effectively uses historical examples, from ancient societies to modern policies, to showcase how governments have historically regulated reproduction. This adds depth and credibility.
Balanced Perspective: The argument is nuanced, avoiding extreme stances and instead presenting a pragmatic view of governance and societal needs.
Social Contract Framing: The connection between the social contract and government authority is well-articulated, showing how individual freedoms are balanced against collective welfare.
Contemporary Relevance: Including examples like the U.S. state-based approach and China's evolving policies makes the argument timely and relatable.
Areas for Improvement:
Organizational Flow: The essay could benefit from a clearer structure. The historical examples are rich but feel scattered. Grouping them into thematic categories (e.g., population control, ideological motives) might improve coherence.
Overuse of Examples: While the historical context is valuable, it occasionally overshadows the central argument. Fewer examples, discussed in greater detail, could make the essay more focused.
Decentralization Argument: The discussion of state autonomy in abortion policy is intriguing but underdeveloped. Expanding on how this approach aligns with or challenges the principles of the social contract would strengthen the argument.
Moral Dimensions: While the essay aims to stay pragmatic, the absence of a more explicit acknowledgment of the moral and ethical concerns surrounding abortion may make the argument seem overly clinical.
Conclusion Depth: The conclusion reaffirms the main points but could be more compelling by summarizing key takeaways and addressing potential counterarguments.
Suggestions:
Structure: Introduce the topic, provide historical context as background, and then focus on modern implications, dividing the essay into clear sections.
Clarity and Focus: Streamline the historical examples and use them to directly support the essay's central claim.
Counterarguments: Address opposing views (e.g., those advocating for universal autonomy or those prioritizing absolute government control) to reinforce the balanced stance.
Language: Some phrasing is dense. Simplifying complex sentences will make the essay more accessible without losing sophistication.
Final Thoughts:
The essay presents a thoughtful and well-researched exploration of a sensitive topic. By refining its structure and balancing historical and contemporary insights, it could become even more compelling and impactful.

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#4791261

Review of It's Time

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This short story, It’s Time, is an intriguing mix of humor, family dynamics, and relationship growth, cleverly weaving a simple event—a piece of mail—into a moment of personal revelation and shared understanding between a couple. Here’s a review:

Strengths
Engaging Dialogue: The story’s dialogue feels natural and flows well. It captures the characters’ emotions effectively, from Dan’s frustration to Jane’s surprise and eventual involvement in the conversation.
Humor and Quirkiness: The premise of a meddling grandmother resorting to "blackmail" to pressure a couple into having children is humorous and gives the story a lighthearted tone. The twist at the end, where Jane and the grandmother secretly conspired, adds an amusing layer.
Character Dynamics: The contrasting depictions of Jane’s and Dan’s grandmothers are well-done, creating a relatable scenario. The subtle fear Dan has of his grandmother is both funny and endearing.
Realistic Exploration of a Serious Topic: While the tone is playful, the story gently explores a serious and relatable issue: deciding when to start a family. It’s a relatable moment for many couples and adds depth to the humor.
Areas for Improvement
Build More Tension: The story could benefit from heightening the suspense about the blackmail at the beginning. Revealing the content of the letter a little later might draw readers in more effectively.
Develop Dan’s Perspective: While Jane’s feelings and perspective are clear, Dan’s thoughts on the topic—beyond the grandmother’s pressure—could be explored further. This would give him more depth and balance the narrative.
Smoother Transition to the Twist: The ending twist, while funny, feels slightly abrupt. A hint earlier in the story about Jane’s potential involvement with the grandmother might make the reveal smoother and more satisfying.
Tighten Sentence Flow: Some sentences, particularly during the dialogue exchanges, could be streamlined for clarity and impact. For example, “Jane immediately tip-toed on” feels a bit rushed and could be rephrased to better capture her hesitance.
Overall Impression
The story is charming and captures a slice of life with humor and warmth. It effectively portrays how external pressures can nudge a couple toward important decisions while maintaining agency and mutual respect. With a few tweaks to pacing and depth, this could evolve into an even more compelling piece.

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#4791260

Review of It's Time

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This short story, It’s Time, is an intriguing mix of humor, family dynamics, and relationship growth, cleverly weaving a simple event—a piece of mail—into a moment of personal revelation and shared understanding between a couple. Here’s a review:

Strengths
Engaging Dialogue: The story’s dialogue feels natural and flows well. It captures the characters’ emotions effectively, from Dan’s frustration to Jane’s surprise and eventual involvement in the conversation.
Humor and Quirkiness: The premise of a meddling grandmother resorting to "blackmail" to pressure a couple into having children is humorous and gives the story a lighthearted tone. The twist at the end, where Jane and the grandmother secretly conspired, adds an amusing layer.
Character Dynamics: The contrasting depictions of Jane’s and Dan’s grandmothers are well-done, creating a relatable scenario. The subtle fear Dan has of his grandmother is both funny and endearing.
Realistic Exploration of a Serious Topic: While the tone is playful, the story gently explores a serious and relatable issue: deciding when to start a family. It’s a relatable moment for many couples and adds depth to the humor.
Areas for Improvement
Build More Tension: The story could benefit from heightening the suspense about the blackmail at the beginning. Revealing the content of the letter a little later might draw readers in more effectively.
Develop Dan’s Perspective: While Jane’s feelings and perspective are clear, Dan’s thoughts on the topic—beyond the grandmother’s pressure—could be explored further. This would give him more depth and balance the narrative.
Smoother Transition to the Twist: The ending twist, while funny, feels slightly abrupt. A hint earlier in the story about Jane’s potential involvement with the grandmother might make the reveal smoother and more satisfying.
Tighten Sentence Flow: Some sentences, particularly during the dialogue exchanges, could be streamlined for clarity and impact. For example, “Jane immediately tip-toed on” feels a bit rushed and could be rephrased to better capture her hesitance.
Overall Impression
The story is charming and captures a slice of life with humor and warmth. It effectively portrays how external pressures can nudge a couple toward important decisions while maintaining agency and mutual respect. With a few tweaks to pacing and depth, this could evolve into an even more compelling piece.

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#4791258

Review of Hummingbird

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This poem captures a vivid and striking image of a hummingbird in action. The title "Blurred wings" immediately sets the tone, hinting at motion and energy, and the imagery throughout is rich and evocative. The description of the bird's colors as "ruby and emerald" brings to life its vibrant beauty, making the scene feel almost magical.

Phrases like "stationary flight" and "sips lifeblood" cleverly juxtapose the bird's frantic wingbeats with the stillness of its hovering, and the metaphorical "nectar of the gods" elevates its feeding into something divine. This adds a layer of reverence, suggesting a connection between nature and the sacred.

If there's any critique, it might be that the poem is very compact, and some readers might want a bit more elaboration to linger longer in the moment. The word choice is effective, but a bit of additional sensory detail—perhaps about the surroundings or the flower being sipped—could enrich the scene further.

Overall, it’s a beautifully condensed snapshot of nature, full of vivid imagery and thought-provoking metaphors.

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#4790906

Review of A cry In the darkness

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This piece has a strong, emotional pull, capturing a deep sense of longing and the agony of separation. The imagery of darkness, space, and the search for a lost soul is vivid and effective. The repetitive questioning about the other person adds a layer of urgency and desperation to the tone. The contrast between proximity and distance, both physical and emotional, is hauntingly conveyed, especially with phrases like "Your face hidden in shadows" and "galaxies separate us." The use of sensory details, like the "invisible silk of a spider's web" and the lingering scent, creates a strong atmosphere of longing and mystery.

The theme of searching across time and space for a connection that feels both familiar and unattainable is powerful. The idea of missing someone never met is a striking reflection of how deep emotional connections can transcend physical realities. The ending, with the faint cry from the universe responding to the speaker’s call, is a beautifully poetic way to tie together the longing and hope.

However, there are moments where the language could be tightened a bit for clarity or impact. For example, “the night clutches me in one final choking embrace” feels a bit overdone compared to some of the more subtle lines earlier. While the repetition of "How can I miss someone I have never met" is effective, some readers might want a bit more variation to avoid it feeling too repetitive toward the end. Still, overall, it’s a striking piece that evokes strong emotions of loneliness, desire, and hope.

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#4790903

Review of Committed to Role: Delivered Consequence

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This poem has a rich, whimsical tone, full of vivid imagery and playful expressions. It seems to delve into themes of wealth, desire, and relationships, while also mixing in light-hearted commentary on contemporary culture. The structure and rhyme scheme give it a lyrical quality, though the phrasing is sometimes a bit abstract, making it feel more like a stream of consciousness.

The first few lines, "The richer that someone seemingly gets, / The beaming becomes more zoned," set the stage for a reflection on how wealth can change a person’s focus or demeanor. There's a slight sense of disillusionment here, as if success and materialism can lead to a detachment from what truly matters.

The transition into the idea of a “cruise for one’s beauteous vacation” vs. a “staycation” provides a fun twist on the typical notion of escape and relaxation, suggesting perhaps that the best moments don’t always need to be grand or far-flung.

There's also a playful tone in lines like “A trophy does imagine the graces / Of a most prosperous and extravagant future,” which brings a bit of irony into the mix. The imagery of the "trophy" seems to comment on superficial ideals of success and beauty, alluding to the way society often glamorizes wealth and outward appearances.

The later stanzas introduce an encouraging, almost uplifting tone, urging the reader to embrace youthful joy, make amends, and enjoy life in a balanced, healthy way ("Have some sober, delicate, decent fun"). This shift to a more positive outlook gives the poem depth, moving from cynicism to hope.

Overall, it has a surreal, almost satirical quality, weaving between different thoughts and ideas about materialism, love, and the pursuit of happiness. It’s an intriguing poem with a lot of potential for deeper interpretation, though its abstract nature might make it a bit challenging for some readers to fully grasp on the first read.

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#4790902

Review of Committed to Role: Delivered Consequence

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This poem has a rich, whimsical tone, full of vivid imagery and playful expressions. It seems to delve into themes of wealth, desire, and relationships, while also mixing in light-hearted commentary on contemporary culture. The structure and rhyme scheme give it a lyrical quality, though the phrasing is sometimes a bit abstract, making it feel more like a stream of consciousness.

The first few lines, "The richer that someone seemingly gets, / The beaming becomes more zoned," set the stage for a reflection on how wealth can change a person’s focus or demeanor. There's a slight sense of disillusionment here, as if success and materialism can lead to a detachment from what truly matters.

The transition into the idea of a “cruise for one’s beauteous vacation” vs. a “staycation” provides a fun twist on the typical notion of escape and relaxation, suggesting perhaps that the best moments don’t always need to be grand or far-flung.

There's also a playful tone in lines like “A trophy does imagine the graces / Of a most prosperous and extravagant future,” which brings a bit of irony into the mix. The imagery of the "trophy" seems to comment on superficial ideals of success and beauty, alluding to the way society often glamorizes wealth and outward appearances.

The later stanzas introduce an encouraging, almost uplifting tone, urging the reader to embrace youthful joy, make amends, and enjoy life in a balanced, healthy way ("Have some sober, delicate, decent fun"). This shift to a more positive outlook gives the poem depth, moving from cynicism to hope.

Overall, it has a surreal, almost satirical quality, weaving between different thoughts and ideas about materialism, love, and the pursuit of happiness. It’s an intriguing poem with a lot of potential for deeper interpretation, though its abstract nature might make it a bit challenging for some readers to fully grasp on the first read.

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#4790748

Review of Chair Rocking Kitty

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This little poem paints a peaceful and playful picture of a cat enjoying its time. The rhythm flows well and captures the carefree nature of a cat lounging in a chair. The lines “Being a furry mess without a care” and “All they ask, is you let them unwind” convey the lazy, content attitude of a cat perfectly. I like how the cat's wishes for a “beautiful Spring day” give the poem a light, optimistic touch, as if the cat is subtly sharing its vibe with the reader.

However, there’s a small opportunity to tighten up some wording for smoother flow. For example, “not paying no mind” could be revised to “not paying any mind” to avoid a double negative. Also, “With that said, they turn away” feels like a bit of a jump in the narrative—it could be more natural if it tied in a bit more seamlessly with the cat’s actions or state of mind.

Overall, the poem has a charming, whimsical tone and effectively captures the essence of a cat’s relaxed demeanor. A few minor tweaks could make it even smoother, but it’s a fun and lighthearted piece!

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#4790747

Review of Seeds of Change

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Seeds of Change

In a world of quiet beauty,
designed by loving hands,
the faerie folk and forms unknown
all populate the lands.

The majesty and magic were
quite obvious to see
brought to an end, unknowingly,
through curiosity.

As twilight changed to eventide,
a glow suffused the night
within a glade, deep in the woods,
designed to lure a sprite.

Its outward form was innocence,
temptation was its name
and the sweetness of its promise
flickered like a flame.

Bewitched, she held it in her hand.
She felt her feelings warm.
It called to her with images
designed to misinform.

It sang to her in wordless songs
of untasted pleasure.
Within her heart she held the key
to unlock the treasure.

She sat transfixed and motionless
as deep within her grew
a need for understanding of
these feelings that were new.

Temptation held her in its grasp;
she could not turn aside.
She found the seeds of change from which
she could no longer hide.

Each bore the name of jealousy,
envy, distrust, and greed
and they became a part of her
so she could spread the seed.

The changes were apparent as
soon paradise was lost.
The poison spread in minutes and
we have since borne the cost.

That far land and its denizens
are now just stories told.
We've relegated fairy tales
to no more than fool's gold.

We've lost the ancient wisdom lived
and learned in days of yore
while temptation still calls to us
to open the next door.

Within a glade, deep in the woods,
or in a quiet lab ...

WriterRick (WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group)

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#4790745

Review of Women’s Sports Thwarted: Men Furthered

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This poem takes a controversial stance on the inclusion of transgender athletes in sports, particularly in female categories. The tone is clearly critical, voicing concerns over the physical differences between male and female athletes, even after transitioning. It highlights perceived inequalities, such as the advantage of male-to-female athletes in areas like strength and athletic ability, and the potential emotional and social consequences for female athletes. The mention of locker room issues and concerns about fairness reflects a broader societal debate on inclusion and fairness in competitive environments.

While the poem raises legitimate points that are part of ongoing discussions, its tone comes off as divisive and could alienate some readers. The language choices, like "manic defiance" and "dangerous crunch," evoke a sense of fear and discomfort around the subject, making it feel more like an attack on transgender athletes rather than a balanced reflection on the issue. It’s clear that the poem seeks to draw attention to the perceived problems in the current system, but a more nuanced approach might appeal to a broader audience and encourage thoughtful dialogue instead of deepening division.

On a technical note, the poem follows a strong rhythm and rhyme scheme, with each stanza feeling like a progression of thoughts leading to the final impactful lines. However, some lines could benefit from clearer phrasing to make the message easier to digest. For instance, the metaphor of “rip city” might be too obscure for some readers. Overall, the piece effectively conveys the frustration surrounding the topic but may benefit from a more empathetic approach to the complex issue it addresses.

WriterRick (WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group)

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#4790744

Review of The Jester Created

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This poem has a deeply emotional and thoughtful premise, mixing friendship, illness, and a mystical twist. The bond between Cameron and Joshua is genuine and heartfelt, and the way their relationship evolves as their health conditions change adds a layer of poignancy. The introduction of a supernatural element, with Joshua being sent to guide Cameron, adds an unexpected depth to the story.

The rhyming scheme is consistent throughout, which gives it a lyrical flow. It reads like a ballad, with the rhythm pushing the story forward, making it easy to follow. The verses that describe the playful, carefree nature of their friendship — like the card tricks and jokes — are especially warm, creating a strong contrast with the eventual darker, more serious revelation about Cameron's father’s deal with the devil. This balance between light-hearted moments and heavy themes of fate and destiny is done well.

The dialogue between the two friends in the later part of the poem is where things get particularly interesting. Joshua's mysterious words are cryptic and thought-provoking, adding an eerie sense of inevitability to the story. His role as a guide, a kind of guardian angel, is both tragic and redemptive. The twist about Cameron’s father making a deal with the devil gives the narrative an unexpected, almost mythological layer.

One area that could be explored further is the emotional impact of the ending. The shift from Josh’s death to Cameron’s future as “The Jester” feels a bit rushed. Given the weight of their friendship and the mysterious fate of Josh, a little more time spent on Cameron’s reflections or feelings before the conclusion would heighten the emotional depth.

Overall, it’s a beautifully written and imaginative piece with strong themes of friendship, sacrifice, and destiny. It invites readers to reflect on the meaning of life, the ties that bind us, and the mysterious forces at play in the background.

WriterRick (WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group)

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#4790435

Review of The Inch

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This poem captures a deep and selfless emotion, where the speaker reveals their willingness to endure hardship and suffering for someone else's benefit. The repetitive line, "Yes, I'd suffer for an inch," is a powerful refrain, emphasizing both the speaker's determination and the significance of even the smallest effort in making a difference.

The use of short, sharp phrases like "Sweat, toil and fight" effectively conveys the speaker's resolve, while the rhyme scheme provides a rhythm that mirrors the steady, relentless nature of their commitment. The imagery of moving a scar is particularly striking—symbolic of carrying pain or responsibility, potentially to heal or protect another.

However, the poem could benefit from slight elaboration to clarify the relationship between the speaker and the person they wish to protect. Adding just a hint of context or a specific detail about "his life" could heighten the emotional impact and make the sacrifice more relatable to readers.

The closing couplet is poignant, but it might be even stronger if the word choice were slightly more vivid or personal. For instance, instead of "so his life may be spared," consider language that conveys more urgency or connection, such as "so his future might remain."

Overall, this is a compelling and heartfelt piece that touches on themes of sacrifice and love, leaving the reader with a sense of the speaker's profound dedication.

WriterRick (WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group)

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#4790434

Review of Breakfast at Tiffany's

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This review is well-rounded and covers multiple aspects of Breakfast at Tiffany's, from the plot to its connection with Audrey Hepburn's other works and even a fun dive into Tiffany & Co.'s iconic branding. Here’s an analysis:

Strengths:
Detailed Synopsis: The plot summary of Breakfast at Tiffany's is concise yet thorough. It effectively captures the main themes, characters, and conflicts. The emotional journey of Holly and Paul is clear, making it accessible even to someone who hasn’t seen the movie.

Personal Touch: Sharing the experience of watching the movie on YouTube with half the screen cut off adds humor and relatability. It creates a connection with readers, especially those who’ve had similar struggles finding films online.

Audrey Hepburn Film List: Including a list of other Hepburn films provides added value to readers who might be fans of her work. The diversity in genres (from romantic comedies to thrillers like Wait Until Dark) showcases her versatility.

Tiffany Infinity Bracelet: The choice is specific and personal, tying back to the movie's iconic link to Tiffany & Co. Mentioning the infinity symbol's spiritual meaning adds depth and personality.

Blue Box History: Including a brief history of Tiffany’s signature Blue Box is a delightful touch. It ties in with the theme of the movie and showcases some thoughtful research.

Areas for Improvement:
Product Review Formatting: The "Angel Product Reviews" section is a bit disconnected. If this is meant to mimic a real product review, expanding on the film's cinematic quality (acting, direction, visuals) would make it stronger.

Tone Consistency: While casual and conversational for the most part, some sections (like the bracelet description) feel more formal. Balancing the tone across the review would enhance the flow.

Blue Box History Depth: While the history snippet is interesting, elaborating a bit more (e.g., Tiffany Blue's Pantone significance or its global recognition) could enrich this section.

Grammar and Phrasing: Minor edits like clarifying that Paul is nicknamed "Fred" and smoothing transitions between sections could tighten up the narrative.

Overall Thoughts:
This review is engaging, informative, and personal. It captures the essence of Breakfast at Tiffany's and its cultural ties to Tiffany & Co. The addition of Hepburn's filmography and the bracelet choice adds variety. With some polishing, this could stand as a charming multi-topic article.

WriterRick (WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group)

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#4790433

Review of Finding Myself By The Sea

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

"Finding Myself By The Sea" is a beautifully reflective poem that captures the intimate connection between the speaker and the sea. The poet weaves a sense of longing, healing, and self-discovery, using vivid imagery and a rhythm that mirrors the ebb and flow of the ocean waves.

The poem starts with a serene moment on a sandy shore, inviting the reader into the speaker's contemplative journey. The tone is introspective, and the straightforward language makes the emotions accessible. Lines like "My troubles fall away, / Like leaves from a tree" effectively convey the catharsis the speaker experiences in the presence of the sea.

The sea is presented not just as a setting but as a source of strength and renewal. The repetition of themes like finding oneself and the sea’s therapeutic power builds a strong emotional core. The poet’s use of e.e. cummings' quote integrates seamlessly, reinforcing the poem’s message while adding depth to the speaker's sentiments.

However, some stanzas could benefit from tighter phrasing to enhance their impact. For example, "The soothing sun and / Wind caress my face" is evocative, but its simplicity could be elevated with more sensory detail. Additionally, the rhyme scheme is consistent but sometimes feels slightly forced, as in "The sea always meant, / The whole world to me." Experimenting with varied structures might make the poem even more dynamic.

Overall, "Finding Myself By The Sea" is heartfelt and relatable, with its central idea resonating strongly. The poet skillfully uses the natural world to explore profound emotions, making this piece a soothing and reflective read.

WriterRick (WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group)

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#4790432

Review of Finding Myself By The Sea

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

"Finding Myself By The Sea" is a beautifully reflective poem that captures the intimate connection between the speaker and the sea. The poet weaves a sense of longing, healing, and self-discovery, using vivid imagery and a rhythm that mirrors the ebb and flow of the ocean waves.

The poem starts with a serene moment on a sandy shore, inviting the reader into the speaker's contemplative journey. The tone is introspective, and the straightforward language makes the emotions accessible. Lines like "My troubles fall away, / Like leaves from a tree" effectively convey the catharsis the speaker experiences in the presence of the sea.

The sea is presented not just as a setting but as a source of strength and renewal. The repetition of themes like finding oneself and the sea’s therapeutic power builds a strong emotional core. The poet’s use of e.e. cummings' quote integrates seamlessly, reinforcing the poem’s message while adding depth to the speaker's sentiments.

However, some stanzas could benefit from tighter phrasing to enhance their impact. For example, "The soothing sun and / Wind caress my face" is evocative, but its simplicity could be elevated with more sensory detail. Additionally, the rhyme scheme is consistent but sometimes feels slightly forced, as in "The sea always meant, / The whole world to me." Experimenting with varied structures might make the poem even more dynamic.

Overall, "Finding Myself By The Sea" is heartfelt and relatable, with its central idea resonating strongly. The poet skillfully uses the natural world to explore profound emotions, making this piece a soothing and reflective read.

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#4790239

Review of Buffy Wilson WC:270

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

This piece has a humorous and relatable tone, capturing the frustration of a man who finds himself reluctantly agreeing to something without fully understanding what he's getting into. The premise of a car enthusiast being roped into a photoshoot is both funny and unexpected, making for an amusing story.

The narrator's internal thoughts add a layer of authenticity to the piece, showing his desire to avoid social interaction but ultimately being pulled into a situation he doesn't quite understand. His realization at the end—"It pays to listen, folks. Pays to listen."—provides a nice twist that wraps up the story in a self-deprecating, yet insightful way.

One thing to consider for improvement is the pacing. The first half of the story could benefit from a bit more detail to set the scene, particularly regarding the husband's frustration. His reactions feel a little rushed, which could make the twist at the end hit harder if the buildup was slightly more gradual.

Overall, it’s an entertaining read with a nice blend of humor and life lessons. It plays on the idea that sometimes, things don’t go as expected, but you might end up having a memorable experience in the end—even if it’s not what you envisioned.

WriterRick (WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group)

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#4790238

Review of Silent Wisdom

Review by WriterRick

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Rated: E

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"Silent Wisdom" is a beautifully contemplative poem that reflects on themes of history, memory, and the quiet power of wisdom passed through time. The poem uses the image of a statue, seemingly static and forgotten, as a metaphor for the wisdom that often goes unnoticed in our busy lives. The narrator’s interaction with the figure—feeling a pull, being drawn to it, and eventually understanding its silent message—creates an intimate connection between the past and the present.

The first stanza sets the tone with the observation that statues and plaques are part of history, yet we often fail to notice them. This idea immediately establishes a sense of missed opportunity or neglect, which is turned around in the later stanzas when the narrator discovers the deeper meaning embedded in the statue’s presence. The subtle realization that statues hold more than just decorative value resonates with anyone who has overlooked the past or taken things for granted.

The imagery of the figure in the burnished coat, absorbed in a forgotten quote, is evocative and thoughtful. The use of the eyes and their ability to "see beyond the silent rusted page" adds depth to the idea that wisdom transcends time. The narrator’s curiosity about why they are drawn to this figure is a relatable experience, as many of us have moments of inexplicable fascination that lead to profound realizations.

As the poem progresses, the connection between the narrator and the statue becomes more personal. The line, “Patience is its own reward,” which is revealed through the outstretched hand, feels like a gentle yet powerful reminder to be present and to trust the process of life. This philosophical message is timeless and resonates universally.

The closing stanzas are beautifully reflective, highlighting the idea that what truly matters in life isn’t fame or recognition, but the truths we share and the lasting impact we have on others. The line, "if my words aren’t just chatter, those I’ve touched will continue to care," encapsulates a sense of legacy and the quiet hope that our lives will have meaning beyond our immediate circumstances.

Overall, "Silent Wisdom" is a thoughtful and introspective piece that blends imagery and philosophy in a way that encourages the reader to pause and reflect on the deeper messages in life. The poem's rhythm and flow enhance the meditative mood, and its ending leaves a lasting impression on the reader about the power of patience and legacy.

WriterRick (WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group)

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