Overall Impressions:
This is a very sad and emotional poem. I know how you feel. I wish I could go back and change some things about myself and things I did or didn't do. It doesn't help to beat ones self up over these things.
Imagery:
You did a good job on the imagery and descriptions.
Flow/Form:
Nice flow and meter.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Good job. Keep writing!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions: This was a beautifully written, but very sad poem. I know what you're going through. My dad passed away, and all I could ever ask was why. I still ask that. This is still fresh in my mind because my dad passed away at the very young age of 49 in October 2007. My parents were divorced and I was angry because my mother acted as though she didn't care. But that's the way she's always been with anything in life. Losing my dad was the biggest tragedy that I had ever experienced, as I am sure it was for you.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
I hope one day you will find closure and peace.
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
What an excellent collection of poetry you have here! I have actually read some of these, and enjoyed them. I will read all of the rest that I haven't gone through yet.
Emotional Impact:
I love reading and writing poetry!
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for displaying this wonderful collection of poetry!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
I know exactly what you are going through. I lost my dad back in October 2007, and we still don't know the cause. He was only 49, it was very sudden and took everyone by surprise. I had no idea that this was going to happen. Now there's this void in my heart and in my life that can never be filled by anything or anyone. My dad was the only parent that I had, no thanks to my mother abandoning me and my three sisters. So, my heart aches for you.
Flow/Form:
Great flow and form.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words, grammatical, or punctuation errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
I hope that one day you will be able to heal. Keep writing. *hugz*
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
This was somewhat of a bizarre story, lol. I won't say anything more, because I don't want to give away the ending.
Imagery:
Very gruesome and graphic imagery.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I found one grammatical error. In paragraph 11, "though" should be "through". Other than that, I didn't find anymore errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Good job! Keep writing!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
This is a very sad and emotional poem. It's sad when you trust someone with something as fragile as your heart, because hearts break so easily.
Flow/Form:
This has great flow and meter.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Good job, keep writing!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
This is a very touching poem about the bonds of friendship. I remember having a small circle of friends that I would hang out with. I have lost touch with them since I graduated high school. I miss those times.
Flow/Form:
Good job on the flow and meter.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Well done! Keep writing!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
I love the snow. I just don't like driving in it.
Emotional Impact:
This reminded me of my own carefree moments as a child. I used to play on the ice all of the time. I had fun but always ended up falling on my knees and getting these gigantic bruises on them and wouldn't be able to kneel, lol.
Imagery:
You gave beautiful imagery and visuals of the little girl spinning and skating on the ice.
Flow/Form:
Good flow and meter.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Good job!
Ciao,
Gem
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Imagery:
You gave beautiful imagery and descriptions.
Flow/Form:
Very nice flow.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't find any misspelled words or grammatical errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
Make sure you put a rating on your poem. I would also suggest that you put in an explanation to what it is you're supposed to do for the contest, perhaps put in a link so other reviewers can see what the contest is about.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this! Keep writing!
Ciao,
Gem
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Ciao,
This was a beautifully written, but very sad poem. I know what you're going through. My dad passed away, and all I could ever ask was why. I still ask that. This is still fresh in my mind because my dad passed away at the very young age of 49 in October 2007. My parents were divorced and I was angry because my mother acted as though she didn't care. But that's the way she's always been with anything in life. Losing my dad was the biggest tragedy that I had ever experienced, as I am sure it was for you.
This was sharp and very clever! I have never seen anything like this before.
I lost my dad back in October 2007, and we still don't know the cause. He was only 49, it was very sudden and took everyone by surprise. I had no idea that this was going to happen. Now there's this void in my heart and in my life that can never be filled by anything or anyone. My dad was the only parent that I had, no thanks to my mother abandoning me and my three sisters. So, my heart aches for you. 
