Overall Impressions:
Spiders give me the heebie-jeebies too. I have had my run-ins with a common house spider to wolf spiders (which are big and hairy). I walked by a spruce tree in my dad's yard and a wolf spider jumped out at me and I must have jumped 10 feet into the air. There was another account when I was lying in bed and a black spider tried to land on my face. I screamed of course, and it scurried back up it's web, lol. Now, at my apartment, there is this big tan spider with a black and white shape on it's belly that has spun a web on my balcony. I have no idea what kind it is, but it scares me anyway. I would say that spiders and snakes are my biggest fears.
Imagery:
Well done on the imagery and details.
Flow/Form:
Good form and flow.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this creepy poem, lol. Keep writing!
Ciao,
Gem
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I am in complete agreement with you on this whole mess that Bush and Cheney have put upon this country. They make me ashamed to be citizen of America. It's a total embarrassment that we attack other countries unprovoked. Then sending our work to other countries to save money, because they don't want to pay us what we are worth. They are responsible for the poor economy. Okay, I better stop before I spin off into a deeper tangent, lol.
Flow/Form:
Well done on the flow of this piece.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Good job on a well-written piece!
Ciao,
Gem
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Overall Impressions:
This is very sad piece that you've written. This is the very thing that you would read in the paper or see on the 6 o'clock news. This was well-written and told in great narrative form.
Flow/Form:
Well done on this free verse form.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this piece! Well done!
Ciao,
Gem
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This is a beautiful and brilliant piece! I love how you put the title of the poem within the words of the poem! I will have to try this sometime! Very cool.
Emotional Impact:
I know what it's like to carry the burden of being unforgiving of someone. It's an evil and crippling feeling. In my life I have learned to fogive people. I don't necessarily have to forget, but I can forgive. You're right. There is a sense of relief and release when you've forgiven the person that has wronged you.
Imagery:
I love how you put the title of the poem within the words of the poem! I will have to try this sometime! Very cool.
Flow/Form:
Nice job on the flow and form of the piece.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Originality/Uniqueness:
This is the first time I have ever seen a poem with the title within the piece, so this to me if very unique.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this really cool piece.
Ciao,
Gem
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A wonderful poem in tribute to our soldiers and our Lord. Some people forget how important it is to support our troops regardless of which political side we are on. Even though we may not like the idea of war, we still need to offer our support no matter what.
Imagery:
Nice job with the imagery and descriptions of this piece.
Flow/Form:
Well done on the flow and form.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Great job! Write on!
Ciao,
Gem
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As a person who has also suffered abuse, both physical and mental, I can completely relate with you on this story. I never suffered any broken bones, maybe a few bruises and emotional pain and suffering. My mother was the abuser, my dad never knew until later on the things that she did. When people say, "Time heals all wounds", they really don't know what they are talking about because they have never been through it themselves. I live with my sister, and I have seen her behave and talk the same way that my mother did. When I hear her fighting and hitting her boyfriends, all of the memories from my own childhood come flooding back and remind me of my mother and the way she treated my dad. It hurts and it never goes away. Time doesn't heal all wounds, the only thing that we can do is live our lives the best we can. I wrote my own story about the abuse from my mother.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Thank you for sharing this with the WDC community. I know that it couldn't have been easy to write this. Take care.
Ciao,
Gem
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This is such a sweet biography and great history on how cats came to America. I have two cats myself, a male orange tabby and a female russian blue/himilayan. I also wrote a poem called "The Cats Meow" which was an acrostic poem. I throughly enjoyed reading this piece.
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
Nice job!
Ciao,
Gem
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What a beautiful tribute to New Orleans and the Katrina victims! When Katrina had hit, I was living in Clearwater, Florida at the time 5 minutes from the Gulf. I and many others watched in horror as Katrina built up strength and ambushed that poor city.
Emotional Impact:
Your words brought tears to my eyes. Your writing shows great compassion for humanity. That's a great thing to posess.
Imagery:
The images that you wrote in this piece were gruesome and horrifying. You captured everything in this exactly as it had happened.
Flow/Form:
For a free verse poem, this has excellent flow. Well done!
Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation:
I didn't spot any grammatical or spelling errors.
Suggestions/Improvements to be Made:
None.
Closing Remarks:
This such a well written piece! Congrats on the ribbon and on a job well done!
Ciao,
Gem
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I have had my run-ins with a common house spider to wolf spiders (which are big and hairy). I walked by a spruce tree in my dad's yard and a wolf spider jumped out at me and I must have jumped 10 feet into the air. There was another account when I was lying in bed and a black spider tried to land on my face. I screamed of course, and it scurried back up it's web, lol. Now, at my apartment, there is this big tan spider with a black and white shape on it's belly that has spun a web on my balcony. I have no idea what kind it is, but it scares me anyway. I would say that spiders and snakes are my biggest fears.
Ciao,
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It was short but said a lot, lol!
They make me ashamed to be citizen of America. It's a total embarrassment that we attack other countries unprovoked. Then sending our work to other countries to save money, because they don't want to pay us what we are worth. They are responsible for the poor economy. Okay, I better stop before I spin off into a deeper tangent, lol.
