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Review of Time Stand Still  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi there!
I was curious to see what someone came up with this title, and I have to say, I thought this was lovely. It was very emotive, and I truly felt that this poem exuded a great bit of warmth and tenderness. I got the impression that this was expressly written for someone close to you, and I am sure that someone will greatly appreciate.

The wording was simple, but I nthought that given the nature of your poem, it was still kind of eloquent.

Thank you for sharing!
Elizabeth John
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Review of Way Home !  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi there--

You reviewed something of mine earlier this week and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I liked this poem very much. For me, what appealed to me was the story-like nature of your verse; I'm finding that as time goes on, that's the kind of poem that appeals to me personally. I also thought that a reader could easily find deeper meaning in the last line, given that this is a poem about Ghandi. I could see the argument being made that on a grander scale "finding home" could be finding ourselves, our nature, our identity as a people, and not just the obvious meaning stated. I guess that's the wonder of poetry: it lends itself to interpretation and people can find all kinds of value in your words.

In any case, good job with this one, and write on!

Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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Review of Better days  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi there--

You reviewed a piece of my work earlier this week and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for your sharing your work. Clearly this is a very emotive poem, but if I could make a suggestion...? (Although I would tell you that I am very new to writing poetry, so please take my suggestion with a grain of salt and an open mind.) I would flesh it out a little more, and perhaps work to make it a little more unique. I think that although the sentiment you are trying to convey is common, your wording should be extraordinary in order to make it really stand out.

Lastly, there's one small "technical" problem: in the second to last stanza, there is no rhyme scheme. All the other stanzas end in rhyme, and because this one stanza does not, it seems a little awkward.

Anyway, that's all. I hope this was helpful, but please feel free to disregard anything you disagree with or that you feel is unmerited. These are only my opinions, nothing more.

Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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Review of Crowned Clown  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi there-

You reviewed something of mine earlier this week and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work! I liked this poem, and I liked the notion of a poem about a court jester. I found him to be evil, and while his audience is laughing at his antics, his wreaking havoc and destruction on the kingdom.

I did find one typo:

You wrote:
I cut of his head.

My suggestion:
I think you meant to say OFF.

Thanks again, and write on!
Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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Review of Beautiful Girl  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello there!

You reviewed something of mine a few days ago and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. Although I have just began dabbling This was a very interesting poem, I especially liked the beginning of your poem. I was always a little lost though from the middle of the end, mainly because for me the switch in subjects were a little disconcerting (from "she" to "you" and back again). However, I think I got the gist of the sentiment being conveyed, and I liked it.

There is one small typo in the piece:
You wrote:
Even though your still so far away

My comment:
your should be you're

Thank you for sharing your work and write on!

Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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Review by elizjohn Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello there!

You reviewed something of mine yesterday and I now wanted to return the favor!

This little passage was just lovely, especially the first two paragraphs. They are beautifully written, and wonderfully descriptive. I liked the emotion that you evoked in this passage, and as the reader, I could really get into Deja's joy and love for train travel. I also liked this piece because it was a great shout-out to that era of train travel and the experience of it. It is something that is becoming lost here in our country; abroad, train travel still has the pulse of the people as it is a prominent way to travel, but not here. It's a shame also, because when you read something like this which can depict such beauty, you wonder why it isn't so here. And mind you, I say all this to you, and I absolutely hate to travel by road or rail---go figure! *Rolleyes*

In any case, thank you for sharing your work! I thoroughly enjoyed this.

Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there!
I just wanted to say that I really liked your poem! Certainly you met the challenge of the promt very well, and I loved that you answered so many questions about so many creatures, goblins and ghouls. If I had any questions before, I think you answered them all!

Also, although I'm no expert on poetry, I thought your poem had great rhythm and rhyme. It made it very easy to read and increased my joy of it a tenfold.

Thank you for sharing your work! Write on!
Elizabeth John
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Why, hello there, my tied for first place friend! *Bigsmile*

I just read your poem and I really liked it. I loved the message you were trying to conveying, and I think you have a lot of brilliant stanzas in your poem. And I loved, loved, loved the ending. I liked that the one telling the tale was actually probably the greatest demon or monster of all, and the irony that he is warning the reader that he himself is the danger that they should fear! Very clever!

My only critiques are with the punctuation and line presentation. However, before I start, let me say that I am also very new to writing poetry, especially using strict rhyme and rhythm schemes, so please consider my words with a grain of salt if necessary. But I get the impression you have the same problems as I do with rhythm, if that's not too presumptuous. In any case, I think you want to reconsider some of the commas you have dispersed throughout your piece. For me, when I was reading, when I got a comma, of course I paused, but then the rhythm would be thrown off. Same for the line breaks. There may be some spots where you might consider combining two lines so the rhythm is not halted by the slight pause that is built in to a line break. I'll give you an example of each:

You wrote:
So, come, venture out- if you dare.

My suggestion:
I don't think you need any of the commas in this line, but I would keep the dash. The pause created by the dash adds that element of drama and mystery.

You wrote:
They see pleasure where others,
Despair.

My suggestion:
Here I don't think you need the comma, and actually, I think I would put despair on the previous line. It might read better and catch the rhythm as intended.

And finally, I just wanted to point out the parts that I just loved:
You wrote:
We're all flawed,
Of course,
But we feel remorse;
While they feel a lust when they err.

I just thought this was very very cool.

You wrote:

To the sights that are seen-
Unclean and obscene-
These sights
On this night,
So beware.

Also very awesome. *Smile*

Anyway, that was a fun, great read. I thoroughly enjoyed, the content of your message was right up my alley. Congrats on your share of the win!

Oh, and Happy Halloween!

Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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Review by elizjohn Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi there--

Thank you for sharing your work! I think you met the challenge of the prompt very well. Your story was well-written and a good pace and flow; I have to tell you, I'd be curious to see what your long version looked like. I know what you mean about the 1k word limits; very often, I have two versions of a story, the 1K version and the expanded (original) version. Usually after a contest, I post the original as soon as I can because usually the cut version tends to be richer with details and story.

Anyway, I liked the characters you created. I thought they were realistic characters that anyone could relate to, and the story you created about the club and the hotel was great. I don't know if it was super-original, but I think you ended the story on a note that kind of gave it a fresh feel, so kudos there.

Thanks again for the good read. Write on!

Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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Review of Snow White  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Hello--

You reviewed a piece of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

I thought the ultimate premise of your story really has some teeth to it. I liked that the main character is stuck in this horribly dangerous situation, literally risking life and limb, and in his deteriorating state, begins to hallucinate about what will ultimately a prophetic vision of his health. So good job there!

I do believe, however, that your writing could be stronger. There are a few typos throughout your piece here and there, and in terms of the writing, there are some passages that are muddled and unclear. As the reader, I didn't understand why the character was going out into the blizzard, and why the car was three hours away. Generally, I would assume that a blizzard or storm of this magnitude didn't just "pop-up" so to speak, without warning. Surely the character should have known that this bad weather was coming. I guess my point here is that his or her reason for being out in the cold is both unclear and unreasonable, and so it's a bit difficult to "believe" that this person went outside. Perhaps something like the guy is on his way home, trying to beat a blizzard and perhaps his car breaks down. To that regard, s/he walks out, looking for shelter and can't get to it....something like that.

In any case, these are just my opinions. Please disregard anything you disagree with!

Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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Review of Terrible Beauty  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello there--

Thank you for sharing your work! I thought this story was brilliant. Certainly, you met the challenge of the prompt extremely well. The story itself is written beautifully, with a rich, lush language that helps make it easy to imagine everything that is going on: every scene, every emotion. Interestingly enough, I liked this entire story, but my single favorite paragraph is probably the one that had the least amount of action: the first one. I thought you did a great job in this single paragraph, setting the scene, the tone, and the mood. The descriptions were dead-on, and I felt like I myself was able to look upon a downtown city street with a new awareness of what makes up that city street, what elements actually bring it to life and give it personality. So bravo there!

The other cool thing about the story, I thought, is that it felt really complete. Usually you write a store for one of these contests, and because of the word count, sometimes it's easy for it not to feel complete. You get caught up in having to cut, cut, cut and heavily edit to make the word count. At least, that's how it goes for me. But your story felt absolutely finished, and if it were me, I wouldn't add or touch a single thing.

Anyway, great work here. Thank you for the read and write on!
Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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Review by elizjohn Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello there!

You reviewed something of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work! Your story was very interesting. I assume this is based on a Writer's Cramp for WDC's 11th birthday, but possibly expanded beyond the 1K word limit. That said, you met the challenge of the prompt, delving into the 11 parties with great detail. I thought you covered a range of party themes and topics, so good job with that. I remember this prompt, and it was one of the things I had trouble with.

I thought you had control of your pen, and I didn't find too much in tbhe way of writing errors, speeling or grammar problems. My only critique would be that I would have liked a little more conflict so that then sense of resolution would have been greater. I thought the story came to its conclusion a little too easily.

In any case, overall, thank you for allowing me to read your work. Please disregard anything you disagree with, and write on!
Respectfully, Elizabeth John
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
From oneHi there!

You reviewed some work of mine earlier so I wantted to retirn the favor!

As you yourself have titled this "a work in progress" I would tell that as a beginning work, this is pretty good so far. I like it and certainly intrigued.i think you are developing so lively and interesting characters. I only have one main critique so far, but it's only as a reflection of the fact that this is a beginning work. I would tell you that in this preliminary stage, it needs some more development. As the story moves from one paragraph to the next, I got the impression that some parts were too thin, so at some points it seemed to move awkwardly from one point to the next. My only suggetion would be to revisit this that you have written so far before moving forward.

Additionally, you do have a few typos and a few other grammar things here and there. I'm doing this review from my phone, otherwise I'd point them out for you (it's a little cumbersome to copy and paste). So you may want to look at that again.

Anyway, good job so far! Keep it up and good luck with this endeavor!
Respectfully submitted,
Elizabeth John
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Review of The Face  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi there!

Thank you for sharing your work! This story was very interesting! I thought you met the challenge of the prompt very well, and your story was very creative. I think that any reader can empathize with Samuel's plight--actually, my heart went out to him, and so good job with his characterization! His characterization was sympathetic and endearing, so actually, when we came to the ending, I really felt bad for him, despite this evil thing that he had inadvertently created had to be destroyed. I think that as we grow older, probably being alone is as fearsome as the monster in the closet or the thing under the bed....

In terms of the writing, my critique would be that I think the story is a little thin, but I wonder if that can't just be attributed to the word count. If you choose to revisit this piece, my suggestion would be to really flesh it out, maybe by 500 words or so. My main reason for suggesting this because at times, there were some spots and some transitions that to me seemed to need more. For example, you wrote:

The tree was his friend. It understood him. He even gave it a name - Quincey.
With the new face came new rumors from the children and people of the town near his cabin.

The transition between the two paragraphs seemed a little awkward. Perhaps something like:
The tree was his friend. It understood him. He even gave it a name - Quincey.
Now that his tree had both a face and a name, Samuel frequented spent time with Quincey, much to the amusement (word choice?) of the townspeople. They began to spread rumors, and ......

That is a very fast rewrite, but I think it is a little smoother with some more story to fill it in. But this is just a suggestion, a humble one at that!

In any case, thanks for the late night read! I enjoyed it very much!

Respectfully submitted,
Elizabeth John
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Joe!

What a great story! You met the challenge of this prompt very, very well. I loved it. I thought it was very creative and imaginative, and certainly far beyond anything I would have ever dreamed up. The pace of the story was great and it was extremely engaging. You wrote the science like a pro, and I wondered briefly for a moment what science credentials were.....hahahahahaha!


There were a few mistakes in the writing that I would point out. Probably the most prevalent was the Panda's for pandas, plural. What you have written is the possessive form of the word, and it suggests that you are only referring to one panda in particular. I would also tell you that it doesn't need to be capitalized.

Additionally, you wrote:

The truth was, that Panda’s were dying out.

My suggestion:
The comma is misplaced. I would rewrite to read like this:

However, the truth was that the pandas were dying out.

You wrote:
woo had administered

My suggestion:
woo should be capitalized

And my last critique goes to the formatting or the layout of the story. In the beginning, you wrote this sentence:
What had he done?

At each instance, I would skip a line and let this one sentence stand alone, italicized as you have it. I think it would help better clarify a shift in thought and break away better from the narrative passages to which their attached. But it's just a thought.

Anyway, great work with this one! A fun, fun read!

Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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Review of Final Exams  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi there--

You reviewed a piece of mine earlier and I wanted to return the favor!

Well, can I just say hahahahaha!

What are the odds that you would get a TEACHER to review your poem about a final exam? *Bigsmile*

Anyway, I did love this though, because even though I'm a teacher now, I have been, of course, and frequently still am a student. I've known my share of final exams, and I think your poem hits all the right notes about exams and testing. I don't think there isn't a person on the planet who couldn't relate to what you're saying, so that's definitely good news. I thought your language was eloquent and your word choice was very rich, and the rhythm was spot-on. I also liked the last two stanzas, because I feel that they expand well on the reality and the necessity of exams, no matter how much we hate them.

Anyway, great job on this piece! Write on!

Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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Review of Grandpa  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello--

You reviewed a piece of mine earlier, so I wanted to return the favor!

Thank you for sharing your work. I remember this prompt, it was up sometime last week. I think you met the challenge of this prompt pretty well. Certainly, it never would have occurred to me that the movers might be transporting something other than boxes or furniture, so I think you chosen way to tackle the prompt was very creative. I also liked the transition and the movement of the story back and forth between the vignettes about the grandfather's life to the present-day where the family is still holding the funeral and moving through the process of grieving. I also liked learning a little bit about Chinese customs as it relates to funerals. I love foreign culture and find this sort of thing fascinating, so for me personally I found that especially interesting to read.

In terms of writing, there are a few things that I would advise you to review: some changes in tense, and a run-on sentence or two. Nothing major, but nothing a perusal wouldn't fix.

Again, thank you for sharing your work and write on!
Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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Review of Appearances  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
Hello--

You reviewed a piece of mine earlier and so I wanted to return!

Thank you for sharing your work. This story was very interesting, but I must admit, I had some difficulty following it. As the story goes on, particularly during the actual robbery, the action picks up, as does the pace of the story, and that is fine. But in the process, it seems to get a bit confused. Pronouns like "it" make an appearance, and I don't know if you're referring to the guy robbing the store, or perhaps his dark side, if that's your intent....? I just feel like the action and the story could be clearer, less ambiguous.

Additionally, I would also make one other critique. The beginning of the story feels like third person, until we get to the second paragraph. At that point, we realize the story is being told from first person. That's fine to do, but if the story is in first person, than there's no way that he can know the actions and the motivations of the guy in the story. How does the narrator know that the attendant "doesn't mind that he's working there"? It's something to point out.

I hope this has been helpful, but please, disregard anything you disagree with. These critiques are only my opinion and are offered only to help you improve, but if you don't like them, please ignore them.

Respectfully submitted,
Elizabeth John
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Review of The Portrait  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello--

What a great piece of work! I loved this story, and I loved the way you chose to tackle the prompt. I thought that this was very ingenious. I love horror stories where the "scare" takes place in the mind, and when the book and guts is innocuous, not free-flowing and gratuitous as is often frequently written in typical horror fare. So hats off to you! This is great work.

In my reading, I only found a few bumps along the way:
You wrote:
He worked long and studiously. Occasionally glancing back at his hated subject in the glass.

My suggestion:
Join those two sentences with a comma, because otherwise the second part is a fragment.

You wrote:
He looked down seeing blood had seeped through his jeans and stained his doona.

My suggestion:
This is a little heavy. I would re-word it:
He looked down and saw that blood had seeped through his jeans......

You wrote:
He both could not bare to look at it, and could not look away.

My suggestion:
You have two clauses that are negative. As such, you should change "both...and..." to "neither...nor"

He could neither bear to look at it, nor turn away. (Also, bare was misspelled. I fixed it in my example here.)

Well, that's it! I enjoyed that very much---write on!

Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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Review of Ethel's Birthday  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi there--

Wow, this was really cool. I loved it. It was very well written, and the tone and language was flawless. I loved the characterization of Ethel. She was sweetly evil, if there ever was such a thing, and in that, you nailed her character. I also thought the plot was very clever, and really, you were able to meet the challenge of the plot in a way that hinted at it as opposed to being very literal, and I really liked that. When I saw the prompt, I immediately began to envision birthday cake and balloons, candles, and the whole shebang. In my head, it was very cliche, but you really handled the prompt well. I appreciate that in story-telling, so good job.

In terms of writing, I didn't see any errors in grammar, punctuation or spelling, although I would remark that toward the end, where you wrote:

She would be “cute”, “sweet”, and, let’s not forget, “precious”.

I would italicize those adjectives as opposed to putting it in quotations.

Otherwise, this was a great "first" read after a long day at work, and as a result, very fun to review.

Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello--

Thank you for sharing your story. I don't know if it was true or not, but certainly it touches a nerve, no doubt. I think you very accurately expressed a level of tyranny and fear that I am sure keeps a terrorized household at bay.

As a work of fiction, I would make only the following criticism: in terms of the writing, there is a lot of tense shifts. Sometimes you used the present tense, and other times you used the past tense. I think it would be worth the time it would take to go back and revisit your piece to make those corrections. Otherwise, I didn't see anything else.

The only other thing I would criticize is the very last line? This is just a personal thing, but it didn't sit well with me, for whatever reason. I think I would have preferred to see your story end with the sentence just before, like this:

I know what I did then. I----

I think it does exactly the same thing that you intended without introducing "you" into the story. It's an abrupt end, but allows for the reader to imagine both what the narrator might have done and how the reader himself would react. But anyway, that's just my opinion.

Otherwise, good work and write on!

Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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Review of Shed No Tears  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello there--

Wow, this was lovely and really resonated. A history lesson in verse, and quite frankly, I think I just learned more about the plight of Native Americans in your one poem than I ever did in school, so really, great job there.

I also loved the rhythm. Poetry is very hard to critique because it really is such a free form of expression, but I think anyone who reads poetry knows what they like, and my preference is for poetry with a clear and defined rhythm and rhyme pattern, and yours delivers very well on this point. My only criticism to this point---and please, this is really more of an observation than a critique---is that the first line of the third stanza was a little hard to read because I couldn't find the rhythm. Of course, I can't imagine an easier way to write that line and still ensure that all five tribes are recognized and honored, so you know, take that with a grain of salt.

Otherwise, I really enjoyed this. Great work!

Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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Review of The Bench  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello--

Thank you for sharing your work. This piece was beautifully described, and written with lots of emotion. The pace of this piece moved at a rate the was equal to the subject matter: not too fast or too slow, but a kind of unwinding, if you will, that was the ideal pace.

I liked the description of the bench, particularly in the first paragraph, and the little bits of personification attributed to it. I thought that was well done.

Thank you for the lovely read.
Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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Review of The Skinny Man  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello there--

Great, great story! I thought you met the challenge of the prompt extremely well. The writing was really superb, and you very deftly captured the voices of the children. The best line to me in your story was also the simplest: when Billy responded to his brother with that forever classic "Whatever." As a mom and as a teacher, I can't tell you how that one word has become so ingrained in the vernacular of the young. It really is like their calling card, their war cry, and so to use it here was great, I thought.

The plot was well-defined, very tight and nicely controlled. It could have very easily meandered all over the place (I have a tendency to do that all the time) but you really kept under control. Your characterization of Danny was also very good. The reader can really relate to this young boy's plight and his fear and easily sympathize. Conversely, the characterization of Billy was also good. He was mostly the mean, annoying brother and although it was kind of tragic, it was also a little well-deserved.....as these things are in a work of fiction.

Anyway, I didn't see any errors in spelling, grammar or punctuation, and that's always a plus!

Thanks for sharing a great story! I'm sure this was a winner! (I like to read the entries and guess who won, and I'm sure it had to be yours!)

Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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Review of Faith is the Key  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello there--

You reviewed a piece of mine earlier today, and I wanted to return the favor!

I liked your poem very much. I think it speaks to why we should have faith, and how with faith, the possibilities are endless.

I did find a few typos that you may want to correct in order to better polish your piece.

You wrote:
If we look for thw light that shines from within
We can draw from its srength again and again

In each of these lines, you have some typos. In the first line, you wrote "thw" when I think you meant to say "the"
And in the second line, you wrote "srength" when I think you meant to write "strength".

Thank you for sharing your work. It was lovely and moving.

Respectfully,
Elizabeth John
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