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Rated: E | (4.5)
I told someone before you that beauty can come out of something so drastic and deadly. Your poem is a great example of beauty out of ugly.

I really liked the third line about her drinking the bay. After seeing those pictures of the water just gone, people walking where there used to be twenty feet of water...scared me. I thought the water might come crashing back and drown them. You inspired very vivid mental pictures.

I also loved the way you worked in and actually rhymed 'barge'. That was great!

I'm not sure what you meant by the weather folk stirring the pot. Would you be so kind and explain that to me?

While you're explaining, tell me what you mean by the 'gnomes' in the last verse? Even though there were a couple spots I didn't understand, I really liked this poem. Thanks for sharing.
Love, LinnAnn
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for entry "Haiku: "Hurricane"" Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Okay, now I know haiku follows a pattern and you did stick to it well. HOWEVER...the way you have this one made me laugh and I don't think that was the effect you were going for. lol

The first line is just fine. huge body of wind. I'm thinking hurricane or tornado, so that starts off really well.

I like the next line. The 'tummy' full of furry and rage. Cute using 'tummy' I have to give it to you I thought tummy was very cute. Stomach wouldn't have sounded good either but such a cute word as tummy for such a destructive force was just incongruent.

The 'lands without a thought' is what made me laugh. at first I thought the land had no thought. then realized it was the storm landing without a thought...and you're right. But the storm only had a tummy. Couldn't be too bad. I'm sorry but it's still making me chuckle.
Thanks for sharing. I've been pretty down, so I needed the laugh.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of It Is Finished  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Well, I'm not sure why the person only gave you a score of two. Maybe they aren't Christian and had no real clue what the poem was about. Or maybe they were anti Christian and that was how they showed it? Maybe they weren't familiar with poetry that doesn't rhyme? I really have no idea why they would give it such a low rating.

You stated what it was about right at the title so that should have given someone a clue, if they were Christian and had a clue. You never know, so many have no idea who Jesus Christ is anymore.

You use good descriptive words to draw the reader in and hold their attention. The ending fits the mood and pulls in the title. I think it was well done. Thanks for sharing it with us.

love LinnAnn
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This is a tired and weary traveler.
Your second verse switches rhyming patterns so it threw me off. It yanked me right out of the emotional setting you made, and made well.

This is just a suggestion, but if you took the last line 'sleeps on the ground' and slid it into the second lines place, the pattern would work, and the verse still make sense. It's just a thought.

I wondered about the food wrapped in foil. Was it fast food, food from a soup kitchen? You drew me in and made me want to know more about this traveler. Good for you.
Thanks so much for sharing this with us.
love LinnAnn

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Review of Once we were Gods  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Oh, that is just too, too sad. For you to fall from your throne when he was five? That is just dreadful. It must have been later? Who would disillusion a child at such a tender age? Who could be so cruel to take away a hero?

You started out well, you really put in the whole riding on a star persona. Then when you said five, I was brought up short, really abruptly. "Out of my way old man." That wasn't five, maybe thirteen? Usually they start to change around then. Between this and the other poem, it's so sad. Do you have grandkids yet? You can regain your crown and glory with grand kids...until their parents wreck it.

Well done. Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn

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for entry "Haiku: "Peach"" Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I used the fruit of my state of Washington, flavored with the fruit of your state of Georgia yesterday in my oatmeal. Fake Georgia peaches are better than none. I know not near enough to the real thing, but a hint at a memory. Your Haiku reminded me of when fruit was picked ripe, cushioned during transit.

I do love how you can pull up whole chunks of the past in such a very few words. What made you think of peaches today? Did you have a peach smoothy. I made a couple last week...or the week before. Even if I don't comment on them all or review them, I do read them.
thanks for sharing
love, LinnAnn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Aww Jay. This was very touching and heart warming. So many people do not have the wisdom you just displayed in your writing here. I would rather have you as you are, and here and alive, rather than be famous and us grieving over your demise. That would be tragic. So many 'greats' have left us in that manner and it's so sad that they could not overcome their demons.

You get your kudos in your life and from people that are important to you. That means so much more than polite clapping from a stranger, don't you think?

You mentioned your wife and daughter are getting famous locally, I expect to see some writing about that. Feel free to let me know when you do write about it. Thanks for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (4.5)
I love your title. It really set the tone for the rest of the poem.

Your second verse is really great to introduce the way people often think and the new idea of the happiness of the season.

'With reds and golds, and joyful sound'- because the other two words ended in 's' I at first thought 'sound' should too. Then I realized the rhyming word 'around' didn't...so I guess your way is fine. lol However, there are more than one sound in the trees, or forests. lol The 'singing in the trees' really appealed to me. I also hear the music nature makes.

The last verse is delightful. So fresh and full of new beginnings and hopeful.

Thanks so much for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of Neshaminy Creek  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Some of this made me go back and reread because the rhythm was off. The syllable count was off. If you count the syllables in each first line for example you will see what I mean.

Your first verse was engaging, and I loved the 'circus tent of trees'. Nicely said.

I wondered if the creepers and cobwebs were from you not going there in a long time. The 'like turnstiles to puberty' made me wonder that. Again, great ending line for the verse.

The 'braless blonde' threw me out of the poem. It just didn't fit with the rest of the atmosphere.

'A circle marks the limb' do you mean a sawed off branch? Total bummer someone took the swing. I felt it ended to abruptly. That just may be me, but it is an ending. Childhood does that. It ends.

Thank you so much for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn

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for entry "Amarillo Again!" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I always love reading your posts about your trips. I always learn something and I always find out about new foods. lol

*Music2* Amarillo by morning.*Music2*

I'm not sure, but maybe you should have started with the second paragraph. I have to admit I got a bit lost there.

Telling us about all the delays and then the lucky break was a good way to evoke empathy.

Classes the won't use? That sounds like a great waste of time and money not only on their part, but time on your part. I'm not sure you even got to see your brother. You left us hanging on that part.

What is a street taco? What were the other ingredients in the catfish and the crawdad tacos?

Thanks for the Billy the Kid info. I didn't know he had a different name other than the Bonney name. Thanks again for the history lesson.

Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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for entry "Mayday at Midway!" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I'd like to know what you mean by 'really old'. lol I'm sure it's not as old as I'm thinking, like in the sixties. lol

It was nice you reassured people that it wasn't as bad as many have been lead to believe. Nice touch on the government and the union issues. We get a little bit of everything. I like that.

Telling us about the food was also nice, and you even went the extra mile and included not only the address but the email of each place as well. You are so thoughtful and informative. I like how you even mention the food wasn't at fault, just not your cup of tea. Again, thoughtful. Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
You totally cracked me up. I have to ask, is the name real? Did you know the person? When you say young, how young did you mean? I know they let younger people than we do, in bars over there. However some mothers never let up on the mothering. lol

You hung a carrot in front of us and said, 'the gnome'. Was this a short person or a gnome the teen swiped off a lawn or what? It's so hard to give the big picture in so few words. However I got great mental picture when you told us the mother was there with her shillelagh. I could picture a little woman in a gingham dress, over weight, and shaking the shillelagh in the air over her head. Thanks for sharing, and the laugh.

Love, LinnAnn
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Review of Pants on Fire  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Its the weirdest thing that you wrote this poem. I know where you are coming from just because of my dream. I don't have cable so I didn't get to see the address you mention. However, your poem gave me a perfect view. It actually made me shudder. Did he actually say he wanted/demanded loyalty above oaths to country? Your poem drew me in and held me in rapt attention. I'm old enough to remember the movies and war clips even though the war was over before I came along.
Seig Trump in bold was a nice touch. Very good!
AND YOU GOT IT ALL TO RHYME. I'm impressed.
Love, LinnAnn

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Review of A Pastoral  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I think the first verse you might want to consider breaking the long lines into two lines, possible at the commas. Just a suggestion. It is your work.

Corn husks inanimate? lol no breeze. That is the 'normal' but you got my attention with their coarseness and no breeze. Then you get the breeze, and very nicely. Whispering wind goes well together.

That whole part --trees gently braid the hair of girls --I love it!

wispy tunes of leaves--I love that too

The second verse seems to not fit too well. The fence part threw me and then slipped into stars. I just didn't get it. Would a transition line help?

It seems like someone died, and that is sad. Reminds me of my dad. He taught me about the stars.

You did move me. Thanks so much for sharing wit us.

Love, LinnAnn
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for entry "Haiku: "Moon"" Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Maybe I'm tired, but I had to read it three times. Duh then I remembered your 'moonday'. Aha! lol

Your first line gave me a mixed mental picture. When you started out with 'mirror' I thought of a lake, calm and still, reflecting the moons bright light. I love those pictures. On Face Book is a group, 'You know you're from Anacortes when' and there are several photographers, you might like the pictures there.

Thanks for the reeducation. I'd forgotten the origin and the namesake. lol

Yes the moon is OFTEN white and bright each month. I remember once my daughter called all freaked out because it was 'blood red' helped get out the 'call to repentance'. lol

You did well with the imagery and getting me to thinking. Thanks.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Twister  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I saw nothing to correct, not a thing. Each sentence pulled me in further and further. Each sentence another image of grief and chaos.

You mention the fear...then I thought of the Storm Chasers. Do they think they are invincible?

Her hair twists into destructiveness--This is an outrageously cool imagery. I love it!

Her hands rip and tear into nothingness-This sounds like her hand rip and tear until they are nothingness. Would it be feasible to say a word that tells what she is ripping? It's just a thought.

Though many prepare, or try to, you are right. Sometimes it's not much good. I did see a lone house in Texas that survived Katrina. He'd spent a fortune to make sure it would. All around them was lumber from disintegrated homes.

This was great. Thanks for sharing.
Love, LinnAnn
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for entry "Haiku: "Fireflies"" Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I have to admit, I never thought of those little flashing lights as 'bursts'. Maybe It's from too many movies with explosions. lol I think more of them as twinkle lights, like at Christmas. You were unique in your description so that was good. You don't want to be like everyone else, do you? lol

Your 'show the way' reminds me of fantasy movies and books. You never know what is at the end of that path.

Whimsied came up with a red line under it...should it be whimsical? No red line came up under that word.

This was a cute little poem and brought back good memories. I haven't seen fireflies in years.

Thank you so much for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (4.5)
I had a great review and then my screen shot up and it disappeared.
You caught and held my attention with 'bacon'. I haven't had breakfast, so I departed long enough to chop corned beef and potatoes and get them frying. lol See how inspiring you are? The mark of a great writer.

'room with light that (is) not that much different'

'lives as the bottom'-did you mean lives 'at' the bottom?

I am a singer. I sang at Carnegie Hall. However I am not a piano player and didn't get all the references. I appreciate your putting so much thought into this short story. It made me think. I did enjoy the piece even in my ignorance.

Are you also a musician? Thank you so much for sharing this with us. Ruwth sent me a link to it. Keep writing.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of Pants on Fire  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
You cracked me up, you really did, then of course I added to that crack up. roflol

I must have a touch of OCD.

You did well, rhythm was fine and the rhyming was fine until the last line. You had the 'look' of rhyming with the iss ending, HOWEVER, giggle, my brain was not going to accept the iss look like it rhymes. My brain would not, absolutely would not say re miss. It kept saying -re -my -sis.

I know that is totally stupid, but my brain has a micro mini me in it. The mini me brain threw a conniption fit and kept saying remises.

I hope you get a laugh out of this. It cracked me up. *Rolling*

Thanks for sharing with us.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of Unexpected Grace  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was very moving and I can identify with it, and the emotions it tells about.

I have forgotten the smaller details of the poetry form. Yours is not consistent throughout.

I love the first verse by the way. The first three lines rhyme with the last not. I get it. Your second verse follows the form.

Then the third and fourth verses do not. The first two lines rhyme and the next two rhyme together.

I do not think that is the pattern I was taught here at writing.com or college. I can't even remember the name of the type of poetry.

I really do like this and am so glad you shared it.
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Review of LIFE AND DEATH  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I'm not sure I agree with yours opinion but it does seem to go by faster at times. lol Fifty or sixty years at a job is a long time; they can add up fast.

Death...well, it can be close but then it can be at a distance. When you're young it seems far off.

I understand the wanting to cut it short at times. Life can be very difficult and hard to bear. If you need to talk, I'm here.

I wasn't sure if your last line was referring to the writer or what. Is it hinting that the writer is suffering of drug overdose, or overdose of lifes' difficulties?

Thanks for sharing this.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of Magic Mirror  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I love the 'magic mirror' aspect. It's so cute and cool. It helped to draw me in and held my attention

You're first answer intrigued me. An angel ornament? A baby?

The answer about the various sounds she heard sort of threw me. I'm in the north, so hearing birds and bees out at Christmas isn't what I hear at that time of year. lol I've never heard singing flowers, not even the solar moving ones. lol

Then back to what type of Angel is under the tree? A real one, an ornament, a gift, a child? This was intriguing and thought provoking.
Thanks so much for sharing it with us.
Love, LinnAnn

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Review of Love You  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I really can empathize with your first two lines. It's so much nicer when you can get suggestions instead of criticism.

The next two lines of your poem definitely sounds like a woman who is insecure. It drew me in and made me feel. It also made me want to read more.

The next two lines gave a hint and the next to the last line makes the reader anxious for the writer and her needs.

Then the last line seems to have the happy ending we were all waiting for. I take it the writer was reassured of their love. Did I get it right?
Thanks so much for sharing this with us.

Love, LinnAnn
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Review of Cloaked Desires  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
If the passion is unbridled, then it's not concealed. Just thought I would mention that.
You smallest opening, then paired with 'burst through' was well done. To have the two opposites in the same line, sort of a yin yang (not sure if I said that right) kind of thing.

Flickering appears is a tantalizing line, short and powerful.

Then you break our hearts with the torn apart.

Mourning from the /a distance. There is a subtle difference and I wasn't sure if 'the' is what you wanted. Mourning the distance, or mourning the person at a distance.

Thank you so much for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Your first verse didn't rhyme but your second verse did, three in a row. Was that on purpose? You got me to thinking about the light v/s dark and not give you both. I wouldn't want only darkness. It would be so heartbreaking.

Poetry is known best to the writer, we the readers can only interpret through out own minds and hearts. Just in case this is a real feeling, I hope you only have light then.

This was a very thought provoking poem. You drew me in and made me pause to think and feel.

Thanks for sharing this with us.
Love, LinnAnn

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