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Review Style
I like to read novels and biographies, so if I can review them at the same time, why not. My ratings are usually at the high end because I think if someone has taken the time and effort to write a large piece, it is an achievement. The review will give the opportunity to flag up typographic errors. I do not mark down ratings for these errors because they are easily fixed.
Favorite Item Types
Rhyming Verse. Novels and short stories.
Least Favorite Item Types
Non-rhyming poetry.
I will not review...
Erotica, Vampire and Wolf stories. Their stories are all very samey to me.
Public Reviews
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Another good chapter with no errors or typo's noted. I particularly liked the part about the working sailors as they were setting sail which seemed very visual to me. What has happened to Pocahontas? I wonder if we will meet up with her again. A very good read and I look forward to more.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
You have made a good start to the story. It goes along nicely without any boring or repetitive bits. It comes to a satisfying end and I have no idea how it will continue; which is a good thing as it prompts me to find out. The writing is good and I noticed no mistakes or typo's. Presentation. You can ignore this if you wish as it is not a criticism, just a way I like to present my chapters on here. Firstly increase the font size. Top right you will see a cog-wheel. Select it to edit text. Highlight all the chapter then on the display panel select size 5. Next scroll to the bottom and select advance and then click on double space paragraphs. Finally continue to the bottom and select Save and View. I use the indent to begin all paragraphs but it is a bit laborious and not really necessary. Finally, well done with this and welcome to WDC.
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for entry "Chapter One: Goodbye" Open in new Window.
Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Having read some of your other chapters, I thought I would take a peek at your other "crossover" item. I was pleased to find the same high-quality of writing and noticed no errors. However, I am a bit puzzled by Nakoma's planned journey. The scene is set in London, England, and it says that the journey to France would take a little under a month. Perhaps it needs explaining why a crossing which would take a day takes a month. Other than that the story was an entertaining read and the characters were well-drawn.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
We have an adventure within an adventure as Alice sets off for the treasure. This is a good thread that ensures that the story does not mimic the original too much. Well-written again and I could find no errors. A longer chapter than the others with plenty of action and preparation. A very enjoyable read.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
A bit of well-drawn action comes into this chapter. The hook at the end is good and it makes the reader wonder what will happen to the ship as well as thoughts about what is the importance of the map. I am left with questions in my head, which is a good thing as I need to continue to perhaps, find the answers.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Another good chapter. The writing being to such a high standard makes the journey through the chapter really enjoyable with no distractions. The characters are well drawn and you have captured Alice's mannerisms very well. I look forward to the next chapter.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Having read the intro I thought I would go on to read chapter one. I was hoping it would be just as interesting and I was not disappointed. I found no faults or errors as the writing seemed to me to be of a very high standard. Although: "As she made to get up," I am not sure if that is correct or not. Having read the book on what I think this continuing story is based on, makes the read more enjoyable. Of course, it can also stand alone and be enjoyed by anyone who does not know of Alice. Will I read the next chapter? You bet.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
As an intro this is really good. Most of us know about Alice and it is a novel idea (excuse the pun) to explore her adventures later in her life. The writing in the intro is well done and shows a talent which will surely follow in the chapters. Will this be a good story? I endeavour to find out.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
A very well-written short with an interesting theme. I spotted no errors or typos, allowing me to continue through the story uninterrupted. The main character gets the sympathy, I believe, of the reader. The last line would be a good hook if the story were to continue. However, to me it has an Alfred Hitchcock feel about it where the reader has to imagine what happens after the end of the text.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I am impressed by this one. It is my type of poem. It has reasonable rhymes, and they don't seem forced or out of place. The similarity between a caged bird and a trapped lover comes across well, to me anyway. I look forward to reading more from you.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
A cracking little poem with a feel-good thread throughout. It is easy to read and understand. I would say "fills me with delight" instead of "fills me with might." But of course, it is your choice. I enjoyed the read and noticed no errors or typo's.
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Review of The Magical Charm  Open in new Window.
Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
You have the potential to create a good story. I enjoyed the read and it kept my attention. However, it needs some work. A space after every line seems a bit strange. There are places where a comma is used in the wrong place. Example:"got the formula right, she looked at the purple potion". Might be better to start a new sentence: "formula right. She looked at".Introduction in dialogue needs a comma as in "Oh, hi, Cher! Also "showed of (off) her hair." "I tried to (two) of the droplets". "they both walked out the door" I would delete the second both and the extra speech mark at the start of the sentence. It seems a lot but if you go through it you should try to spot where two separate sentences are separated by a comm. This may seem a lot but don't be downhearted because it is all fixable and you will find your work improves the more you write and get reviews. I rate this item on the story which is quite a good start. Hope you do get to continue.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a charming piece of writing. This short-short has a feel-good theme and is quite funny. I do like the way he met his mate and they feasted on the corn. We tend to forget that animals have a life, especially when we are tucking into our own dinners.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I like a poem that entertains and this certainly fits the bill. I feel as if I am the person at the bus stop and that is a good plus point. I could not see any typo's or errors but would not wish to as this piece stands on its own quite well. Well done with this interesting and enjoyable piece.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
The group return to the tree and I expected them to be caught. They didn't and it is always good when I am proved wrong. This is the last chapter displayed so far. Will it be continued? I don't know, but if it is I will be pleased to see what happens. It has been an enjoyable read and something different in the thread. Well done with this. In the last sentence should suck read as such?
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
The new wizard people have mixed ideas which makes for a good thread. Also Sora seems uninterested in taking the throne which comes as a surprise but also gets my interest as I feel he will change his mind at some time. What is for sure is that there is possibly some danger ahead in the next chapter. Must read on. No errors or typo were spotted.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
The journey continues and new characters come along at about the right time. The reader will be left wondering if these new people will be for the good or for the bad as hints are given for both options. I can't comment on spelling due to country differences but I think "Her's was an oak color" doesn't need an apostrophe. "Arwin moved his to move his staff" seems an error. A good hook at the end prompts me to read the next chapter to find out if the new people are friendly or not.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Lots going on in this chapter and we get a small reference to the side characters. I admit that I have a slight difficulty merging the two parts of the tale together as it seems all about the fairies and not so much about the plot that Yasmin is there to follow as a side character. Nevertheless, it is a good enjoyable read. I noticed: "Grass growing and leave near the window." Should this be leaves? "Angel(s) were the perfect rulers." "Slowly and quietly they surrounded the buzzwasp." Perhaps remove "slowly" as it seems unlikely that the buzzwasp would be caught if they moved slowly. I like the bit where Yasmin wakes and thinks for a moment she is in her room. Still enjoying the read as it seems like something different from the norm.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This chapter fleshes out the surroundings and gives us an insight into the lives of the characters. Although this was an interesting and well-written chapter, I can not see how it equates to the original idea of "A side character". Perhaps more will be revealed in the next chapter. Towards the end, there seemed to be a lot of fairy names and I was a bit confused at times. That said, it was an enjoyable read.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This seems more complex and different from the previous non-chapter item. The story comes over well and can be followed enough to make it an entertaining read. The storyline itself seems refreshingly original for a fantasy. The next stage of the story is about to begin and that is a good hook for the reader to consider continuing. A couple of typo's, perhaps: "get this boy to me my family." and "a week nod" weak.
Just a preference in my work is to put a bitem at the end so the reader can go straight to the next chapter.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I am always looking for something different, some new angle. I have found that in this piece. This prompts me to take a look at my own side characters and their existence. The fantasy is interesting and well-written. Would the story so far cause me to read more. I believe it does.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
A good and entertaining first piece on here. Who doesn't like and have fond memories of their grandparents, hopefully? If you go onto the edit wheel, top right on your item's heading. Go down to Advanced and select double spacing and the item will look more presentable and be easier to read. Welcome to WDC.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
What an interesting piece of writing. Centering on a cemetery with the deceased all about the place. Death is, of course, sad but this tale seems to see through the sadness with a message of care and understanding of those who went before. I spotted no typo's and enjoyed the read.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
It seems a bit disjointed at places where it jumps forward without explanation, but due to the high quality of the writing, I assume that it is intended that way. The outlaws arrive but we don't hear from them until four of them are locked up in jail. There is a typo at: "We (With)all the supplies". It seems more like an outline for a longer story than a completed short story. Nevertheless, it is well written and an interesting read. The ending is a nice surprise.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
An interesting factual read about Anne Boleyn. It reminded me of my box-set "The Tudors" where Anne Boleyn is played by the talented Natalie Dormer (Game of Thrones and Mockingjay plus other parts). Also stars British singer/actress Joss Stone as Anne of Cleaves. Time I got the box-set out again.
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