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I like to read novels and biographies, so if I can review them at the same time, why not. My ratings are usually at the high end because I think if someone has taken the time and effort to write a large piece, it is an achievement. The review will give the opportunity to flag up typographic errors. I do not mark down ratings for these errors because they are easily fixed.
Favorite Item Types
Rhyming Verse. Novels and short stories.
Least Favorite Item Types
Non-rhyming poetry.
I will not review...
Erotica, Vampire and Wolf stories. Their stories are all very samey to me.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
So we have an antelope hunting a lion situation. Her friends have abandoned her, it seems. Like before is this a test or some training? Risky, but she must have something neither she nor I have not realised. Likewise, neither her nor the female demon can be killed or the story would probably end. I can't imagine what happens next, but I will sure read on to find out.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Well. she certainly seems to be in trouble now. I can't see why Moon Wolf stopped the other from helping her, but maybe that is how he sees part of her training. Pity the GeeBee looks like surviving the demon's attack, but I am sure he will get his comeuppance later on. The hook at the end, this time is massive and I am sure something substantial is about to happen. Or maybe not but she will of course survive. Excellent story telling.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another good chapter. I expected the teacher, Moon Wolf, to be a bit more fierce but he seems laid back. I wonder why Charmian was warned against Justin as he seems all right. There again nothing remains normal in this strange land so anything can turn. It all makes for a good deal of suspense and there is certainly a lot in this story. Very well thought out with no noticeable errors or typo's. A good end hook, as I have come to expect.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Brilliant. I can't wait to see where this is leading.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A surprise for the reader. But this is a story full of them which shows your talent at keeping the reader, me, interested.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I am enjoying your story immensely. Every part though fitting together also can stand alone. Your end hooks are brilliant and prompt me to carry on every time.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another entertaining chapter that moves forward and gives a well-written account of the discussion to send Charmian off to see Moon Wolf.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The story continues at a nice pace with more from the unborn dream creatures. I miss the friendly GeeBee in this chapter, my favorite at the moment. I like that Charmian sneaks into the meeting only to be instantly discovered. How will they react, or more so, how will she react because they banned females from the meeting?
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A good chapter that gives the reader a well-timed break from the action. A pleasant read with Charmian giving X a new name. Looking back I think the girl looking over the wounded Manitou earlier could be the one mistaken for the mother Demon. It's a thought, although I could be wrong. No errors or typo's noticed.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A well-written and interesting chapter which answers the questions posed in the last chapter. The way that the parts of this story fits together and flows is skillfully done. The last sentence is a surprise twist and ensures I will read on. No errors noted, as usual.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another action-packed chapter with plenty of suspense. The female demon shows up in this chapter and seems quite formidable. I can't understand how Charmian was not killed when the demon attacked. Hopefully, it will be explained in the next chapter. I will also need to read on to see if Drake survived the fall off of the cliff.
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Review of Part 30: Merger  Open in new Window.
Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Quite a lot in this part with the, as yet, not materialised demons requesting help from Charmian. Charmian's character is getting stronger as we progress through the story and not just the young schoolgirl we were introduced to at the start. One thing I have noticed so far is that the author is a master at giving a good hook at the end of each part.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
As I see it, a good caricature of a creature who appears to be wicked but is not all bad. He comes to the rescue although fears for his own well being as well as others. As with a lot of the previous parts, this can be a story within a story. And as usual it has a good hook ending.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Charmian sets off to meet the demon father. This turns out to be an adventure within an adventure. Saved from drowning by a creature that doesn't like her. But he has no choice, I think. Servant of the demon he has to present her to him. The father curses when they meet and I wonder what lies ahead for her in a position where there is no escape. She will be safe, of course, but I need to find out how.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
It is good to temporarily return to where the story began to find the means to perhaps solve the problem. Another well-written and interesting chapter. It is obvious that a lot of thought has gone into developing this story. I look forward to reading on.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
In some fantasy type stories, I have difficulty in the suspension of disbelief. This is not the case here. Could I believe that someone can enter into someone else's dreams and seek advice from them? No usually but in this case, I am there with the character and can almost feel and see what they feel and see. This is yet another entertaining part with a good hook at the end.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Just when I thought a great story could not get any better, along comes Part 25. This is a skillful construction of a new thread to the tale. This story seems to have many threads but they are all skillfully written and all have a place in the story without any confusion. As usual, I didn't spot any errors, but really who cares? This is story telling at its very best.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Don't you like the bad guys getting a good beating? Especially from a young girl who becomes a formidable creature. But then the story slows down to a rescue attempt, but the suspense is still high. Two more characters join us in this fascinating tale. The writing remains to a high standard and the desire to read on is equally high following another good end hook.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Blimey, what an exciting chapter. I was not expecting anything like this. This kept me on edge all through and gave the feeling of being there amongst the action. A brilliant piece of fictional writing suspence. I can't wait to find out what happens next. In fact, I won't, I'm off to the next part.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another good part, although there is a bit I don't understand. "To which the voice replied," No indication to who this refers to or who's voice it is. There is an indication that Red Bird might visit the human's land, although I could be getting that wrong. I will have to wait and see.
It looks as if the action is about to get intense as the bad female demom's servant brings a serious threat to the group.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This continues to be an entertaining and well-written read. The author shows talent by showing suspense in almost every part; this one included. Also we nearly always are left with a question to be answered in a later part. This one, as well as a good hook at the end, asks; what is the friction between Tal and Justin? A great addition to the story. A story of many threads, but I am able to follow them all without confusion.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
So, I was expecting trouble, but the creature was friendly. A good bit of plotting to give the reader a pleasant surprise. A new human character is also introduced but the reader would be aware of his presence on the island. Although the danger was short-lived the suspense remained throughout making this another enjoyable and interesting part.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A likable chapter and a good read as we follow Charmian as she goes to find her friends. Good descriptive text and we fear that trouble lays ahead for her in the woods especially when she loses her way. The hook at the end is brilliant and ensures most readers would at least take a peek at the next chapter to see what is about to happen. Good writing and storyline, as usual, with no errors noticed.
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Review of Part 18: Fallout  Open in new Window.
Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Another good read. The bad demon seems to be moving forward and others are getting jittery.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The writing continues in a standard that is good for me. Obviously, it has been well proofed by the writer as I have found no typo's throughout. In this part, we are introduced to more characters/creatures. This could become a bit confusing if more are added at this rate, but for now, I am managing to follow it okay. A lot of the parts have very good hooks at the end and this one is another of them. I look forward to finding out the implications of that hook.
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