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I like to read novels and biographies, so if I can review them at the same time, why not. My ratings are usually at the high end because I think if someone has taken the time and effort to write a large piece, it is an achievement. The review will give the opportunity to flag up typographic errors. I do not mark down ratings for these errors because they are easily fixed.
Favorite Item Types
Rhyming Verse. Novels and short stories.
Least Favorite Item Types
Non-rhyming poetry.
I will not review...
Erotica, Vampire and Wolf stories. Their stories are all very samey to me.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The mystery and intrigue continues in this chapter. Hints and revelations are sort of drip fed to the reader giving enough to keep the reader interested but leaving plenty for speculation. I noticed no errors or typo's in this well-written chapter and look forward to finding out more.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
The last chapter so far. Maybe there will be more. The high drama and suspense continues. Who knows, other than the author, what lies ahead for Larcia? I can't even have a guess. It has been an entertaining journey so far and has potential for more. I noticed a few typo's: (What's the point of walkbng ahead?) , (Princes Evelyn?) , ( he took in my arms in his. ).
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
She fell down a pit, of course, how did I forget that? So we have good characterisation and a well penned chapter. The story gets a bit sinister and is quite dramatic. I noticed no errors or typo's although I was so engrossed with the story that I would not notice unless they were blatantly obvious.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Well what can I say? This is like a story within a story. I must admit I was a little confused at first. Was this another dream? I don't recall any kidnap or fall from a horse so have no idea how she got into this situation. It was good to have a reference to Rose being worried as if we were reminded of the real world. A lot of suspense and drama in this chapter making it an enjoyable read.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The story takes a very good new direction with the introduction of the horses and stables. The snakes also appear again later making this an interesting as well as a well written chapter. I did notice a couple of typo's near the end though. (they did an year ago.) and ( a lot longer to exit tge forest tgan it did to enter. ). I look forward to the next chapter.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A change in the time. Not a problem at all as it is often done in fiction. In fact it enhances the story. Larcia is a successful woman and has done well in her life but is haunted by bad dreams. She still has a friendship with the snakes which adds to the suspense of the story. I look forward to the next chapter as I don't know where it will lead.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A strange but enjoyable tale in this chapter. It is well written and held my interest throughout. The hook at the end suggests that it may be a dream, which would explain why the snakes didn't see the boys off without her help, as something that I thought about when I read it. I noticed: (but bever attacking) Not sure if this is a typo or a word I am unfamiliar with.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is good. We meet a new character, the boy. The dialogue and interaction between them is interesting. Suspense rises as Reddog appears hostile to Sam's questions. The interaction again is very good. This chapter moves along nicely and I noticed no errors or typo's.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
The worst British Prime Minister ever, and an embarrassment to us all. But look who we have now.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A good chapter heavy on description which will please a lot of readers, I found it lacked going forward as not much action was happening and it has started to read like a monologue. This is only my opinion though and may not be shared by other readers. I noticed: (You are nutsSam) & (I loosened my grip snd (and) two almost perfectly round smooth stones)
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Mary turns up and I would be pleased to see her again if it were not for her pot smoking. She is a good character though and the interaction with Sam is good and believable. She mentions going to see her cousin and then set's off to her brothers. I don't know if this is an error or intentional. The crows are still playing their part which is a good thread to the story. I thought I noticed a typo but can't seem to find it again. A good interesting chapter.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Things are moving on slowly and Sam is getting more puzzled. A good and interesting read again.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A good chapter and some good banter and atmosphere in the bar, even if some was not so welcoming as others. We meet Reddog who has a thing about him which we are just beginning to comprehend and no doubt he plays a big part in the story. I relate to the sound of the crows as there are some roosting in the trees near me. An enjoyable read.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
The story continues and starts with what I believe to be the main theme. Well written again and I only noted one typo a missing t at (as if hearing my though(t) ). I like the introduction of the crows which makes me think of Hitchcock's, The Birds. I feel we need some interaction with someone, other than the spirit, even if it is just a brief exchange with passing neighbour. The story certainly keeps my interest.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Well written and well presented again. I noticed no errors or typo's. A good description of the state of the house and the work in hand. A bit of backstory added and a good diversion to the nearby store with an unhelpful owner. I was a little disappointed that we didn't see any visit from Mary, but no doubt that will come.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I only noticed one typo and no other errors: 5th paragraph (you wantef to find out). The chapter is well-presented again with spaced paragraphs which makes it easier for the reader. The dialogue between the two characters is believable and business like as would be expected at this stage. I wonder if they become more close as time moves on and I look forward to finding out.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A well-written and interesting fictional tale from long ago. The characters are well drawn and there is enough description for me. A typo noted at: ( she would not marry him if the (he) dragged her to the altar ). A couple of small bits I felt were missing. The sound of horse's hooves and then the punch from Lord Nash with no indication that he had dismounted. A few sentences later he helped her to her feet but there was no indication that she had fallen. A great start to the novel but a pity the author has not visited for a long time. Hope she is okay.
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Review by Bruce. Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
A good and interesting start to the story. It is well-written and I noticed no grammar or typographic errors. The characters are well-drawn and their names are easily pronounceable. The hook at the end is good and will prompt the reader to continue when the next chapter is presented. The visual presentation can be improved if you have a mind to do so. At the top of your work the gear wheel takes you to the edit tab which will display the edit line. If you select your work and select the 5 option it will increase the font size. At the bottom select advanced and then on paragraphs select double. If you try it I am sure you will be pleased with the effect.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I am wondering if I have missed something because I don't know who or what Doofus is. This is good, the science which is obviously fiction comes across as real which is a credit to you. Lacy's revelation at the end adds to the drama and prompts the reader to wonder how much significance, if any, it is to have on the story. I noticed no errors although I was a bit puzzled by the opening sentences.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The story moves on at the same high standard with good well drawn characters including a new one who may or may not have a bigger part to play. There is a good focus on the domestic side of things in this chapter which blends in well with the magic element. I noticed no errors and look forward to the next chapter.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The story continues to hold my interest and gives a great insight into the entertaining world whether factual or fictional. The characterisation remains good and the visual images in my mind are well presented. I have a couple of thoughts in this chapter. "Exhausted, Cherie she sat far audience right of the theater." This may be correct but I found it confusing and might need clarification. Also, the card trick. The pieces are laid like a puzzle with one extra but then the pieces are handed over as only two pieces with no notice of how this happened magic or otherwise. There is a typing error at: one hell of a resum/FONT> builder for you." This really is a brilliant story and I look forward to continuing.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Again another well-written chapter with no errors or typo's noticed. This is a clever story and once I started to read the chapter I had to carry on to the end. The main character, Gary, continues to show concern. The end to the chapter is cleverly done and leaves the reader (me) with thoughts that Gary might have a rival for the place on the show.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
What a delight to come across a chapter written to such a high standard and capable of holding the interest of the reader (me) throughout. The narrative and dialogue are spot on. I found it an extremely interesting read. My only grumble "non-seguitur". I am not keen on Latin phrases especially if I have to leave the story to look them up. This is as I said a grumble and not a fault as you are, of course, entitled to use whatever words you wish. There is a typo just before the first section break: "Lacv left and Cherie". A brilliant chapter and I look forward to more.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A good sized font and spaced paragraphs is always a good start. The characters are well-drawn and believable. The storyline kept my interest throughout and I noticed no errors or typo's. A faultless prologue and a good ending which shows the mental state of the mother. Very well done.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I must repeat that a huge block of text may be off-putting for some people who may not continue to read it; especially if they read on the screen. If the text is copied temporarily to word, or similar, the reader can break it into paragraphs which makes it a better experience giving the chapter a more enjoyable feel. Moving on, as a chapter the story continues to be of interest and as I said before has good potential. The characters are well drawn. I would certainly read on if the text block was not so off-putting. In the last sentence, should line be lion?
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