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I like reviewing poetry and short stories.
Favorite Item Types
I really love structured poems with good rhythm and rhyme.
Least Favorite Item Types
I don't enjoy reading long stories riddled with grammar or spelling mistakes because these distract me.
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If I don't enjoy reading it on some level, then I won't review it. So if you got a review from me, even one with a low rating, I enjoyed the read.
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Review of SCARS OF THE SOUL  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
You wrote a touching free form poem.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen. The genre Drama could work, too.

I found your heavy emphasis on scares moving, especially when I reread the description.

Well done writing a thoughtful poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
You wrote a poem about the living, and the sun and the moon.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I liked how you included all the creatures. However, you don't connect the sun, the moon and the living with the idea that the world is getting smaller.

The world is smaller in the sense of transportation time, connectivity, ability to communicate, and the world is bigger in terms of the economy. Also, the world is smaller in terms of renewable resources. You could include some of these or related ideas in your poem.

Well done writing a poem about how we all see the sun and the moon.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a good essay on a topic I care about. The font is too small to read comfortably.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found opinions and debates are best when solutions are presented. We can use paper instead of plastic grocery bags, but demand has to be within renewable supply capacity limits. Some jobs are dependent on plastic so maybe compostable plastic would work for those messy tasks. Although plastic is a major problem, deforestation is a bigger problem combined with global warming, and we need reforestation. By presenting solutions and priorities, your opinion piece sounds better.

Well done writing a great opinion piece.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Fools  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)

You wrote a free form poem about lost love, and the reactions.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I don't know why Flower is capitalized. "Was so lighten up for me" has a grammar error so it's hard to parse. starring has one r.

Well done writing a poem about lost love.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.0)

You wrote what could be a great diary entry on your personal reaction to the pandemic.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres could be better chosen. This is more your personal reaction to the news than news itself.

I found the piece didn't build. There isn't a story. Again, this is fine if it is a diary entry. Also "how often i should" should be capital I.

Well done writing your personal reflections so clearly.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Darkling  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (2.5)

General Comments
You wrote an encouraging poem meant to lift someone out of dark feelings.

Grammar and spelling are mostly good and seldom distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found a few spelling and grammar errors distracted me while I was reading,
- "times a healer" - apostrophe s,
- "that it always has" that or it,
- "Easy said when you're heart whole" - easily, and heart's,

Story Comments
Are the characters engaging?

Yes. It's a story about a caregiver encouraging a depressed person.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

No.

Well done writing about the light and the dark.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of A Hopeful Longing  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)

You wrote a free form poem about a craving for something.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I wanted to know more about what the craving was for. Also, this line is awkward:
- An ecstasy of somewhat kind,
And it's not clear why there is a twister.

Well done writing about the routine of work and life, and in our mind is a craving.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Writer's Block  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

General Comments
You wrote a double acrostic with your name.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

Story Comments
Are the characters engaging?
Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?
Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?
Yes.

Well done writing a double acrostic that tells a story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.0)
You wrote encouragement to parents to raise their daughters well.

Grammar and spelling are mostly good and seldom distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found a few mistakes that would be easy to correct,
- Punctuation is missing from the first few points.
- You shift from 3rd to 2nd person. It's awkward.
- "but it is proved by what. that we do" - no that.
- "Babies should set goals in life..." - babies in diapers have the goal of walking after crawling, so they may be too underdeveloped for this. Children, instead of babies.
- "school clubs, gifted classes" - and gifted classes,
- In the same sentence, end it with a period instead of ellipses.
- "Parents don't frame them" - needs a comma after Parents.
- The next sentence says he, but this is about daughters, so she is appropriate.

Well done writing some heartening advice.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of AUDREY  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

General Comments

You wrote a song that tells a story about growing up.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
You could add a cover image that is great and really suits your writing.

I found one typo distracting:
- Now that sweet baby girls (no -s),
is in the 2nd chorus.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes, growing up is one of the great mysteries that is always engaging.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

No, in the versus she could grow up all the way into adulthood.

Well done writing a song/poem that tells an important story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
You wrote a poem that starts with a rhyme scheme but that ends as a freeform poem. I would like your poem more if you stuck to the rhyme scheme and syllable count.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

Only the title says this is about a foreign boyfriend.

Well done writing a poem that communicates love.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Oh Canada  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
You wrote a nice poem about Canada.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
You could choose a cover image that is great and really suits your writing, like a maple leaf.

I found it a little strange that fireworks are taboo and that seaplane is the only access.

Well done writing a good poem!

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Broken Pieces  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
You wrote prose that are strongly poetic in quality.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genre is well-chosen, although why Other is chosen first is not clear.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found the lack of white space made the text hard to read. Centering also made the text hard to read.

Well done writing a touching piece.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Childhood  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)

General Comments

You wrote a poem with good feelings about childhood.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

You could add a cover image that is great and really suits your writing.

I found I was distracted by "wen"... I think you meant went.

Freeform poetry is fine but you start with two lines of 5 syllables each, setting a pattern, and when the pattern is broken it is noticeable.

Your description shows the poem is written because you care for people.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Seven Years Later  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (2.0)

General Comments

You wrote a story about growing up and coming full circle.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me. Speech is in a separate line, and can be in the he said, she said format.

Genres are well-chosen.

I found the story moved too fast and wasn't developed enough.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

No, take the time to develop the characters.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

There is no conflict apart from the brief struggle with disbelief.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Because the story isn't developed, the ending feels unbelievably convenient.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

It's okay but needs to be formatted as dialogue.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

No, this could be developed, too.

Well done writing a story. You have a good idea worth developing.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
You wrote a compelling poem.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I would have liked the poem more if it had a rhyme scheme to go with the interesting format you chose.

Well done writing a good poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.5)
You wrote an essay or a great diary entry.

Spelling is good and doesn't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found your writing hard to read because of capitalization and run on sentences. Consider your opening sentence for example,
- "As I talk to my Mom these days as She is lives in Assisted Living Nursing Home over in Indiana where My sister Cindy Lives also who helps takes care of My Mother needs."

I also found your piece touching.

Well done writing about cares and hope so poignantly.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a story outline without a link to the story.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.

Genres are for the story but this is only an outline.

I found I wanted to read the story, so a link would be helpful.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Requiem  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

General Comments

You wrote a poem about an unwed woman gone to her grave.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is good and the colours suit your writing. A tombstone would be perfect.

I found myself distracted by a comma:
- No one to redeem,
The thought continues in the next line.

Well done writing a high quality poem!

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of The Chatroom  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)

General Comments

You wrote a contrast of prose and poetry.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found the extent to which one character demands missing the point really tiresome.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Initially, yes, and the opening dialogue is great, too. "Poetry is condensed spirit" grabbed me, and after that the skeptic lost me.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

No, it's boring in the middle. The character missing the point seems too obtuse to believe.

Does the action rise to a climax?

No, it's too artificial to have a character leave for time with hubby, which is unrelated to the previous conversation.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes, in the beginning. I think the piece could be shortened in the middle and given a sign off without reference to the husband.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing an interesting exercise, a comparison/contrast between two written forms.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.0)

General Comments

You wrote a beautiful poem.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found myself perplexed by the ending. Icons make Earth tremble? It doesn't make sense to me, but until that point, your poem is beautiful.

Well done writing good imagery in an interesting form.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of The Semicolon  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


You wrote an interesting and entertaining essay on the semicolon.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found nothing to distract me in your writing.

You could have expanded on Grammarly and the other tools and products you use.

Well done writing a great essay with a great quote.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of The Apology  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)

General Comments

You wrote an interesting story that engaged me.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I was confused by
- "Haddock house"... I guess it should be Haddock House if it's the name of the building.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes. Two things struck me as odd. One was the threat to slap the young one. The other was that dragon saliva is hard to clean.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes, it's cute.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a captivating story!

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of In Concert  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

General Comments
You wrote a good story in poetic form.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found myself enjoying the approach of the predictable ending.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes, Itchy's name and internal conflict are enough.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes, at the very end.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a poem-story. I wish it rhymed.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a self-help piece with a compelling tone. Many authors have tried to imagine utopia but the governance question hasn't been answered yet.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found a couple of distracting mistakes,
- "At time it consciously becomes difficult " - at times,
- "put a little effort to become" - into becoming

Well done writing a strong, moving piece of prose.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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