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I try to give comprehensive reviews.
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I like reviewing poetry and short stories.
Favorite Item Types
I really love structured poems with good rhythm and rhyme.
Least Favorite Item Types
I don't enjoy reading long stories riddled with grammar or spelling mistakes because these distract me.
I will not review...
If I don't enjoy reading it on some level, then I won't review it. So if you got a review from me, even one with a low rating, I enjoyed the read.
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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a fun story about an inheritance.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a story in a poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.0)

You wrote a short, inspirational piece on how wonderful exercise can be if a person finds a sport they like.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me. The yellow/gold color text is hard to read.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found myself thinking but what about people who find exercise boring, or really difficult? Not everyone can relate to your ideal of how exercise should be.


Well done writing something inspirational!

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Nancy Grace  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
General Comments

You wrote a story about an alcoholic. You chose interesting names for your characters.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found a couple of details distracted me.
- + is at the end of paragraph 4.
- The smiley face at the end could be an Author's Note.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

No, it doesn't flow naturally in some places.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a good story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Revenge  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
General Comments

You wrote a story filled with idoms, per the prompt.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found A bird in the hand is worth two in the bush, isn't quite what the police would say. It doesn't sound natural.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

No, because of the heavy use of idioms as the prompt required.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a good story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.5)
General Comments

You wrote a story about a dying robot in a futuristic society.

Spelling is good and doesn't distract me.
Genres experience doesn't make sense because you aren't the robot and you haven't lived in this futuristic society. Also, the robot probably doesn't need to eat food.

I found many grammar mistakes and some of your sentences aren't really sentences.
- The colour now stained yellow from the prolonged exposure the solar radiation.
- the words then replaced by report to incinerator 451. - put the report in quotes.
- Then a sudden blow to the back of his head.

You type as though you are talking. Written English is very different from verbal English.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

It's okay.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

N/A

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a scene from a futuristic society.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a great short story with a surprising ending.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

N/A

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a great story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of American Ply  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a fun poem celebrating Americana.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found you made good use of the prompt and I like the way you included the prompt in small font at the bottom.

Well done writing a nice poem. I liked it.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of I Miss...  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
General Comments

You wrote a poem with rhyme scheme abcb.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen, but I'm not sure where the philosophy is in the poem.

Story Comments
It sounds like the writer misses someone who's never been met. That's a little confusing but may be the intended story. If so, it's a neat idea.

Well done writing a good poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Anatomy; a family  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)

You wrote about family connections. It wasn't clear whether your poem has a religious meaning.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found the subject of the poem isn't clear because of the heavy use of pronouns. Only the title gives a suggestion.

Well done writing a good poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Número Seis  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.0)

You wrote a concise thought and an important insight.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen. The genres give important context so we know what you're talking about.
The image is great and really suits your writing.

I found the word count is more visible than the words, which I didn't see until the word count told me to go looking for words. You could develop your insight.

Well done writing!

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Tangled Web  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a captivating story.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I hope you publish your story because it is better than some published short stories I've read.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes. A little more background would be interesting. What did they do before they were chosen? How were they chosen?

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes, well done.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)

You wrote a free form poem about achieving the goal of being alone in nature. You've captured the mood of being alone with trees in the night.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found the last line needs a comma after nothing.

Well done writing a poem that captures the mood you wanted.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Forest Sunset  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)

You wrote a poem about an amazing photograph.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found the 2nd line about trees confusing:
- thus to the sheet of fiery waters,

Well done writing a free verse poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Comments

You wrote a fun poem inspiring writers to have hope. I like that you made the poem easy to read - thank you.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

Your poem sort of tells a story, so...
Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

The writing is engaging.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

The tempo and unfolding images are compelling.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a great poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)

You wrote a beautiful poem about a dangerous sea path.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image would be great and would really suit your writing - for example, the photo that inspired it.

I found your link to religion interesting.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a nice poem about being inspired by nature.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found your idea of learning from the stars really interesting.


Well done writing a moving poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (1.0)
General Comments

You wrote what seems to be Harry Potter fan fiction.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The description is a run on sentence.

I found your opening sentences are a run on sentence.
- an hard is incorrect, it's a hard.
- at least is two words,
- fighted is fought.
- standed is stood.
- Dialogue should be punctuated properly. See how in any fiction book.
- enterance is entrance.
- The author's note can be a dropnote.
- an chapter is a chapter.


Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

No.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

No.

Does the action rise to a climax?

No.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

No.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

No.

In your story, you need to show, don't tell.


Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.0)

You wrote a nice poem about the later years in life.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.
The description is about you, but not about the piece.

I found you give a nice feeling to the final years and a nice interpretation of burial.

Well done writing a great poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Good Mourning  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a great story about the crowded subways. I've lived in Taipei and Beijing and your story made me feel I was in Tokyo.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found myself absorbed in your tale.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes. The description of the subway crowd is especially good.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a really good story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.5)

You wrote a few paragraphs about faith.

Grammar and spelling are okay and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found a few typos,
- save you?Suppose - needs a space,
- "od bless you! - God,
- life> So it is - question mark,
- that god would save him. - God,
- some body - somebody is alive and some body is dead,

Well done writing your brief sermon,

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (1.0)

You wrote your encouragement for yourself while you are going through a hard time.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
You meant patience, not patients, in your title.

I found some punctuation errors - the period goes at the end of a sentence with a space after, not before. I is capitalized, but you have a couple of i.

Dealing with the loss of a loved one (it sounds like a death) and the loss of a boyfriend, is worthy of two separate paragraphs. Or, rephrase it so it doesn't sound like someone died if they didn't.

Well done writing through the difficulties of healing.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Icy Hand  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
General Comments

You wrote a poem about surviving winter well.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I wish it rhymed.

Story Comments

Your poem tells a story about home life.

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a good free form poem. A cover image of snow would suit your writing well.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Civil Warriors  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Comments

You wrote a touching poem about war.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are chosen... it's not really inspirational though, is it?

I found I like how you ended it, with the change from the future to my future.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes, although you could develop the setting more if you feel like editing.

Well done writing a good poem about a hard battle.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Ennui  Open in new Window.
Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Comments

You wrote a good poem about giving up on love.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found I could relate to the experience. But the last line? "why the beat poets" doesn't make sense to me.

Well done writing a great poem that captures why stay single.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a funny poem or song very well.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found I had to laugh a few times. Also, one comma seems out of place to me:
- Now my cows, graze in a travelin’ band. (no comma needed)

Well done writing a great poem. I see why it won the Cramp.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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