I like this piece of poetry's format. The repetition of the word anxiety is both effective and dramatic. Anxiety as you describe it is complicated and pervasive. It seems to always be present. "It's so easy to self doubt." Aww, I do not believe I like this anxiety. Happy account anniversary.
This piece of writing reads as being part of a conversation one would share with a friend the morning after. You describe a strange, chance encounter that still resonates with you. An unmistakable accent and a unique appearance impress themselves upon you. Your imagination wonders at this. Perhaps this figure deserves to become a character in your writing. Happy account anniversary.
I have never considered that a windchime could and would cry. This is an interesting perspective. This poem describes a yearning and indecision. Love can sometimes be difficult and painful. The rhyme scheme is all over the place without a set pattern, but I like it. It feels real, authentic. Happy account anniversary.
Haha, I love your handle. It commands recognition and respect. Fun form of address for grandchildren. Thanks for the smile on my face and happy account anniversary.
So, this is what it could potentially be like to be abducted by aliens. It seems stressful and scary. The quaisar could be unpleasant, or that is implied. The poor husband, Mark, is the scapegoat. Your story has got me thinking and feeling grateful the aliens have ignored me. Happy account anniversary.
Ah, distraction and vacation woes. Things can and do happen when our concentration is tested. Who hasn't operated with tunnel vision and something called auto drive. Poor Buddy had the best intentions and an important message to pass on. Being a parent has its moments. This is a great story for the prompt words. Happy account anniversary.
So many seemingly mundane events can and do trigger memories. It is amazing what our brains store and then shuffle to our current attention. I like your descriptions of the sunlight. Summer heat can seem endless. You discovered a refuge in books and they make great friends. Yes, what is important? Happy account anniversary.
I adore and respect anything Seussish. This is a fun, rollicking piece of poetry. The rhymes skip along at a great, enticing pace. I like the energy and the joie de vivre. Sibling rivalry/resentment is very real and something the cat in the hat recognizes. I noticed two minor bits to quibble about. You write or type "quite" in reference to the mother's song. Do you mean quiet? "So don't go to far" should be don't go too far. Thanks for the smile and happy account anniversary.
From the tone of this piece of poetry it is clear that you love your Siamese cat. I like the name Cookie, it is fun and sweet. Yes, I could believe a beloved pet is similar to a child. There are the snuggles and the inhibited play. The joy in the moment is contagious. Happy account anniversary.
This is a chilling tale. It contains good ol' greed and a hefty disregard for human life. Mrs. Henderson has become a cash cow with an anticipated forty year life span. Scary! I commend your imagination. All of this from three prompt words? Happy account anniversary.
You met the three hundred word challenge in composing this story and that is not an easy thing to do. I too believe meeting a fairy would be magical. Photos would suffice as both souvenir and evidence. I noticed two things. "The thing standing on me dresser" should be on my dresser, or is this Australian vernacular? "I stared Karen" should be I stared at Karen. Thanks for sharing and happy account anniversary.
The love you have for your unique child is front and center here. You have discovered the silver lining of autism. It is not all doom and gloom. An extended childhood does seem like a bonus. My aunt and uncle have a now adult autistic son and there have been many occasions/incidents. A sense of humour is invaluable. Happy account anniversary.
When is a penny not just a simple coin worth one measly cent? I imagine the special, unique coins are found in this manner jumbled amongst the others. That grouch has a windfall and may never bad mouth change ever again. Coins are often something that accumulates in our pockets and purses. This is a story depicting a slice of life and the joy of discovery. Happy account anniversary.
I like the perspective of this piece of writing. The narrator is the dying family member who then does die. I suppose everyone attempts to bargain with Death and delay their imminent demise. "There is enough written in your book of life." I like the idea of a book of life with pages and chapters. But is there ever enough in that book? "My breath went and didn't returned" should be didn't return.
"Wish my mother" should be I wish my mother. I suggest with the friendliest way Death came and brought his registration book with him. "I haven't ask any forgiveness" should be asked for any forgiveness. You write well and I understand what you are writing. There are a few issues related to English and that is probably a second or third language for you. Happy account anniversary.
This poem certainly reflects many emotions in its lines. How quickly brutal reality shattered a little boy's Christmas morning happiness. He had dreams, illusions when he first awakened. Too soon he learned he would rather have a living, breathing Mom than a new toy. I like the rhyming. It is not forced or clumsy. I have a suggestion. "Yet the house stands silent without a nary a sound." I believe that first a is not necessary. Happy account anniversary.
This is a beautiful letter full of reflections and shimmering memories. I like that it is all tied together with references to glittering stars and the skyscape of night. Stars do tend to encourage thinking. They are beyond our physical grasp, but their aloofness appeals to us. Who does not gaze at the sky and wonder about its vastness? All of this is like the passage of time. That amazing sky has endured many years, so much beyond our comprehension, yet it is common to everyone, every generation. First friendships are special as you illustrate. Happy account anniversary.
This poem is poignant with its what ifs, might-have-beens, hopes and dreams. I believe most people would, ideally, love to have their mothers live well into a good old age. Any life cut short is a tragedy, a loss of potential, but that of a young mother is especially devastating. There is raw emotion in this poem. "I imagine my mother at ninety." Hugs. Thank you for sharing.Happy account anniversary.
Now that is a twist of an ending. I cannot fathom losing track of an old acquaintance whom I considered my inferior and then discovering he was the judge determining my sentence. I like that final thought. The narrator is stunned, but still considers the judge to be little ol' Binky someone who should be non-threatening. This is well-paced and amusing. You have created a memorable character. Happy account anniversary.
This poem does summarize motherhood. The title says it all, too. Mother and child need each other. The rhymes are great and unforced. Cuddles and smiles are a Mom's reward. I agree with the following line. " Mother is so amazing." I can sense your love here. Thanks for sharing and happy account anniversary.
This poem flows and rhymes effortlessly. I must confess I have never before wondered what a tree might say. A tree could believe us to be flighty and without strong roots. ""In fine greenery they'd all be dressed." "What could be better than being a tree." It could be a serene lifestyle. Happy account anniversary.
This is hilarious! If ever I wondered what it would be like to co-exist with a meddling ghost, I now know and am forewarned. You created unforgettable images that whirl 'round in my brain. Yes, I imagine a spinning turkey would make for an amusing video begging to be shared. I appreciate the husband's low key response to a turkey flung across the kitchen. Cranberry sauce splashed in a sink? Yuck, but an impressive sight. Thanks for the laughs.
With this poem you have illustrated that happiness can be fleeting, elusive, a shape-shifter. It is never a constant, a given, a surety. So many things affect it. Our current desires change it. Our moods colour it. Our jobs, our careers shape it. Thank you for sharing. Happy account anniversary.
This is beautiful and poignant. There needs to be more sermons like this and ministers like Timothy. I like him. Quoting Tiny Tim shows him to be an of-the-people-kind-of-guy. Too often we judge others and condemn them for their circumstances. Thanks for sharing and Merry Christmas.
Bah humbug! That know-it-all blue-striped pajama clad Grinch became a thief. He snatched your innocence, your belief in magic. Sure, you had questions, but you would have reached your own conclusion when you were ready. Why hurry that? We all grow up soon enough. This line is poignant. "From that moment forward, I began missing something- a package of wonder wrapped in white magic." I enjoyed the descriptions of your big brother attempting to educate the parents and their refusal to be bamboozled. To write he presented as an overachiever sums up his character. Your chicken farmer father's no nonsense approach is delightful. When someone talks s*** bring up the undeniable qualities of chicken manure. I enjoyed reading this and thanks for sharing. Happy account anniversary.
Whew, this is indeed a creepy story! If this had been a book, I could truthfully state I could not put it down. You held my interest from the first word to the last. I like the premise, a revenge killing involving a bewitched cameo. Alas, the eager, vengeful daughter forgot the ominous warning. This gives new meaning to the descriptors 'old prune' or 'mummified old hag'. I noticed one spelling error. "Her skin more taught" should be her skin more taut. Thanks for this delightful read and happy account anniversary.
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