There really is nothing quite as annoying as gridlock. It tests every driver's patience. Yes, idling and going nowhere only serves to highlight the wasted time and pressing chores being unfulfilled. I noticed a few minor issues. The first sentence introduces Ana's frustration. The word gridlock should be capitalized and a period placed at the end of the comment. "Neither she or Dan had meet them yet" should be met them. "Probably ask for an autograph" should be either asked or asking for an autograph. "Guys handles attention" could be how the guys handle attention or how the guy, (the celebrity), handles attention. "Tapping her fingers...". This sentence is incomplete. Yes, Ana is doing this, but what else, what next? You could simply add that Ana is doing this. I like the surprise ending in which Ana recognizes the Lexus driver as her new neighbour. Obviously, the blonde passenger is not his wife. Happy account anniversary. {{indent}justify}{/justify}
Hello.I love your rambling, stream of consciousness writing. You jot down each memory as it occurs
in your head. Yes, sometimes our brains act that way and replay past events for us to reconsider. The love you feel for your mother is genuine and heartfelt. Of course she is a part of you. She loved and taught you. Thanks for sharing and happy anniversary.
This is a well-written, funny story. You recreate the game show tension and aptly describe the contestant squirming under the camera's unflinching lens. I now can commiserate with contestants who feel all the judging eyes and fret about so many things. They are constrained by time and the fear of missing the correct answer. That telephone conversation with the mother put on the spot to be a lifeline is hilarious and lifelike. She has her own agenda and fails to recognize the urgency. Then after guessing correctly the poor contestant is once again asked a math question. That money is not without its sweat and tears.Thanks for sharing and happy account anniversary.
Your writing illustrates what all cat companions know. Cats are beyond our understanding. They are not so much mysterious, but contrary. They act and do whatever they want and that changes as do their whims. They can be lazy and curious, clever and naive. Do they constantly plot to befuddle people? I did laugh at the alternate and mistaken version of Santa,Sonta. And, yes, what's with the random cat vomit strategically placed for the maximum annoyance? happy account anniversary.
Ah, new students have much to learn . I can imagine a kindergartener worried about being abandoned. Being somewhere without Mom can be scary. I like the idea of the one mother reassuring her child by leaving her scarf as a comfort. "She told me was was going to do..." Yep, there's one too many of that one word was. Happy account anniversary.
Hello. Where we grow up really does make its mark. Our memories are often fond ones. We learn from that environment. I appreciate your Dad's sense of humour . Just why would this neighbour have such towers unless he was a radio aficionado. I am surprised that the neighbours who seemed to believe they were the better}/i} people in town tolerated these ugly structures. Live and let live. Thanks for the laugh and happy account anniversary.
Well, that was a different read. Is this what it would be like to be mistaken for dead and taken before your time? Oops, wrong year. Oops, it was just revealed that you live to be ninety-nine and die peacefully in your sleep. Oops, the cat is out of the bag. Then, you are told have a nice day? I am intrigued by this story line. I noticed a few issues. The word is can't short for cannot and not cant. You also miss the apostrophe in I'm which is short for I am. It is not im. Also, it should be it's which is short for it is. "I mean honestly most people cant even say ninety". I believe a period should follow this sentence and the preceding words words should be divided into a separate sentence. Oh, and that cant should be can't. Also the sentences should begin with a capitol letter. Thanks for sharing and happy account anniversary.
I was running right along with that younger brother and rooting for him. You sure created tension with this story, and I do not just refer to that of action with the heart-pounding chase. Sibling tension exists in a category all its own. Ah, to be young again and playing tag. Yes, sometimes it required quick thinking and reactions in the moment. Thanks for plastering a smile on my face and happy account anniversary.
Haha! The ending is funny and yes, it points out a mystery. How could the navel lint be blue if there had been no contact? Is that the new and improved usage of the belly button to be a lint collector/sorting station? Oh, this small crevice is conveniently located for an important task. I like your rhymes. They are effortless. The poem flows smoothly. Thanks for the laughs and happy account anniversary.
As most any parent will agree, children grow up quickly, too quickly. That old adage time flies is so true with child rearing. One minute they are infants and the next they are producing offspring of their own. The memories never fade and are cherished for a lifetime. As you illustrate those memories are especially poignant for life events such as weddings. One day the daughter played dress-up and seemingly overnight she is gussied up for her wedding. That father has earned his right to be sentimental and weepy. Thanks for sharing and happy account anniversary.
What you write here makes sense. As an avid reader, I do not want or appreciate the entire back story. All the details do not make a more compelling or intriguing tale. Action does create more interest. With dialogue and action bits and pieces can be doled out. Too much detail can indeed be boring. Thanks for sharing and happy account anniversary.
Oh, this is funny. One simple letter replacement can really skew the intended message and/or the business owner's name. I notice misspelled announcements and signage all the time. I am tempted to correct what I see with a black Sharpie. Poor, suffering Larry. One unfortunate error and he's sacked. I believe the consumers would see the humour in this and actually remember this business because of it. It need not be in a derogatory manner. Thanks for the laugh and happy account anniversary.
I don't pretend to understand computers. I use them, but I doubt I will ever re-wire one. When they do as I wish they are wondrous machines. I can, however, appreciate all the work and effort that goes into creating them and their components. Yes, as with any business and the launch of products, sacrifices are necessary. Everyone dreams of the big pay day and there seems to have been many in today's techno world. "Not even when I became of the CEO." I do not believe of is necessary. Thanks for sharing and happy account anniversary.
You describe a beautiful, supportive friendship in this story. Two girls share a bond. I am not sure what the focus is in this piece of writing. It meanders a bit ranging from describing Fariha and her relationship with her family to a birthday party and then an injury. This story feels unfinished. I noticed a few issues. "A trimmed figure" should be a trim figure. "Seated in cement benches" should be seated on cement benches. "Is all the arrangements done" should be are all the arrangements done. "Its Fariha's birthday". It should be it's or it is. Thanks for sharing and happy account anniversary.
Well, you've got the start of a story here, all right. You describe a marriage in crisis. Morgan is definitely unhappy and perhaps unfulfilled. Dion seems genuinely concerned and worried. What will happen next? I noticed a few issues as I read your writing. First of all you use commas where I believe you should place periods. There are several stand alone sentences strung together with commas. The word 'distant' is used instead of 'distance.' "Hoping is" should be "hoping if." I do not recognize the word 'conger'. Do you mean 'conjure?' "Over and hour away" should be "over an hour away." "Perfect white toothed smiled" should be 'perfect white-toothed smile." I think "move her out the hood" should be "move her out of the hood." This has the beginnings of something intriguing. Happy account anniversary.
Your wee story serves to emphasize that marital strife has existed for eons. The sexes have their own priorities and expectations. Going out with the boys, no matter the reason or end goal, can be considered contentious. I laughed at the ending. That thing wished for attacks and destroys. Do not play with fire was apparently not yet a warning. She got what she wanted, sort of, and knowing that Ug left her to deal with it. Thanks for this bit of fun and happy account anniversary.
I am laughing and repeating that fateful sentence, "heck of a deal." When I first read the title I suppose I anticipated a story about playing cards. This singular sentence does have a double meaning though. All those bald men played the hand they were dealt. "Don't pull the orange string" must seem like a suggestion, or an irresistible thrill/challenge. I'm wondering if my balding hubby pulled that orange string? Thanks for the laughs and congrats on your win.
Well, this is a stark message contained within a thoughtful piece of poetry. It is a rallying cry for change. I admire your ability to rhyme throughout your poem. It is effective to repeat the first stanza and reiterate your stance. Financial insecurity can be overwhelming and its consequences brutal. "Working all for not each year" must seem hopeless and stressful. These simple words sum up so much and are honest. "Ageless greed and aging kin." Is it not said/believed that money makes the world go round? Happy account anniversary.
I enjoyed reading this tale about a family of raccoons and their feline friend. It also has a happy ending which makes it endearing. Sure, there was some grief and some suffering, but it was temporary. This mimics real life, eh, the good and the bad. Both are inevitable. You made the furry siblings like all siblings. They sometimes bicker and they challenge each other, but ultimately they love and support each other. i noticed a few issues, but nothing major. In one spot you use 'your' when it should be 'you're.'
"An-ti-scep-tic?" Is that a deliberate way to pronounce that word? It' s spelled 'antiseptic.' "But I tired" should be "but I was tired." "Bandit's battled body." I believe that should be "Bandit's battered body." "He'd didn't do anything". That letter 'd' with 'he' isn't necessary. Thanks for sharing this heartfelt story. Happy account anniversary.
This is a very creative, fanciful story. I cannot imagine the randomness of it. Receiving and then passing the magic ball to someone else keeps the spell alive. Will every temporary steward have a crisis to deal with? Does it attract unresolved issues and force a resolution? Marty was only too willing to dispose of the accursed ball even if it meant he'd snared someone else. "Did something in that ball make crazier than you already were?" I believe there should be another you placed before crazier. "How much money did you tell this guy you were going give him?" There should be a to placed between going and give. I enjoyed reading this. Happy account anniversary.
This is a heartfelt story. It seems melancholic and the premise of a dream is emphasized. Christmas seems to evoke feelings of longing. I enjoyed the surprise twist. Tim is the deceased lover returning to visit. He is beckoned by the flickering candle. Thanks for the explanation of the Victorian tradition. Happy account anniversary.
This was fun to peruse and I settled into my private box car to accompany your train of thought. It just chugged/steamed along with a steady momentum. So, you were asked for your {digits/i} and then ghosted. I cannot pretend to know what this is like. I agree it's incomprehensible behaviour. I enjoyed your sense of humour and the number one possibility could well be the truth. I agree, why not have some fun and create scenarios. Thanks for the laughs. Happy account anniversary.
I feel your pain in these words. Yes, usually there is much to celebrate when a baby is born. Life and death are not always understandable as you now know. Caleb was loved and that is indisputable. You were brave to put this to paper as it were and describe a terrible time. Thanks for sharing and happy account anniversary.
I chose this story to read because you mentioned Toronto and 1914 in the header/teaser. I have studied my family's genealogy and, of course, the first world war figures in my discoveries. I like that you describe the tensions of that tumultuous time and the dreadful uncertainties. So many made sacrifices. Creating and sustaining a life together as a couple would have been beyond difficult. Your characters are compelling. I enjoyed the read. happy account anniversary.
Haha. I suppose cartoonitis is preferable to many other conditions. Being cooped up with nothing but cartoons to watch has never before seemed detrimental, but anything is possible. I laughed at the cure, public television and animal documentaries. Inject some serious subject matter and the cartoonitis disappears. Thanks for the absurdity and happy account anniversary.
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