Hi; this is very interesting, but I can't help but wish it were longer. Is the creature a werewolf? Also, I'm not sure what, "See what you made me do?" refers to -- waking the creature?
Wow, very detailed and involved for such a short story. I liked that he was the kind of person who would throw the fish back. I kind of wish the Lorelai had spoken to him/got to know him.
Interesting question, "Your choice?" It makes me wonder what the alternative was. Also, it's interesting that the opponent tosses the knife aside before starting the fight. And that decades have passed and the person became a captive somehow. I sense a novel's worth of backstory.
Sounds like you support a free and fair election process, do unto others as you'd have them do unto you. This is the first Three Squared poem I recall having read, and yours seems spot on for the form, with rhyme as a nice addition.
I get an impression of confusion and fear and self-doubt and maybe fear of even trying to live a full life, or maybe that is me projecting my own feelings onto the poem. The train or the bus stops running, so we walk fast.
Very nice opening- I’ve seen it in their face/I’ve caught them unaware. But I’m not sure about the woeful mask in the second stanza- I was thinking the woe was behind the mask of something else.
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