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SevenTwoEight

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#4794546

Review of A glimpse

Review by SevenTwoEight

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.0)

This is a fascinating story. You develop the relationships between the characters well, and I can see why your protagonist is so excited to have her brother come home. The writing is excellent, light and engaging and with a softness I personally really love.

What I'd like to see more of is the hint of the coming nightmare. Just a little more, woven into the narrative as it flows. I only really know there's something about to go awfully wrong because of the description in the info block at the top. This would give it more of a kick, more of a sense of dread to contrast with the general feeling of this person's life being good right now.

Otherwise, this feels like it has loads of potential to go somewhere big.

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#4793661

Review of Quantity vs. Quality

Review by SevenTwoEight

Rated: ASR ★★★★★ | (5.0)

The first thing I thought of was Bradley Whitfield driving a golf cart through a subterranean concrete hellscape in Cabin in the Woods. Then I switched instantly to my partner, who works in corporate IT, and how entirely on-brand this is for his attitude to employment (on the protagonist's side—he's always b*tching about the phone-it-in employees).

I especially love the drip feed of detail and the reward of re-reading, going back through each section once I had the reveal so I could pick up more information. I'm assuming this is Lucifer's business and we don't have Dave to blame for that one. Corrupting Saint Augustine would be one hell of a catch, though. And how stiff is the competition from Heaven? These are all things I want to know and the joy is in the imagining.