Hello denbo356, I just read your story "Chief Jimbob"
It was a riot, I laughed at it because Jimmy had to dress up
like an Indian Chief, His boss was very mean She made him
dress like that. Your characters were strong I thing Jimmy was likable whereas his female boss was a mean person who took
advantage of him needing this job. It was a good story a nice plot. I saw a couple of type O's but other than that I loved your
story.
what a vivid image of a bird, I can just see a red bird against
the stark white snow in the winter. this is a beautiful poem, and you did a good job with the rhymes, it has a good meter and it flows well too. I think you have outdone all other poems I have read to date.
Wow what a spectacular poem I think it was very sad Is it a true story? I love cats. you should contact the animal control over that dog. I did not see any mistakes with your writing I thought it was very good.
what a great story for children, though you would have to read it to the younger children as it would be too difficult. I thought it was a long story for a children's story but it was well worth the time and effort put into reading it. it is great.
I think this is a special poem, i saw it on the review page and I knew I had to read it. it is beautiful and oh so true. to bad everyone can't find the faith. great poem , good writing, excellent message.
excellent Lisa, I think you did a great job writing about pets you gave us so many facts and information on dogs and cats. I learned a lot. I think it is great that you are giving the Humane Society the attention it deserves. and thanks for the healthy check list.
very nice story about your Appalachian hills, it sounds like a nice place and I'm sure it's people are tired of the stereotype they are stuck with. Every place has it's own stereotype I guess, but some are more hurtful than others. I guess yours is very hurtful.
Hello Smafas, this story,"Shrunk into his hands..." is very good, it is creative and invites many writers to add to the story which can take so many different directions. The collection of Characters you have created are nice, you have a teen boy and his brother and his best friend
you also have the parents. who can come home from Texas at some point. I added a chapter myself, I had them to find an object to which they believe came from an alien space craft and they think Jake was abducted and shrunk by the aliens. pretty lame but that's my story and I'm sticking to it. lol
you have done a spectacular job turning the Genesis story in to a modern day poem. you included the story of Adam and Eve and their creation, and Eve and Satan in the Garden, and Cain and Able, all together in one poem which is well written, and it rhymes and has a rhythm and everything. I recommend it to everyone out there to read it. Even if you don't like poetry it gives you a condensed story. Even if you aren't Christian it is very artistic and it will give you a crash course in Genesis book.
Hi, I just read "My Chains" it was a real nice poem
I enjoyed the ending of it where you reveal what you
are actually speaking about. a war with your flaws
I think we all have that, I know I do. I've too many to
count. but you had good rhymes and very good rhythm.
the poem flowed well good job keep it up.
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hi, I'm honeysuklerose, and I just read your story :Charisma-theDevil's Gap-
I think you did a good job writing this story. the plot is extraordinary and I felt that the characters were very likable and believable. I think the dialogue was right on it was thought provoking and just down right good writing. thank you for sharing this story with me. I give you
hello Jp Murphy you did a very nice job on this poem I enjoyed reading it
it had some very good rhymes and it had a nice rhythm, it flowed nicely.
my favorite lines from the poem is:
Times hands are moving they’re quickly passing by,
The sun is setting on the story of you and I,
Although without a hello can you have a goodbye,
If I said I didn’t want more would it be a lie,
I did not see any mistakes with your writing
you did a very nice job.
Hello Danielle Stewart, I found this item while looking at my email page. I was taen by the title and then further dragged in by the description of the item. My father was a soldier many years ago and faught in a horrific war. I thought your piece grabbed the hearts of we who did not serve making us realize how horrible your time away from home must have been. Thank you for serving our country and protecting us and our freedoms. Your item is a winner in my book. very emotional.
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