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Opening comments to a review

Here are my comments for chapter twenty-four.

Specific comments are shown in bold below. I've put additions inside () parentheses, I've used strike-through for deletions, and comments are in {} braces.

Disclaimer: These are opinions rather than corrections. Use them if they're helpful, and feel free to ignore them if they're not. It's your story, so your choices are ultimately correct.