CONGRATULATIONS! You are a NEW YELLOW!!!
Hi! Hope you are doing fine! 
Overall
WOW! LOVED your essay. Do you blog? I think you can do that, you are great in capturing the attention of the reader. Ths are the kind of things that I like to read on blogs, for example. It's an awesome thing to dream like you do, words. WOW! My dreams and nightmares, are movie like, but seen from the point of view of the character (if we can call it that), protagonist, hehe in that moment, that most of the time is me. I really coudn't imagine my dreams without those pictures, but I understand you perfectly. I can relate to you about the reading, but I have to confess that I can read everything except newspapers and instructions. OMG, I don't know why, but I can't read instructions, guides, or something like that. I prefer to take 1 hr assembling a desk, than taking the time to read the instructions, NO WAY! I don't know why!!!! hehehe strange! But its a great essay, and I enjoyed every moment of it. Keep on writing!
Title/Description
Good choices, they work, simple but to the point!
Spelling
None that I could notice! Great job!
Suggestions
To keep on writing, and try to blog if you have never done that before, I know it has helped me a lot, because no one tells me to shut up, hehehe I LOVE to talk,and in my blog I can talk and write ALL I want about my opinions, emotions, and anything I want! If you do, let me know!
Keep on writing!
Take care!
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