Nemesis's (traveller) Reviews

Nemesis

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Review of Soul Census - War of Shadows - Book 1

for entry "Chapter 3.3 - Lover's Bond"

Review by Nemesis

Rated: 13+ ★★★★★ | (5.0)

Well, I have to admit, there is a lot of junk out here and at first I thought this was going to be one of them but I kept reading because your grammar and point of view remained consistent. You are a good storyteller because like Aloli, you sucked me in and I really began to enjoy the story.

I love your concept of souls, soulmates and realms. I think you are really on to something with your plot. It has a lot of excellent possibilities. I want to see more action, I think all of the thoughts really work but added action would make it the bomb. Thanks for writing, very enjoyable.

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Review of Midnight Rendezvous

Review by Nemesis

Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.5)

I gave you this rating because it is a good story.

I stumbled on 'Wake up'- 'secreted' - 'ate that there'

And some minor punctuation.

Seems a little critical, I know, but with a few small changes, this peice could certainly be read in the likes of 'Reader's Digest' etc.

Judging by your writing skill, you likely questioned those points yourself.

A brilliant story, just short of perfect.