Very unique and intreguing. I loved the story, it had some rough spots when trying to follow but all in all a great idea and well stated. Nice description of the older woman in the hospital as well. I am wondering about the following line:
βThereβs no need for us here anymore; Iβm sorry about,β he looked away, and they left.
I was left wondering what they were speaking of? I know it was the mans death but it was left to vauge for me persoanlly. At any rate I thougtht it was good.
Keep It Up!
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