You've obviously put a lot of effort into kick starting this item and using details, probably has the best potential to become an amazing story in the future than anything I've seen on this website. This one's a keeper, keep 'er goin'!
overall interesting consept, enjoyed it. However some chapters look like they were typed while drunk. I know that this isnt the original writers fault but if a chapter like that arises have someone re-write it.
9.9/10
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