I love how you have described total surrender here, like it is something that fills every part of one's life and mind. The way you've left it unclear whether the narrator delights or loathes this invasion of themself is clever, as it leaves it up to the reader's perception, and the flow of the piece is great. One thing I would say to do is capitalise the 'I's, as that is a proper pronoun, but other than that 'Final Vows' was amazing. You did a great job.
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