Random review brought me and I can say I would not made it on my own, and I enjoyed this light hearts, not bogged down in overexpressed imagery. All we can do is one day at a time, never more, or never less. Events change us, but the next day comes. Well written, a simple spelling error, and kind feeling, almost somber feeling. Thanks
Always fun to stop in, and to find a small poetry form. Simple, but expressive. To see Venus it is on the horizon, and it it associated with love, it's a shame its far from it. No suggestions, and enjoy an easy read. Thanks.
Wow! This is so well written, almost like an classic early eighties read. I could see the doll, probably more creepy than intended, feel the sadness in the man, the age, the echoes of lost times, the rhyme brings all this together, so good! Here's your five I'm so impressed.
October flew, and a poll for November is a fun idea. Easy to understand, and not over pumped in writing ml. I choose the kids quote, there isn't a time than when they were too quiet that things were not entertaining, Thanks! Little Spooky staiNe
Random review link brings me back quite a few years, and this is well written and impactful, to remember a birthday, the day the fear and happiness of being a parent, and a little anxiety cozied up with pride. Nothing can take all that away as it only grows as the new life grows. Thanks for the memories reminded, and all in all a warm feeling read.
Yup we get one life on earth, our soul might pass on, its debatable. Simple, well edited, quaint in its message but not overpowering. Be good, and things we do will come around good or bad. Thank you for sharing.
Random review brought me, Max Griffin 🏳️🌈 and I can't pass the reward. A chart, something, actives people in a group. R O A R i'm not sure, but as I visted here a review of sorts.
Very good poem, says a lot without over descriptive prose. Easy to understand, and well edited, no spelling or punctuation errors. Thank you for sharing, and take care.
Good warm day, Sinbad Nibbler Random review brought me, and cute small somewhat different prose, I won't say I understand but can respect the feeling and intent shared. Festive of light I believe and I enjoy lights amicability. Thanks here a five for sharing.
Random review link brought me, and what a powerful share. Impactful and heartfelt. Interesting told with feelings and understanding. I felt like I was watching it all happen, and felt the sadness too. Thank you for sharing and take care.
Random review link takes me way back, and to a great easy to use poetry form abiyt Christmas. Well done. All the feelings, objects that portray the holiday, well edited and not over fluffed.
Goodness gracious is this love? How creative. A thunderstorm, the beauty, the intensity of it, and how scary it can be, love indeed, for it can be thrilling, and attracting and fearful. Short, precise and deliquated prose. Well edited and enjoyable. Thanks!!!
Well written, edited with intent, but I'm unsure of what is spoken of. Bad relationship? Blasphemy? Speaking to the devil? I see different things in this, and I guess the ending tripped me up on intent. Some wonderful written prose, and honestly well written, I overthink I'm told.
Thanks and Happy Spooky Season.
Many people keep their thoughts to themselves, don't stir the pot so to speak. Our choices are our own, even if those decisions might be wrong. Simple, not over crowded in lengthy imagery. A small glimpse, ta da! Thanks no suggestions, poetry is easy and understandable.
Thirty is so near, gosh! you had me thinking of past retirement, mistakes, illusions, judgement, self doubt. As we look at ourselves daily and see the age, judge the signs. Such dark, somewhat moist prose. Great to happen across during spooky season.Rats. mirrors, High Five! I enjoyed.
Good Afternoon, Kay Carter Random review link brought me out of my favorite dark place and I enjoyed this poem a lot. The prose is just wow!
Blood-gloss — corpse-lily, your velveteen furniture.
The rating can be lowered for more people to enjoy. I suggest all lines starting capitalized, besides these this is crazy creative. Again, Thanks! I'm in awe.
Delightful pleasant poem. I enjoyed, so honest and something that we've all done, I'm sure, and just see it is amusing. Great rhyme, well done, spot on editing. Thanks!
Emotional impactful poem, oh my! This is well done, somewhat sad. Being so positive, so Active, and have such happen it only so touching cause so many experience and can relate. Thank for for sharing something that might help others in similar experiences.
Thank you for sharing such a life changing event. I too took my son, remember the tubes, and tried to crawl into bed with him after he'd turn blue, and stiff. I know the feelings I won't say it gets easier,change it all that happens. Take care of yourself some days aren't easy.
Wonderfully detailed, I felt it I was there in that room, seeing the windows, the pillows, feelings the warm and comfort of such nostalgic imagery. Very well done, honestly.
Well written poem that talks about the past, the present and how we need to remember the past, learn from it, absorb it within ourselves and live for the future. This is interesting, not crazy imagery but says what it needs to to get that point across.
I couldn't imagine feeling so much uncertainty, and mixed emotions laying in a bed in the hospital alone with your thoughts, that war you'd fight and lose. I thanks ya for sharing as I had no idea that these feelings would attack in such a way if such were to happen. They say breaking a hip is very bad, and I agree I know others who have, I count myself lucky as I never broken anything.
Good Afernoon, Jo Paynter Creates Random review link, and poetry, my favorite to read. This is well done, leaving the open ended question to keep the reader, and not providing a resolution is creative. Not overly creepy but gives you "what if" thoughts. Suggestive, and well edited.
Good afternoon, spidey Looks like I found an older poem, but golly it's wonderfully dark, like a long shadow behind the warmest feelings. Creative, not overly embellished. Well edited. Thanks! I enjoyed and will be back for more.
Simple form, that is well told, like a small story. You used the prompt wonderfully. Aliens, some throwbacks, some imagery on how it all would go down. I could see it all clearly. Thanks, no suggestions, I see no errors.
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