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#4338213

Review of Bears

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hello normajean,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your twelfth year with us.

Overall Impression: This was a very well written story. And I liked it a whole lot.

The Story Itself: What I liked the best about this story was how it ended. I'm a big fan of twist at the end of a story. But when you can make me smile and laugh it's even better.

Your Characters: The only thing I would have done differently with this story is given them names. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: There wasn't a lot of dialogue in this story. What dialogue there was looked good to me. the only thing I would have done differently was not starting two sentences with the same word. But that's just the way I like to write my stories.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: It looks like you made an error in Tense in this story. Shouldn't it be 'were' instead 'are?' You might want to look into that.

Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a great job with this story. Do you have any more stories like this one? If so, and they are as good or better than this one I would definitely like to read them too if I can.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

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#4331680

Review of The Mirage

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Rated: E

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Hello bananafish,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your tenth year with us.

Overall Impression: This was a fantastic poem. One of the best, if not the best, ones I have ever read.

The Poem Itself: There are a lot of individuals who have had this happen to them. Maybe not this way, but something similar. Unfortunately, it happens a lot because of all the estranged

How It Make Me Feel: I felt existed for this individual. but I also felt sad for them. I'm sorry it turned out not to be his father.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: The only thing that might be an error in grammar with this poem is with starting your lines with capitalization. But from what I read it more a sentence break error to me. What I mean is you ended some of your sentences wrong. At least that's what I think that you did. You might want to check into that.

Any Last Thoughts: It's kind of the opposite with me and my ex-father. It didn't bother me that he wasn't part of my life after he left me and my mother. I never wanted to find him. And to his dying day, and beyond, I didn't want to see him. He never wanted me, and I never wanted him.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4331677

Review of Happy to be crying

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Rated: E

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Hello bordoichila,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your fifth year with us.

Overall Impression: What was this poem about? I know that from the Title Description that it's about 'the miseries of the world.' But I'm not sure what that means. It didn't read like that to me in this poem.

The Poem Itself: Don't get me wrong. I liked this poem a lot. I'm just a little bit confused about what's it about.

How It Make Me Feel: I felt existed after reading this poem. Once I started reading it, I couldn't stop. Not too many poems, or stories, can do that for me. but this one did.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: Overall, I think you did really good in writing this poem. But I did notice that there was a few errors in capitalization, one of them in particular. You might want to checked into that.

Any Last Thoughts: Yes, I know what I have wrote makes it read like I didn't like you poem. But I did. I think you did a great job with this poem.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4331676

Review of Path Not Taken

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Rated: E

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Hello Poetry Emotion,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your tenth year with us.

Overall Impression: Since the first line isn't part of the poem itself, I don't think that it should be centered like the rest of it. Other than that I think you did a great job with this poem. I liked it a whole lot.

The Poem Itself: What I like best about this poem is that it was centered. I think that a poem is easier to read and understand if it's centred.

How It Make Me Feel: I felt for the one who died. It was never mentioned that that's what happened. But from the way I read it that's what did happen. Am I wrong about that?

Any Last Thoughts: Personally, I wouldn't have started each section of with the same word or in this poem the same phrase. But that's just the way that I like to write. Whether it's a sentence or a paragraph there has to be at least two sentences or paragraphs before I use a word again.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4331675

Review of "Drifting from reality to the Abstract"

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Rated: 13+

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Hello writerchuck,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your seventh year with us.

Overall Impression: This was a well-written poem. I like it very, very much.

The Poem Itself: Losing a mother is never an easy thing to deal with. But to lose her like this is ever harder.

How It Make Me Feel: I felt sorry for the mother in this story. Hope her end comes quickly and painlessly.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: I'm not sure. But I think the first word on each line is supposed to capitalize. You did that with most of it, but there were a couple of lines you didn't. You might want to look into the grammar rule on capitalization.

Any Last Thoughts: This poem hit home for me. I lost my mother twenty years ago. And she died peacefully. So, did my ex-father. But he only died at the end of last year from dementia.

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Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4331672

Review of MEMORIES LOST

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Rated: E

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Hello artistlee,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your tenth year with us.

Overall Impression: I liked this poem a lot. What I liked the best about it was that we all have to deal with our memories whether we like them or not.

The Poem Itself: We all have memories that we have lost. And a lot that we wish we could lose. But we all have them. The real trick is finding them again. Usually, they are lost forever. But sometimes they can be found. all you can do is try to find them.

How It Make Me Feel: It made me feel sad. I felt sorry for the individual in this poem.

Any Last Thoughts: A lot of repetition in this poem. But other than that, it was a great read. I'm glad that I got the chance to read it.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4331671

Review of Yes, redbuds sing

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Rated: E

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Hello Kåre Enga writing poetry ,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your twelfth year with us.

Overall Impression: At first I didn't know what you were trying to write about. I thought that Redbuds were a kind of bird. Even though I had never heard of a bird like that. The reason why I thought it was a bird is because of the singing. But I was wrong about that.

The Poem Itself: This poem was a little bit hard for me to read. I had to read almost every section two or three times. It was just a little bit too sophisticated to me.

How It Make Me Feel: Don't get me wrong. I liked this poem a lot. I'm glad that I chose this one to read and review.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: I'm not sure. But I think that you are supposed to capitalize the beginning of each line. You did that on one or two of them, but not the others.

Any Last Thoughts: I notice in my search for which poem I was going to review that you have several of them. Is that all you do, Poetry? Do you write anything else besides Poetry?

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Thank you for sharing this Poetry with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great poems like this one.

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#4331440

Review of Demon

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Rated: E

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Hello SilverRose,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your eleventh year with us.

Overall Impression: This was a different kind of a story. Not that it was a bad kind. In fact, it was just the opposite of that. I liked it a whole lot. But it was different. Maybe because it was Fanfiction, and maybe it wasn't.

The Story Itself: This is a story about a male who is a demon. At least that is who he appears to be. It's not until the end of it that you find out he is more than just a demon. But you won't know that unless you read the whole story.

How They Spoke: Some don't consider thinking as dialogue. But I'm not one of them. I do think that it is. It's just a different kind of dialogue. But it's still dialogue.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: I'm not sure if you handled the thinking in this story correctly. But I think that you did. It all depends on what country that you come from. I know there are some countries that do it like this. And you are probably from one of them.

Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a very good job with this story. Have you done any more like it? What about other Fanfiction? Did any other Fanfiction? I'm not a big fan of Fanfiction. But I know what I like. And I liked this story. I'm glad that I read it.

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Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4331439

Review of Sarah's Moon

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Rated: 13+

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Hello dle,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your twelfth year with us.

Overall Impression: Wow, what can I say about this story other than that. I think you did a great job with it.

The Story Itself: From the title it was kind of obvious why she was talking to the sky. But I still had to read it to know for sure if that was true or not. It could have been another Red Herring. By the time that I did I was hooked. And I had to finish it.

Your Characters: Of course, Sarah is the main character in this story. But her old friend is a big part of it too. I liked that you gave your character a name. A lot of writers don’t do that. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

Any Last Thoughts: Have you written any more stories like this one? If so, and they are as good or better than this one is, I would definitely like to read and review them too.

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Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4331438

Review of END

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Rated: E

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Hello rickyg,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your fourth year with us.

Overall Impression: I'm not sure what to say about this story. Don't get me wrong. I liked it a whole lot. But it was very difficult for me to read it. Not because of the subject matter, but because of how it was written.

The Story Itself: This is a story about a couple named Chuck, or is it Carl, and Cheryl. They are having a discussion about something. It's not until the end of the story that you find out what it is. I like that a lot. A lot, if not most, of my stories, are like that.

Your Characters: Chuck or Carl? You start off with Chuck. But toward the end it was Carl. I liked that you gave your characters a name. A lot of writers don’t do that. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: There was a lot of dialogue in this story. But it was misplaced. You had it all in the same paragraphs. I think they should be separate paragraphs. When a new person begins to speak they need a new paragraph to do it. At least I think that they do.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: I'm not sure where to start. There was a lot of problems with this story. you had a missing word or two and some punctuation problems. But I think the biggest problem you had wasn't your paragraph structure. even though it's a big one too. It's your use of Quotation Marks. They were either misplaced or not needed.

Any Last Thoughts: I think you have the makings for a very good story here. It just needs a lot of fine-tuning.

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#4331437

Review of Life is a Journey

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Rated: E

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Hello Abigail Isis,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your eighth year with us.

Overall Impression:

The Story Itself: You made this story about squirrels. But they could have been any animal. Is there a reason why you made them squirrels?

Your Characters: Of course, Chit-Chat and Terra are the main characters in this story. And I liked that you gave your characters a name. A lot of writers don’t do that. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: there wasn't any dialogue in this story. but there should have been a lot of it. The way it was written it read like there should have been a lot of dialogue in this story.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: I think I noticed one misspelled word and one sentence structure error. This misspelling was the word 'storage.' And the sentence structure was either 'He asked her for help.' or 'He asked for help from Terra' instead of 'He asked her for help from Terra.'

Any Last Thoughts: You have a very good story here that needs to be written and read. But right now this story is telling instead of showing. It needs to be re-written to show instead of tell.

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#4331435

Review of OR Floor

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Rated: 13+

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Hello C Fowler,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your third year with us.

Overall Impression: I liked this story a whole lot. It kept me interested in it from beginning to end.

The Story Itself: I'm not sure who I feel sorrier for in this story. Is it Dr. Cox, the patient or your main character? I say it's the patient. After all, she's is about to die from an appendectomy.

Your Characters: You mentioned Dr. Cox, and I liked that you gave them a name. But you didn't give your main character one. I would have. also, I would have given Dr. Cox a first name. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: The dialogue seemed natural. I believe it to be Doctors talking. What I liked best about the dialogue was that you didn't put us down with a lot of technical doctor mumble jumble.

Any Last Thoughts: I noticed that you have several other Fiction stories. If they are as good, if not better, than this one I would be very interested in reading and review some of them too, if I can.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4331434

Review of Placard in The Book of Oblivion

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Rated: 18+

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Hello Whitemorn,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your fourth year with us.

Overall Impression: I'm a little bit confused by this story. Not because it read like a poem. But because it didn't make much sense to me. Don't get me wrong. I liked it. But I didn't understand it. Maybe it's just me. After all, it was set in the Shakespearean era.

The Story Itself: Who is this bullied man. And how did he get his revenge. I know that you wrote something about doing it in their sleep. But I'm not sure what that something was. Did I miss it? What was this story about? I would really like to know.

Any Last Thoughts: When I first saw this story I thought that I might like it because of the Action/Adventure genre. I'm a big fan of Action/Adventure. Next to Science Fiction and Mystery, it's my favorite. But I didn't read any Action/Adventure in this story. Did I miss that too?

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Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4331433

Review of Those Three Words

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Rated: E

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Hello caylra,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your fourteenth year with us.

Overall Impression: As I read this it read more like a poem than a Fiction story. And I was right. It's a rhyming poem. Don't get me wrong. I like Poetry. And I liked this story a whole lot. But I'm a little curious about why you categorized this as Fiction instead of Poetry?

The Story Itself: I can understand where the Romance/Love and the Emotional comes in with this story. But not the Teen genre. Where are the teens in this story? Is it because of the ending? Are they that young?

Your Characters: [I liked that you gave your character[s] a name. A lot of writers don’t do that.] Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

Any Last Thoughts: What I liked best was how this story ended. Everyone excepted that the three words would be 'I love you," especially since this is a romantic story, but it wasn't. Great job. I love a surprise ending.

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#4331430

Review of Parenting - Word Count 74

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Rated: E

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Hello Improxablity,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your fourth year with us.

Overall Impression: At first I wasn't sure if I was going to like this story. After all, I'm not a parent. But I'm glad that I did. It liked it very much.

The Story Itself: I don't read a story just because I'm trying to get GPs for reviewing it. That's just the added bonus. The main reason why I read them is that I think I might like them. And when it comes to this one I'm glad that I read it. It's a simple story. But it's one that any parent of a five and seven years old can relate to.

Your Characters: The kids are being typical kids. But the mother I don't think is. Her first thought would we his safety if, and when, he spilled the milk. Then she would scold him for drinking out of the carton.

Any Last Thoughts: What I liked the most about this story was the little boy chugging the milk. And the little girl encouraging him to do it. I also noticed that you have several other Fiction stories. If they are as good, or better, than this one I would like to read them too, if I can.

If you're interested in reviewing any of my work you will find my Short Stories, Blogs, etc. in my PureSciFi portfolio. I have some in my PureSciFiPlus portfolio too.

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#4331143

Review of Alien Contact

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Rated: E

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Hello Kerik/Ed almighty,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your twelfth year with us.

Overall Impression: This is one of the best, if not the best, stories that I have ever read. I loved it from beginning to end. Not because it was Science Fiction, even though that was a plus, but because of how it was written. And what it was about. True, I will read almost anything that's Science fiction. But that's not the only reason why I read a story. I read what I think that I will like. And I very glad that I did with this one.

The Story Itself: What I liked the most about this story was the comedy aspects of it. There are other Alien races in the universe that have shows like 'Survivor.' So, it's not all that unbelievable that one might observe ours. But there aren't any races observing us right now that do. I also don't think any of the ones that do have shows like ours gets eaten. There several that when they say you have been eliminated from this competition they mean that literally. In other words, they are eliminated.

Your Characters: You gave Dartak a name. And I liked that you gave them a name. But you didn't give one to who they were talking to. I would have do that too. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: This whole story was dialogue. After all, it was part of the Dialogue 500 contest. Did you win the contest for that month? If not, you should have.

Any Last Thoughts: Do you have any more Short Stories like this one. If so, I would definitely like to read and review them if I could.

What was the final Word Count for this story? Was it close to 500? The reason why I ask is because if it wasn't I probably would have added the line '"Oh, great. I had to pick the one human on Earth that doesn't watch Survivor."'

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Thank you for sharing this story with WDC. And sharing it especially with me. Keep on writing great stories like this one.

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#4331141

Review of The Drowned Lover

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Rated: 13+

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Hello von Garrett,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your sixth year with us.

Overall Impression: Yes, I liked this story a whole lot. It kept me in Suspense and Mystery even though it wasn't categorized as either. But at the same time I didn't like it. I know that sounds confusing and it is. It's not because of the story itself. But how it was written.

The Story Itself: I wouldn't call this a twisted romance. It's more of a one-sided romance.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: This story was telling instead of showing. And that's a definite no-no. At least it looked like it was to me. Some of it did show your story. But most of it was telling. Unless some of it was dialogue or thinking without the quotation marks or italics.

Any Last Thoughts: Was he a seaman of some kind, like a Pirate or a fisherman? The reason why I ask is because of your ending. Isn't the Siren's Song part of their lives at sea?

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#4331138

Review of Science

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Rated: E

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Hello M.Deity,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your sixth year with us.

Overall Impression: This story was very weird. In fact, it was so weird I didn't understand it. Don't get me wrong. I did like this story. But I didn't understand it.

The Story Itself: What I liked the best about this story is that you brought up the eleventh dimension. You are right about there being more than four. But how do you know about the eleventh one? Is this the fiction part of your story? If so, then you are wrong. There are a lot more than four, or even eleven. There's several hundred of them. and I'm a little curious how you knew that.

Your Characters: You gave miles a name. But you didn't 'me' one. If this were my story, I would have given 'me' a name too. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: This whole Short Story is one big dialogue between Miles and Me. The only thing that it didn't have was the quotation marks around it.

Any Last Thoughts: I'm also a little confused about how this story was written. It was categorized as a Short Story. But the way it was written it looks more like an old fashioned screenplay scene, skit, etc.

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#4331137

Review of Longing

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Rated: E

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Hello Demacian Freeman,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your sixth year with us.

Overall Impression: I agree with you that love hurts. Sometimes it's good. And sometimes it's bad. It depends on the individuals involved at the time that it happens. But I think that usually it's good. Unfortunately, when there is good there is also bad. We are both.

The Story Itself: This read more like ramblings or thoughts about love than a Short Story. Don't get me wrong. I liked this story a whole lot. It just didn't read like one to me.

How They Spoke: There was no actually dialogue in this story. But it read to me like it was all, or almost all, dialogue without the quotation marks or thoughts without the italics to me.

Any Last Thoughts: Instead of just telling us how you felt about the good and bad involving love, you should have written a story about someone that was affected by it both ways. I know that's not an easy thing to do with a Word Count limitation, especially one this small. but it can be done.

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#4331136

Review of Mary GO Getter

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Rated: E

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Hello Will Dee,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your eighth year with us.

Overall Impression: It was a simple story. But it was a well-written one too. I liked it very, very much.

The Story Itself: A lot has happened almost all at once for Mary. It started out bad with her car being vandalized. And then it got worse. The parents of those teenagers should have paid for her car or paid for a new one. As for her boss and landlord, both of them should have been more lenient under the circumstances.

Your Characters: Mary is of course the main character in this story. And I liked that you gave her a name. A lot of writers don’t do that. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

Any Last Thoughts: I think that you did a very good job with this story. Do You have any more like it? If you do I would like to read and review them too when I get the chance to do it. And if they are as good, or better, than this one then I definitely want to read them.

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#4331134

Review of Wake Up? Dead?

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Rated: 13+

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Hello Geoff,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your third year with us.

Overall Impression: This read more like dialogue without the quotation marks or thoughts without the italics. Don't get me wrong. I liked this story a whole lot. It just did read like a story to me.

The Story Itself: It was a 'story' about several things. this story is about death mostly. but it's also about waking up and dreams too.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: I'm not sure. But I think you made a couple of grammar mistakes with this story. I noticed that you used the word 'maybe' several times in this story. And I think that's a no-no when it comes to grammar. So, is the word 'or' to start a sentence too. you might want to look into both of these possible errors in grammar.

Any Last Thoughts: I think you did a very good job with this story. But I am wondering why it is so short. There's nothing wrong with that. I'm just curious about it. Was it because of a Word Count limitation contest?

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#4331133

Review of Potty Time!

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Rated: 13+

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Hello womandisciple,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your tenth year with us.

Overall Impression: This story made me smile. It's a problem that every parent has to deal with. And I think that you did a great job in how you dealt with it.

The Story Itself: The story is about a little boy that tries to go to the bathroom for the first time by himself. But his mother is right there with him telling him what to do and what not to do. I always thought that it was harder to train little boys than little girls when it comes to this subject. And after reading this story I think that I am right. The one thing I probably would have done differently if I wrote it is having him do Number Two instead of Number One. Number one is easy to learn how to do. It's Number Two that's harder. At least that's what I think.

Your Characters: True, the little boy is the main character in this story.
But so is his mother. I know that it's hard to do with a story this short, but I would have given them names. Maybe something like 'Carol said, "Ready to go by yourself, Tommy?' or '"Ready to go by yourself, Tommy?" Carol asked.' I think it makes a story better if they have a name. Personally, I try to give all my characters a name. Especially, the main ones. I think that it makes them feel more real if they have a name.

How They Spoke: Most of this story was dialogue. And the dialogue itself looked good to me. But the way that it was done was a little bit confusing.

Any Last Thoughts: The way that this was written it reads more like a poem than a Short Story. Is there a reason why you did it this way. Don't get me wrong. I like this story very much. I'm just a little curious as to how come you wrote it the way that you did.

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#4331130

Review of What's up with Whatsit

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Rated: ASR

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Hello Mrs. Whatsit,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your eleventh year with us.

Overall Impression: These blog entries was very interesting. It's not because I didn't like it because I did. But it didn't make much sense to me. All three blog entries that I read were different from each other. That's not a bad thing. I have read a lot of blogs like this one. But it's still interesting.

Your Blog Introduction: It was a very weird Introduction. Don't get me wrong.
I liked it. But it didn't really make much sense to me. What does it have to do with your blog entries?

The Blog Itself: At first I was only going to review your latest blog entry because it was kind of a long one. But I noticed that the next two were pretty short. So, I read all three of them. The first one I could understand. And the third wasn't too bad. But the middle didn't make any sense to me. What was that one about? I know that it's a list. But what kind of a list was it? I'm also a little confused about the named that you mention in your blog entries. Some of them you said who they were in connection to you. But some you didn't. Did I miss something in reading them?

Any Last Thoughts: I now it doesn't read like I liked your blog. But you are wrong about that because I did like it. In fact, I wanted to read more of it. And I still do, if I can. But I just have the time to do it right now.

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#4331129

Review of A look at my personal life and thoughts.

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Rated: ASR

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Hello brom21,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your seventh year with us.

Overall Impression: I like the way that you think. You're not afraid to open up when it comes to what you like to do besides write. Which like the rest of us is your top priority. What I like the most about these blog entries is that you are a Video Game fanatic. And you aren't afraid to write about it.

The Blog Itself: I'm sorry, but I only had time today at work to read your last two blog entries. I want to read more of them. Especially, if they are as good or better than these two are. But I just don't have the time to them right now. As for the blogs themselves, they are both pretty much the same thing. You mostly talk about playing Video Games with your friends. There was a mention about finishing your Novel and editing it, though. And you did mention that you wrote for three hours on it. I would like to know more about this Novel.

Grammar, Spelling, Missing Words: Yes, I know that grammar, spelling, and missing words aren't important in blogs. But I still think that you should make every effort to do them with that in mind. And I noticed that in the first entry that I read there appeared to be a few errors. You might want to checked that out.

Any Last Thoughts: Do you write Fanfiction based on these Video Games. If you don't you should be. They always say that you should write about what you know best. And from what I read Video Games is what you know best.

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Review of L'aura del Campo

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Rated: 13+

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Hello Kåre Enga writing poetry ,

I saw that this is your anniversary month with WDC. This is your twelfth year with us.

Overall Impression: I loved these blog entries. I'm not a big fan of poetry. Probably because I'm not very good at it myself. But I know what I like. And I liked these very, very much.

Your Blog Introduction: When I first looked at your Introduction I thought to myself, 'Oh no, I'm not going to be able to review this one because it's in Spanish. I only took Spanish one year when I was in seventh grade. And that was back in the Stone Age.' But a second later as I read on I realized it wasn't in Spanish. At least I think it was Spanish. But I might be wrong about that too. I'm very happy that I was wrong about the foreign language. Otherwise, I wouldn't have read these great blog entries.

The Blog Itself: What I liked best about these blogs was that they were poetry for the Thirty Day Picture Prompt challenge. I have seen several blog entries for this challenge. It seems that everyone on WDC is doing it except for me. But this is the first one I have seen done with poetry. I also liked that they weren't rhyming poetry. It's the kind of poetry that I write. The first and third picture you chose I have seen before, especially the first one. But I haven't seen the second one before now.

Any Last Thoughts: I only read the last three blogs. But not because they were too long. It was just the opposite. It's because they were too short. if I had continued on I wouldn't have been able to stop myself. They were that good.

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