HI! I thought this was a very well written piece! I loved how dramatic it was throughout the entire story. The ending was exciting and it made me want to know more. I wouldn't change anything! Keep it up:)
I thought this was very interesting! This type of writing is not typically my cup of tea, but you still made me want to read on. It still wasn't a 5 star from me, but I think that its still worth looking at. Keep it up:)