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Review of You  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a romantic poem written heart fully to a dream lover that the author believes that they will meet someday. I almost never see faces in my dreams. I tend not to look at people's faces when I am awake so of course I do not see them in my sleep, the major exception is my wife and Doctor who characters.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a great story. I love the main character. You built a vivid world. The brother is a real prick though. There was a place that was not as smooth as the rest of it. But I could not find it when I went back to put it in the review so it could not have been that bad.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a great story. I like the kid. He has a lot of heart. Too bad he does not have any hope of an honest life. If he had been born with more resources he could have been a really influential person. I would love to hear more about this kid. Like does he survive to become a captain?
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Review of Life Saver  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
i'm not sure if this follows the prompt, many contests require the prompt to be used exactly, it they allow any changes they are punctuation or capitalization. It is a good story. You might consider fixing the wording to match exactly just in case it would suck for such a good story to get disqualified on a techincality. you also should probably identify the contest it is for in the note at the bottom. In case someone else wants to enter after reading this. I think I might but I have a link back in the I write forum. Think about the people that don't
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Review of Liar  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this poem. It very well describes the way we think about ourselves. I am satisfied with every word choice. They are well thought out. I did not follow the title through the poem until the last line. Then the whole poem came together for me, from title to tip.
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for entry "~ Confidence Course ~" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
That sounds like a wet day. I like that you had the idea to dry your hands on your head. Congratulations on passing the confidence course. Did the girl in front of you pass? Did she finish the obstacle? Memories are a treasure trove of good stories. Did you won the contest
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Review of The Jericho Loop  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
THis is an awesome story. I really did not see anything like this coming from the prompt. I would love to read more, to know how he eventually breaks the time loop. Did you win? If you do, make sure to put that in your note at the bottom. You might consider putting the note in a drop note or pop note
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Review of Donavon  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a wonderful story. I like Jack he's good people. Donovan seems devoted to the birds and his job or duty or whatever. I love the birds. They have wonderful personalities. To me mindy has the personality of a cat. Always complaining about the food taking too long even when the bowl was already full and waiting.
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Review of Hugh Dunnit  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a somewhat surreal story. It has the flavor of a dream or hallucination. Hugh is really obtuse. It is not really cute of him. I like his secretary and pity her. I also pity the cops at the graveyard, and the poor abused body of his mother. I hope he gets a 72 hour psych hold for his behavior.
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Review of This Broken Earth  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Really nice chapter. A release from the tension of the last two, right up until the last scene. that wrenched things right back up. there is a lovely push and pull in the tension of this story. it's like real life in that way. I like the off duty time activities shown.
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Review of Angel Feathers  Open in new Window.
for entry "Duck Family Vacation" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
That is an absolutely cute story. It was family friendly. Though I think the writing style isn't quite what I think of when I think of writing for kids. It is a good story. I love the characters. But it disturbed me that Daisy is Donnie's sister. I mean, given Disney.
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Review of The Voice Inside  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is creepy. The voice sounds like a demon or some kind of evil spirit. I can see the poor kid trying desperately to resist the voice's commands. The poor tortured dude. I would not like to be in his place. I really wonder what the voice will make the aunt do.
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Review of Wrong Turn  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
That is a sad story. I liked it a lot. For me it was told in a very real way. I felt like I was sitting around that table with the author and the storm chasers. I felt where it was going before it got there but that did not reduce the impact for me any. I felt the part about the hospital was rushed, but it felt right that it would be. They would not want to linger over the details at that point. Again a great story from you.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
That was adorable! The dialect you used was perfect! I thought that the main character was absolutely awesome. I have to say that some of the punctuation around the dialect was odd to me, but it worked well enough that I can not say it was wrong. Another great story, thanks for posting it and bringing it to my attention.
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Review of The Snake  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
What a smooth poem. It comes off as highly complimentary and sympathetic towards the snake, despite the fact that it is a deadly murderous creature. It leans heavily on the reality that the snake has to eat. It gives me a new way to appreciate the strength and value of the predator.
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Review of Blue Bird Flies  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a lovely poem. I am reviewing it on your first WdC anniversary. You have great writing potential. This poem is well written. It tells a good story. I was rooting for the bluebird and was disappointed that he did not make it to the sky. This poem also calls to the potential of the writer and the reader. I hope you come back online and are greeted with this review in your inbox.
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Review of Celestial Wars  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I like this story. The magic came as a cool surprise to me. The two old lady's taking off on the bike together was entertaining. I could see the dumbfounded looks on the bikers' faces. It made me giggle. The two observers in the sky seemed awfully disappointed that the women diffused the situation so simply.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a cool vignette. It makes very vivid images form in my mind. I can only imagine what it must be like to go in there and find a natural solution to summer heat. This summer has been so hot. Worse than that one of our window air conditioner died and it took us a week to replace it.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is interesting. A trip through your psyche. I hope you know how much we all care about you thank you for hanging in there for us. Dark places are terrible places to be. I
hope this piece was cathartic for you.

I am sorry you keep revisiting this place. I wish we could bury our problems too.
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Review of The Missing Coins  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
awesome use of the prompt, i loved it. It is genius how the mom was able to take her son down a peg. His head was entirely too swollen over how good a magician he was. I wonder if she is going to tell him or if she is just going to keep the secret to his failure to herself.
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Review of Angel Feathers  Open in new Window.
for entry "Liberty" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Excellent use of the prompt. It really worked for me. Liberty is a likeable character. I was worried the whole time you were just setting us up for a disappointing twist like basically her new parents do not come for her. I was worried they would get into an accident or just change their mind. I was pleasantly surprised when they arrived with gifts. I am glad I didn't see the prompt before I finished reading. Perhaps it would be better to stick the prompt and the note on the contest in a drop note or pop note. I know it would have ruined the story for me if i had seen it before I finished the story.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a unique short story. I tells of a situation all too common to us writers. I used to have a real problem writing in notebooks and journals. I would buy them because I liked the cover, then I would not write in them because I was afraid of ruining them. Eventually I hit on the secret I needed. I would work on my penmanship I would write the alphabet over and over until my brain filled with words. By then I had already "ruined" it so the words could not be worse. Now I write shopping lists and reminders then eventually stories flow.
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Review of Ben's Quest  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a cool story. I like it. It seems entirely reasonable. It seems that history is cyclic anyway. But is there really enough DNA variation in just two people for them to repopulate the planet by themselves, or will Ben be bringing forward more specimens for diversity?
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Review of Good night  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very whimsical poem. It reminds me of childhood and a parents wish for a child. The various parts hold together well. It is definitely thematically consistent. I think there should be one more stanza break in the middle of the eight lined stanza to make it look right. Was this prompted by something? You might check and see if it qualifies for the writing for kids contest this month if it's being held.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow that is creepy! I love the way you used the prompt. I have read one other entry for this prompt and it was cool too. I am curious if I could do half as well. This really is a complete story wrapped up in a well written piece of poetry. He seems really scary.
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