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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I really like your story here. Probably need to pay some attention to spelling and wording. i.e. The feeling of being anxiety had departed...there are a few spelling things, etc.

"H-hello. My name is- is Khris. Khris Winters." She nodded then, stepping a little closer.

"You can just call me Cat. How are you feeling

For this you might either have Khris call her Mrs. Anderson first, or have her do this in a continuation of her intro ('I am Grey's mother, my friends nad family call me Cat')


Good writing!
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