As usual I enjoyed your writing. Great characters and situation. The bar scene was vivid, although it might use just a little more in the way of other character description. Honestly, I had to reach for that one little thing. I also like the fact that if you're an immortal you can pretty well do whatever the hell you want (fighting or whatever) without worrying too much about the aftermath. I've been in bar fights and my idea of a good time is not waking up with bloody hands lumps all over my head. Good stuff to think about!
Can't wait to read more of this.
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