I see the makings of a great scary story here...it was just a bit difficult to follow at times, and some passages seemed more like filler than crucial information to advance the plot. The characters are very likeable and fun! I'd like to have a little more backstory as to why the cabin is the way it is, and who the old man is.
Sometimes the dialogue seemed more like filler than crucial to the story, but it was still a fun adventure to go along with Abby and Megan. Please keep working on this story, it can only get spookier :)
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