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Review of Mountain Madness  
Review by Kathy M Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ ★★★★★ | (3.5)
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Hi,

I think this has the potential to be a great story. It has a facinating plot of two killers trapped in a snow storm NEXT to a wealthy resort area. I'd suggest, however, that the author needs to tightened up. I'd also suggest more character development. Maybe take more time to talk about the killers' hit first. A conversation or two. I'd also say that in a $400 a night place, the killers would find more than a couple of hundred dollars.

You may want to help the readers to realize that the escapees were as trapped by the snow as the vacationers. That isn't made clear here.

A few editorial remarks:

"agencies where looking for two escapees" were looking?

Their goal was to find a way off the mountain, but they learned to much despair that there was still no way off the mountain.

You might want to tighten this sentence.
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