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Review of Dear Dad  
Rated: E ★★★★★ | (4.0)
This was a very moving piece that i really enjoyed reading. You are brave for posting such a personal account, and i am sorry for your loss. I too have lost my father, so when i read your piece it really reminded me of how much i missed my own father (I dont know if that was in your intentions, but it was nice.)

The only thing i noticed is a couple of spots where grammar and spelling came into account, specifically in the beginning.

keep on writing

Romeo
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Rated: 13+ ★★★★★ | (3.5)
Good start! You have many good thoughts, jokes, and great ideas with room for some improvement.

Good:
Funny. Some slapstick humor (fat jokes, mom jokes) but also some intelligent subtle humor as well. well done.

Your script captured a realistic dorm conversation. No matter the setting, your characters could be depicted as college students.

Improvement:
The conversation is a little forced and unnatural. I know actors contribute a good deal to this with their own interpretation, but it is important when writing a script that you can include slang and other natural elements of a conversation.

Keep it up, hope to see this grow

Romeo
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