This first chapter is a very good setup for things to come, it leaves things open, but effectively establishes the main characters want to gain. It doesn’t do anything extraordinarily, as it’s limited by being the first chapter, but it does its job very well.
I have some mixed opinions on this chapter, specifically fattening up Roxanne, but slimming down the guys, however, it’s very well written, and I definitely think overall it’s a positive.
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