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Being your reader, then your other eyes.
I'm good at...
Discovering the psychology of a writer and the effect of the work on the reader. The effect on the reader is all that matters to me. Also, I'm not a grammar giant, so don't expect much.
Favorite Genres
Adventure, Action, Fantasy and SciFi.
Least Favorite Genres
Romance. No romance.
Favorite Item Types
Poems, novels and blog articles.
Least Favorite Item Types
Erotic articles.
I will not review...
Any romance, because I just hate reading it, and because it does no good to anyone. I agree you might not understand. Thanks.
Public Reviews
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Review of Harvest Time  Open in new Window.
Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Mm...
Time to cherish the belies? Ok. 😂

Israel 🖍️
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Review of Alone  Open in new Window.
Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
There is more in life than a tent that rejected its king. The worth of a man is his heart, not his pocket nor his mouth. Repentance and reversal is an act of humilty. Males lack this very much.

I think that the abandoned can be accepted, if the other party sees a reason to accept such. But one must make steps to get the forgiveness of those he wronged while he is yet alive, not fear about it. Real men lead by example: humilty and true love. Make the step. Not to be accepted, but to get their forgiveness. That is number one.

Israel 🖍️
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Review of Corona  Open in new Window.
Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Creative.

I think they made a vaccine for it recently? It will work eh?

Israel 🖍️
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Review of A Touch of Love  Open in new Window.
Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Timmy. I read this poem.

I'm left with what to think about.

Israel 🖍️


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Review of Jerry  Open in new Window.
Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with Dreamweaver Bar & Grill  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, I read this story today. Are you still here in this site? Please give me a reply ASAP if so. Thanks very much.

I think that Jerry is gifted. Gifted in comforting and counselling people, but is deficient in physical well-being, which hindered him from living out his full potential. But despite that, he helped the protagonist. For that alone I think he was a hero. His life likely would not have been in vain.

I enjoyed the story, but I stumbled on some wrong sentences -- even an incomplete one. You do not seem to have much interest in good grammar, but it helps make it easier for your reader to understand and enjoy your writing.

Greetings.

Israel 🖍️


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Review of Mrs. Markola  Open in new Window.
Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  Open in new Window.
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
😂
Very funny and masterfully told. No moment reading it was not interesting, captivating and nice.

I think that the woman needed more description, since the story was meant to last for a few moments, but I also now understand that you might have been economising words. You could make put more colour to the canvas when your use for the story -- maybe the contest -- is gone by.

Israel 🖍️
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Review of Mia’s Guests  Open in new Window.
Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
We couldn't get angry at the lady. Mysterious.

Greetings.

Israel 🖍️
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Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nicely penned.
Are you really a teenager?
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Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with The Poet's Place  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (4.5)
Sounds like a poem on racism.

The message was clear and stirring.

Thanks.

Israel 🖋️
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Review of A CAN OF WORMS  Open in new Window.
Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I've been to the feild you discussed; being lonely and not finding it easy to make friends take you there. You'll deal with relationships differently, because you understand some things, and have suffered.

If paradventure the friend you have likes you and doesn't want to lose you, and you yourself don't wanna lose the person, that is priceless, if truthfulness and trustworthiness are also attendant.

I like the analogy. I also have a question: If the worms are bad characters, should I be happy or be sad and keep asking God to take them away?

Israel 🖋️
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Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
(I hope no one will hear me) I think she's charming 😊
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Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Imaginative and interesting.
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Review of Who Knows?  Open in new Window.
Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Though the question is rhetorical, permit me to act as if it isn't. Since the speech is philosophical, permit me to say my view.

I think that beauty is whatever appeals to the mind, and that two minds might see the same things differently. This signifies that the heart of a person is as beautiful as he finds right things beautiful, and as ugly as he finds wrong things beautiful.

Thanks for sharing the poem.

Also, do you write structured poems? I wish you do; I read this one like a stylishly worded prose.

Israel 🖋️
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Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
Both interesting and imaginative.

The rhythm is also good.
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Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
The price was interesting; I burned through it as fire would an intensely sucked cigarillo. The language was simple. Nothing is as nice as complex ideas put in simple words. I call think such people are heroes, since not being understood or speaking simply is easier. 😂

My opinion is that conventional methods can be boring - permit me to yawn - but known methods are good to be said, especially to one who has no idea what to do next, or how to do it. There are many 'do nots', but I don't obey them all. I learn from them, but that's all.

Concerning what you said, I think that what a writer should not forget too is, 'Is this realistic?'

Greetings.
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Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I think that these politicians are all players, mostly. Getting fanatical about them is folly.

I also believe that my party shouldn't tell me whom to vote for. If the man my party chose wouldn't do collective good to my country, I would not vote him, though he be from my party. Our pursuits should go beyond parties to men and what they can offer.

My opinion.

Greetings.
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Review of River Side  Open in new Window.
Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I saw the romantic scene.

I also know that the writer is a woman. Her voice came through.

You are trying in giving your lines the appropriate number of syllables, but you have some things to see to too.

The number of lines per stanza was irregular, the poem was shallow in my eyes...had no depths..heart. The words you use matter.

Greetings.
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Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.0)
Hello Shinobi...I thought that this means a masterless person? Are you a Samurai? 😂

Okay. Getting serious. I don't understand your language...I don't speak Japanese. Since you can write your name in English, I certainly believe you can do your articles in it too.

This will help both you and your reader's a lot. They can read your article and advice you, while you learn.

I don't know any Japanese here, so who would read your articles. I hope for a reply.

Greetings.
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Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Great 🙄
I just wonder why people can't leave their hairs as it is. At least, the colour should be respected. 😕
Well, not my concern 🤷 I'm only here to read and enjoy.

The article has a captivating title... that's what got me reading.
The write up seemed nonfictional, which is why I'm presuming that this might not be fictional. 😉

It was wearying when the tale seemed to cut off for a minute, and the speaker started taking about when she was waking up and what she does... but I tried hard to finish. I hope you see the fault and fix it.

Greetings.
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Review of Power  Open in new Window.
Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with The Poet's Place  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (3.0)
The message was passed, and the last imagery was the highest bullet of them all, speaking for myself.

I like your confidence and free expression. One shouldn't drop this in favour of sounding majestic. You sounded majestic, anyway. A good mark.

Your sentences are wrong, sometimes, which you should look into. There is poetic licence, but its refuge should be sought sparsely, not as a lifestyle, or your poems will sound like fourth class poetry to an advanced reader.You sound like a beginner. I sounded like this once.

Your rhyme is zero percent, which is why I read it as a prose and not as a poem. For example: Twinkle, twinkle little star;
How I wonder what you are!

You liked that, right?

Try to give your lines decipherable rhythm, at least. From there, start practicing end rhymes. Not all poems have end rhymes, but it gives a kind of look to your poem.

Remember not to drop originality, sincerity or simplicity for rhymes.

Much to say, but I'll be around if you need me.

Greetings.
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Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Interesting. Captivating since the discovery of the vials and his presumption of its source.

Flowing, simple and straight to the point. Even carried with it the voice of a male writer. I don't have to check if I'm wrong 😂

My opinion on the empty bottle is: since this guy lived in the future of the time it was sent in, how did he know it was a joke. I wasn't convinced. I plucking out my pipe from gobbling down the explanation that would've satisfied me for once. We writers explain things that way sometimes, but it makes our character more than human and all-knowing. 🙂

Greetings.
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Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a jolly poem. I even heard bells jingle as you spoke. The world there shined forth is jolly. The jingles, the bells, the sweet nature.

I also beheld something else: you didn't struggle much to keep rhyming when the words seem no where around. You stuck to passing the message. That's interesting.
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Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I read this.

Greetings.
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Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  Open in new Window.
Rated: E | (5.0)
😂 So sad the villain was male. I wouldn't wanna be him; he really did have a bad day in the hands of super Sophilia.

I hated his actions because of how he kept the world gloomy. I'm glad it was just a story. No one wants him anywhere near the doors of reality.

Is the story yet in progression?

Greetings.
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Review by Mikel Bardsdale Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Phew. I liked listening to this lady. Her voice and effect got me reading. Who wouldn't?

As a male, my own heart has been through a lot, so it seems I keep away from getting attached, because I fell in love with a playmate in my junior years, who didn't care if I died or lived, and I spent up to ten years(?) recuperating, after crying on my own for long. She's a lawyer now, married and working in Britain.

I think that the moving on with the girl of the man isn't to make her keep doing that. If he cares about his wife, he's sad, but doesn't wanna be alone either.
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