hi!
this poem was really touching, and your use of rhymes was great.
i hope you keep writing poems like this and even better :)
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keep writing and never give up because you are truly gifted.
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this poem is great, but it was also confusing(for me) but that is why i liked it.
when i started reading through this great poem i found my self at the end really quickly (which is a good thing)
your use of rhymes was great.
i hope i could write nice poems too :)
anyway great work, keep writing!