Wow. I really like this piece. Strong verbs like quiver, patter, and churn give this poem a real feeling of movement and momentum. There are strong images with few words, which I feel are the marks of good poetry. The one nitpick I have is that time-streaked should have a hyphen. Otherwise, I think this is a solid piece. Thank you for sharing it.
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