Amethyst Angel 🌼's (greenwillow) Reviews

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Review Style

Casual, friendly. I'll point out typos when I see them and make suggestions about quality, characters and logic, besides telling you how I feel about the piece.

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Does it make sense? Are the characters well portrayed? What's the overall feel of the piece?

Favorite Genres

Poetry, children's, anything rated E

Least Favorite Genres

Anything higher than 18+

Favorite Item Types

Poems, flash fiction, essays, articles, biographical/personal, etc

Least Favorite Item Types

AI Generated Content of Any Kind.

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NSFW or AI generated content. Please do not send me anything that comes back from QuillBot AI detector as more than 25% AI generated. I will check and decline it.

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#4747988

Review of Freedom

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Greetings from the House of Mormont!
By participating in a Writing.com activity called "Game of Thrones"

, I am in no way endorsing the GoT franchise or identifying as a fan thereof. I’m here to help my team win

HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"

Whee! I’m here with a panicky review to finish the dratted doors with

There seems to be some confusion about how many reviews are supposed to be crammed in that last door: I’m absolutely certain Gaby is demanding twenty (

) but Annette tells me it’s just ten. At any rate, better safe than sorry, because I had no idea the Doors would be closing tomorrow at midnight. I’m so close!

I love your spin on this prompt. The beavers escaping from the fur farm is heartwarming and exciting, and perfectly suits you as you’re from Canada. We see the aged leader bringing them through adventures and trials to a new more natural and happier life in the wild, and we hope that the ending is a happily ever after. There is a chance they might be found and recaptured.

My story was about a neglected horse… but whatever. I’m surprised you haven’t opened a folder or a book item to hold your GoT stories in. That may be a good idea to keep everything tidy later on. Also, it’s fun to include the specific prompt so people know what you had in mind.

Great story! Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing

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#4747944

Review of Trinity

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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)

Greetings from the House of Mormont!
By participating in a Writing.com activity called "Game of Thrones"

, I am in no way endorsing the GoT franchise or identifying as a fan thereof. I’m here to help my team win

Ah, a poem! I love poetry, especially simple nature poems that have a lot of meaning packed into them.

Formatting first… you’ve left this poem quite small and unimpressive on the page. Perhaps it would look more “poetic” if it were centered, with larger font size and maybe even a color. And we know that a dropnote for your thoughts is a nice tidy idea.

I love the concepts you’ve arranged here, contemplating three different types of birds and comparing them to the variety of human personalities. We see the sparrows, plain on the outside but soaring to surprising heights and nesting in far off nooks and crannies. We see the ravens, and are somewhat unsure about how exactly they “conjure rainbows…” is it a biblical metaphor? A reference to rain and shadows? A reference to how purportedly bright the Corvid family of birds is? We move on to the next line and see swans, with their monogamous relationships, and the conclusion drawn that these three are “like us.” Yet there are so many more birds, beautiful and diverse, and there is much more to humanity than simply these three elements.

Yet, this is a charming and simple poem. I don’t have anything to offer for advice because I’m quite laidback when it comes to poetry. I view it as a highly subjective art form and pretty much anything goes, as long as one puts one’s heart into it.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing

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#4747941

Review of Just One Point of View

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

Greetings from the House of Mormont!
By participating in a Writing.com activity called "Game of Thrones"

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Hi again!

This is great advice on writing fiction . We see the vivid differences in the writing between your first example and second, and the point of view is brought home with drama and care. Plus we get lots of words from you, explaining the reasoning behind it all.

I chuckled when you said that about the Wikipedia article on France in 1815… I’d probably want to read it myself if I was interested. In fact, I might prefer to read the objective, sterile report of facts rather than the harsh, visceral reality of a story about the situation. Sometimes I shy away from grittiness in my writing, which leads to having a sort of childish, fairytale quality. It’s good to remember that vivid writing is more memorable and meaningful than “bland” writing. I also have tendencies to narrate stories, especially with first drafts. I like to get it down in almost a summary fashion and then dive into the experience from a deeper and more active perspective second time around.

As before, I recommend Size 4 Verdana font.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing

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#4747926

Review of Schrodinger's Cat

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

Greetings from the House of Mormont!
By participating in a Writing.com activity called "Game of Thrones"

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Ah, something brief and lighthearted. I like finding the fun stuff in people’s ports, and this fits the bill quite well. I wasn’t sure what to expect as the cat prowled through the Forbidden Zone… was it the kitchen, perhaps? I wondered. Would a fire break out? But no, instead we get a cat with superpowers, who tries them out on his owner. It’s a bit unclear if the owner’s behaviors are connected to the cat’s “orders” or if it’s simply a matter of habit, but it’s fun to think the cat could be ordering her around. Potential here even for a longer story.

Remember to leave your notes in a dropnote at the bottom, and Size 4 Verdana font… (you’ll get sick of seeing me say it, but I’m just using it as a filler.) I think I’ve done 5 reviews today, and since I like to use the Daily Review Rewards program as efficiently as possible, that’ll be it for today. I’ll come back tomorrow with two more, if all goes well.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing

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#4747923

Review of A Green Christmas

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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)

Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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An amusing story we have here, of a bad boy learning a lesson from his favorite Star Wars characters on Christmas. It was well written for a first draft, with little details that brought it to life. I don’t know much about Star Wars, but I chuckled at the way you captured Yoda’s unusual language patterns.

The story is simple and memorable. Timmy stands out somewhat from the usual young brat because he seems to be more manipulative, perhaps indeed brighter. If he were older I would almost say he displays psychopathic tendencies, but he does repent nicely at the end and resolve to do better, encouraged by Yoda.

There are instances when reviewing where I feel tongue tied… what am I supposed to say? You incorporated the target word quite well by putting it in the mouth of one who talks strangely anyway. A little tweaking, tidying up perhaps, and you could probably submit this to a holiday contest someday.

I usually recommend Size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability and accessibility across devices. You could also move the background section to a dropnote, either at the top or the bottom.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing

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#4747912

Review of Short Bio

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Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)

Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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Hi, Max. I’m sure you’ve noticed the hullabaloo taking place within the halls of WdC. I’m here to review five of your items so I can “open a door” in this activity. Blame Gaby

It’s nice to get to know you a little better. I appreciate your background in math and remember the joke that goes around during the holidays about “happy holidays” in algebraic language. I see that a love of reading runs in your family, since your daughter is a digital librarian. Perhaps a link to your website to learn more about you might be a good idea. I remember visiting your website recently and being impressed (or maybe slightly amused) by the published book covers, so the link must be around somewhere.

I’d like to take the opportunity to thank you for your patient advice about every story I’ve offered through your Crosstimbers Review Forum. Your advice has been invaluable, and I usually end up making some last minute changes to incorporate it before the contest deadline

which reminds me, there’s only a few days left to write for this month’s Quotation Inspiration! Eek

Thanks for being here. Your presence is greatly appreciated. Take care and keep writing

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#4747896

Review of Your Pet Did What???Tell Me, Tell Me!!

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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Ah, pets. Everyone has stories about beloved animals, even if they don’t actually own any. Pet stories are a classic way to make friends and share memories. This is a good idea, and it would be fun to see if something of the sort is still active on WdC. Hmm, I think there is a contest running where we can submit items about pets.

I’m on a mission to review 5 closed forums, and I found this one by looking through the “oldest first” option in the search engine. I see forums in those days were very “Spartan,” with little in the way of fancy formatting or even very large font. Nowadays people strive to make their forums as colorful and engaging as possible before one even reaches the comment section. They also function as places to host contests, as well as daily check-in spots for people to chat and see who else is active. I assume you are no longer active around here. Very few people from twenty two years ago are, or even just ten years. I do see you still have an upgraded account, which is a good sign. I’ll have to check out your portfolio sometime soon.

Thanks for being here at the beginning, take care, wherever your journey has taken you all these years, and as I tell everyone here, keep writing

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#4747884

Review of The 63 contest! --CLOSED

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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Hi…

I don’t know if you’re still active here or not (I guess the chances of that are quite slim…) I’m on a mission to review five closed forums, so I went to the search engine and specified “most recently modified last” and this was one of the oldest ones available.

So…this appears to be a simple “fundraiser lottery” type of activity, where a pot of WdC Gift Points is solicited and then the total funds are split between the host and a lucky winner. Did WdC have the “virtual dice” yet at this time? How was your winner determined? It must have been hard to keep track of 63 participants… I find things like that are made easier by the Notepad, where I can gather up reviews and posts and other such things and then post them in the proper area when I’m ready.

I don’t recognize anyone who joined the fun, but that’s hardly surprising because I’m a newbie who’s only been here since July ‘23. Honestly, I’m at a loss for anything else to say… maybe I should go find a forum that was closed more recently, because I fear I’m talking into the wind anyway

Thank you for being here at the beginning. Take care, wherever you are at this stage in your life, and keep writing, as I tell everyone

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#4747766

Review of CONTEST: Words of ImaginationClosed

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Rated: ASR

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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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Well, now here’s a blast from the past! To open Door 19, I have to review five different forums that are currently closed. So to do that more efficiently I went to the search engine and sorted them out by “most recently modified last,” which brought up yours as the second option. I think it might possibly be the oldest and even the first forum ever created here

I see it’s a contest, which has all the earmarks of modern contests here: award icons, gift points, rules, and prompts, which seem to be rather strange to my mind. Imagination Alphabet? I’ll have to take a look at that…

It’s sad to observe that you and Hooves are the only donors/judges from this forum left on the site; the others have either left entirely or become White Cases. I see that most of the winning items are also gone for similar reasons.

I love finding “time capsules” here, and definitely this is one of the most historic and interesting I’ve seen so far. There’s not all that much I can think of to say about it. I’m quite glad you are still here and active after so many years.

Thanks for hosting that and leaving it up, take care and keep writing

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#4747193

Review of The Black Hat

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Rated: 13+

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Hi, I’m here to review your item for I Write 2024.

I’m happy to find a story written for the Quotation Inspiration this month, as it’s always difficult to gauge participation in the Official WdC contests until after the fact. I guess I like to see what ideas other people have to interpret the prompt, especially this one.

We have here a story of two men, friends from way back, who have a misunderstanding over the place of the friend in the home of the one he’s come to move in with. It was tastefully written, save for the one f-bomb and the sh*t (both of which are acceptable for the rating anyway) I wasn’t sure how dark it would get or how literally the prompt would be interpreted, and was relieved at the quick, blunt ending. It is written simply and clearly, drawing together the theme of good and bad as seen in the Westerns so enjoyed by the two when they were young. I enjoyed the Australian setting and the subtle reminder that Christmas takes place in the summer down under.

The plot feels rather trite and predictable, as we can immediately anticipate the danger lurking in Sam’s desire to host his friend, especially seeing as that the friend had an affair and that’s what started the mess in the first place. Sam must have been quite blinded by friendship to not realize the obvious risk involved. In fact, I’ve had that kind of story in my head for years, wondering if it would be worth writing. I also thought of something simplistic like that for the Quotation Inspiration, but I didn’t really want to deal with such a topic. My latest idea for it - before the month runs out! - is a fantasy.

I would recommend underlining the datelines in order to present a tidier organization, and also adding a few centered stars in between scenes to divide them more clearly. And I never thought I’d say this, but maybe a slightly smaller font size would give it a more “mature” appearance? I like size 4 for everything.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing

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#4746964

Review of ~I'm Coming Home~

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Rated: 13+

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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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, I am in no way endorsing the GoT franchise or identifying as a fan thereof. I’m here to help my team win

Wow, what a story. Brief and touching, yet so simple in the rendering. We see the heartbroken woman, her desire to be a mother, her rescue of the infant and her brave yet startling decision to run away with the baby girl to a new life in Mexico.

I see nothing to correct or change here; this is the kind of flash fiction I’d like to be able to write. I’m curious that it was a weekly prompt; nowadays Arakun hosts her prompts daily, which is quite a feat because she has to get them all judged and posted up by midnight.

That’s a gorgeous award icon, and well deserved… and now I have to figure out how to fill in four hundred more characters

This is the final review of your port raid from me, and I must say it was a lot of fun. I never really stopped by your port for more than a brief glance… and there’s still plenty more to explore. I didn’t have the time or energy to check out the Lou Ryan detective stories, for example.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep up the good work - you’re greatly appreciated around here

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#4746903

Review of "The Best Gift"

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Rated: 13+

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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
By participating in a Writing.com activity called "Game of Thrones"

, I am in no way endorsing the GoT franchise or identifying as a fan thereof. I’m here to help my team win

Whoa, what a stunning and beautiful story we have here! I love it, and heeding your request at the bottom that we don’t offer suggestions as to changing it would be easy. Honestly, I can’t think of a thing I would change about it, aside from the basic and monotonous observation to use Size 4 Verdana font, which I’ve said to you enough times already

The cherished moments of a newly minted family are heartfelt and touching, reminding us that families should be whole and happy and sometimes the very Angel we need to help us heal is the one we have unknowingly “entertained at our home…” I’m thinking of a quote from the Book of Hebrews right now (13:2…)

It also reminds us how “all things work for good” and even the darkest tragedy has light at the end of the tunnel. It is a story of hope and resilience, of a mother’s love that stretched across the boundaries of life and provided an answer to the problems caused by such sudden loss.

This is a striking work, and for a newbie it’s quite commendable. I would hope some of my work leaves a lasting impression in such a way.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing

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#4746892

Review of The Not So Calm Before the Storm

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Rated: 13+

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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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Oh my, what an absurd situation! It plays with essential horror elements in a fairytale way which has us wondering by the end whether the story is as straightforward as it might appear. For one thing, we are presented with an unreliable narrator, who views the people they are entrusted to escort as stupid pests. We also see the narrator’s carelessness in not preparing more effectively for the storm and the journey through the woods. They also display a certain callousness in barging into the unlocked dwelling. Surely they should have noticed signs of current habitation once they got in.

The tension rises as we encounter the ferocious cat, which creates some serious damage to the man and the window. We can’t help chuckling a little when we see the “fedora shaped hole” in the window and marvel that the hat never left his head. The absurdity of the situation escalates when the cat wreaks further havoc and the broom is used ineffectively against it.

So as not to summarize the entire story, which I seem to be doing for some reason, I’ll simply say it was hilarious and sinister at the same time, teasing us with hints of underlying danger and a birdwatching adventure gone awry that wasn’t all that well thought out in the first place.

I would suggest Size 4 Verdana font, and also you might want to tidy up the list of funny people and their characteristics at the beginning. Long lists with several components should be separated by both semicolons and commas for clarity.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing

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#4746879

Review of TAKE YOUR PARTING GIFTS ON THE WAY OUT!

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Greetings from the House of Mormont!
By participating in a Writing.com activity called "Game of Thrones"

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Ah, the drama of parenting daughters. You have captured the weirdness and frustration of such without being too personally specific, and given us a bright idea to help our own families out in such a way by preparing them for the inevitable growing up moment.

It’s really a very time honored thing to do, as evidenced by hope chests, dowries and other such things. Every family has a responsibility to set their daughters up in the right direction and provide love and support, up to a certain point, and it’s good to know your kids turned out ok and appreciate all the effort that went into their upbringing. As a daughter, I know the drama all too well, having caused plenty of havoc and mayhem in my day

Your narrative is clear, showing and telling without delving into dialogue or play-by-play that could slow it down or appear too fictionalized. We see a mother who wants the best for her girls and desires to avoid conflict in the most productive way possible.

I would definitely suggest using Size 4 Verdana font here, but aside from that I don’t see anything wrong. The mention of that French card game at the beginning is nifty; I had to google that real quick as I was reading. Perhaps a word count at the top would be a good idea so we know what we’re getting into.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing

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#4746870

Review of White Balloons

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Rated: ASR

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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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A quietly contemplative free verse poem centering around the narrator’s encounter with a burial in the drizzling rain.

The scene is painted with truly poetic clarity: the folded umbrellas signifying the people’s obliviousness to the rain in their grieving, the white balloons indicating the passing of a child, the mother and girl standing separately, the poignant questions that arise as one views the scene. All is laid out in large, clear font, with the narrator’s internal questions separating the different observations into groups.

The free verse flows conversationally, and we feel like participants in the moment, standing in the cool damp, sharing the grief with everyone and wondering why such tragedies take place and how to move on. I especially appreciate the opening and closing repetition, with a touch of rhyme at the end; it reminds me of the great poetry of old, none of which I can particularly remember at the moment…”For Whom the Bell Tolls” or something.

Overall it is a striking, memorable poem, and I have no suggestions for improvement.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing

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#4746727

Review of Boiled Peanuts, Grits and Straw Hats

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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We have here a fond description of your Southern US winter home, presumably in Florida. You show us a glimpse into the reminiscences of the classic denizens of old Dixieland, though upon closer inspection, the memories recited by the couple are actually about Scotland, not the US. It’s like a story within a story, arranged in the casual free verse of a poem.

The enjoyment derived from your half-yearly stay down there is evident in phrases like “home away from home” and “A fond farewell,” and we see the lasting friendships formed that transcend the time and distance, to pick up where they left off next winter… though there is always the worry that they may no longer be around. Gentle whimsy is provided by the big old word “octogenarian,” and I love the charming anecdote about the Scottish New Year’s traditions.

I might suggest including a line count within the item, but it’s not a big deal. Your formatting is excellent, and the lines flow freely along in a conversational manner.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing

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#4746604

Review of The Bogeyman Will Get You

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Rated: 13+

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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
By participating in a Writing.com activity called "Game of Thrones"

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Ok, when I saw the name “Joey” in the first sentence, I had my suspicions… which were confirmed when I saw the name “Gaby” in the next paragraph

That was slick. How intense were things getting in the last GoT?

An alarming fairytale of what happened to a mischievous little girl who ventured too close to the opening to “H E double hockey sticks”, as people say around here. It was well written, conveying the shock of such a horrific sight and the hideous depiction of the devil with memorable clarity. We of course understand that it is make believe, a story invented by Joey’s mom, but at the end we don’t really get a clear view of the impact it had on Joey. Did the scary story fix his bad behavior, or did he forget all about it in a day or two?

Spelling and grammar looks good. Your font is a good choice for everyone except iPad users… mind if I complain vigorously about Apple’s substitution of some highfalutin, nearly illegible script called Snell Roundhand for the good Comic font so popular around here? I’d like to give them a piece of my mind…

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing

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#4746436

Review of I Don’t See The Juncos, Anymore

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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I'm here for three more items in your port raid, hon

I love a good nature poem, and this captures the essence of everything I look for. You have the metaphorical descriptions of the scenery, the winter snows and the flighty charm of the little birds.

Your free verse flows smoothly down through the narrative, and the words bring it to life in a true poetic fashion. We can see your love for the juncos in the caring way you've fed them over the winter and the way you think so fondly of them. Yet you hardly realized their absence until you thought you caught a glimpse of them at the Florida feeder. Such is the way of life... We don't realize how much we miss something until we look for it and it isn't there.

The lines are well balanced and easy to read. I would recommend gathering the Wikipedia quote into a dropnote for tidiness, and you can underline the title header.

As a free verse, autobiographical poem, I don't have much to suggest. I'm laidback about poetry rules and structure, as being too lazy to bother with meter and syllable counts myself. Certainly I'm not qualified to advise anyone about those things

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing

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#4746389

Review of E-Mail

Review by Amethyst Angel 🌼

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Rated: 13+

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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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Ah, is this ever relatable. I think everyone on the planet who has an email address knows the feeling of being bombarded with materialistic messages while longing for some kind of real connection to come through the inbox!

You've cleverly employed repetition, building up the different feelings that escalate to sheer exhaustion as you navigate cyber mounds of nonsensical spam that leaves us chuckling at the absurdity of it all.

You've expressed the frustration at not receiving the emails you want or need to see, while being swamped by spam that you carefully and tastefully describe. The lines are well balanced and easy to read, and the occasional rhymes add playfulness to the tone despite the distress.

I use Gmail and I'm quite happy to report that I get almost zero unsolicited spam in my inbox. I do, however, sign myself up for an endless number of newsletter type things, anything from Christian worldview news, to daily Hebrew lessons, to a frustrating amount of daily ads from craft stores and other places I have a membership with.

I've had to clear my subscriptions at least twice in the past couple years... At one point I was throwing out over 100 emails a week! Even now, I'm working with a backlog of news articles and lessons that I should be reading, stretching all the way to last Christmas

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing

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#4746388

Review of In My Tiny Room

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Rated: E

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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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A beautiful representation of your personal writing process: enclosed, quiet and alone with your thoughts and dreams, to capture them on the pages like so many fluttering butterflies.

I like how it's structured, with carefully balanced line lengths drawing us smoothly through the free flowing verses to the conclusion.

I can identify with this, as I find I write best in a quiet place by myself... But I suppose everyone does - though there are those who write things while sitting at Starbucks. Goodness, I'd be so busy people watching and listening to the ambient music, I wouldn't be able to write a thing

I'm easily distracted, I suppose. Anything to get away from the noise inside my head, which ultimately only adds to the noise as I fill it with distractions.

Anyway, you have a good personal poem here, rife with colorful metaphors that build in layers and demonstrate what you mean in showing terms, rather than simply saying "I like to write in a locked room by myself!"

And now I'm thinking about Imagine Dragons and their new song Eyes Closed... If you'll allow me to go off on a silly tangent. It's a song where the lead declares "lock me up in a cage! Just throw away the key, don't worry about me - I can do this with my eyes closed..." And I understand that to be his personal struggle with mental health and the consequences of his actions. He wants to be alone to deal with himself, to do battle within his own mind, and that internal battle produces much of the music that we get from his band.

I couldn't help drawing the comparison... I'm not trying to imply that you're saying you go in a room by yourself because of your mental health. It's a simple way to get some peace and quiet to write in, to tap into your innermost thoughts and feelings and lay those out.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing

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#4746376

Review of When Mama Wrote

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Rated: E

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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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A beautiful and heartfelt poem expressing the memories of the narrator’s mother as she agonizes and coaxes her poetry into existence with her pencil.

I love how you’ve created these beautiful images of the lady hard at work with just a few key phrases, creative and unique. The metaphor of a roller coaster ride is indicative of the depth of emotion and feeling that went into the mother’s creations, and we understand the trepidation involved with being so vulnerable as to pour her heart out upon the page, sifting through the harsh realities of her life to create something that becomes a lasting legacy.

The metaphors employed create a rich sense of meaning in many layers, as we open with the phrase “plastic shopping bags in flight” to describe the free whirling escape of her words across the page, wild and yet cautious at the same time, as indicated by the closing line of the first verse, “unwilling to tell too much.”

We close the poem with an understanding of how much the mother’s poetry means to the child, as we see them clutching the papers close and feeling the shared sense of joy and escape that the mother did, leading to a stronger bond of love and respect, no matter the present distance between them.

The poem is arranged artistically, with carefully balanced lines that flow freely down the page and lead us smoothly through the memories. This is excellent poetry, and I really enjoyed reading it. Your teal Award Icon is well deserved.

Thanks for sharing, take care, and keep writing

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#4746368

Review of Published Books of WdC Authors Forum

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Rated: 18+

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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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What a nice idea for us to help each other in our writing journey by reading, sharing and writing about the published works of our WdC friends. I didn’t know Princess Megan was a published author.

Your rewards are quite generous, and they make me feel tempted to join the fun… but unfortunately this looks like a project that has entirely petered out. Are you still doing this? I didn’t see any signs that anyone was ever rewarded for their efforts. Maybe I didn’t look far enough back in the forum. It would be fun to get this rolling again. You have set it up quite nicely, with clear directions as to what to do and how to post one’s work, and I can’t think of any suggestions for improvement, especially considering it seems to be dormant.

It seems like an excellent idea, and I feel bad that it fell flat in such a manner. The WdC product reviews are still going fairly strong as far as I know. Perhaps you can have a fundraiser of some kind to get this up and running again… or perhaps a poll to see if anyone is interested. Maybe the idea is not popular.

Take care, thanks for hosting this, and keep writing

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#4746351

Review of Epiphany or the Truth Grasped

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Rated: 13+

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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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A wise and informative article about creating an epiphany in one’s stories. I find that one’s inner worldview plays a role in what kind of epiphanies one crafts for the characters. Though I strive to maintain positivity in my items, sometimes I question whether a “happy” ending is best… other times I feel as though the ending was neither here nor there, and rather fell flat instead.

What is important is what the characters learn, whether about themselves or the outside world. The observation towards the end that one might have gone a little too easy on the character is a good point, as one doesn’t usually learn much unless much is gone through. I can think of at least one story of mine where, though the main character does reach an epiphany of sorts, it doesn’t really lead to a shift in behavior for him. The flaws that brought him to that stage are still present, which leads to the realization that the story has no real resolution and the resolving of the final conflict is tenuous at best. But, since it’s a contest entry, I’ll have to wait until next month before considering how to make it better. (Really, one can consider as much as you like until you’re ready to write. Nothing wrong with that.)

I would suggest using Size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability and accessibility across devices. A word count might be a good idea so we know when we have a chance to read it. The writing is clear and concise, and the concept of a literary epiphany is well defined.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing

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#4746184

Review of Hello, Kitty!

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Rated: 13+

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Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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An amusing and rollicking tale of an adopted cat and her thirteen kittens - eek!

For the first few sentences I thought maybe it was a true biographical story, which is silly, but I had just come from your wedding forum and your extended bio and still had my mind stuck in nonfiction.

I don't understand how people could make this grammatical error: "Opening the door, she entered the house with grace..." The cat did not open the door for herself! I hope you don't misplace the object of the sentence these days, Gaby. It's quite annoying when I see people doing that.

It's funny, my Mom adopted a feral cat who turned out to be expecting kittens many years ago. She tells me how she noticed strange bumps on the cat's belly and brought her to the vet... Those were nipples!

The heroine's attempt at solving her wild kitten overload is certain to only make things far worse - how ever did she come up with that idea? A Husky - oh boy

I can imagine the adorable videos going viral, but peace and quiet in that household will be a thing of the past.

A thoroughly enjoyable story, and a fun adventure into the long-ago depths of your port. I really liked conducting this raid, but I won't be going beyond ten reviews because I just don't see the point, due to the Daily Review Rewards program. It feels like overkill - wait'll you see Gervic's efforts in your port!

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing

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#4746173

Review of Congratulations, Gaby & Aco!

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Greetings from the House of Mormont!
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Wow, a forum celebrating your wedding where the last post was ten years ago

I am awed that someone could be around WdC long enough to celebrate such an amazing milestone after already being well known and loved, and then be here long enough again that the items associated sink into the sands of time... In other words, you're really old

I hope your marriage is going well. Happy ten going on eleven years, as I'm in too much of a hurry to see what your actual anniversary is

Ok, so how do I review a special occasion forum that no one has disturbed the layer of dust on since the event itself? Well, I'm curious as to how such a forum is created. Who wrote the well wishes? Who orchestrated the inclusion of it within your portfolio? Did you create it as a scrapbook of sorts, or did someone create it and give it to you?

I see even the StoryMaster dropped by to wish you well. What a fine community we have here. We can partake in each other's milestones and share the joys and sorrows of life. We see people come and go; some stay around and build it into their real lives, and others never quite make themselves at home.

Thank you for keeping this open for us. Take care, enjoy your family, and keep writing

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