Overall, this was a very good story. It kept me interested until the end, and I was almost sad that there was no more. I am just beginning to write and reading other people storeies never ceases to amaze me - I find it incredible how words just come to some and others must stuggle to find the perfect word for the situation.
I don't know if it was intentional or not, but there are two paragraphs in which you repeated the same sentence twice - when Olivia was driving home and when she watched Tim walk down the hallway. It appears that perhaps you wrote 2 variations and just forgot to choose one.
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