Hey, great poem. I love reading poems in this form. Who says poems need to rhyme? The only suggestion I have would be to add adjectives. Basically metaphors. I've found comparing yourself like to a broken mirror or scarecrow really sets an image in the readers' mind, know what I mean? Keep up the great work.
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